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Sher ka jawaab sher meiN deejiye..
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Sher ka jawaab sher meiN deejiye.. - 8th May 2007, 06:57 PM

Sher ka jawab sher meiN deejiye..

DostoN,


ham apni is Anjuman main ek or thread ka izafa karte haiN ess main aap ko ashar hi likhne haiN or agle member ko us sher ke jawab main koi sher meiN likhna hoo ga theek hai ?

yeh koi naya silsila nahi hai sab ko pata hoga ke kaise khelna hai yeh.. aise threads say hame kaafi kuchh seekhne ko milta hai.. Sher kisii ka bhii ho sakta may be your own or borrowed..

bas she'r likhte vaqt is baat ka khayaal rakha jaaye ke javaaban jo she'r likha jaa rahaa hai, us ka koi na koi rabt pichle she'r se hona chaahiye..Shukryah!

to chaliye meiN hi Shuruaat karta huuN:


ibtidaa-e-ishq hai rotaa hai kyaa
aage aage dekhiye hotaa hai kyaa


PS: to keep the beauty & meaning of the thread 'sher ka jawaab sher me.n deejiye', it is requested to all member that, please reply a 'sher' with a 'sher' only (not with four liners, qitaa, Ghazal, nazm etc etc). I hope all members will cooperate me to maintain beauty and dignity of the site in all level.

thank u all

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jo mann Khojaa apnaa to mujh se buraa naa koye



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9th May 2007, 01:15 PM

frineds.. kuchh examples de raha huuN....

jaise kii pahela Sher hai..

ibtidaa-e-ishq hai rotaa hai kyaa
aage aage dekhiye hotaa hai kyaa

ess Sher ka jawaab kuchh ess tarah ho sakta hai...

ishq me.n jaa.N se guzarate hai.n guzarane vaale
maut kii raah nahii.n dekhate marane vaale

aur phir ess Sher ka jawaab kuchh es tarah de sakte haiN...

us lab-o-chashm se hai zindagii-o-maut apanii
kab-kabhii pal me.n jilaayaa kabhii pal me.n maaraa




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9th May 2007, 02:29 PM

fir ek nayi column.... good..........

waise jawab dena try kar rahin hoon..sahin hain ki galat jaroor batana....

nida fazlijee ka sher hain yeh......

Kabhi kisiko mukammal jahan nahin milta,
Kahin zameen to kahin aasman nahin milta...

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fir ek nayi column.... good..........

waise jawab dena try kar rahin hoon..sahin hain ki galat jaroor batana....

nida fazlijee ka sher hain yeh......

Kabhi kisiko mukammal jahan nahin milta,
Kahin zameen to kahin aasman nahin milta...

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hmm.. answer sahiii hai aur rabt bhii dono SheroN meiN.. yeh Sher waise bhii mera pasandidah Sher hai... so, thanks too

ab ess Sher ke jawaab meiN, Ek Sher arz hai...

zamii.n pe chal na sakaa aasmaan se bhii gayaa
kaTaa ke par ko parindaa uDaan se bhii gayaa



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hmm.. answer sahiii hai aur rabt bhii dono SheroN meiN.. yeh Sher waise bhii mera pasandidah Sher hai... so, thanks too

ab ess Sher ke jawaab meiN, Ek Sher arz hai...

zamii.n pe chal na sakaa aasmaan se bhii gayaa
kaTaa ke par ko parindaa uDaan se bhii gayaa

I don't know if I'm replying this right.. still trying to..

Na cheeno usse uski udaan, keh raha hai ek parinda..
Aasmaan me hi hai muskaan uski, mat karo use sharminda..

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Chaahat aap ka Sher bilkul sahii... aur khuubsuurat Sher chuna hai aap ne.. daad!

apa ke SHer ke jawaab meiN yehi kahuNga..

Na cheeno usse uski udaan, keh raha hai ek parinda..
Aasmaan me hi hai muskaan uski, mat karo use sharminda..


mujhe maaluum hai us kaa Thikaana phir kahaa.N hogaa
pari.ndaa aasmaa.N chhuune me.n jab naaqaam ho jaaye




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Chaahat aap ka Sher bilkul sahii... aur khuubsuurat Sher chuna hai aap ne.. daad!

apa ke SHer ke jawaab meiN yehi kahuNga..

