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Do Din Ka Mehmaan -
10th July 2007, 08:04 PM
Do din ke mehmaan ban ke, wo alvida mujhe keh gaye
kuch na os se puchh sake, bas sochte hi reh gaye wo bhi gair mai bhi gair, phir bhi kiya mujhe keh gaye dur to wo pehle hi the, ab na jane kaha ja ke beh gaye hum beithe the oski raho mai, kisi aur ko sath leh gaye os ke liye ro bhi nahi sakte, jate jate gair mujhe keh gaye ose vidha karke hum, na jane chup keise beh gaye afsos na hua ose jane ka, barri khushi se "bye" keh gaye jaha bhi raho khush hi raho, janat tujhe mubarak ho dost dost kehte kehte, apni dosti bhi sath leh gaye  GOD IS GREAT
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11th July 2007, 09:21 AM
Wah ki likhiya hai, PUNJABAN HEER JI,
kina dard bhariya hai iss wich, ek ek line bahut hi sohni hai, "akhiya de pichhe lag ke aave dil la na beithi" -------------------------------------------- Jihdi mitro bhaal ch dil oh na kuri labhdi,oh na kuri labhdi
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Ranjhan bin Adhuri
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12th July 2007, 10:47 AM
Thank u DEEP JI
thank u for ur comment, esnu salahuon liye sukariya, par aaj aapne shayri.com de ek friend di kami hai aapni iss mehfil wich GOD IS GREAT
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wah ji wah |
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wah ji wah -
13th July 2007, 07:48 PM
wah ji wah, kiya khub likhiya hai, ek dard da ehsah hunda hai, ek ek gal nu kinni sohni tara darsaya hai HEER ji, sachi hi tusi taa bahut hi sohna likhde ho, really good job
"Love is life So don't live ur life without love "  |
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16th July 2007, 02:36 PM
Achhi koshish hai Aapki Punjaban Heer G
Dua hai ke aap aise hi likhte rahein... aapka intezaar rahega... Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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Ranjhan bin Adhuri
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16th July 2007, 07:44 PM
THANK U JASDEEP JI
thanks ke aap ne meri iss koshish ko like kiya and isse read karne ke liye aapna time spend kiya, Thank u again GOD IS GREAT
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gud job |
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gud job -
22nd July 2007, 07:22 PM
punjabi heer, ur poetry was absolutely mind blowing,keep it up.
bye keep smiling. |
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dosti -
22nd July 2007, 07:28 PM
kitna mante hai tumhe,
yeh batae kaise, apni deewangi dikhaye kaise, dosti bhi anmol hai aapki, kuch lafzon se samjhai kaise. |
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24th July 2007, 10:50 AM
Thank U Ajnabi55
Thank U To Like My Poetry And Thanks For Spending The Time For This Also GOD IS GREAT
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3rd July 2008, 04:45 PM
jaha bhi gya ek saya sath chala aaya hai,
gaur se dekha to saye me wajood tera paya hai... |
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Ranjhan bin Adhuri
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18th July 2008, 10:18 PM
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very goooood lines, bahut hi sohna likhiya hai GOD IS GREAT
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