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25th August 2004, 12:20 AM
1st sher
hamari chahat ko yuun aazmaya na karo Duur rehna hai tau yaad bhi aaya na karo" -Paras 2nd sher hamne saari koshishe ki apko bhulaane ki phir bhi yaad aa aa kar rulaayaa naa karo -mast 3rd sher jab aa hi nahi sakte ho meri jindgi mein tum yaadoin mein aa kar mujhe tadpaaya na karo --sakhi 4th sher Teri inhin ansooon main meri yaadein basti hein Apni ankhon se ab toum inhein bahaaya na karo --amanush 5th sher Meri panaho me aaker fir jaya na karo u aa-ja kar dil ki tanhaiya baraya na karo --udas 6th sher Dil hai mera nahi koi khilona, isse yun khelkar chhod jaya na karo... --pulkit gupta 7th sher zarra see aahat, aur yeh be-ikhtiyaari meri bekhabar sanson ko meri, yun uljhaaya na karo --paras Sanjoo, plz. help me keep the integrity of this thread... aur tum aaye hee thhe tau koyi sher likh jaate... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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25th August 2004, 10:23 AM
Sanjoo,
plz. help me keep the integrity of this thread... Parastaar jii satsriyaakal........mujhe koii shoK nahii hai tumharee yaa kisi aur kii daanT khaane kaa..... mai ne joo kuch likhaa hai..bada soch samjh kar likhaa hai........ aur tum aaye hee thhe tau koyi sher likh jaate......vo tao bada mushkil hai jii....ek se ek bade mahaaratii baithe hai yahan....mai ap kii bisaad ka sab se choota moharaa hu....sab se pehale piit jata huu jii...aur mai ab aur piitne ka shok nahi rakhtaa.......  mai bhalaa aur mere bakwaas shayarii bhaliii.....radif pakadne jaat hu tao kafeeyaa tang pad jata hai...kafiiye ko pakdu tao wazaan kam pad jata hai......mai ap jaise paiimaanoo nahi likh pata jiii.........awaaraa hu jii aawargii se jinaa chahataa hu.................. chaltaa hu...... jaate jaate ek ghalib sahaab ka sher ap k liye khaas toR......nazaar kartaa hu.... Nikalnaa khulld se aadam ka sunnte aaye thai lekin bade be-aabaruu ho kar tere kuuche se hum nikle aur ek sher...kahii sunne ko nahi milegaa joo mere mijaaz se miltaa hai......woh bhii sunn lo.... Vo nazuuk mijaaz hai tao yahaan hum bhii hai tamkanak* khud hii hum aese hai kii manaya na jaayegaa....... *tamkanak=masstmolaa(ap kii bhashaa mai sankii) shaamapraathii......Sanju!!!!! muddato mout ne bhi tarsaaya hame.. ..... |
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26th August 2004, 01:02 PM
1st sher
hamari chahat ko yuun aazmaya na karo Duur rehna hai tau yaad bhi aaya na karo" -Paras 2nd sher hamne saari koshishe ki apko bhulaane ki phir bhi yaad aa aa kar rulaayaa naa karo -mast 3rd sher jab aa hi nahi sakte ho meri jindgi mein tum yaadoin mein aa kar mujhe tadpaaya na karo --sakhi 4th sher Teri inhin ansooon main meri yaadein basti hein Apni ankhon se ab toum inhein bahaaya na karo --amanush 5th sher Meri panaho me aaker fir jaya na karo u aa-ja kar dil ki tanhaiya baraya na karo --udas 6th sher Dil hai mera nahi koi khilona, isse yun khelkar chhod jaya na karo... --pulkit gupta 7th sher zarra see aahat, aur yeh be-ikhtiyaari meri bekhabar sanson ko meri, yun uljhaaya na karo --paras Tumhari zyaadtiyon se dushman mauj karte hain besabab rooth ke yuun mujh ko sataya na karo --Sahil Khan "Sahil" |
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26th August 2004, 03:20 PM
Jheel si ankho me bhar kar ye udasi..
rukhsaro ki ranaaion* ko bujhaya na karo.. --udas rukhsaro ki ranaaion = beauty of face udas |
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13th September 2004, 12:05 AM
Doston...