Na cheeno usse uski udaan, keh raha hai ek parinda..
Aasmaan me hi hai muskaan uski, mat karo use sharminda..


mujhe maaluum hai us kaa Thikaana phir kahaa.N hogaa
pari.ndaa aasmaa.N chhuune me.n jab naaqaam ho jaaye

aadaab mayank ji,
is thread mai,mai bhi shirkat karna chahungi.umeed hai mera sher sahi hai,

hamarii koshishon ko naakaami ka naam na do yaaron,
milen na manzil jab tak hum haaraa nahi karte.


yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
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aadaab mayank ji,
is thread mai,mai bhi shirkat karna chahungi.umeed hai mera sher sahi hai,
hamarii koshishon ko naakaami ka naam na do yaaron,
milen na manzil jab tak hum haaraa nahi karte.

Sara jee:

aap ne Sher sahii kahe haiN.. daad!

ab aap ke Sher ke jawaab meiN..

ajab chiiz hai ye mohabbat kii baazii
jo haare vo jiite, jo jiite vo haare




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ajab chiiz hai ye mohabbat kii baazii
jo haare vo jiite, jo jiite vo haare


Mohabbat karne vaale, haar jeet ka kahaan hisaab rakhte hain..
Dil me mehboob ki dhadkan, aur aankhon me hijaab rakhte hain..

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Mohabbat karne vaale, haar jeet ka kahaan hisaab rakhte hain..
Dil me mehboob ki dhadkan, aur aankhon me hijaab rakhte hain..

~Priya

kyon ho koi hijaab mehboob aur aashiq ke darmiyaan??
bas yeh wasl ki baatein logon ko bataaya nahi karte.

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Mohabbat karne vaale, haar jeet ka kahaan hisaab rakhte hain..
Dil me mehboob ki dhadkan, aur aankhon me hijaab rakhte hain..

~Priya

kyon ho koi hijaab mehboob aur aashiq ke darmiyaan??
bas yeh wasl ki baatein logon ko bataaya nahi karte.

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raaz kii baate.n likhii aur Khat khulaa rahane diyaa
jaane kyo.n rusavaa_iio.n kaa silasilaa rahane diyaa


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rusvaa_iio.n ke liye tera shahar mashoor hai,
chorr dun tujhe par mera dil majboor hai,
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rusvaa_iio.n ke liye tera shahar mashoor hai,
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jane tu kis baat par etna magroor hai,
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Ho gayi hai mashoor bewafai kuch is qadar unki
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Ho gayi hai mashoor bewafai kuch is qadar unki
Zikra aaya mere mehfil main to jhuk gayi nazar unki
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Very good thread... Ijazat liye bagair hee arz kar raha hoon... khataa mauf...

Unsey milee nazar, ek lamha-e-mukhtsar ke liye,
dil yeh soch kar Mutama-iin ho gaya, jaise koyi mil gaya hai umar bhar ke liye...
Sandy ji aapne sher bahut khoob kaha hai, par shayad aapne rules nahi padey...aapko sher ke last lafaz se sher kahna hai...jaise ki aapke sher ka last word hai "Liye" to hindi ka lafaz hua "A" to mujhe "A" se sher lahna hoga....shukriya

aaj to besabab ushad hai dil,
ishq hota to koi baat bhi thi...


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Sandy ji aapne sher bahut khoob kaha hai, par shayad aapne rules nahi padey...aapko sher ke last lafaz se sher kahna hai...jaise ki aapke sher ka last word hai "Liye" to hindi ka lafaz hua "A" to mujhe "A" se sher lahna hoga....shukriya

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ishq hota to koi baat bhi thi...


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are didi aap confuse ho gayi hain aur bechare sandy ji ko bhi confuse kar rahin hain.....yaha last akshar se dusra sher start nahin karna hain...woh to dusre thread"baitbaazi "main karna hain..yaha to sher ke jawab mein sher hi likhna hain.........jo pehle sher se match karta ho......


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shayad ye bhii ek ada thi unki mujhe satane kii.....

Darta hun naye dost banane se....
Bahut Zakhm khaye hain dosti ke bahane se........
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are didi aap confuse ho gayi hain aur bechare sandy ji ko bhi confuse kar rahin hain.....yaha last akshar se dusra sher start nahin karna hain...woh to dusre thread"baitbaazi "main karna hain..yaha to sher ke jawab mein sher hi likhna hain.........jo pehle sher se match karta ho......


