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!namii baakii rahe aaNkhoN meN, daaman tar naheeN karnaa! - 28th January 2008, 10:42 AM


aadaab ar^z dostoN! kaise haiN aap!
lambii gair-haajrii ke liye mazaarat khuaa huN! aj kaii roz o shab ke baad ek ghazal kahii hai, so pesh kar rahaa huN! apnii raa'i dijiyegaa, aisii iltajaa hai!
shukriyaa!


namii baakii rahe aaNkhoN meN, daaman tar naheeN karnaa!
rahe gauhar* samandar meN, unheN beghar naheeN karnaa!

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ye fasl-e-khwaab ik din lah-lahaa'egii haqiiqat meN,
nigaahoN ki zameeN ko seeNchnaa, baNjhar naheeN karnaa!

kabhii gairoN kii mehfil meN, na ruswaa kar azeezoN ko,
tu ghar kii baat kaa charchaa kabhii baahar naheeN karnaa!

koii apnaa bhale hii mud'datoN ke baad ghar aaye,
gile-shikwe hazaaroN kar, takal'luf par naheeN karnaa!

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!

rasoyee meN rakhe bartan to zaahir hai ki khankenge,
zaraa sii baat par haal e watan badtar naheeN karnaa!

(apne naanaa jaan (nanaa jii ) ke inteqal (dehavsaan) par unhe naz'r maqta'h)

khudaa ke huq'm se ik zinda'h-dil rukhsat-talab hai "dheer",
use haNste hue rukhsat karo, rokar naheeN karnaa!
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29th January 2008, 12:54 PM

koii apnaa bhale hii mud'datoN ke baad ghar aaye,
gile-shikwe hazaaroN kar, takal'luf par naheeN karnaa!

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!..


...kaise hain aap dheerji.....haan bahut dino se aap gayab hi hain..arsa hua aapka kalam padhe huve.....aapko padhna hamesha acccha hi lagta hain.......aur aapke khayal ke to kya kehne........aise hi is mehfil ki ronak badhate rahe....aaaj kuch waqt ki kami hain warna saare sher ke operation kar deti........

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29th January 2008, 09:45 PM

Dheer BHaiya:

namaskaaR..!

ummid kartaa huuN aap ba-Khairiyat sey hoNge.. aik baar fir sey baRii hi umdaah Ghazal peSh ki haii aapne bazm meiN.. maQtaa to BHaaii jabarjast rahaa.. mere dil sey niklii hu'ii DheroN saari baDhaa'iiYaaN qabUl keejiYeNgaa..!

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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Love 29th January 2008, 10:21 PM

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aadaab ar^z dostoN! kaise haiN aap!
lambii gair-haajrii ke liye mazaarat khuaa huN! aj kaii roz o shab ke baad ek ghazal kahii hai, so pesh kar rahaa huN! apnii raa'i dijiyegaa, aisii iltajaa hai!
shukriyaa!


namii baakii rahe aaNkhoN meN, daaman tar naheeN karnaa!
rahe gauhar* samandar meN, unheN beghar naheeN karnaa!

*gauhar - perl

ye fasl-e-khwaab ik din lah-lahaa'egii haqiiqat meN,
nigaahoN ki zameeN ko seeNchnaa, baNjhar naheeN karnaa!

kabhii gairoN kii mehfil meN, na ruswaa kar azeezoN ko,
tu ghar kii baat kaa charchaa kabhii baahar naheeN karnaa!

koii apnaa bhale hii mud'datoN ke baad ghar aaye,
gile-shikwe hazaaroN kar, takal'luf par naheeN karnaa!

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!

rasoyee meN rakhe bartan to zaahir hai ki khankenge,
zaraa sii baat par haal e watan badtar naheeN karnaa!

