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28th August 2014, 05:00 PM
mere dar se uth kar agar ja rahe ho
bata kar to jao kidhar ja rahe ho bhari hain nami se tumhari bhi aankhen bure haal men ho magar ja rahe ho wafa hi wafa main ne ki hai hamesha mujh hi se chura ke nazar ja rahe ho zara main bhi janu ke kis ghum ko lekar idhar ja rahe ho, udhar ja rahe ho khuda se dua main eh hi maangta hun udhar khush raho tum jidhar ja rahe ho mujhe zher de kar abhi mar dalo agar waqai chod kar ja rahe ho hai Parwaaz ko bas isi baat ka ghum ke apni qasam tod kar ja rahe ho |
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28th August 2014, 06:49 PM
mujhe zher de kar abhi mar dalo
agar waqai chod kar ja rahe ho waahhhhh janaab ye faqat ghazal nahii ek daastaan hai..... ek afsaana... ek risaalaa hai...... bas noor hi noor jhalak rahaa hai mere bhai.. daad qubool kijiye... duaago Shaad.... |
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2nd September 2014, 05:11 PM
Bohut bohut shukriya Sameer Saheb....Age bhi sath dete rahiyega. main inshallah age aur bhi kalam pesh karta rahun ga.
Khuda hafiz. |
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31st August 2014, 08:42 PM
wafa hi wafa main ne ki hai hamesha
mujh hi se chura ke nazar ja rahe ho Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaahh! Mujeeb saheb, Dard aur ishQ ka imtezaaj khoob kiya hai aap ne... dherooN dherooN daad iss besh-qeemati ghazal ke liye!  reps added. Likhte rahiye, DuaooN ke saath, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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2nd September 2014, 05:12 PM
Sorry for belated response Hassan Saheb.
Aap ka bohut bohut shukriya. |
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31st August 2014, 09:12 PM
mujib sahab .... ye ghazal zabaan ke meethe paani aur bayaan ki rawaani ka ek jharna hai jis ki ek ghoont le kar tishna-e-sukhan ko masarrat aur itmenaan ka ehsaas hota hai. agar baat karein is ke ehsaasaat ki, to waaah ... kayee kism ke jazbaat ... shikayat naarazgi supurdgi intesaab .... ka taana baana buna hai .... in sab jalwon se beintehaayee zauq-e-sukhan haasil hota hai. beshaq ek laajawaab pur-jamaal qalaam hai .... aap ko bahaut bahaut mubaarakbaad aur dheron dheron daad !!!!
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha |
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2nd September 2014, 05:19 PM
My dear Zarraa ji,
Jitni khoobsurat meri Ghazal hai usse bhi kahin ziyadah khoobsurat aap ka eh bayaan(Comment) hai. I feel humble of being heard to your such amazing comment. It is so nice of you. Lots of thanks to you. Take care Khuda Hafiz. |
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2nd September 2014, 05:43 PM
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Apne itna khoobsurat likha hai ki koi kahin bhi ja raha ho yahin aaker theher jaayega. Likhte rahiye. Khush rahiye. Sarika |
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3rd September 2014, 11:39 AM
Bohut bohut Shukriya
Hanste hue daad qubool kar raha hun. Kyon ki is bhagti hui duniya men koi Ghazal sunkar theher jaye to bohut badi baat hogi. Isi tarah saath dete rahiye. Cheers! Mujeeb |
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3rd September 2014, 01:23 PM
Oh very very sorry Nazneen ji.
Beintehah office ke kamon men phans gaya hun...is liye shayad acknowledgement dena bhool gaya. Waise aap ko jaan kar taajub hoga ke peshe main Sr. Scientist hun ....magar ek zamane se zauq-e-shayeri rakhta hun....lekin bohut ziyada nahin. Aap se mazrat chhata hun......is baat ka phir se shukriya ada karta hun ke aap ne meri Ghazal ko meticulously padha, samjha aur sincerely comment bhi kiya. Aap ka nacheez dost Mujeeb Parwaaz. |
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4th September 2014, 12:57 PM
Dear Nazneenji...aap se mukhatib ho kar ..ap ke message padh kar...kalam padhkar ek andruni khushi hoti hai mujhe....pata hai !!
main aksar ghazal isi purani beher ( rythm) "faulun faulun faulun faulun" men likhta hun. Purani ( Traditional) beher is liye ke.....Jeegar Muradabadi ki ek mashhoor Ghazal bhi isi beher men hai. Is Ghazal ka ek matla aur do sher .....arz kar raha hun.. jo ab bhi na takleef farmayiyega to bas haath malte hi reh jayiyega ham hi jab na honge to kya rang-e-mehfil kise dekh kar aap sharmayiyega. bhoolana hamara mubarak mubarak magar shart eh hai na yaad ayiyega......By Jeegar Muradabadi do filmi geet bhi isi beher main....aur bhi kai honge... 1. Ajee rooth kar ab kahan jayiyega....jahan jayiyega hamen payiyega 2. bane chhahe dushman zamana hamara..salamat rahe dostana hamara. Ok. Cheers! With best wishes. Mujeeb Parwaaz |
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9th September 2014, 10:22 PM
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अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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10th September 2014, 12:44 PM
Bohut bohut shukriya Madhu ji.
Aap ki kavitayen bhi kafi asardaar hoti hain. Main to forum men dhoond dhoond kar aap ki kavita padhta hun. Bade khule dil se aap likhti hain...aur rawani bhi khoob achhi. Bye for now. Mujeeb Prwaaz |
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