Aaj pehli baar yahan par ek pehla phool iss haar-e-ghazal main lagaa rahe hein...aap logon ke gul-e-kalaam ke intazaar main ijaazat chahte hein... Shukriya... Teen kadam to chal diyaa raah-e-ishk main tere saath Kya houa jo gouzaar na sakaa sari zindagi tere saath... Amanush...  Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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15th November 2004, 06:29 PM
Teen kadam to chal diyaa raah-e-ishk main tere saath
Kya houa jo gouzaar na sakaa sari zindagi tere saath... 2nd sher Tere haanthon ki garmi ka abhi tak hai moujhe ehsaas Kismat ne jane kya kya khel khela hai mere tere saath Ye sab jaante hein… Tum ko kitna chahte hein, Sirf Rab jaante hein 'Amrita' |
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Paras ji ke liye -
15th November 2004, 06:52 PM
Paras ji ......yaha bhi aap hi ka thread hai......aankh na chouraaiye
iss se.......aapka aur sabhi doston ka intazaar hai yahan par Moujh ko meri vafaa ka sila aur kya mile oussne bhi meri yaad main ansoo bahaye 'Namaloum' Ye sab jaante hein… Tum ko kitna chahte hein, Sirf Rab jaante hein 'Amrita' |
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16th November 2004, 02:32 AM
Tere haanthon ki garmi ka abhi tak hai moujhe ehsaas
Kismat ne jane kya kya khel khela hai mere tere saath 3rd Sher teri mohabbat ke julus ne samja jise ek shayar ka agaaz, anjaan nigaahon ne na dekha woh mera janazaa tere saath |
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16th November 2004, 02:55 AM
Dosto aap sabko, especially Amrita aapko yahan dekh kar bahut khushi huyi...dekhiey main shayar nahin hoon...lekin yeh thread humne shayri ke niyamon ko samajhne ke liye hee taamir kiya...tau ab yeh mera farz ban jaata hai ki jitna maine shayri ko samjha hai ya seekha hai...utna tau aapko bata hee doon...
plz dhyaan dijieygaa yahan; 1st sher hamari chahat ko yuun aazmaya na karo Duur rehna hai tau yaad bhi aaya na karo" -Paras 2nd sher hamne saari koshishe ki apko bhulaane ki phir bhi yaad aa aa kar rulaayaa naa karo -mast 3rd sher jab aa hi nahi sakte ho meri jindgi mein tum yaadoin mein aa kar mujhe tadpaaya na karo --sakhi 4th sher Teri inhin ansooon main meri yaadein basti hein Apni ankhon se ab toum inhein bahaaya na karo --amanush 5th sher Meri panaho me aaker fir jaya na karo u aa-ja kar dil ki tanhaiya baraya na karo --udas 6th sher Dil hai mera nahi koi khilona, isse yun khelkar chhod jaya na karo... --pulkit gupta 7th sher zarra see aahat, aur yeh be-ikhtiyaari meri bekhabar sanson ko meri, yun uljhaaya na karo --paras Tumhari zyaadtiyon se dushman mauj karte hain besabab rooth ke yuun mujh ko sataya na karo --Sahil Khan "Sahil" Aapne kuch note kiya? na karo is the ending of every sher's second line...this is called 'radeef' just before na karo is a rhyming pattern...of 'aaya' 'rulaaya' 'tadpaya' uljhaaya' etc... this is called the 'kafiyaa.' A ghazal must have these two...there are other things as well like 'behr' length of lines must be same., and the 'wazan' yaani weight that till date my ghazals lack too...but abhi tau hum yeh do cheezein hee samajh jayein tau ghazal ko aur samjhein... ab aap sab khud hee samajh gaye honge ki yeh ghazal sahi nahin jaa rahi... let me start a new ghazal and then you guys reply to that...theek hai? gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th November 2004, 03:03 AM
lijiey 1st sher
Aaj Pyaar se apne rihaayi maangti hoon Ab tumse tumhari judaayi mangti hoon so 'aayi' is the kaafiya and 'mangti hoon' is 'Radeef' every second line of the sher must end with mangti hoon..and before that the rhyming pattern must be for eg....rihaayi, judaayi, gehraayi, pazeeraayi...etc etc... Good luck gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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16th November 2004, 03:24 AM
Since I messed up previously in the 'kafiya' - 'radeef' combination, here I'm trying to redeem myself..
