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sahmaa huwaa gulaab hai kaaNtoN ke darmeyaaN -
27th December 2010, 05:33 PM
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dosto aiye is seekhne sikhaane ke aml ko aage darhaate hain ..ye mere ghazal jise main ne aaj ke 10 saaal pahle likhi thius waqt meraa takhallus masood hi huwaa kartaa thaa .. tamaam logon se guzaarish hai ki is pe apnee raaye den sahmaa huwaa gulaab hai kaaNtoN ke darmeyaaN jaise koi azeez ho aonoN ke darmeyaaN naa paid ho gayee hai kiuN dunyaa se aashtee kiuN izteraab hai bapaa logon ke darmeyaaN insaaf ke wajood ko jab se lagaa gahan rahne lage ameer haiN pahroN ke darmeyaaN dil kee siyaah kaariyoN ke raNg dekhiye cherey sajaa kea aye wo chehroN ke darmeyaaN har faisley ko shoriye allaah pe hozoor mat dhooNdhiye naseeb sitaaroN ke darmeyaaN taptee huyi shaam magar magar dopahar hai sard kaisaa ye inquilaab hai shahroN ke darmeyaaN ouryaaniyat ke raqs ne aisaa acar kiyaa poshaak bat ke rah gayee tukdoNke darmeyaaN tanqeed ke sho”oor ki raftaar jab badhee Hassaas ne panaah lee feqroN ke darmeyaaN |
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27th December 2010, 05:44 PM
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Jawab Nahi Aap Ki Is Ghazal Ka..... Boht Aala,Umdah,Apnay Andar Aik Dars Liye Huye Hai........ Hr Sher Qabil-e-Taareef Hai..... Alfaz Ki Adayigi Kamal Hai... Bs Aik Jaga Mujhy Thora Sa Theak Ni Laga Tha,Wo 2nd Sher Aap Dekh Lijiye Ga..........Agar Mere Mtabiq Aap Ko Theak Lagay To Sahee Warna Aap Mere Liye Mashal-e-Raah Hain ALLAH AAP KO KHUSH RAKHAY Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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27th December 2010, 06:33 PM
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aadaab shakil bhai aap jaise maamilah fahm sanjeedah kalaam log hi mahfil ki jaan hain tamaaniyat ka ehsaas hota hai jab koi is tarah baareekee se ghazal ko dekhtaa hai 2nd sher me jahaan aap ne unglee rakhi hai kis bunyaad pe ? kaheen aisaa to nahi ki lafze ,,,,,, kiun,,,,,, saqeel mahsoos kar rahe hain yaa koi doosree wajah hai . zaraa wazaahat kar dete to maamilaa samajhne aasaani ho jaatee mukhlis masood hassaas |
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29th December 2010, 04:07 PM
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naa paid ho gayee hai kiuN dunyaa se aashtee kiuN izteraab hai bapaa logon ke darmeyaaN Janab Masood Hassaas Saheb....! Aap Ka Ye Shaer Bhi Bilkul THeak Hai...... Magr Mere Kehnay Ka Maqsad Ye Tha Ke Is Sher Ke Pehlay Misray Me " Na-Paid Ho Gai Hai Kiun Dunia Se Aashtee" " Lafz Hai Or Kiun Istemaal Kia Gaya Hai....... Mujhy Aisay Lag Raha Hai Ke Agar In Dono Me Se Aik Lafz KHatam Kr Dia Jaye To Sher Ziada Rawani Or Theak Bahar Me Aa Jaye Ga....... Aisay Parhnay Me Kuch Rukawat Feel Ho Rahi Hai.......Ye Sirf Mera Mushahida Hai ... Lazim Nahi Ke Theak Bhi Ho .... Bahrhaal Aap Aik Dafa Khud Tawajjo Farma Lijiye Ga..... ALLAH Aap ko Khush Rakhay Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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1st January 2011, 01:06 PM
Bohat khoobsurat ghazal hai Masood sahab,
naa paid ho gayee hai kiuN dunyaa se aashtee kiuN izteraab hai bapaa logon ke darmeyaaN zara is sher ke mayine samjhayiye.. Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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1st January 2011, 04:57 PM
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inshallaah parson faarigh ho jaun gaa to sabhi ke jawaabaat dun gaa aor tabserey bhi karun gaa .............aap ka jawaab chun ki mukhtacar hai is liye jawaab de detaa hun ye mokammal sher .. sawaaliyaha .. hai pahlaa micra .......... dunya se amno amaan kiun ghaayeb ho gayaa hai ? doosraa micara ........ logon ke darmeyaan kiun be chainee paaye ja rahee hai ? masood hassaas |
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1st January 2011, 06:59 PM
taptee huyi shaam magar magar dopahar hai sard
kaisaa ye inquilaab hai shahroN ke darmeyaaN ouryaaniyat ke raqs ne aisaa acar kiyaa poshaak bat ke rah gayee tukdoNke darmeyaaN Bahut Pasand aaye aapke Yeh do khayaal ... Masood Bhai ... ! ek dam tarotaazaa ehsaas ... ek umdaa soch ... iske pichhe nazar aati hai ... bahut khoob .. Bhai .. ! aur sab ashaar ki peshkash bhi pur asar rahi ... tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... qubuul ki jiye ... yunhi aate rahen aur likhte rahen ... khush rahen ... ! Happy New Year ... ! duaaon ke saath ... !  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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5th January 2011, 07:46 AM
har faisley ko shoriye allaah pe hozoor
mat dhooNdhiye naseeb sitaaroN ke darmeyaaN waise toh puri ghazal pasand aayi par upar diye do lines khaas rahe shukriya Masood sahab is ghazal ko humare saath share karne ke liye Regards  _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
 Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota Ananthpak |
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5th January 2011, 12:02 PM
insaaf ke wajood ko jab se lagaa gahan
rahne lage ameer haiN pahroN ke darmeyaaN Kya gehri baat kahi hai mere bhai aur kya khoobsurti se kahi hai...........bemisaal raha aapka yeh tanz. dil kee siyaah kaariyoN ke raNg dekhiye cherey sajaa kea aye wo chehroN ke darmeyaaN Wah wah phir ek baar kamaal kar diya aapne..........Subhan_Allah kya nishaan_dehi ki hai aapne janab maza aa gaya. har faisley ko shoriye allaah pe hozoor mat dhooNdhiye naseeb sitaaroN ke darmeyaaN Sach aur sach ke siwa kuch nahi mere bhai............Allah se dua hai ke woh aapke is sher ke sadke aapke tamaam Gunaah maaf kar dein. taptee huyi shaam magar magar dopahar hai sard kaisaa ye inquilaab hai shahroN ke darmeyaaN Mere bhai jaha se aapne yeh sher kaha hai waha tak pohachne meri hasiyat ke baher zaroor tha par ek adna ki koshish zaroor ki hai aur jo samjha hai usse apni zaat par hi sharminda hua hu...........Allah se dua hai ke yeh inquilaabi andaaz badle aur ek badlaav aaye zamane me. Is shaandaar peshkash par karodo daad kabool kare mere bhai. Reps+++++ Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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