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Darta hun naye dost banane se....
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Thanks friends, aap sab waqaii meiN bohat achchha kar rahe haiN.. aap ek ke baad ek Sher ko paRhenge to bohat mazza aayega... aisa lagegaa kya khuub silsila chal raha hai..

Priya, aap ke Sher

Har lehar ko kinaara mat samjho..
Har dost ko dost pyara mat samjho..
Nazar nazar me bhi farak hota hai..
Har nazar ko ishara mat samjho..

ess ke jawaab meiN:

Takaraa hii ga_ii merii nazar un kii nazar se
dhonaa hii pa.Daa haath mujhe qalb-o-jigar se

qalb-o-jigar: jaaN aur dil




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Takaraa hii ga_ii merii nazar un kii nazar se
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-mayank

jawaab arz hai,

han,kuch pane ke liye kuch khona to padta hai,
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-mayank

jawaab arz hai,

han,kuch pane ke liye kuch khona to padta hai,
tune to bas khoya hai dil,woh apne qaraar ko tarasta hai.
sara jee wel come...ess anjuman meiN post kiye huye mere lagbhag sabhii Sher ustaadoN ke haiN.. aap ke sher ka jawaab arz hai..

shaayad aa jaayegaa saaqii ko taras ab ke baras
mil na paayaa hai un aa.Nkho.n ka ras ab ke baras








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sara jee wel come...ess anjuman meiN post kiye huye mere lagbhag sabhii Sher ustaadoN ke haiN.. aap ke sher ka jawaab arz hai..

shaayad aa jaayegaa saaqii ko taras ab ke baras
mil na paayaa hai un aa.Nkho.n ka ras ab ke baras





yeh baras beete jaaye hai,
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ye poochne bhi na koi aaye hai!!!
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Guzar jaati hain yunhi umar saari
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har waqt ek anjana sa khwab bunte rahte hain
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Sunita jee,

gujar to jayegi eh dost bin tere,
par badi udhas beqarar gujregi.....

aap ke sher ka jawaab

phuul Khushbuu jhiil mausam dhuup titalii aur havaa
sab ke cheharo.n par udaasii tere jaane ke baad




buraa jo dekhan mai.n Chalaa, buraa naa milyaa koye
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Sandy ji aapne sher bahut khoob kaha hai, par shayad aapne rules nahi padey...aapko sher ke last lafaz se sher kahna hai...jaise ki aapke sher ka last word hai "Liye" to hindi ka lafaz hua "A" to mujhe "A" se sher lahna hoga....shukriya

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ishq hota to koi baat bhi thi...


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You should just check the example given by Mayank... You don't have to start from last word but need to use one rabt from the previous sher....

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Sunita jee,

gujar to jayegi eh dost bin tere,
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aap ke sher ka jawaab

phuul Khushbuu jhiil mausam dhuup titalii aur havaa
sab ke cheharo.n par udaasii tere jaane ke baad

Duur rah kar bhii sadaa rahatii hain
mujh ko thame huin baahein uskii
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ufffffff.......sorry dear mausam...aur sorry sandy ji

yeh kaya ho gaya mujhe, gad-bad ghotala.....

ab aap log mujhse chotty ho to maaf kar hi dogey .....hai na


sandy ji jab mujhe aapni galati ka ahsaas hua, maine tabhi yeh post daal de thi.....again sorry for that.


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mujh ko thame huin baahein uskii
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aap ke Sher ka jawaab mausam,


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aa.Nkho.n bhar aakaash hai, baaho.n bhar sa.nsaar



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dost sandy ji, aapko dedicate kar rahi hoon yeh sher...ab to gusse ko jane dijiye...aur ek smile dijiye...aise

humse ek khata ho gaye,
unki nazar bhi khaffa ho gaye,
sar jukka diya jab unke saamne,
to unki nigahey-karam ho gaye

-sunita virender


sorry mayank ji, aapke sher ka jawaab na dekar maine aapne ruthey huey dost ko mana-ne ke liye ek alkag sa sher likh diya....uske liye.