gustakhi maaf kijiyega aur is baar shayaad is naye shayar ka sher safal ho.. Aaj Pyaar se apne rihaayi maangti hoon Ab tumse tumhari judaayi mangti hoon 2nd sher Sab kuch lootakar bas ek cheez maangti hoon Ab tere zehan se apni parchaayi mangti hoon |
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17th November 2004, 12:53 AM
Aaj Pyaar se apne rihaayi maangti hoon
Ab tumse tumhari judaayi mangti hoon 2nd sher Sab kuch lootakar bas ek cheez maangti hoon Ab tere zehan se apni parchaayi mangti hoon 3rd sher Apni iss anaaniyat ko ab tum chod bhi do Tumse sirf tumhari tanhaayi mangti houn 'Anaaniyat' = Egoism Ye sab jaante hein… Tum ko kitna chahte hein, Sirf Rab jaante hein 'Amrita' |
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28th November 2004, 01:30 PM
Aaj Pyaar se apne rihaayi maangti hoon
Ab tumse tumhari judaayi mangti hoon 2nd sher Sab kuch lootakar bas ek cheez maangti hoon Ab tere zehan se apni parchaayi mangti hoon 3rd sher Apni iss anaaniyat ko ab tum chod bhi do Tumse sirf tumhari tanhaayi mangti houn 'Anaaniyat' = Egoism 4th sher tum chal to diye ho yun chodke mujhe ab tere dil ke jakham ki gahraai jaanti hoon शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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17th February 2005, 05:51 AM
Hi Paras di aur shayri.com ke sadasye,
Paras di aapne yeh link mujhe diya iska mein bahut hi abhari hoon Yeh thread vakai mein bahut hi acha hai aur mujhe isse kai cheezein sikhne ko milin hain. Ek adhuri ghazal ek aisa phool hai jo khilne se pehle murjha jaata hai isliye is Ghazal ko aage badha raha hoon ki yeh Ghazal jald apne sahi anjaam tak pahooche Aaj mein is Aaj Pyaar se apne rihaayi maangti hoon Ab tumse tumhari judaayi mangti hoon 2nd sher Sab kuch lootakar bas ek cheez maangti hoon Ab tere zehan se apni parchaayi mangti hoon 3rd sher Apni iss anaaniyat ko ab tum chod bhi do Tumse sirf tumhari tanhaayi mangti houn 'Anaaniyat' = Egoism 4th sher tum chal to diye ho yun chodke mujhe ab tere dil ke jakham ki gahraai jaanti hoon 5th sher Ab tak tera intezar kiya bahut e shayar aaj khatam ho, tujhse vidaayi mangti hoon Thanks Rohin |
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17th February 2005, 03:01 PM
Paras Meri Behna......
bahut hi aachi kadi shuru ki hai.... saari posts padi aur bahut kutch seekhne ko mila..... chaata (6th) sher pesh kar raha hoon.... Aaj Pyaar se apne rihaayi maangti hoon Ab tumse tumhari judaayi mangti hoon Paras Sab kuch lootakar bas ek cheez maangti hoon Ab tere zehan se apni parchaayi mangti hoon Kaif Apni iss anaaniyat ko ab tum chod bhi do Tumse sirf tumhari tanhaayi mangti houn 'Anaaniyat' = Egoism Amrita- Amore tum chal to diye ho yun chodke mujhe ab tere dil ke jakham ki gahraai jaanti hoon Sakhi Ab tak tera intezar kiya bahut e shayar aaj khatam ho, tujhse vidaayi mangti hoon Rohin lagaya tune mol is pyar ka ae sanam...... aaj tujhse apni wafa ki saudaai maangti hoon..... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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17th February 2005, 07:20 PM
7th sher
Aaj Pyaar se apne rihaayi maangti hoon Ab tumse tumhari judaayi mangti hoon Paras Sab kuch lootakar bas ek cheez maangti hoon Ab tere zehan se apni parchaayi mangti hoon Kaif Apni iss anaaniyat ko ab tum chod bhi do Tumse sirf tumhari tanhaayi mangti houn 'Anaaniyat' = Egoism Amrita- Amore tum chal to diye ho yun chodke mujhe ab tere dil ke jakham ki gahraai jaanti hoon Sakhi Ab tak tera intezar kiya bahut e shayar aaj khatam ho, tujhse vidaayi mangti hoon Rohin lagaya tune mol is pyar ka ae sanam...... aaj tujhse apni wafa ki saudaai maangti hoon..... aman rahi Aag hoon, shola banoon, phir raakh aye sanam Rahe tu salamat, paayandah vidaayi maangti hoon paras shukriya rohin aur aman...keep it up gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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18th February 2005, 01:09 PM
