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Ek baar phir haal mera, AzeeB banaana…! -
14th September 2009, 01:43 AM
Aadaab bazm ko
Ek umra ke baad kalam uthayi hai .. bas yuN hi khyaal bas likhta chala gaya.. aapke nazar kar raha huN.. baaki aap sab par chorrta huN... Chale gaye hai mausam aaNkhoN se ashq ban kar.. faisle hai saamne khade har pal ka aks ban kar.. tum aane jaane ka ye silsila chor do.. gham ke raastoN pe mujhe maud do… teri salamati main sukooN paa lounga kahiN .. mujhse apna har naata tod do… ki tumhe chah thi jis aashiyane ki .. bas dil maiN gad gaya hai naksh ban kar… aur faisle khade hai saamne.. pal pal ka aks ban kar… Dhal hi jaate hai mausam aaNkhoN se ashq ban ke … oOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO Mere zehan ka mujhe hi, raqeeb*banaana… Ek baar phir haal mera, ajeeb banaana… Badal gaye raste hijra*maiN ilzaamoN tale.. Mil gaya to karam, na to naseeb bataana.. Intzaar hi hai mere jeene ka sahara akela.. Tum bhi faasla itna aake, qareeb banaana.. Laayak nahi tumhare dagabaaz zindgi meri.. Mujh sa na-kaamil*na koi, habeeb banana.. Muflis*chehre pe ishq saja hai khushi ban ke.. Kaazib*daulat maiN khush, ghareeb zamaana.. Aur..! Uth na sake zameeN tale ‘saccha_pyar’ mera.. Shab-e-gunah*maiN aisi koi, tarkeeb lagaana.. Ek baar phir haal mera yuN, ajeeb banaana… Mere zehan ka mujhe tum, rakeeb banaana… oOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoOoO KunaaL :- 14-09-2009 ---------------------- *Raqeeb ------ Dushman, enemy *Hijra --------- Judaai, Pain of separation *Na-kaamil---- Na-kaamyaab, unsuccessful *Kaazib ------- Jhoote, Fake *Shab-e-gunah--- Gunah ki raat, Night of crime -------------------------------- Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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14th September 2009, 06:14 AM
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kar diyaa bhayeeeeee . |
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14th September 2009, 07:40 AM
Kunaal ji........Namashkaar......kaise hai aap......bahut dino ke baad hi sahi.......bahut khub likha hai hamesha ki tarhaa......har sher zindgi ke bahut kareeb raha.........har ek mai soch ki gehraai bahut hai......jo ghazal ke naazuk palon ko dhaardaar banaye rakhti hai.....mujhe padhkar bahut acha laga........aise hi likhte rahiye.......  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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14th September 2009, 04:57 PM
Kunal Sahab aadaab.........
Janab aapki gazal aayi aur hum aa gaye... Bhai aapki gazal ki taraf jane se pahele ek ilteja karunga janab aapki shirkat bazm mein bahut kam ho chuki hai bus isse mentain kariye....  Chaliye aapki gazal ki taraf chalte hai........ Muradaf waza gair muradaf gazal behad khoob lagii..... sabhi sher achche lage but kuch sher ke muaine saaf zahir nahi hote ke sher ka msg kiya hai... mujhe yeh sher behad umda lage...... Laayak nahi tumhare dagabaaz zindgi meri.. Mujh sa na-kaamil*na koi, habeeb banana.. Uth na sake zameeN tale ‘saccha_pyar’ mera.. Shab-e-gunah*maiN aisi koi, tarkeeb lagaana.. likhate rahiye Bazm mein aate rahiye Apna khayal rakhiye Khuda hafez.. 
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14th September 2009, 05:12 PM
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behad khoobsoorat likha hai aapnay .............har shayr ki apni ek soch hoti hai aaj ek baar fir say main bhi is soch ka kayaal ho gaya hoon ..... meri aur say daad kabool kijiyega......... aapka vichitra Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer...... Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi..... Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............ |
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15th September 2009, 01:25 PM
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bahot khubsurat...................achchi rachna hai aap ki Regards _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
 Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota Ananthpak |
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15th September 2009, 02:41 PM
good gazal ye jo apne first line mai jo likha hai Aadaab bazm ko ?? bazm kya hota hai
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15th September 2009, 07:33 PM
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jaisa ki apne bataya apne bahut time baad kuch likha hai.......magar yakeen janiye apki qalam ki dhar me koi kami nahi hai........ pahle ka to pata nahi lekin abto bahut paini hai  is bahut acchi ghazal par meri daad kabool kijiye regards |
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17th September 2009, 02:28 AM
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Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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17th September 2009, 09:36 PM
Mere Bhai..Kunnu.........
