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17th June 2015, 08:23 PM
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab..!
Aik baar fir se meHfil meiN haaZir ho rahaa huuN apnii ik Ghazal ke saath…. Ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeh Ghazal pasaNd aayengii… aapki raae'y kaa iNtezaar rahengaa… mulA’iizaa farmA’iiYe…!
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
maiN zameeN saa rahaa tuu rahii aasamaaN
chaaNd taare ti’re maaNgataa maiN nahiiN
jaa ti’ree maNzileN DhooNDh le Khud hi tuu
maNziloN ke niShaaN jaanataa maiN nahiiN
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
chaar suu bas diKhe muskuraahaT ti'ree
Ey sanaam ! aur kuChh chaahataa maiN nahiiN
maiN nahiiN jaanataa kyaa Khataa thee mi’ree
din-ba-din mar rahaa jee rahaa maiN nahiiN
Bewafaa par liKhii kyuuN Ghazal “JOSH” ne
Aag sii haii Qalam Aag saa maiN nahiiN
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*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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17th June 2015, 08:50 PM
Very nyc
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jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
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17th June 2015, 09:25 PM
bahut achchi ghazal hui dhawal bhai ..dheroN daad kabool kareiN
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khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
Kya baat hai dhaval ji.......bahut khoob ghazal pesh ki hai aapne...bahut khoob andaaz....
dher sari daad aur mubarak bad meri taraf se...
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
Kya baat hai dhaval ji.......bahut khoob ghazal pesh ki hai aapne...bahut khoob andaaz....
dher sari daad aur mubarak bad meri taraf se...
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
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18th June 2015, 10:12 AM
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Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab..!
Aik baar fir se meHfil meiN haaZir ho rahaa huuN apnii ik Ghazal ke saath…. Ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeh Ghazal pasaNd aayengii… aapki raae'y kaa iNtezaar rahengaa… mulA’iizaa farmA’iiYe…!
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
maiN zameeN saa rahaa tuu rahii aasamaaN
chaaNd taare ti’re maaNgataa maiN nahiiN
jaa ti’ree maNzileN DhooNDh le Khud hi tuu
maNziloN ke niShaaN jaanataa maiN nahiiN
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
chaar suu bas diKhe muskuraahaT ti'ree
Ey sanaam ! aur kuChh chaahataa maiN nahiiN
maiN nahiiN jaanataa kyaa Khataa thee mi’ree
din-ba-din mar rahaa jee rahaa maiN nahiiN
Bewafaa par liKhii kyuuN Ghazal “JOSH” ne
Aag sii haii Qalam Aag saa maiN nahiiN
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kyaa baat hai dhaval bhai.... khoobsurat aashaar se sajaai hai aapneye ummdah ghazal.... ek ek lafz apne likhne waale ke hunar ko bayaan kar rahaa hai.... likhte rahiye aur khush rahiye
Shaad.........
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18th June 2015, 10:53 AM
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Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab..!
Aik baar fir se meHfil meiN haaZir ho rahaa huuN apnii ik Ghazal ke saath…. Ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeh Ghazal pasaNd aayengii… aapki raae'y kaa iNtezaar rahengaa… mulA’iizaa farmA’iiYe…!
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
maiN zameeN saa rahaa tuu rahii aasamaaN
chaaNd taare ti’re maaNgataa maiN nahiiN
jaa ti’ree maNzileN DhooNDh le Khud hi tuu
maNziloN ke niShaaN jaanataa maiN nahiiN
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
chaar suu bas diKhe muskuraahaT ti'ree
Ey sanaam ! aur kuChh chaahataa maiN nahiiN
maiN nahiiN jaanataa kyaa Khataa thee mi’ree
din-ba-din mar rahaa jee rahaa maiN nahiiN
Bewafaa par liKhii kyuuN Ghazal “JOSH” ne
Aag sii haii Qalam Aag saa maiN nahiiN
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khush rho
bahut saare pyar ke saath
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18th June 2015, 06:20 PM
Namaste Gujju jii,
kya hal hai?
sab maja ma ne....
maine padhi tumhari ye ghazal..pahle kuch gadbad lagi..bt fir wapas pdhi..dimag lagake...to samajh agai ...
to ab samajh agai mujhe ghazal or achhi bhi lagi hai....
