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un main hee jeete rahenge raat din un main hee marte rahenge raat din
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un main hee jeete rahenge raat din un main hee marte rahenge raat din - 26th April 2006, 09:53 PM

pahle ye nazm doosre roop mian yaha ayee thee aaj laga hai ue kaheen na kaheen mukammal huyee hai aap logon ke pyar chahoonga nazm par
Anil

besabab ahen bharenge raat din
ham tumhe socha karenge rat din
saya tumahra sath hee to jayega
ham use roka karenge rat din

chand tare sath sare kho gaye
dekhiye kaise andhere ho gaye
ham yahee socha karenge rat din
ham kise dekha karenge rat din

kahanee kisee kee na apnee shayree
chhoot gayee tum se tumahree dairy
us main tumhe dekha karenge rat din
ham use parhte rahenge rat din

zindgee ka jo bhee ab ye roop ho
saya ho kahee ab ya ki dhoop ho
jo thikane mere tumhre sanjhe hain
hamne bas wahee mukam mange hain
un main hee jeete rahenge raat din
un main hee marte rahenge raat din
besabab ahen bharenge raat din
ham tumhe socha karenge rat din


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26th April 2006, 09:59 PM

ANIL JI ........

yah sach main bahut sundar hai .....ek hi shabad hai iske liye bas

amazing........

kahanee kisee kee na apnee shayree
chhoot gayee tum se tumahree dairy
us main tumhe dekha karenge rat din
ham use parhte rahenge rat din

zindgee ka jo bhee ab ye roop ho
saya ho kahee ab ya ki dhoop ho
jo thikane mere tumhre sanjhe hain
hamne bas wahee mukam mange hain
un main hee jeete rahenge raat din
un main hee marte rahenge raat din
besabab ahen bharenge raat din
ham tumhe socha karenge rat din

yah lines bahut pasand aayi is mein........aap bahut hi sundar likhte hain........dil ko touch kar jata hai.......

with best wishes

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26th April 2006, 10:16 PM

Anil ji,
bahaut accha laga hai aapko parhkar. Isse prakaashit karne aur humey paraahney mera dhanyavaad sweekar karein.

likhtey rahiyega

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27th April 2006, 11:12 AM

besabab ahen bharenge raat din
ham tumhe socha karenge rat din
saya tumahra sath hee to jayega
ham use roka karenge rat din
adab
anil ji
hamesha ki tarah behtreen......................

in ashaar per khas tor se dad dena chahhungi qubool kijiye

chand tare sath sare kho gaye
dekhiye kaise andhere ho gaye
ham yahee socha karenge rat din
ham kise dekha karenge rat din


bas itna hi kahungi

"ye lamhe hamen yad ayenge aksar
akele main humko satayenge aksar
haqiqat jo he kal kahani banegi
kahani kisi ko sunyenge aksar
jawaN dil ki pehli mauhabbat
jise sochkar muskurayeNge aksar
jinheN bhool pana hameN hoga mushkil
khuaboN main to a hi jayenge aksar"

take care

bye


Mangi thi mene tumse mohbbat ki zindagi
Zindagi ko tumne mohbbat bana diya

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27th April 2006, 12:24 PM

besabab ahen bharenge raat din
ham tumhe socha karenge rat din
saya tumahra sath hee to jayega
ham use roka karenge rat din

Kitane pyare shabd hai..

Ki aapko rok na sake to aapke saye ko rokne ki kosish karenge.. Aap na rahe to kya.. aapki koi nishani hi aapki yad main rakh lenge.. Vo aapke diye jakhm hi sahi, pyare hai.. Kyonki vo aapne diya hai..

Bahut pyare alfaj.. Kuch milta julta share kar raha hun..

