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Ghazal: ZiNdagee kyaa haii ko'i bataaye to sahee...! -
17th November 2009, 10:58 AM
Mere Pyaare dostoN: Namaskaar aur Aadaab! baRe dinoN baad aik ChhoTii si koShiSh ko lekar bazm meiN haaZir huaa huuN.. kal raat baiThe huye zeh'n meN ik baat aayiiN.. tou lafzoN ke Zar'iiYe uNhe peSh karne kii koShiSh kii mere dil ne ! ummid kartaa aapko mere ehsaas pasaNd aayeNge! aap sab ke Qeemtee raa'ey kaa mujhe iNtezaar raheNgaa! mulA'iizaa farmaayeN! ****************************** ZiNdagee kyaa haii ko'i bataaye to sahee asliyat kyaa haii ko'i diKhaaye to sahee pal meN detii KhuShi to pal meN detii hai Ghum maamalaa kyaa haii ko'i sunaaye to sahee sach ko deKhe ik arsaa beet gayaa hai ab JhooTh kaa pardaa ko'i haTaaye to sahee log kehte hain haNs ke jeelo ziNdagee Khud ke Ghum pehle ko'i Bhulaaye to sahee taarifoN se rauShan hum ho gaye hai.n bahot daaG hum par bhee ko'i lagaaye to sahee ****************************** ज़िंदगी क्या है कोई बताए तो सही असलियत क्या है कोई दिखाए तो सही पल में देती ख़ुशी तो पल में देती हे गम मामला क्या है कोई सुनाए तो सही सच को देखे इक अरसा बीत गया हे अब झूठ का परदा कोई हटाए तो सही लोग कहते हैं हंस के जीलो ज़िंदगी खुद के गम पहले कोई भुलाए तो सही तारीफों से रौशन हम हो गये है बहोत दाग हम पर भी कोई लगाए तो सही ****************************** |
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bahot masoom sa likha hai aapne...mujhe bahot acha laga...sacha laga.. yunhi likhte rahiye..khush rahiye..god bless... सच को देखे इक अरसा बीत गया हे अब झूठ का परदा कोई हटाए तो सही तारीफों से रौशन हम हो गये है बहोत दाग हम पर भी कोई लगाए तो सही bahot khoob..daad... aapka dost, Pradhyuman gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
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Hello Dhaval ji,Kaise hai aap? aaj aapki likhi hui rachana padhi Dil ko chhu gai. Reply karane se apane aap ko rok nahi paai ......aur aapke kahe mutaabik apana reply sirf aapko pm mai nahi aapki is pyaari si post par bhi kar rahi hoon. Kuchh is tarha se aaj bayaan kiya hai aapne chand baaton ko ki...... jaise laga koi zindagi ke saamane khada rahe kar zindagi ko hi aaina dikha raha hai. kuchh sawaal........ jo shaayad har insaan ke mann mai kahi na kahi kisi na kisi rang mai hote hi hai. Aapne sach mai bahot achchha likha hai...... is par bas itana kahe sakti hoon ki ..... really very touchy ...and real.... aapne hum sab padhne waalo ke saath saath ....shaayad Zindagi ko bhi uaski sachchaai ka aaina dikha diya,....... aur uase apani haqiqat se rub-ru karwaaya. Thanks Dhaval Ji ....itani pyaari rachana share karne ke liye..... sach bahot pyaara likha hai..... yun hi likhate rahiye ......aur hammesha khush rahiye. aur aapke sawaal ka jawaab.... ji main thik hoon ....yahaa aana nahi hota aur jab kabhi aati hoon bas sab ko padhati hoon....likhana waise bhi mujhe aata nahi aur .....jo thoda kuchh pahele likh leti thi ab woh bhi likha nahi jaata ....so maaf kijiyega ....iatan waqt yahaan se door rahi. Par main aap sabhi ko padhane to aati raheti hoon. Aur dhaval ji ek baat kahu.... jab aapko is rachanaa mai chhupe sawaalo ke jawaab mil jaaye to hume bhi bata dijiyegaa...... shaayad humaare bhi kuchh yahi sawaal hai zindagi se. Bhagwaan ji aapko har khushi de, Aapki dost: Gudia Jay Ambe Puri Hoke Bhi Jo Puri Na Ho Hoon Zindagi Ki Wo Ankahi Kahaani...... ------------------------------------------------------------ Ek Aaina Jiski Tasveer Dhundhla Gai, Ek Dil Jiski Dhadkan Ruksi Gai, Ek Zindagi Jiski Manzil Ka Koi Pata Hi Nahi, Ek Daaman Jahaan Se Khushiyaan Galti Se Bhi Guzarti Nahi. |
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17th November 2009, 03:00 PM
Dhaval jee,
aapki ghazal hume achhi lagi chand lafzoN main bade khubsurti se bahot kuchh bayan kiye hai aapne sawal to va kai kamal ka hai magar shayad jawab sochte sochte umr beet jayegi  fir bhi pata nahi chalegi zindagi aakhir hai kya ..? apna khayal rakhiye mahfil mein aate rahiye DuaoN ke saath Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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17th November 2009, 04:54 PM