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
ye mujhe bahot achhi lagi lines....
likhto raho gujju
grazie
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18th June 2015, 09:29 PM
Kya baat Chote ustaad ...
Maza aa gaya .. BeintihaaN khubsoorat Ghazal
Mashallaah bahut tarakki kari aapne aur yakeen janiye
MaiN bayaN nahi kar pa raha mujhe iss bat pe kitni khushi hai
Har sher mohabbat me duba hua tanj kasta laga
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19th June 2015, 11:16 AM
Dhaval ji, bohot khoob ehsasaat, aur ek alag andaaz. Khoob ghazal huyi hai jenab.
Likhte raheiN.
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Bohat bohat aalaa likha hai chotu tamam ashaar bht pasand aye aur pehle se bht behtari hai likhne mai likhte raho yunhi khush raho
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
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21st June 2015, 09:56 PM
Kya baat hai dhaval jee..bahut hee sundar ghazal hui....daad kubul karein....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
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23rd June 2015, 09:49 PM
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Very nyc
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Kaisii hon aap... khushii huii aapko koshish par dekh kar.. padhte rahiyega
duaaon ke saath ijaazat
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25th June 2015, 11:50 PM
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Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab..!
Aik baar fir se meHfil meiN haaZir ho rahaa huuN apnii ik Ghazal ke saath…. Ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeh Ghazal pasaNd aayengii… aapki raae'y kaa iNtezaar rahengaa… mulA’iizaa farmA’iiYe…!
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
maiN zameeN saa rahaa tuu rahii aasamaaN
chaaNd taare ti’re maaNgataa maiN nahiiN
jaa ti’ree maNzileN DhooNDh le Khud hi tuu
maNziloN ke niShaaN jaanataa maiN nahiiN
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
chaar suu bas diKhe muskuraahaT ti'ree
Ey sanaam ! aur kuChh chaahataa maiN nahiiN
maiN nahiiN jaanataa kyaa Khataa thee mi’ree
din-ba-din mar rahaa jee rahaa maiN nahiiN
Bewafaa par liKhii kyuuN Ghazal “JOSH” ne
Aag sii haii Qalam Aag saa maiN nahiiN
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Dear Dhaval
bhaai kaise ho?? ghazal bahut umdaa likhi hai aapne.. bas etna hi kahan chahunga ki likhate rahe..
shubhkamnaao sahit
Akant...
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
maiN zameeN saa rahaa tuu rahii aasamaaN
chaaNd taare ti’re maaNgataa maiN nahiiN
jaa ti’ree maNzileN DhooNDh le Khud hi tuu
maNziloN ke niShaaN jaanataa maiN nahiiN
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
chaar suu bas diKhe muskuraahaT ti'ree
Ey sanaam ! aur kuChh chaahataa maiN nahiiN
maiN nahiiN jaanataa kyaa Khataa thee mi’ree
din-ba-din mar rahaa jee rahaa maiN nahiiN
Bewafaa par liKhii kyuuN Ghazal “JOSH” ne
Aag sii haii Qalam Aag saa maiN nahiiN
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Dhaval bhai namaste,
Behad khoobsurat gazal kahi aapne, har ek sher apne aap me ek kahani kahta hua.....andaz -e-bayaN behad dil fareb raha.......aur kya ehsaas waaaaaaah.......dheeeeroN daaad
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27th June 2015, 07:47 AM
originally posted by Dhaval.....
Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
kya khoob kahi sir....
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28th June 2015, 11:59 PM
dhaval miyaaN tak mera salaam pahuNche.... Radeef meiN nahin laga dene ke baad thoda mushkil ho jata hai nibhana, par aapne khoobi se ise nibha liya, is umda ghazal ke liye dil se daad qubool farmaayeN....
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Bohut ache dhaval ji.
Bohut pasand aaya. Khush rahiye aur thoda zyada likhiye taaki hume aapko padne ka lutf aur zyada mile.
Duaon ke saath.
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bahut achchi ghazal hui dhawal bhai ..dheroN daad kabool kareiN
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
Kya baat hai dhaval ji.......bahut khoob ghazal pesh ki hai aapne...bahut khoob andaaz....
dher sari daad aur mubarak bad meri taraf se...