(apne naanaa jaan (nanaa jii ) ke inteqal (dehavsaan) par unhe naz'r maqta'h)

khudaa ke huq'm se ik zinda'h-dil rukhsat-talab hai "dheer",
use haNste hue rukhsat karo, rokar naheeN karnaa!

hey DHEER,
kya khub kalaam likha hai aapne...is pure kalaam ka har sher lajawaab hai...kisi ek ya do sher chunne ki gustakhi mai nahi kar sakti kyon ki har sher ka apna mazaa hai..mai to ek arse se aap ki fan ho..aap ka har kalaam sidha dil me utar jata hai...zameer ko janjhod kar rakh deta hai...zindagi ki wo barikiyan, jinhe hum aksar nazar andaaz kar dete hai,aap unka ehsaas dilate hai ....itna khubsoorat kalaam hamare saath share karne ke liye aap ka shukriya.....uhi mehfil ki rounak badhate rahiyega....apna khayal rakhiyega.....
aap ki dost,


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waah waah - 29th January 2008, 11:14 PM

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aadaab ar^z dostoN! kaise haiN aap!
lambii gair-haajrii ke liye mazaarat khuaa huN! aj kaii roz o shab ke baad ek ghazal kahii hai, so pesh kar rahaa huN! apnii raa'i dijiyegaa, aisii iltajaa hai!
shukriyaa!


namii baakii rahe aaNkhoN meN, daaman tar naheeN karnaa!
rahe gauhar* samandar meN, unheN beghar naheeN karnaa!

*gauhar - perl

ye fasl-e-khwaab ik din lah-lahaa'egii haqiiqat meN,
nigaahoN ki zameeN ko seeNchnaa, baNjhar naheeN karnaa!

kabhii gairoN kii mehfil meN, na ruswaa kar azeezoN ko,
tu ghar kii baat kaa charchaa kabhii baahar naheeN karnaa!

koii apnaa bhale hii mud'datoN ke baad ghar aaye,
gile-shikwe hazaaroN kar, takal'luf par naheeN karnaa!

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!

rasoyee meN rakhe bartan to zaahir hai ki khankenge,
zaraa sii baat par haal e watan badtar naheeN karnaa!

(apne naanaa jaan (nanaa jii ) ke inteqal (dehavsaan) par unhe naz'r maqta'h)

khudaa ke huq'm se ik zinda'h-dil rukhsat-talab hai "dheer",
use haNste hue rukhsat karo, rokar naheeN karnaa!
bahut khoob dheer janaab,dil se mubarakbad qubool kare is dil nashii kalaam par, ham magar aap ke naana je ke dehant kii baat sun kar dukh bhee hua,bhagwaan unki atma jo shaati paradaan kare aur jannat mile unhe moksha ke saath yeh duaa hai,philhaal vaqt kii kamii ki vajah se shoty men reply kar raha hoon. maaf karna janaab.

lekin aap ki likhi har ghazal behad khoobsurat hoti hai,sidha dil men utar jaati hai nigaah ke jhariye,khaas kar yeh sher suru se aakhirr tak z'han par chhaaya raha,bahoot khoob likha hai waah.

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!


yunhee likhate rahiye
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koii apnaa bhale hii mud'datoN ke baad ghar aaye,
gile-shikwe hazaaroN kar, takal'luf par naheeN karnaa!

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!..


...kaise hain aap dheerji.....haan bahut dino se aap gayab hi hain..arsa hua aapka kalam padhe huve.....aapko padhna hamesha acccha hi lagta hain.......aur aapke khayal ke to kya kehne........aise hi is mehfil ki ronak badhate rahe....aaaj kuch waqt ki kami hain warna saare sher ke operation kar deti........

