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24th November 2008, 10:51 AM
Woh Chand ke sath bahut khoobsurat Nazar aaraha tha...
Aaj Chand hi uski khoobsurti ko badha raha tha..... Wahi chand jo roj uski khoosurti ko fika kar deta tha... Aaj uski roshini main woh pura nazar aaraha tha..... Kehno ko woh usse milon dur hi sahi... Per is dharti se woh uske bahut karib nazar aaraha tha.... Aaj wahi chand uske sath per itrara raha tha.... Aur woh khada sirf muskura raha tha..... (Sayad aap logo samjh aaya ho ki ye kiske bare main baat ho rahi hai.... Per phir bhi ye us pyare se taare ke bare main jisse chand ke aage koi dekhta bhi nahi....) Suno… Aie… Zindagi….. Is bar jate jate…. Jara milti jana…… |
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25th November 2008, 08:56 AM
Hi Ruchika....
This Is Really Fantastic..tumhare Khayalaat Bahut Hi Gehre Aur Khoobsurat Hain......touching....zara Si Shabdon Ki Hera Pheri Karogi, Aur Shayri Ke Terms Ko Follow Karke Likhogi To Zarur Bahut Acchi Acchi Ghazlein Likhne Lagogi....think About It...  Zainy Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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25th November 2008, 09:54 AM
Hi dear...
Thanks for ur appreciation... per sach bataon mujhe shyari ke koi terms maloom nahi... i just write what i feel... per phir bhi main koshish karungi.... aur aapse umeed karungi that u ll help me in that..... thanks dear.. ruchika Suno… Aie… Zindagi….. Is bar jate jate…. Jara milti jana…… |
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25th November 2008, 10:00 AM
SURE...IT WOULD BE MY PLEASURE TO GUIDE YOU...
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=2125 GIVING YOU A LINK...PLS READ IT....I AM SURE IT WILL HELP YOU... ZAINY Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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25th November 2008, 10:27 AM
thanks alot zainyji..... ll surely read n try to understand it....
can u please do me a favour..... kya aap mere inhi lines (gazal ya shayri nahi keh sakti) ko correct kar sakti hai kya....so that i can know my fault... hoping for ur positive reply if u have time.. thanks ruchika Suno… Aie… Zindagi….. Is bar jate jate…. Jara milti jana…… |
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25th November 2008, 11:45 AM
Ruchika
Maine Ye Nahi Kaha Ki Tumne Kuch Ghalat Likha Hai, Jise Theek Kiya Ja Sakta Hai...mai Ne Ye Kaha Hai Ki Jo Likha Hai Usay Agar Shayri Ki Terms Ko Follow Ke Likhti To Zyada Behtar Aur Khoobsurat Lagta Aur Haan Mai Tumko Sirf Guide Karungi...kosish To Tumhe Khud Karni Hogi...... Zainy.. Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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25th November 2008, 11:53 AM
ok dear.... thanks.. ll surely try...
Suno… Aie… Zindagi….. Is bar jate jate…. Jara milti jana…… |
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