Kalaam ka Matla aur Maqta behtreen laga.... haan matle se maqte tak ki ravaani ka hi ye asar hai... ek baar phri tumne behtereen kalaam pesh kiya hai... Likhte raho... Tumhara apna....... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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21st September 2009, 01:39 PM
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Bohat bohat shukriya .. aapka khaak alfaazoN ko apnanane ke liye .. aapki daad ko seene se laga ke rakhta huN maiN... aate rahiyega,,, Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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21st September 2009, 06:05 PM
kunal ji Namaskaar!!
kaise hain aap? bahaut samay baad aapko parhney ka awsar mila hai. bahaut behtareen ghazal pesh ki hai aapne.....alfaaz bahaut majbooti liye hue hain. aabhaar vipin 
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21st September 2009, 08:52 PM
kunnu !
kaise ho ??? kahaN ho ??? kya kar rahe ho ??? amaa bhai kuch to bataoge na ??? tumhaarii to koi khabar hi nahi miltii ??? mere paas tumhara number bhi nahi jo cal kar luN ??? khair ... ghazal behad khuubsuurat hai ... hamesha ki tarah ...vo hi jana pehchana dard samete hue ... merii dheroN daad Qubuul farmaao ... maalik tumhe apne saaye meiN mahfooz rakhe ! |
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23rd September 2009, 08:40 PM
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Aur shukriya ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye .. ilteza karunga .. jin aasharoN ke muane samajh nahi aaye hai mere saamne rakheN .. maiN koshish karunga aap tak apni baat pahuchaane ki .. aur maiN sach kehta huN khwahish jee .. maiN khush koshish karta huN ki cheezoN ko saaf rakhuN .. par maiN na jaane koun se khyaal kisme mila deta huN .. par umeed karta huN padhne wala bas padhe nahi ... use aaraam se padhte hue uta hi gehra utar jaye jitna main jaa ke likhta huN ... aap aaye accha laga ... aapka apna Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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23rd September 2009, 08:41 PM
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Bohat bohat shukriya janaab .. aapke tashreef laane ka .. main aapka teh dil se shukriya ada karta huN... aapki daad sir maathe sir,. Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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23rd September 2009, 08:45 PM
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Pari bula sakta huN na tumhe .. khuda se guzarish karunga .. tumhe sach maiN pari banaye... aap aayi accha laga... umeed rahegi aage bhi Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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23rd September 2009, 08:47 PM
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 it is a joke or somthing else.. LOLHai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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23rd September 2009, 08:51 PM
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KunaaL Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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23rd September 2009, 08:53 PM
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Aapko accha lag gaya aakhir kaar .. par bhai asar to is baat ka hai aap aaye.. mujhe bas aapka ashirwaad hi chaiye.. Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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24th September 2009, 09:28 PM
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MaiN ek dum durust huN.. aap aaye mujhe behad khushi hui .. aapko pasand aaye khaak alfaaz .. maiN bayan nahi kar sakta apni manmooniyat ko... aapka bhi shukriya Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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28th September 2009, 07:00 PM
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Main ek dum durust huN .. apr aapki khairiyat ki dua karta huN ,,, aur batane ko kya hai ... kuch din ke liye waapas aaya huN .. but aapka no miss ho gaya hai dobara ,, offliner de dijiye ya scrap daal dijiye baaki aapki hausla afzaai ka shuriya ata farmaata huN... aapka apna Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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28th September 2009, 11:16 PM
Kunnu Bhaiya, Kaise ho...?
Jab se tum ne iss rachna ko submit kiya hai, har roz yaani jab jab SDC par aate hein hein, isse ek baar zaroor parh lete hein...! Tum ne bahut khoob likha hai aur ashirvaad hai ki tum hamesha har mukaam par tarakki karte raho...! Aashirvaad ke saath...! Shubhchintak tumhaara Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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29th September 2009, 09:26 AM
Kunaal Bhaa'ii:
namaste! meraa Shaa'iiree kaa safar jab se Shuru huaa thaa uN dinoN se maiN aapko paRhtaa aayaa huuN.. aapki koShiSh bahot hi beHteriN rahiiN... umdaah aNdaaz-e-bayaa.n! waah!! ! liKhate rahe.N aage bhee! bazm ki Shaan baRhaate raheN aise hi! Quote:
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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29th September 2009, 01:38 PM
Kunal Ji,
Wah janab... kia kehnay janab, Itnay khobsorat jazbaat pesh karnay ke liye daad qabool kijiye...... Aise hi likhtay rahiye, GOD BLESS YOU, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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4th October 2009, 04:41 AM
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aur apko acchi lagi ghazal mujhe behad khushi hai aapka apna kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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4th October 2009, 04:44 AM
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Mujhe khushi hai tum mujhe itne din se padh rahe ho .. aur yakeen jaano aaNkhoN main purane pal taazah ho gaye jo meri shayri ka shurwaati daur tha.. aata to rahunga hi ab tak is shey se bacha nahi saka huN khud ko ... ek nayi gazal tayaar hai jaldi hi saamne hogi Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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4th October 2009, 04:46 AM
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aise hi mera honsla badhate rahiyega ,.. mujhe khushi hogi aur aapki daad ko seen se lete hai humm Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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