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itna khubsurat likhne ke liye......tahe dil se daad...hazir hai... khush rahiye... duaaon ke saath...  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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17th November 2009, 08:20 PM
bahut achee agzal huyee hai sada asie hee likhte raho
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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18th November 2009, 07:49 AM
jai shree krishna, dhaval bhai
bahut din bad aapka likha huva padha. bahut hi acha laga..aapne hamesha ki tara bahut hi acha likha hai....aur aishe hi likhte raihna..... aapki choti behan |
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19th November 2009, 03:59 PM
Uljhe hue ho miyaaN.. isi liye sawaaL hi sawaal hai kyuN,... khair sawaal hi sahi .. ghazal acchi lagi mujhe.... aise hi likhte rahoo
Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
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19th November 2009, 04:05 PM
Dhawal Bhai.......... AadaaB
Kafi achche ashaar likhe hai aapne kafi asardar lage gazal ka mazmoon aam hain per aapne behad khaas kar diyaa use......Ek behad achchi koshish per dil se daad kabool kijiye...  YouN hi likhate rhaiye..Khush rhaiye.. Apna khayal rakhiye Khuda Hafez... 
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21st November 2009, 03:38 PM
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Dhaval Kem cho  yaar tumharee ghazal humesha kuch naya batatai hai... sach mein bahut achi hai yeh ghazal bhi... saare sher apne mein rozmarra ki baat batate hain... aise hi likhte raho... taec kaer jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai uth jati hai kalam likhne ko wo pyar deewana hota hai kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan wo kalaam shayraana hota hai jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai... ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* duniya mein kitna gam hai apna gam phir bhi kam hai ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* |
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22nd November 2009, 02:22 PM
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Dhaval jii, Namaskaar! Wah Kya baat hai, bahut achhi Ghazal likhi hai aapne. Darasal yeh Ghazal to hai hi lekin saath hi saath ek aainaa bhi hai jisme jo dekhna chaahe vo apni shaqal dekh sakta hai.... Dil se daad haazir hai.. Kabuul kijiye... Aapka dost Vikram Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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22nd November 2009, 03:21 PM
BAHUT HI ACHA LIKHA
DIL KO CHOO GAYA JINDAGY KI HAQIKAT HE JINDAGY BAHUT HIASAN HO JATY HE JUB APANO ME APANAPAN PA JATY HE JINDAGY BEHAD HERAN HO JATY HE JUB GERO ME APANA PA Jaty he sada khush raho apki didi shakun |
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23rd November 2009, 08:19 PM
Dhaval Sahab,
Bahot achchha likha hai aapne, har sher zindagi ke bahot kareeb se guzartaa hai, Tahe dil se mubarakbaad kubul kijiye -Rashid Quote:
 Tu AndheroN -ujaaloN me mila kar mujhko Zindagi ab to sawaloN me mila kar mujhko |
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23rd November 2009, 09:20 PM
Wah Dhaval Jii,,
Kamal hai, Aik dam zaberdast, Hur aik shair dil ke aar paar ho gaya, Maqta boht hi dard-bhara lagaa.... Likhte rahiye aur apna khiyaal rakhiye ga,, HSN tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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24th November 2009, 06:33 PM
Dhaval,
Bahot hi umdaa shaayri likhi hai aapne....parhke bahot achha lagaa....jab koi aapna unchaaiyo.N ko chhoo'ta hai to bahot khushi hoti hai.... Daad to pahale hi de chukii hu....chalo fir se dedeti hu...Meri taraf se daad kabool kijiye.... Likhte raho.... Grazie Pooja  ===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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25th November 2009, 05:44 PM
seedhe saadhe alfaz me bohat kuch bayaan kiya hai aapne.....kaash kisi ko in sawaloN ke jawaab pata hotey.....