8th and last sher
Aaj Pyaar se apne rihaayi maangti hoon Ab tumse tumhari judaayi mangti hoon --Paras Sab kuch lootakar bas ek cheez maangti hoon Ab tere zehan se apni parchaayi mangti hoon --Kaif Apni iss anaaniyat ko ab tum chod bhi do Tumse sirf tumhari tanhaayi mangti houn 'Anaaniyat' = Egoism --Amrita- Amore tum chal to diye ho yun chodke mujhe ab tere dil ke jakham ki gahraai jaanti hoon --Sakhi Ab tak tera intezar kiya bahut e shayar aaj khatam ho, tujhse vidaayi mangti hoon --Rohin lagaya tune mol is pyar ka ae sanam...... aaj tujhse apni wafa ki saudaai maangti hoon..... --aman rahi Aag hoon, shola banoon, phir raakh aye sanam Rahe tu salamat, paayandah vidaayi maangti hoon --paras Tasaavur me mere qaid hain yaadein Tumhaari hi, In Yaadon sang jeevan bhar ki tanhayee maangti hoon --Pulkit Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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18th February 2005, 01:49 PM
Starting a New Ghazal...
Ist Sher Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN Requesting all the members to please continue it further... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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18th February 2005, 01:55 PM
Ist Sher
Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN -Pulkit Gupta 2nd Sher Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN -Rohin Bhargava |
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19th February 2005, 11:21 AM
Pulkit bhai....bahut aache....mann Garden Garden ho gaya....
3rd sher....persh kar raha hoon.... 1st sher Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN -Pulkit Gupta 2nd Sher Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN -Rohin Bhargava Dard-e-^AMAN^ had se roz gujarta hai..... zakmon ki kitaab subho-sham likha karte hain..... -Aman **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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20th February 2005, 02:52 AM
1st sher
Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN -Pulkit Gupta 2nd Sher Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN -Rohin Bhargava Dard-e-^AMAN^ had se roz gujarta hai..... zakmon ki kitaab subho-sham likha karte hain..... -Aman 4th sher Paigaam ko mitaana mitaakar phirse likhna likhkar na vejna..tumse ye rasm sikha karte hain -Raj  Raj
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21st February 2005, 03:58 PM
Bahut aache.... sahi jaa raha hai ye kalam....lekin shayad kahin radeef mein kutch gad-bad hai.....
Meri behna....zara gaur karna aur hume batana..... Raj ji...aapke sher mein ek correction ki hai.... 5th sher pesh kar raha hoon...... 1st sher Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN Pulkit Gupta 2nd Sher Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN Rohin Bhargava Dard-e-^AMAN^ had se roz gujarta hai..... zakmon ki kitaab subho-sham likha karte hain..... Aman 4th sher Paigaam ko mitaana mitaakar phirse likhna likhkar na bhejna..tumse ye rasm sikha karte hain Raj chupa liya hai kafn mein apne phir bhi..... bazaar mein loote armaan roz bika karte hain..... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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22nd February 2005, 05:50 AM
1st sher
Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN Pulkit Gupta 2nd Sher Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN Rohin Bhargava 3rd Sher Dard-e-^AMAN^ had se roz gujarta hai..... zakmon ki kitaab subho-sham likha karte hain..... Aman 4th sher Paigaam ko mitaana mitaakar phirse likhna likhkar na bhejna..tumse ye rasm sikha karte hain Raj 5th Sher chupa liya hai kafn mein apne phir bhi..... bazaar mein loote armaan roz bika karte hain..... Aman Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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I am sorry because of I did deleted my reply first, Do Forgive me*
