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22nd July 2014, 12:57 PM
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niche ke sher ko thoda change karke, another try..
fusooN jo bos e daar o rasn ka wo ab dikhate haiN
kahaaN khalvat kadaa dhundoo ye zindaanii e hastii* meN
zindaanii e hastii = prison of life
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ek aur koshish...
kahaaN rukuuN kahaaN jaauuN ki har manzil tujhe paauuN
teri zulfoN kii halqoN* se banaa zindaaN hai iis dil ka
halqaa = chain
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aap dono ka tehe dil se shukrguzaar hooN jo aapko yeh chhoti sii koshish pasand aayee....
ek aur koshish...
jab kabhii kar looN ibaadat yeh duaa yazdaan* se
wo riha kar de na mujhko raahat e zindaan* se
yazdaan = God
raahat e zindaan = peace/tranquility/comfort of prison
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wahhh wahh wahh... Aadil saheb...
aap ne to mehfil loot li.... boht aala darjay ke ashaar pesh
kiye haiN aap ne... dil se nikli dherooN daad qabool kijiye....
DuaooN k saath,,
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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22nd July 2014, 12:59 PM
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bohat bohat shukriya Zarraa sahab .....I whole heartedly agree to your opinion sir ....yes your suggestion would add life to my sher ...thanx a lot.....
mureed hoon ,tera zindaanee hoon main
ab chhahe tu jaa.n lele ya zindagi baksh de
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wahhh... Ananth jii,,
boht khooob..... daad hi daad...
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22nd July 2014, 01:01 PM
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Ek ...toota - phoota sher mera bhi
ye saza khud hii muqarar kii , nahi'n Royungaa mai'n.
Aa'nkh zindaa'n ho gayi aur ashk zindaani huye'n.
Ufaq......
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Ufaq saheb...
boht khoob... boht hi gehra shair pesh kiya hai aap ne.. dehrooN daad..
DuaooN k saath,,
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
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22nd July 2014, 01:05 PM
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Waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh.....
Hassanbhai,
behad khubsurat sher..... daad hi daad.......
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waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!
bahot khub, Hassanbhai
zor e kalaam aur zyaadaa
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behad shukriyaaH Aadil saheb,, is qadar pazeraayi k liye
teh-e-dil se manooN hooN...
miltay rahiye ga,,
DuaooN k saath,,
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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22nd July 2014, 02:04 PM
kuch arz karna chaahunga lafz-e-zindaan pe ummeed hai pasand aaye
umr guzaarii thii terii jin chasm-e-gul meN
aaj hameiN kyoN quaid-e-zindaaN si lagtii hai
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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22nd July 2014, 05:34 PM
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wahhh wahh wahh... Aadil saheb...
aap ne to mehfil loot li.... boht aala darjay ke ashaar pesh
kiye haiN aap ne... dil se nikli dherooN daad qabool kijiye....
DuaooN k saath,,
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Hassanbhai,
aapka teh-e-dil se shukrguzaar hooN jo naacheez kii iis adnaa si koshish ko itna pasand kiya
duaoN ke saath... Adil ka salaam....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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22nd July 2014, 06:25 PM
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aap dono ka tehe dil se shukrguzaar hooN jo aapko yeh chhoti sii koshish pasand aayee....
ek aur koshish...
jab kabhii kar looN ibaadat yeh duaa yazdaan* se
wo riha kar de na mujhko raahat e zindaan* se
yazdaan = God
raahat e zindaan = peace/tranquility/comfort of prison
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Aaj ki ghair haazri ki muafi chahta hon Zarra saheb... Kuch zehan mein aa raha hai.. Arz hai:-
Giraftar hue jab se tere zaati Zindaan meiN!
Aaina jab bhi dekhta hon, phoot ke roti hai jawani meri
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Ek ...toota - phoota sher mera bhi
ye saza khud hii muqarar kii , nahi'n Royungaa mai'n.
Aa'nkh zindaa'n ho gayi aur ashk zindaani huye'n.
Ufaq......
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MASHA ALLAH!!...Bohat khoob!!
ek se badhker ek sher hai..superb!
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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22nd July 2014, 08:33 PM
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MASHA ALLAH!!...Bohat khoob!!
ek se badhker ek sher hai..superb!
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22nd July 2014, 09:46 PM
Zarraa saheb, aik adna si koshish:-
mar na jaye kahiN zameer mera, yeh rooh bejaan rehne do!
azaadi mili to behak jaoN ga, mujhe Qaidi -e-zindaan rehne do...