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Ghazal ki pazeeraai ke liye main aapka behad shukraguzaar
Huun... padhte rahiyega aage bhee
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kyaa baat hai dhaval bhai.... khoobsurat aashaar se sajaai hai aapneye ummdah ghazal.... ek ek lafz apne likhne waale ke hunar ko bayaan kar rahaa hai.... likhte rahiye aur khush rahiye
Shaad.........
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Salaam
Ghazal aapko pasand aayi jaan kar khushii huii... mehnat zaaree rahegee aage bhee
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Chottu.......bahut kuch mehsoos kar rhi hu maiN shayad yu kahun ki samaj rhi hu maiN...khair....gazal meiN aag bhar di tumne...bahut hi Josh meiN aakar likhi hue maloom hoti hai...ehassa bahut khaas lge hame.
khush rho
bahut saare pyar ke saath
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aapko ehsaas pasand aaye bahot khushii huii... saath dete rahiyega aage bhee
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Namaste Gujju jii,
kya hal hai?
sab maja ma ne....
maine padhi tumhari ye ghazal..pahle kuch gadbad lagi..bt fir wapas pdhi..dimag lagake...to samajh agai ...
to ab samajh agai mujhe ghazal or achhi bhi lagi hai....
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
ye mujhe bahot achhi lagi lines....
likhto raho gujju
grazie
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Dear pooja
Dimaag lagaa ke ghazal padhii aur ghazal samjh mein bhii aa gayii khoob.. next ghazal italian lang. Mein likhni padengii .. ghazal padhne aur pasand karne ke liye shukriyaah... padhtee rehnaa aage bhee
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Kya baat Chote ustaad ...
Maza aa gaya .. BeintihaaN khubsoorat Ghazal
Mashallaah bahut tarakki kari aapne aur yakeen janiye
MaiN bayaN nahi kar pa raha mujhe iss bat pe kitni khushi hai
Har sher mohabbat me duba hua tanj kasta laga
Malik aapko aur kaifiyat takseem kare
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Namaste
Aapse hameshaa kuchh seekhne ko milaa hay aapko Ghazal mukammal lagee khushii huii... mehnat aage bhee zaaree rahegii
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Dhaval ji, bohot khoob ehsasaat, aur ek alag andaaz. Khoob ghazal huyi hai jenab.
Likhte raheiN.
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Kyaa Kahne Dhaval Ji
Khoob Se Bhi Khoobtar Ghazal huii Hai Janaab
Jawaab NahiN
Dilee Mubaaraqbaad !!!
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
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12th July 2015, 09:49 AM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab..!
Aik baar fir se meHfil meiN haaZir ho rahaa huuN apnii ik Ghazal ke saath…. Ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeh Ghazal pasaNd aayengii… aapki raae'y kaa iNtezaar rahengaa… mulA’iizaa farmA’iiYe…!
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
maiN zameeN saa rahaa tuu rahii aasamaaN
chaaNd taare ti’re maaNgataa maiN nahiiN
jaa ti’ree maNzileN DhooNDh le Khud hi tuu
maNziloN ke niShaaN jaanataa maiN nahiiN
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
chaar suu bas diKhe muskuraahaT ti'ree
Ey sanaam ! aur kuChh chaahataa maiN nahiiN
maiN nahiiN jaanataa kyaa Khataa thee mi’ree
din-ba-din mar rahaa jee rahaa maiN nahiiN
Bewafaa par liKhii kyuuN Ghazal “JOSH” ne
Aag sii haii Qalam Aag saa maiN nahiiN
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Waah Waah waah!! Kya zabardast bayaani hai Dhaval dost! Har ek sher kahaani keh raha hai and the whole poem is brimming with emotions. Mujhe behad pasand aayi aapki yeh ghazal, meri dil se daad kubool karen.
Yeh sher khaas pasand aaye:
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
maiN zameeN saa rahaa tuu rahii aasamaaN
chaaNd taare ti’re maaNgataa maiN nahiiN
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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15th July 2015, 10:48 PM
Dhaval baht achhi shayri likhi hai.YuN he tumhari kalam chalti.rahe aur YuN he humen aapki shayriron se mukhatib hote raheN..Dhaval ji shukria itni sundar shayri likhne k lie aur hum tak pahnchane k lie..