Ek chhoti si kowshish, would not match the rules though**Ijaazat? Likh deti houn... 1st sher Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN Pulkit Gupta 2nd Sher Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN Rohin Bhargava 3rd Sher Dard-e-^AMAN^ had se roz gujarta hai..... zakmon ki kitaab subho-sham likha karte hain..... Aman 4th sher Paigaam ko mitaana mitaakar phirse likhna likhkar na bhejna..tumse ye rasm sikha karte hain Raj 5th Sher chupa liya hai kafn mein apne phir bhi..... bazaar mein loote armaan roz bika karte hain..... Aman 6th Sher Pyaar Bhada Do Mithein Bol Ko..Dil Tarasta Hain... Shab-o-Roz..Qayaamat Ka Intezaar Kiya Karte Hain... Keep smilling....... Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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22nd February 2005, 06:22 AM
Strange...but true !Mujhse bhi galti houi...Beg for your pardon
1st sher Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN Pulkit Gupta 2nd Sher Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN Rohin Bhargava 3rd Sher Dard-e-^AMAN^ had se roz gujarta hai..... zakmon ki kitaab subho-sham likha karte hain..... Aman 4th sher Paigaam ko mitaana mitaakar phirse likhna likhkar na bhejna..tumse ye rasm sikha karte hain Raj 5th Sher chupa liya hai kafn mein apne phir bhi..... bazaar mein loote armaan roz bika karte hain..... Aman 6th Sher Pyaar Bhada Do Mithein Bol Ko..Dil Tarasta Hain... Shab-o-Roz..Qayaamat Ka Intezaar Kiya Karte Hain... Shimul 7th sher Alvida keh kar wo chali gayi to kya houa Ousski pehli salaam ab bhi yaad kiya karte hain Amanush... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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8thvaan sher pesh kar raha hoon.....
1st sher Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN Pulkit Gupta 2nd Sher Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN Rohin Bhargava 3rd Sher Dard-e-^AMAN^ had se roz gujarta hai..... zakmon ki kitaab subho-sham likha karte hain..... Aman_rahi 4th sher Paigaam ko mitaana mitaakar phirse likhna likhkar na bhejna..tumse ye rasm sikha karte hain Raj 5th Sher chupa liya hai kafn mein apne phir bhi..... bazaar mein loote armaan roz bika karte hain..... Aman_rahi 6th Sher Pyaar Bhada Do Mithein Bol Ko..Dil Tarasta Hain... Shab-o-Roz..Qayaamat Ka Intezaar Kiya Karte Hain... Shimul 7th sher Alvida keh kar wo chali gayi to kya houa Ousski pehli salaam ab bhi yaad kiya karte hain Amanush... 8th sher yun *Qasr-e-zulmat mein chooda jo tujhe ^AMAN^..... in *sihaayion mein bhi uske aks dikha karte hain…. Qasr-e-zulmat= andheron ki jagah/place sihaayion= darkness is sher ke saath ke kalam poora hua Meri behna........ kutch aapke khayal ka intezaar rahega is par...galtiaan bata dijiye..... **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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22nd February 2005, 02:14 PM
Dil ke halaat ba Qalaam likha karte haiN
Mohabbat ki ghazal har sham likha karte haiN Pulkit Gupta Kiya hai roshan meri mehbooba ne mera dil aise Poornima ke din bhi apne Chaand ko Dekha karte haiN Rohin Bhargava Dard-e-^AMAN^ had se roz gujarta hai..... zakmon ki kitaab subho-sham likha karte hain..... Aman_rahi Paigaam ko mitaana mitaakar phirse likhna likhkar na bhejna..tumse ye rasm sikha karte hain Raj chupa liya hai kafn mein apne phir bhi..... bazaar mein loote armaan roz bika karte hain..... Aman_rahi Pyaar Bhada Do Mithein Bol Ko..Dil Tarasta Hain... Shab-o-Roz..Qayaamat Ka Intezaar Kiya Karte Hain... Shimul Alvida keh kar wo chali gayi to kya houa Ousski pehli salaam ab bhi yaad kiya karte hain Amanush... yun *Qasr-e-zulmat mein chooda jo tujhe ^AMAN^..... in *sihaayion mein bhi uske aks dikha karte hain…. Mujhe nahin lagta ki mujhe kuch kehne kee zaroorat hai...lagta hai aap khud hee jaan gaye hain...ki kya galti huyi kaafiya mein... aap sab jitni shiddat se yahan likhne ki koshish kar rahe hain...mujhe bahut khushi ho rahi hai dekh kar... main ek naya sher likhne jaa rahi hoon...ummiid hai aap ise ghazal ka ruup de deinge... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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22nd February 2005, 02:41 PM