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tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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22nd July 2014, 10:00 PM
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Ek ...toota - phoota sher mera bhi
ye saza khud hii muqarar kii , nahi'n Royungaa mai'n.
Aa'nkh zindaa'n ho gayi aur ashk zindaani huye'n.
Ufaq......
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Wwwwaaaahhhhh !!! Kya baat hai !!!! Behad hi khoobsurat sher !!! Aur behad maanikhez bhi laga mujhe !!
naheen rone ki saza ..... aaankh zindaan ...... ashq zindaani .... AMAZING !! BRILLIANT !!
sad hazaar laakh daad is sher par Ufaq bhai !!!!!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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22nd July 2014, 10:02 PM
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Zarrasaab,
bahot bahot shukriya aapkii nawaazish ke liye
aur saahab aapne bilkul sahi samjha halqe (baaloN/zulfon kii curls) bhii hotii hai aur zanjeer kii rings bhii hote haiN ..
yahaaN iis lafz halqaa pe Ghalib saab ka ek sher pesh karna chahunga.. out of context hai iis liye muafee ka arzmand hooN
bus ke hooN 'GHalib' aseeree meiN bhee aatish zer-e-pa
moo-e-aatish-deeda hai halqa meree zanjeer ka
(aseeree = imprisonment; zer-e-pa = under the feet;
moo = hair; aatish-deeda = roasted on fire)
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wwwwwaaaaaahhhhh !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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22nd July 2014, 10:03 PM
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wahhh wahhh wahhh Zarraa saheb..
Kia kehne aap ke.. Aap ne to mujhe lajawab kar dia
Dheroon daad qabool kijiye...
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Shukriya Hassan bhai !!!!!!!!!!!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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22nd July 2014, 10:05 PM
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waaaaahhh, Zarrabhai, waaaaaaaaahhhhhh!!!!
kya baat kahii hai aqs ko aaine meN qaid karne kii jo baat kahii hai behad hii khubsurat wordplay hai, janaab. dili daad....
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Shukriya Aadeil bhai !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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22nd July 2014, 10:09 PM
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kuch arz karna chaahunga lafz-e-zindaan pe ummeed hai pasand aaye
umr guzaarii thii terii jin chasm-e-gul meN
aaj hameiN kyoN quaid-e-zindaaN si lagtii hai
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Waaahhh !!! Bahaut hi khoob !!! Bahaut pasand aaya sher !!! Daad Aadeil sahab !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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22nd July 2014, 10:14 PM
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Zarraa saheb, aik adna si koshish:-
mar na jaye kahiN zameer mera, yeh rooh bejaan rehne do!
azaadi mili to behak jaoN ga, mujhe Qaidi -e-zindaan rehne do...
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waaaahhhh Hassan sahab !!!! bilkul taaza aur muktalif nazariya pesh kiya !!! bahaut khoob !!! aur lafz-e-zindaan ko qaafiye ke zindaan mein daal kar is lafz par ghaur karne ke silsile ka lutf aur bhi bardha diya
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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22nd July 2014, 10:22 PM
aseeree meiN jiye jaate haiN zindaaN meiN malaaloN ke
gunehgaar aaj ke haiN aur mujrim guzre saaloN ke
-zarraa
(aseeree = captivity)
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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22nd July 2014, 10:37 PM
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aseeree meiN jiye jaate haiN zindaaN meiN malaaloN ke
gunehgaar aaj ke haiN aur mujrim guzre saaloN ke
-zarraa
(aseeree = captivity)
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wahhhhhh... be-had umdaH khiyaal aur
kitni rawaani se pesha kiya hai...
khas kar alfaaz 'mujrim guzre saaloN k'
aap dherooN daad ke mustahiq haiN ...
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23rd July 2014, 12:16 AM
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wahhhhhh... be-had umdaH khiyaal aur
kitni rawaani se pesha kiya hai...
khas kar alfaaz 'mujrim guzre saaloN k'
aap dherooN daad ke mustahiq haiN ...
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bas aap ki mohabbat hai Hassan bhai .... bahaut bahaut shukriya aap ka !!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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23rd July 2014, 12:19 AM
dostoN ... lafz-e-zindaan ki zindaanee ab bas 24 ghante ki aur hai hai ... yaani ke hum agle 24 gahnte tak, yaanii next midnight tak "zindaan" par ghaur karenge...phir naya lafz ...
