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tumhara hi naam - 7th May 2006, 08:09 AM

aaj fir zindagee se mulakat ho gayi.....
veraan si meri duniya jaise abaad ho gayi........

pucha jab unhone bade hi pyar se.......
kaho ab tak kis tarah beet hai umar tumhari..............?
tab honth mere khamosh rahe.......
par ankhaoo ne ankhaoo ki bhasha pad daali........

diya jawab unko meri ankaoo ne kuch is awaz se............
khamosh se reh gaye woh bhi pyar ke is andaz se.......


kaha meri ankhaoo ne........kuch rangeen ehasas hai........
aapki yaadon ke ab bhi mere pass.........
apni badrang zindagee ko unhi se saja rakha hai
abhi tak en ankhaoo mein tumhare liye cheepey aasuoan se..........
apni marusthal si zindagee ko "nam" bana rakha hai
woh ek unbujhi si aag jo tum chor gaye they mere bheetar......
apni baraf hoti bhavanaon ko uski garmi se pighala rakha hai

ab kaun kare ankahee,beete benaam si zindgee ka hisaab.......
maine toh apni baki bachee saanso per bhi tumhara hi naam likha hai...............
tumhre jane ke baad bhee jise apana kah sakoon
.aaj tak door door tak aisa kaun dikha hai...
maine toh baki bachee saanso per bhi bas tumhara hi naam likha hai


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bahut khoobsoorat hai - 7th May 2006, 09:42 AM

bahut khoobsoorat hai prem kee gaharayee hai is main sampoorna hai kavita tumahree tumhre aur achhe lekhan ke liye aur bhee shubhkamanaye
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Re: bahut khoobsoorat hai - 8th May 2006, 09:04 AM

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hi - 8th May 2006, 11:31 AM

ranju ji aap agar sath de to aap ki is poetry mai sudhaar kar ke ek achhi ghazal ham bana sakte hai,

aap ki koshish achhi nahi kaafi achhi hai
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8th May 2006, 04:39 PM

hi ranju,

pyar ke bichhadnese zindgi sach me virani si lagti he par jab vo laut aaye to sahi me ye ehsas dilati he ki..........

aaj fir zindagee se mulakat ho gayi.....
veraan si meri duniya jaise abaad ho gayi........

aur fir jo tumne likhi he last vali lines iske alava kya likh sakta he koi?
jab akhri sans par bhi unka nam ho..........

ab kaun kare ankahee,beete benaam si zindgee ka hisaab.......
maine toh apni baki bachee saanso per bhi tumhara hi naam likha hai...............
tumhre jane ke baad bhee jise apana kah sakoon
.aaj tak door door tak aisa kaun dikha hai...
maine toh baki bachee saanso per bhi bas tumhara hi naam likha hai

very good yar

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Re: bahut khoobsoorat hai - 9th May 2006, 08:33 AM

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Re: hi - 9th May 2006, 08:37 AM

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ranju ji aap agar sath de to aap ki is poetry mai sudhaar kar ke ek achhi ghazal ham bana sakte hai,

aap ki koshish achhi nahi kaafi achhi hai
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shukriya Manu ji.............aapko pasand aayi meri ek chotti si koshish accha laga............aap isko aur behatar likh sakte hain toh plz jarur likhe , mujhe bahut khushi hogi.....u are always welcome...........mujhe apni is rachana ka aapke sahbdo mein samwar ke aane ka intazar rahega........

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9th May 2006, 08:40 AM

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hi ranju,

pyar ke bichhadnese zindgi sach me virani si lagti he par jab vo laut aaye to sahi me ye ehsas dilati he ki..........

aaj fir zindagee se mulakat ho gayi.....
veraan si meri duniya jaise abaad ho gayi........

aur fir jo tumne likhi he last vali lines iske alava kya likh sakta he koi?
jab akhri sans par bhi unka nam ho..........

ab kaun kare ankahee,beete benaam si zindgee ka hisaab.......
maine toh apni baki bachee saanso per bhi tumhara hi naam likha hai...............
tumhre jane ke baad bhee jise apana kah sakoon
.aaj tak door door tak aisa kaun dikha hai...
maine toh baki bachee saanso per bhi bas tumhara hi naam likha hai

very good yar

with best wishes and love

ilesh shah
shukriya ilesh ji..............

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9th May 2006, 09:59 AM

ranju ji bhaut khobsurat gazal hai

bhaut bhaut sunder

bhaut dino baad padha hai aapko achha laga


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11th May 2006, 08:35 AM

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ranju ji bhaut khobsurat gazal hai

bhaut bhaut sunder

bhaut dino baad padha hai aapko achha laga


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thanks shrdh .........aap ne is ko pada aur pasand kiya......mujhe bhi aapka meri kavitaa padna bahut accha laga.......

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