1st sher
Sukoon mujhe nahin, tau beqaraar wo bhi hain bheegi palkein meri, go ashkbaar wo bhi hain paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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22nd February 2005, 11:37 PM
1st sher
Sukoon mujhe nahin, tau beqaraar wo bhi hain bheegi palkein meri, go ashkbaar wo bhi hain paras 2nd Sher Aansoon ki wajah kya, yeh ashk jaante hain Humare hal-e-dil ke raazdaar wo bhi hain Rohin |
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23rd February 2005, 09:08 PM
Sukoon mujhe nahin, tau beqaraar wo bhi hain
bheegi palkein meri, go ashkbaar wo bhi hain Aansoon ki wajah kya, yeh ashk jaante hain Humare hal-e-dil ke raazdaar wo bhi hain urz kiya hai Raazdari jinhe bakhshi mire dil ki humne Dil ki janib ek talwaar vo bhi haiN |
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23rd February 2005, 09:46 PM
Sukoon mujhe nahin, tau beqaraar wo bhi hain
bheegi palkein meri, go ashkbaar wo bhi hain paras Aansoon ki wajah kya, yeh ashk jaante hain Humare hal-e-dil ke raazdaar wo bhi hain rohin Raazdari jinhe bakhshi mire dil ki humne Dil ki janib ek talwaar vo bhi haiN kshitiz ashq aaNkhoN main nahi sookh gayi palke yuN... khwaaB hume nahi, jinke talabgaar woh bhi hai... Kunal(S.p) Aadab paras didi... aur azeez shayroN... aaj badi deri ke saath aapki is mehfil maiN shirkat kar raha huN ... afsoos hai ki is mehfil se kahiN door tha maiN ... par aaj yahaN ka raahgir maiN bhi ban hi gaya ... ek se ek hunarmand kalamkaaroN kei mehfil maiN ... umeed hai ki aapse seekhne ko bohat milega... aur ilteza hai ... gar kahiN maiN choook jauN to aap uspe mujhe jaroor ittela kareN ... aur muafi ka bhi talab gaar huN gar sath maiN kahiN kam reh jauN to ,,, aap sab apna khayal rakiye ... mehfil sajate rahiye aap sabka kunal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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20th March 2005, 02:49 PM
Sukoon mujhe nahin, tau beqaraar wo bhi hain
bheegi palkein meri, go ashkbaar wo bhi hain paras Aansoon ki wajah kya, yeh ashk jaante hain Humare hal-e-dil ke raazdaar wo bhi hain Rohin Raazdari jinhe bakhshi mire dil ki humne Dil ki janib ek talwaar vo bhi haiN kshitiz ashq aaNkhoN main nahi sookh gayi palke yuN... khwaaB hume nahi, jinke talabgaar woh bhi hai... Kunal(S.p) Dekh ankhon mein apne hi paani beh jaata hai Meri zindagi ke Aa-iinaa-baradaar wo bhi hain Rohin I am sorry if i broke the rules but somebody had to continue Thanks Rohin |
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21st March 2005, 01:06 PM
Sukoon mujhe nahin, tau beqaraar wo bhi hain
bheegi palkein meri, go ashkbaar wo bhi hain paras Aansoon ki wajah kya, yeh ashk jaante hain Humare hal-e-dil ke raazdaar wo bhi hain Rohin Raazdari jinhe bakhshi mire dil ki humne Dil ki janib ek talwaar vo bhi haiN kshitiz ashq aaNkhoN main nahi sookh gayi palke yuN... khwaaB hume nahi, jinke talabgaar woh bhi hai... Kunal(S.p) Dekh ankhon mein apne hi paani beh jaata hai Meri zindagi ke Aa-iinaa-baradaar wo bhi hain Rohin 6th sher sitamgar sahi, qaatil mijaaz nahin hain wo riste hamare zakhmon ke charagaar wo bhi hain paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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12th April 2005, 06:44 PM
[QUOTE]Originally posted by Parastaar