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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23rd July 2014, 12:22 AM
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dostoN ... lafz-e-zindaan ki zindaanee ab bas 24 ghante ki aur hai hai ... yaani ke hum agle 24 gahnte tak, yaanii next midnight tak "zindaan" par ghaur karenge...phir naya lafz ...
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nahii Zarra saheb... itni jaldi hum zindaaN se nikal aayeN gay......
abhi zara kuch aur qaid-e-tanhai ka maza lene detay...
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23rd July 2014, 01:03 AM
chalieN Zarra saheb.. lafz zindaaN pe kuch aur likhne ki koshish karte haiN:-
anna ke faislay pe zindagi qurban kar donH ga!
laga kar aag apne ghar ko khud veraan kar donh ga!
hajoom-e-shehar meiN mera tamasha dekhne waloN
maiN khud ko khud hi supurd-e-zindaaN kar donh ga.........
supurd : surrender
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23rd July 2014, 09:57 AM
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chalieN Zarra saheb.. lafz zindaaN pe kuch aur likhne ki koshish karte haiN:-
anna ke faislay pe zindagi qurban kar donH ga!
laga kar aag apne ghar ko khud veraan kar donh ga!
hajoom-e-shehar meiN mera tamasha dekhne waloN
maiN khud ko khud hi supurd-e-zindaaN kar donh ga.........
supurd : surrender
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Hassanbhai,
laajawaab.... bahot khub
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aseeree meiN jiye jaate haiN zindaaN meiN malaaloN ke
gunehgaar aaj ke haiN aur mujrim guzre saaloN ke
-zarraa
(aseeree = captivity)
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waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!
kya baat.. kya baat.. kya baat...
ek aalaatariin ghehraaii bharaa khayaal pesh kiya hai aapne
daad-o-mubaarakbaad
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Waaahhh !!! Bahaut hi khoob !!! Bahaut pasand aaya sher !!! Daad Aadeil sahab !!
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aapka mamnoon hooN, Zarrasaab....
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Zarraa saheb, aik adna si koshish:-
mar na jaye kahiN zameer mera, yeh rooh bejaan rehne do!
azaadi mili to behak jaoN ga, mujhe Qaidi -e-zindaan rehne do...
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bahot khub khyaaalaat, Hassanbhai
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MASHA ALLAH!!...Bohat khoob!!
ek se badhker ek sher hai..superb!
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shukirya Zainyji...
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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23rd July 2014, 10:00 AM
chaliye, ek aur sher merii jaanib se....
teri husn e barhamii* se maiN kahaaN anjaan tha
khat tera leke jo aaya qaasid* e zindaan tha
(husn e barhamii = beautiful anger; qaasid = messenger, courier)
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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chaliye, ek aur sher merii jaanib se....
teri husn e barhamii* se maiN kahaaN anjaan tha
khat tera leke jo aaya qaasid* e zindaan tha
(husn e barhamii = beautiful anger; qaasid = messenger, courier)
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wahhhh!!! boht khoob...
aap hamesha ki tarah is baar bhi aik alag soch ke
sath nazar aaye,, dheroN daad qabool kijiye,,,
*hSn* : parStaar
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23rd July 2014, 11:23 AM
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Aadeil, Hassan, Zarraji, ufaq you guys are awesome....zindaan word par itni khoobsurat shayri pesh ki hai ap logon ne meri tarafse dheron daad.
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bundle of thanks, Naaz. thanks for being there.
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23rd July 2014, 11:25 AM
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gunehgaar aaj ke haiN aur mujrim guzre saaloN ke
-zarraa
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kitni taareef ki jaaye iski...
zarra sahab aap to seriously ab shayri ko hobby chodkar , ek semi professional way me len.
aapse bahut hi kamtar log mashoor ho gaye tv par.
aap to hilaa denge sabko
everything is written in sincereity.
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23rd July 2014, 09:17 PM
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Rashk-e-jinaan* hai ye Zindaan-e-Ishq
Maut de dey mujhe rehaaii na dey
rashk-e-jinaan=similar to heaven
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wahhh... wahhh.... kia ghazab ka khiyaal pesh kiya hai Naaz..
its just awesome....
is verse k liye dherooN daad..
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23rd July 2014, 09:29 PM
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Thnx Hassan your appreciation means a lot to me m just trying to write pls feel free to point out my mistake.
