Shayri.com  

Go Back   Shayri.com > Shayri > Aapki Shayri

Reply
 
Thread Tools Rate Thread Display Modes
Itne kamzor tum nahin
Old
  (#1)
$hivani
Registered User
$hivani is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 125
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: baroda
Rep Power: 21
Smile Itne kamzor tum nahin - 29th January 2004, 07:40 PM

Kal ke darr se
jo aaj na jee sake
wo tum nahi....

shaam ke darr se
jo uday na dekh sake
wo tum nahi......

haar ke darr se
jo jeet main na jhoom sake
wo tum nahi.........

girne ke darr se
jo unchaai na choo sake
wo tum nahi.........

inkaar ke darr se
jo izhaar na kar sake
wo tum nahi.........

bewafaai ke darr se
jo wafa na kar sake
wo tum nahi.......

zaroorat ho tumhe aur
jo saath na de sake
wo HUM nahi......


koshish ko hamari please nakarna mat.........gar pasand aaye to likhna zaroor ek khat....
   
Reply With Quote
Old
  (#2)
Shimul
*Ishq~Ibadat.......**
Shimul is a glorious beacon of lightShimul is a glorious beacon of lightShimul is a glorious beacon of lightShimul is a glorious beacon of lightShimul is a glorious beacon of light
 
Shimul's Avatar
 
Offline
Posts: 8,716
Join Date: Jun 2003
Location: Aapne Sanam Ko Yaad Kiya Sar Jhuka Liya**
Rep Power: 33
29th January 2004, 09:49 PM

Bohot hi khubsurat kalam likhhi hein aapne. Wah, keya baat hein. Dilko bohot achha laga, aur poche ke kitni khushi huyi. I can't explain. Really it's so beautiful. Likhte rahiyega. Tahe dilse shukriya kabool kijiyega. Take care. God bless you.


*Aapni Parwaaz-e-Takhayyull Hain Zamane Se Juda
Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche
Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain
Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche**
*~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~**

*Pure Love**
   
Reply With Quote
good
Old
  (#3)
puneetgrover
Registered User
puneetgrover is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 75
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: delhi,pitam pura
Rep Power: 21
good - 30th January 2004, 02:12 AM

hey thats a great poem.... i really liked that....WOH TUM NAHI aacha khayal tha keep writing,god bless u

BYE
   
Reply With Quote
hi
Old
  (#4)
romana
Registered User
romana will become famous soon enough
 
Offline
Posts: 754
Join Date: Sep 2002
Location: uk
Rep Power: 22
hi - 30th January 2004, 04:53 AM

hi shivani jee

bhut hi achi poem hai bhut hi piyara andaaz hai aapke likhne ka

keep it up
bye


~,ROMANA,~
   
Reply With Quote
hi
Old
  (#5)
banjara''''
kuch likhne ki koshish
banjara'''' has a spectacular aura aboutbanjara'''' has a spectacular aura aboutbanjara'''' has a spectacular aura about
 
banjara'''''s Avatar
 
Offline
Posts: 930
Join Date: Feb 2003
Rep Power: 24
hi - 30th January 2004, 04:57 AM

his shivani gi
how r u?
yakin maniye to afsos hota hay jab achi posts tak
ja nahi pate..magar bhala ho doston ka jo acha parhne
ka mashwara dete hain...
khob likha hay jnab....jise hath pakar kar sath chalne ka wada diya jaye use himmat or takat dilane k liye aap k ilfaz apni
sachayi or mukhlis maani sath liye hwe hain,,acha laga
likhte rahiye ga
aik banjara'''
bas''''


banjara''''
agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon
or judai main mohabbat kasi????
   
Reply With Quote
Bahut Khoob
Old
  (#6)
Chaand
Registered User
Chaand has much to be proud ofChaand has much to be proud ofChaand has much to be proud ofChaand has much to be proud ofChaand has much to be proud ofChaand has much to be proud ofChaand has much to be proud ofChaand has much to be proud of
 
Chaand's Avatar
 
Offline
Posts: 2,628
Join Date: Jul 2002
Location: New Delhi
Rep Power: 34
Bahut Khoob - 30th January 2004, 03:53 PM

Bahut achche shivani ji aapki ye sakaaratmk utsaah bharne waali kavita wakai bahut pasand aai.. DekheiN hum bhi is.se kuchh seekh paate haiN ya nahi.

Chaand


Sachh bolne ka hausla to, hum bhi rakhte haiN lekin
Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN.

- Chaand
   
Reply With Quote
thanx again......
Old
  (#7)
$hivani
Registered User
$hivani is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 125
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: baroda
Rep Power: 21
Smile thanx again...... - 30th January 2004, 08:21 PM

i am really thankful to all of you...i am glad you all liked it....act i didnt expect ke everyone will like it so much.....i wrote this one especially for all those people who have posted their shayris in the shayri-e-dard forum....i just couldn't tolerate those broken hearts so i thought may be this can help them feel better and i hope it has........once again thank you all.....chaandji,banjaraji,romanaji,puneetji and shimulji of course....bye n take care!


koshish ko hamari please nakarna mat.........gar pasand aaye to likhna zaroor ek khat....
   