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Sunita jee,

gujar to jayegi eh dost bin tere,
par badi udhas beqarar gujregi.....

aap ke sher ka jawaab

phuul Khushbuu jhiil mausam dhuup titalii aur havaa
sab ke cheharo.n par udaasii tere jaane ke baad

Mayank Jawab arz hai.....

Kaash aisaa ho sabah jo haath tere chhoo aaye,
too udahr phool chuney aur idhar khushboo aaye

Kam se kam itna Muyassar toh ho insaan ka khulus,
Ghar se nikalo toh padosi ko bhi khushboo aaye..

Merey ehsaas main bas gayee hai kaisee yeh mehak,
Koyee khushbu main lagaaon teri khushboo aaye

Muyassar - easy
Khulus - Strength Of The Relationship


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Arey sunita ji chill, I am not angry at all. Infact I ws replying to mayank's sher But took some time and now when I posted my sher there are couple of more posts before me.... mistake oops...


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Dil diya thaa to muqader bhee ataa kar detey,
warna taqhlik se pehley he fanaa kar detey,
tumne samajhi hee nahi ishq kee azmat warna,
hum tumhey ek he sajdey main khudaa kar detey...

Meri bandagi hai woh bandagi, jo qaid-e-dair-o-haram nahi,
mera ek nazar tujhey dekhna, ba-khuda namaz se kam nahi...
   
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it's ok sandy , Sher ka jawaab achchha diya hai aap ne.. ab aap mere us Sher ka jawaab deejiye, jis Sher ka jawaab baaqi hai.. lekin jaldi kahiiN aisa na ho kii aap se pahle koii aur jawaab de de..



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aa.Nkho.n bhar aakaash hai, baaho.n bhar sa.nsaar

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dost sandy ji, aapko dedicate kar rahi hoon yeh sher...ab to gusse ko jane dijiye...aur ek smile dijiye...aise

humse ek khata ho gaye,
unki nazar bhi khaffa ho gaye,
sar jukka diya jab unke saamne,
to unki nigahey-karam ho gaye

-sunita virender


sorry mayank ji, aapke sher ka jawaab na dekar maine aapne ruthey huey dost ko mana-ne ke liye ek alkag sa sher likh diya....uske liye.
tumhari nazar kyon khafa ho gai
khata bakhsh do gar khata ho gai
hamara irada to kuchh bhI na tha
tumhari khata khud saza ho gai....

Just joking sunita ji.... Actually I didn't read your earlier post... Friends

Now we should carry on with the theme of the thread.... Sorry Mayank for spoiling the fun of the thread....


Yeh wafaa ke sakht raahen, yeh tumhare paao naazuk
Na lo inteqam mujhse mere saath saath chal ke.....

Dil diya thaa to muqader bhee ataa kar detey,
warna taqhlik se pehley he fanaa kar detey,
tumne samajhi hee nahi ishq kee azmat warna,
hum tumhey ek he sajdey main khudaa kar detey...

Meri bandagi hai woh bandagi, jo qaid-e-dair-o-haram nahi,
mera ek nazar tujhey dekhna, ba-khuda namaz se kam nahi...
   
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it's ok sandy , Sher ka jawaab achchha diya hai aap ne.. ab aap mere us Sher ka jawaab deejiye, jis Sher ka jawaab baaqi hai.. lekin jaldi kahiiN aisa na ho kii aap se pahle koii aur jawaab de de..



chooTaa kar ke dekhiye jiivan kaa vistaar
aa.Nkho.n bhar aakaash hai, baaho.n bhar sa.nsaar

Mayank
Dohe ka jawab dohe se....

jeevan ke din rain kaa , kaise lage hisaab
deemak ke ghar baith kar, lekhak likhe kitaab


Yeh wafaa ke sakht raahen, yeh tumhare paao naazuk
Na lo inteqam mujhse mere saath saath chal ke.....

Dil diya thaa to muqader bhee ataa kar detey,
warna taqhlik se pehley he fanaa kar detey,
tumne samajhi hee nahi ishq kee azmat warna,
hum tumhey ek he sajdey main khudaa kar detey...

Meri bandagi hai woh bandagi, jo qaid-e-dair-o-haram nahi,
mera ek nazar tujhey dekhna, ba-khuda namaz se kam nahi...
   
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