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it was awesome..... no doubt!
aik koshish meri taraf se bhi:-
maiN harf-e-na-haasil hooN mitaa dijiye mujhe
ik waaqia samajh ke bhula dijiye mujhe..
yeh faaslay na mita sakooN ga tamam umer!
zindaaN ke maQtal pe latka dijiye mujhe....
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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You are too good yaar tumhari shayri ki speed mujhe hairaan kar deti hai aur wo bhi ek se badhkar ek shayri, deep n meaningful thought.....simply outstanding.
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pehle bhi kaha tha, ab bhi keh raha hooN..
aap jese dostoN ka saath raha to, insha Allah, zaroor boht
aagay jaaoN ga...
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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23rd July 2014, 10:14 PM
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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23rd July 2014, 10:20 PM
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chalieN Zarra saheb.. lafz zindaaN pe kuch aur likhne ki koshish karte haiN:-
anna ke faislay pe zindagi qurban kar donH ga!
laga kar aag apne ghar ko khud veraan kar donh ga!
hajoom-e-shehar meiN mera tamasha dekhne waloN
maiN khud ko khud hi supurd-e-zindaaN kar donh ga.........
supurd : surrender
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Waahhh !!! Kya pursoz sulagta huwa qita kaha Hassan bhai !! Bahaut khoob !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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23rd July 2014, 10:21 PM
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jii,, intezaar rahe ga us "khas" lafz ka.........
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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23rd July 2014, 10:24 PM
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Originally Posted by aadeil
chaliye, ek aur sher merii jaanib se....
teri husn e barhamii* se maiN kahaaN anjaan tha
khat tera leke jo aaya qaasid* e zindaan tha
(husn e barhamii = beautiful anger; qaasid = messenger, courier)
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Waaaahhhhhh !!! Zabardast sher kaha Aadeil bhai !!!! Ghazab !! Qaasid-e-Zindaan .... Waaahhh !!! Dheron daad !!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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23rd July 2014, 10:25 PM
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Originally Posted by N@zneen
Aadeil, Hassan, Zarraji, ufaq you guys are awesome....zindaan word par itni khoobsurat shayri pesh ki hai ap logon ne meri tarafse dheron daad.
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Shukriya N@zneen ji ...................
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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23rd July 2014, 10:38 PM
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kitni taareef ki jaaye iski...
zarra sahab aap to seriously ab shayri ko hobby chodkar , ek semi professional way me len.
aapse bahut hi kamtar log mashoor ho gaye tv par.
aap to hilaa denge sabko
everything is written in sincereity.
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can't thank you enough for your invaluable compliment Zidd sahab. aap ki baat bahaut wazan aur maayne rakhti hai mere liye.
aap ki baat se inspire bhi hua hoon, aur ek responsibility si bhi feel kar raha hoon, ki jis bhi had tak fan mila ho, us ke saath insaaf karna hamaari
zimmedaari hai ... sila chaaheiN mile ya n mile ...aur is muamle mein initiative ki kami zaroor huwee hai meri taraf se .... aap ki baat par zaroor reflect karoonga .. heartfelt thanks
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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23rd July 2014, 10:44 PM
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Rashk-e-jinaan* hai ye Zindaan-e-Ishq
Maut de dey mujhe rehaaii na dey
rashk-e-jinaan=similar to heaven
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wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hhhhhh
behad hi khoobsurat aur umdah sher !!!!!!!!!! zindaan ko bhi baagh-e-adan ka rutba ata kar diya is sher ne !!! dher si daad aur bahaut si mubaarakbaad aap ko Na@zneen ji !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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23rd July 2014, 10:45 PM
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it was awesome..... no doubt!
aik koshish meri taraf se bhi:-
maiN harf-e-na-haasil hooN mitaa dijiye mujhe
ik waaqia samajh ke bhula dijiye mujhe..
yeh faaslay na mita sakooN ga tamam umer!
zindaaN ke maQtal pe latka dijiye mujhe....
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Waahhh !!! Kya baat hai Hassan sahab !! Qita ka har misra asardaar hai !! Bahaut khoob !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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24th July 2014, 12:27 AM
Masha Allah bohat khoobsurat ashaar bane hain is baar bhi...
Sabhi dostoN ka tah e dil se shukriyah .....is thread ko follow karne ke liye...
Zarraa sahab ki mehnat jitni bhi tareef karun kam hi hogi...
Pure sdc team ki taraf se aapka shukriyah adaa karna chahungi
Ek sher
Is jism ke zindaan mieN ek umr se qaidi haiN.