Reply With Quote
well done shivani
Old
  (#8)
sourabh_0103
Registered User
sourabh_0103 is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 13
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: lucknow[uttar pradesh](india)
Rep Power: 0
well done shivani - 4th February 2004, 06:41 PM

u had write very good one
and i appreciate it ......

take care
bye


sourabh
   
Reply With Quote
Old
  (#9)
$hivani
Registered User
$hivani is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 125
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: baroda
Rep Power: 21
Smile 8th February 2004, 11:25 AM

hello sourabh ji....thanx a lot....i am glad u liked it..i am sorry for replying late....but thanx a lot....


koshish ko hamari please nakarna mat.........gar pasand aaye to likhna zaroor ek khat....
   
Reply With Quote
hi
Old
  (#10)
asifalone
Registered User
asifalone is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 28
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: pakistan
Rep Power: 0
hi - 8th February 2004, 01:45 PM

hi
bohat khubsurat alfaz chune hain aap nein aaj waq qai acha laga hai likhte rahein
asif


udas shamon ka hamsafar.,.
  Send a message via Yahoo to asifalone  
Reply With Quote
hi!!!!!!!!!
Old
  (#11)
$hivani
Registered User
$hivani is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 125
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: baroda
Rep Power: 21
Smile hi!!!!!!!!! - 9th February 2004, 07:36 PM

hello asifji......thanx a lot for appreciating my poem....i think last time i confused with some other person i am sorry for that....take care aur aate rahiyega yahan....bye!


koshish ko hamari please nakarna mat.........gar pasand aaye to likhna zaroor ek khat....
   
Reply With Quote
Old
  (#12)
Qasid
Super Mod
Qasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant futureQasid has a brilliant future
 
Qasid's Avatar
 
Offline
Posts: 3,901
Join Date: Aug 2001
Location: Mumbai
Rep Power: 45
9th February 2004, 08:02 PM

bakhoob likha hai shivani ji, hum to aab soch rahe hai ki kisi insaan ki tareef-e-bayaan hai ya khud khudaayi ko kaafile mein utaar layi hai aap.. bahut pasand aaya..likhte rahiyega

duaaon ke saath
-mast



Qasid


___________________________________________

नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं
क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ

रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें
  Send a message via Yahoo to Qasid Send a message via AIM to Qasid  
Reply With Quote
Hi...
Old
  (#13)
rakshit
kashtiki talashme..SAAHIL
rakshit is on a distinguished road
 
rakshit's Avatar
 
Offline
Posts: 124
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: Gujarat (India)
Rep Power: 21
Smile Hi... - 10th February 2004, 06:44 PM

Hi, Shivani...
Kaise ho..... aashaa he achchhi hi hogi...
bahot hi achchha likhaa he....
keep writing...
Take care.....


~*~ saahil ~*~
----------------------------------------------
Ye alfaz he dard e dil ke, aur kuch nahi.n
Ye ghaav he zindagee ke, aur kuch nahi.n
----------------------------------------------
  Send a message via Yahoo to rakshit  
Reply With Quote
hello....
Old
  (#14)
$hivani
Registered User
$hivani is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 125
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: baroda
Rep Power: 21
Smile hello.... - 10th February 2004, 09:01 PM

mastji aap ka bahut bahut shukriya jo aapne hamein itna saraha.....sach main dil khush ho gaya apni itni taarif padhke....tahe dil se shukriys kubool kijiyega....bye 4 now...and take care!!!!!


koshish ko hamari please nakarna mat.........gar pasand aaye to likhna zaroor ek khat....
   
Reply With Quote
Old
  (#15)
$hivani
Registered User
$hivani is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 125
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: baroda
Rep Power: 21
Smile 10th February 2004, 09:04 PM

hello rakshitji.....hum to bilkul thik hain aur hum bhi yehi aasha karte hain ki aap bhi achche hi honge...aap ka bahut bahut shukriya...i'm glad u liked it.....bye 4 now!take care!!!!!!!


koshish ko hamari please nakarna mat.........gar pasand aaye to likhna zaroor ek khat....
   
Reply With Quote
sanam tum kyon....
Old
  (#16)
sourabh_0103
Registered User
sourabh_0103 is on a distinguished road
 
Offline
Posts: 13
Join Date: Jan 2004
Location: lucknow[uttar pradesh](india)
Rep Power: 0
sanam tum kyon.... - 13th February 2004, 12:56 PM

sanam tum kyo rooth jaate ho aanjane mein,
roothne mein lagti hai do ghariya umr guzar
jaayegi manane mein


sourabh
   
Reply With Quote
Reply

Thread Tools
Display Modes Rate This Thread
Rate This Thread:

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump

Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
Dil kitna kamzor hai sumeet jagtiani Shayri-e-Ishq 0 4th January 2007 05:12 AM
Kamzor Shaakh.....................] Vipinbox Shayri-e-Dard 5 23rd February 2006 12:32 PM
kamzor lamhe samridh_delhi Shayri-e-Ishq 3 5th January 2005 08:37 PM
Itne kareeb aa ke bhi gjgjgj Shayri-e-Dard 1 20th February 2003 03:45 AM
khud ko na kamzor samajh bunty Anjuman-e-Shayri 0 30th November 2002 01:57 PM



Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.5
Copyright ©2000 - 2024, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
vBulletin Skin developed by: vBStyles.com