aapki ghazal bohat acchi lagi mujhe.. yuhi likhtey rahiye.... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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27th November 2009, 11:58 PM
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Pradhyuman bhaa'ii: namaste! aapne merii koShiSh ko paRhaa aur pasaNd kiyaa mujhe bahot hi KhuShi hu'ii! aapki daad sar'aaNKhoN par! yuuNhi saath dete raheN aage bhee! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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1st December 2009, 12:13 PM
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1st December 2009, 08:30 PM
Dhaval jii,
Kaise hain aap? wah wah kya kahe .... jo bhi kahe woh kum hi hoga ... Har sher ek lesson de raha hai aur ... kisi ek ko choose karna na insaafi hogii .... Ghazal behaad aachi lagii .. yu hi aate rahe aaur mehfil ko char chaand lagatey rahye.... Take care best wishes.......! Mandeep ~ Mandeep Kaur ~ |
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1st December 2009, 08:34 PM
Dhaval bhaiyya..... bahut khoob...dil se daad kabool ho.... khush rahiye...
 "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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13th January 2010, 02:04 PM
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namaste! maiN ek dam Theek huuN aap sab dostoN ki duaaoN se... aapko meri koShiSh par deKh kar bahot hi Khushi huii... aapne meri koShiSh ko itani baareeqee se paRhaa sukooN milaa..! aapse darKhaaSt yahee haii ki bazm meiN jab bhee waQt mileN aa jaayaa kareN!,, yuuNhi paRhte raheN aage bhee! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN ShuKriyaa! duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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15th January 2010, 08:17 PM
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apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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8th February 2010, 11:06 AM
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namaste! Ghazal ki pasaNdagee ke liye bahot bahot ShuKriyaa'h..! yuuNhi saath dete raheN aage bhee... paRhte raheN..! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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10th February 2010, 11:07 PM
dhawal ji bahut khoobsurat gazel...har sher me nikhar hai.
 ~*~*~* उदास पथिक ~*~*~*दिल की चीखे जब बढ जाती हैं और जज्बातो की आंधी रोके नही रुकती.. तो लिख लेती हू.... |
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4th March 2010, 02:48 PM
ZiNdagee kyaa haii ko'i bataaye to sahee
asliyat kyaa haii ko'i diKhaaye to sahee pal meN detii KhuShi to pal meN detii hai Ghum maamalaa kyaa haii ko'i sunaaye to sahee sach ko deKhe ik arsaa beet gayaa hai ab JhooTh kaa pardaa ko'i haTaaye to sahee log kehte hain haNs ke jeelo ziNdagee Khud ke Ghum pehle ko'i Bhulaaye to sahee taarifoN se rauShan hum ho gaye hai.n bahot daaG hum par bhee ko'i lagaaye to sahee Aaj aap ki yaha shayri phir se paDhne ko jee chaaha, Dhaval Bhaiya...! Aapne ne isse bahut saadgi aur masoomiyat ke saath likhaa hai jo hamein behad pasand hai...! taarifoN se rauShan hum ho gaye hai.n bahot daaG hum par bhee ko'i lagaaye to sahee Upar quoted misraa to bas kamaal ka hai...! Aise hi likhte rahein aur apna khayaal bhi thik se rakhein, ok...? Aashirvaad ke saath Jai sHree KrisHna Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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20th April 2010, 10:34 AM
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namaste! koShiSh ko paRhne ke liye dil se samjhne ke liye maiN aapka be-Had ShuKraGuzaar huuN... paRhte raheN aage bhee...! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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21st April 2010, 01:45 AM
Kya baat hai Makhta padhkar yu laga mano isse behtar aur koi sher nahi hota is kalam ko mukammal karne ke liye........Good work Dhaval saheb
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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21st May 2010, 11:13 PM
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namaste! kaise hai.n aap? aapko yahaaN deKh kar baRii KhuShii hu'ii.. aapne apnaa Qeemtee waQt diyaa maiN aapka be-had ShuKraGuzaar huuN! yuuNhi saath dete raheN...! KhuSh raheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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21st May 2010, 11:15 PM
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namaste! kaisii hoN? Shaadi ke baad baRe hi vyast ho gaye hoN ab tou aap! jab bhee waQt mileN aa jaayaa keejiye! saath dene ke liye bahot bahot ShuKriyaa'h! KhuSh raho! duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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21st May 2010, 11:19 PM
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namaste! ziNdagee iisi kaa naam hai jo har moD par hameiN aik naye hi sawaal ke saamne KhaRaa kar detee hai bhaa'ii.. aapne apnaa Qeemtee waQt merii koShiSh ko diyaa bahot bahot ShuKriyaa'h... yuuNhi paRhte raheN aage bhee! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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