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28th July 2015, 09:06 PM
Dear Dhaval
Aapki es creation ki jitani taarif karu kam hi hogi.. Bahut hi umdaa likha hai aapke.. God bless you..
Akant...
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आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो...
AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho...
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28th July 2015, 10:44 PM
bahut umdah likha h dhaval bhai.....daad kubul karen
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
email: rkm179@gmail.com
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19th April 2018, 01:18 AM
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Originally Posted by akant
Dear Dhaval
bhaai kaise ho?? ghazal bahut umdaa likhi hai aapne.. bas etna hi kahan chahunga ki likhate rahe..
shubhkamnaao sahit
Akant...
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Akant bhaiya
Pranaam
Bas main theek hun.. Shukriyaah ghazal ki pasandgee ke kiye
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:20 AM
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Dhaval bhai namaste,
Behad khoobsurat gazal kahi aapne, har ek sher apne aap me ek kahani kahta hua.....andaz -e-bayaN behad dil fareb raha.......aur kya ehsaas waaaaaaah.......dheeeeroN daaad
Aapka apna
Bhushan
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Bhushan bhaii
Namaste
Khushii huii jaan kar ke aapko yeh ghazal pasand aaii.. Padhte rahen aage bhee
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:21 AM
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Originally Posted by rajinderseep
originally posted by Dhaval.....
Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
kya khoob kahi sir....
Rajinderseep
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Shukriyaah rajinder jee
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th April 2018, 01:22 AM
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Originally Posted by Taish
dhaval miyaaN tak mera salaam pahuNche.... Radeef meiN nahin laga dene ke baad thoda mushkil ho jata hai nibhana, par aapne khoobi se ise nibha liya, is umda ghazal ke liye dil se daad qubool farmaayeN....
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Ghayal bhai
Aapki daad sar aankhon par... Padhte rahuye aage bhee
Duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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21st April 2018, 12:07 AM
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Originally Posted by Dhaval
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
Namskaar aur Aadaab..!
Aik baar fir se meHfil meiN haaZir ho rahaa huuN apnii ik Ghazal ke saath…. Ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeh Ghazal pasaNd aayengii… aapki raae'y kaa iNtezaar rahengaa… mulA’iizaa farmA’iiYe…!
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Bewafaa tuu nahiiN Bewafaa maiN nahiiN
DhooNDhtee ho jise wo pataa maiN nahiiN
waQt thaa bewafaa ,Bewafaa hum naa the
waQt hi thaa buraa ke buraa maiN nahiiN
maiN zameeN saa rahaa tuu rahii aasamaaN
chaaNd taare ti’re maaNgataa maiN nahiiN
jaa ti’ree maNzileN DhooNDh le Khud hi tuu
maNziloN ke niShaaN jaanataa maiN nahiiN
jin baGhichoN meiN hum baiThate the kabhee
uss taraf ik naZar deKhataa maiN nahiiN
chaar suu bas diKhe muskuraahaT ti'ree
Ey sanaam ! aur kuChh chaahataa maiN nahiiN
maiN nahiiN jaanataa kyaa Khataa thee mi’ree
din-ba-din mar rahaa jee rahaa maiN nahiiN
Bewafaa par liKhii kyuuN Ghazal “JOSH” ne
Aag sii haii Qalam Aag saa maiN nahiiN
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kisne kaha thaa ki wafa tum karo,
itne nasamajh to tum kabhi naa the.
bahut khub dhaval jee.
ye wafa aur bewafai kaa aalam hee kuch aur hai
maine khud wafa karke aur bewafa hoke dekha hai.
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23rd September 2018, 08:22 PM
Kya baat hai mere chhotu, maza aa gyaa parhkar ek ek share bakamaal. Sub haan allha. Daad hazir hai👍👍👍👍👍👍
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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2nd October 2018, 12:48 AM
ye kya ki sab se bayaaN dil ki haalateiN karni
'faraz' tujh ko na aaiiN mohabbateiN karni
mileN jab un se to mub'ham si guft-a-gu karna
phir apne aap se sau sau vazahateiN karni
kabhi 'faraz' naye mausamoN meiN ro dena
kabhi talaash puraani rifaaqateiN karni
Shayar ho, ab bhoojo...to jaaneN!
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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