Teri tasveer se karta tha baten
Mere kamre main aaina nahi tha
Tere bare main jab sonch nahi tha
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27th April 2006, 04:59 PM

hamesha ki tarah yeh gazal bhi bahut achi lagi.acha likhte hai aap.likhte rahiye yunhin.
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dil ko ccho gaya aapka kalaam - 27th April 2006, 05:00 PM

Anil ji ..bahut hi khoobsoorat aur dil ko cchoo lene wala kalaam kaha hai aapne..Aapki har nazm bahut hi pyaari hoti hai..yeh bahut hi ummda hai...
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Re: un main hee jeete rahenge raat din un main hee marte rahenge raat din - 27th April 2006, 08:41 PM

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pahle ye nazm doosre roop mian yaha ayee thee aaj laga hai ue kaheen na kaheen mukammal huyee hai aap logon ke pyar chahoonga nazm par
Anil

besabab ahen bharenge raat din
ham tumhe socha karenge rat din
saya tumahra sath hee to jayega
ham use roka karenge rat din

chand tare sath sare kho gaye
dekhiye kaise andhere ho gaye
ham yahee socha karenge rat din
ham kise dekha karenge rat din

kahanee kisee kee na apnee shayree
chhoot gayee tum se tumahree dairy
us main tumhe dekha karenge rat din
ham use parhte rahenge rat din

zindgee ka jo bhee ab ye roop ho
saya ho kahee ab ya ki dhoop ho
jo thikane mere tumhre sanjhe hain
hamne bas wahee mukam mange hain
un main hee jeete rahenge raat din
un main hee marte rahenge raat din
besabab ahen bharenge raat din
ham tumhe socha karenge rat din
Anil ji…
Yoon toh main pehle bhi iss kavita par daad de chuki hoon….lekin aaj yahan aayi hoon

na jane kyun lagta hai jaise ye kavita aapne kisi ko dhayan mein rakhkar likhi hai…..

Mujhe behad pasand aayi aapki ye kavita…..aapka andaz-e-byan alag hai sabse, jo ki mujhe
bahut pasand hai….aur yahan aane wale sabhi doston ko bhi…..

Sadgi se bhari hoti hain aapki kavitayen…..aur iss kavita mein yun laga jaise dard jhalak raha hai bahut hi masoomiyat se….

ek aur behtreen rachna par…..dil se nikli daad kabool kijiyega

Apna khaayl rakhyiega


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shukriya - 28th April 2006, 07:27 AM

mujeh ek shabd amzing de ke tum ne tareefon ka poora shabdkosh de diya bahut khoobsoorat hai tumhara meree shayree pe wah kahana shukriya bahut sara
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bahut bahut dhanyavwad - 28th April 2006, 07:29 AM

kabhee awasar mila to prakashit bhee karayoonga abhee bahut bahut shukriya tum ne parha dil se parha adha prakashan to ho gaya mera bahut bahut dhanyawad vipin
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shukriya rubeena - 28th April 2006, 07:35 AM

rubeena tumhree tareef hee khoobsoorat nahee tumhare alfaz shayree ke roop main is ke akhir main bhee bahut khoobsoorta hain abs atee rahana meree shayree par
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wah bijay - 28th April 2006, 07:36 AM

wah bijay har baar kee tarah is baar bhee tumahree tareef achee lagee tumahre lafz achhe lage bahut ham ko wah
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shukriya akelijan - 28th April 2006, 07:37 AM

tumharee jaan akeli ho shayed par tumhre ane se meree shayree ko ek dost mil gayee hai jo dil se parhtee hai aue achhe dil se parhtee hai shukriya akeli jan
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sonali shukriya - 28th April 2006, 07:38 AM

shukriya sonali bahut achee hai aap ka kahana bahut himmat deta hai ek hosla ke kuch log bahut dil se parhte hai aur salah dete hain mujhe
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wafa shukriya - 28th April 2006, 07:41 AM

shukriya wafa ab meree shayree khud tumharee raah dekhtee rahtee hai bahut achha kahtee ho tum bahut himmat detee ho tum . meree kamana hai eeshwar se prarthana hai ki sada aisa likhoon ke tumhe parhna bojh na lage mujeh meree shayree par charcha bahut achha lagata hai
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