[B]Sukoon mujhe nahin, tau beqaraar wo bhi hain bheegi palkein meri, go ashkbaar wo bhi hain paras Aansoon ki wajah kya, yeh ashk jaante hain Humare hal-e-dil ke raazdaar wo bhi hain Rohin Raazdari jinhe bakhshi mire dil ki humne Dil ki janib ek talwaar vo bhi haiN kshitiz ashq aaNkhoN main nahi sookh gayi palke yuN... khwaaB hume nahi, jinke talabgaar woh bhi hai... Kunal(S.p) Dekh ankhon mein apne hi paani beh jaata hai Meri zindagi ke Aa-iinaa-baradaar wo bhi hain Rohin 6th sher sitamgar sahi, qaatil mijaaz nahin hain wo riste hamare zakhmon ke charagaar wo bhi hain [b]paras 7th sher Ounka yahi kehna hai ki samajhdaar wo bhi hai par ye nahin samajhti ki mera sansaar wo bhi hai Amanush... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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22nd May 2005, 12:03 AM
Sukoon mujhe nahin, tau beqaraar wo bhi hain
bheegi palkein meri, go ashkbaar wo bhi hain paras Aansoon ki wajah kya, yeh ashk jaante hain Humare hal-e-dil ke raazdaar wo bhi hain Rohin Raazdari jinhe bakhshi mire dil ki humne Dil ki janib ek talwaar vo bhi haiN kshitiz ashq aaNkhoN main nahi sookh gayi palke yuN... khwaaB hume nahi, jinke talabgaar woh bhi hai... Kunal(S.p) Dekh ankhon mein apne hi paani beh jaata hai Meri zindagi ke Aa-iinaa-baradaar wo bhi hain Rohin 6th sher sitamgar sahi, qaatil mijaaz nahin hain wo riste hamare zakhmon ke charagaar wo bhi hain [b]paras 7th sher Ounka yahi kehna hai ki samajhdaar wo bhi hai par ye nahin samajhti ki mera sansaar wo bhi hai Amanush... 8th sher Kitne ilzaam diye duniya ne, yeh khuda jaanta hai "Rohin" ko hai bus itna kehna ki wafadaar wo bhi hai |
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23rd May 2005, 01:00 AM
would like to start sumthing..
ishq me bewafai ka sabab.. kis kis ko samjhayein dil ki hazaar majburiyaan.. inhe kahaan lekar jayein |
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23rd May 2005, 10:27 AM
ishq me bewafai ka sabab.. kis kis ko samjhayein
dil ki hazaar majburiyaan.. inhe kahaan lekar jayein Gudiya humne tumko chahne ki galtiyaN sau baar ki, aaj bhi dil chahta hai woh khata dohrayein. Talib Talib. |
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23rd May 2005, 10:34 AM
ishq me bewafai ka sabab.. kis kis ko samjhayein
dil ki hazaar majburiyaan.. inhe kahaan lekar jayein Gudiya humne tumko chahne ki galtiyaN sau baar ki, aaj bhi dil chahta hai woh khata dohrayein. Talib humne inteezar tera Qayamat tak kiya Aur kitna is dil ko teri yaadon se Behlayein Rohin |
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Paigaam-e-Aman
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23rd May 2005, 12:12 PM
ishq me bewafai ka sabab.. kis kis ko samjhayein
dil ki hazaar majburiyaan.. inhe kahaan lekar jayein Gudiya humne tumko chahne ki galtiyaN sau baar ki, aaj bhi dil chahta hai woh khata dohrayein. Talib humne inteezar tera Qayamat tak kiya Aur kitna is dil ko teri yaadon se Behlayein Rohin khatawaar nahin tum, jo kiya qatl-e-armaan ….. aaj bhi is dil ko hum yeh samjhayein..... Aman_rahi **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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23rd May 2005, 12:37 PM
ishq me bewafai ka sabab.. kis kis ko samjhayein
dil ki hazaar majburiyaan.. inhe kahaan lekar jayein Gudiya humne tumko chahne ki galtiyaN sau baar ki, aaj bhi dil chahta hai woh khata dohrayein. Talib humne inteezar tera Qayamat tak kiya Aur kitna is dil ko teri yaadon se Behlayein Rohin khatawaar nahin tum, jo kiya qatl-e-armaan ….. aaj bhi is dil ko hum yeh samjhayein..... Aman_rahi sochakar baithe hai ki too laut aayega ek din us pal ke intezaar me hai nazare bichaayein Garima first time yeha aayi hoo... hope line sahi hogi.. mere hisaab se to theek hai. pls galat ho to bata de |
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