Urr jayeNge hum aakhir ek roz reha ho kar.
Nm
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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24th July 2014, 12:33 AM
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Masha Allah bohat khoobsurat ashaar bane hain is baar bhi...
Sabhi dostoN ka tah e dil se shukriyah .....is thread ko follow karne ke liye...
Zarraa sahab ki mehnat jitni bhi tareef karun kam hi hogi...
Pure sdc team ki taraf se aapka shukriyah adaa karna chahungi
Ek sher
Is jism ke zindaan mieN ek umr se qaidi haiN.
Urr jayeNge hum aakhir ek roz reha ho kar.
Nm
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wahhh! wahhhh! .... lajawab......
thanks for sharing...
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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lafz "zindaan"par members ke qalaam -
24th July 2014, 12:39 AM
dostoN is baar ke lafz zindaan par members ke khud ke kahe huwe aashaar jinhone “zindaan” mein jashn e sukhan ka lutf paida kar diya
in khalwatooN se ab hum ukta chuke haiN 'hSn'
youn jabr e musalsal se behtar humaiN zindaaN nawaaz doh
hassan
rawaaN aisa ke afsurda rahe zindaan e tan meiN ye
lahoo ko mere nazzara e khanjar achchha lagta hai
zarraa
qabal az qaid mujhe kuch to hausla de mere yaar
suna hai Qaidi e zindaaN 'Qaatil' bhi hote haiN
hassan
qatl zindaaN meiN tay to hai lekin
qaid e tanhaayee maar daale hai
zarraa
fusooN jo bos e daar o rasn ka wo ab dikhate haiN
kahaaN khalvat kadaa dhundoo ye zindaanii e hastii meN
aadeil
mureed hoon tera zindaanee hoon main
ab chhahe tu jaa.n lele ya zindagi baksh de
ananthpak
kahaaN rukuuN kahaaN jaauuN ki har manzil tujhe paauuN
teri zulfoN kii halqoN se banaa zindaaN hai iis dil ka
aadeil
jab kabhii kar looN ibaadat yeh duaa yazdaan se
wo riha kar de na mujhko raahat e zindaan se
aadeil
Giraftar hue jab se tere zaati Zindaan meiN
Aaina jab bhi dekhta hon, phoot ke roti hai jawani meri
hassan
ye khudaaraayee bhi paNhuchee hai kahaaN
aainaa banne laga hai zindaaN
zarraa
ye saza khud hii muqarar kii nahin Royungaa main
Aankh zindaan ho gayi aur ashk zindaani huyen
ufaq
umr guzaarii thii terii jin chasm e gul meN
aaj hameiN kyoN quaid e zindaaN si lagtii hai
aadeil
mar na jaye kahiN zameer mera yeh rooh bejaan rehne do
azaadi mili to behak jaoN ga, mujhe Qaidi e zindaan rehne do
hassan
aseeree meiN jiye jaate haiN zindaaN meiN malaaloN ke
gunehgaar aaj ke haiN aur mujrim guzre saaloN ke
zarraa
anna ke faislay pe zindagi qurban kar donH ga
laga kar aag apne ghar ko khud veraan kar donh ga
hajoom e shehar meiN mera tamasha dekhne waloN
maiN khud ko khud hi supurd-e-zindaaN kar donh ga
hassan
teri husn e barhamii se maiN kahaaN anjaan tha
khat tera leke jo aaya qaasid e zindaan tha
aadeil
Rashk e jinaan hai ye Zindaan e Ishq
Maut de dey mujhe rehaaii na dey
n@zneen
maiN harf e na haasil hooN mitaa dijiye mujhe
ik waaqia samajh ke bhula dijiye mujhe
yeh faaslay na mita sakooN ga tamam umer
zindaaN ke maQtal pe latka dijiye mujhe
hassan
sabhi shora jinhone yahaan shirkat ki aur is lafz par ghaur karne ka ilsila musalsal qaayam rakkha un ka bahaut bahaut shukriya. yahaan ye kehna chaahoonga ki hassan bhai aur aadeil bhai ne 5-6 ashaar pesh kar ke lafz ke alag alag pehluon ko saamne rakkha. jin qadrdaanon ne seekhne ki is koshish mein humaaree hausla afzaayee kari un ka bhi tah e dil se shukrguzaar hoon, aur un ka bhi jinhone is is thread to pardha ho aur ye kar ke bhi hamaara saath diya
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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