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Namaste ji!!
kaisii haiN aap? deir se aane ke liye muaa'fi ... merii khushnaseebii keh aapko mere kalaam paDhne achchhe lagte haiN. sheroN par aapkii him'mat afzaayii ke liye dhanyawaad .. baaki operation ka intezaar rahegaa

aati rahiyegaa!
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aadaab ar^z dostoN! kaise haiN aap!
lambii gair-haajrii ke liye mazaarat khuaa huN! aj kaii roz o shab ke baad ek ghazal kahii hai, so pesh kar rahaa huN! apnii raa'i dijiyegaa, aisii iltajaa hai!
shukriyaa!


namii baakii rahe aaNkhoN meN, daaman tar naheeN karnaa!
rahe gauhar* samandar meN, unheN beghar naheeN karnaa!

*gauhar - perl

ye fasl-e-khwaab ik din lah-lahaa'egii haqiiqat meN,
nigaahoN ki zameeN ko seeNchnaa, baNjhar naheeN karnaa!

kabhii gairoN kii mehfil meN, na ruswaa kar azeezoN ko,
tu ghar kii baat kaa charchaa kabhii baahar naheeN karnaa!

koii apnaa bhale hii mud'datoN ke baad ghar aaye,
gile-shikwe hazaaroN kar, takal'luf par naheeN karnaa!

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!

rasoyee meN rakhe bartan to zaahir hai ki khankenge,
zaraa sii baat par haal e watan badtar naheeN karnaa!

(apne naanaa jaan (nanaa jii ) ke inteqal (dehavsaan) par unhe naz'r maqta'h)

khudaa ke huq'm se ik zinda'h-dil rukhsat-talab hai "dheer",
use haNste hue rukhsat karo, rokar naheeN karnaa!
Namaskar Dheer bhai

Dheer bhai mujhe bahut dukh hua yeh sun kar ke aapke Nana ji nahi rahe.
Bhagwaan unki aatma ko shanti de.

Aaj maine bahut dino ke baad aapko padha hai lekin aapko yaad hoga ke maine ek baar aapse kaha tha ke aap bahut hi gehrayi se likhte hai. aur is baar bhi aapne waisa hi kiya hai.
Itna achha likha hai aapne ke mere paas shayad shabd bhi nahi hai tareef ke liye lekin khushi hai to is baat ki ke itna khushnaseeb hu ke aapki iss rachna ko padhne ka mauka mila hai. jaise ek ek lafz mein itni jaan hai ke seedha hi zehan mein utar gya aur bahut hi khoob laga.
Itni khoobsoorat nazm ko padhne ka mauka dene ke liye main aapka tah-e-dil se shukarguzaar hun.
Bhagwaan aapki kalam ko aur taaqat bakshe.

Khush rahiye hamesha.



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namaskaaR..!

ummid kartaa huuN aap ba-Khairiyat sey hoNge.. aik baar fir sey baRii hi umdaah Ghazal peSh ki haii aapne bazm meiN.. maQtaa to BHaaii jabarjast rahaa.. mere dil sey niklii hu'ii DheroN saari baDhaa'iiYaaN qabUl keejiYeNgaa..!

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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namaste Dhaval miyaaN!!
kaise hoN?
phir ek bar kalaam aaya aur kalaam par aapne nigaah e karam farmaayaa, aik arse se chala aa raha ye daur aaj bhii kayam hai, jaan kar khushii huii! tumhari daad aur duaaoN ke chalte to kuchh likh paate hai, warnaa khaaksaar ki kalam kaa to kaaghaz bhii bairii hai
shukriyaa dost!! daur chalta rahe , yahii duaa hai.. tumhare liye.. aur yakinan mere liye!!
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hey DHEER,
kya khub kalaam likha hai aapne...is pure kalaam ka har sher lajawaab hai...kisi ek ya do sher chunne ki gustakhi mai nahi kar sakti kyon ki har sher ka apna mazaa hai..mai to ek arse se aap ki fan ho..aap ka har kalaam sidha dil me utar jata hai...zameer ko janjhod kar rakh deta hai...zindagi ki wo barikiyan, jinhe hum aksar nazar andaaz kar dete hai,aap unka ehsaas dilate hai ....itna khubsoorat kalaam hamare saath share karne ke liye aap ka shukriya.....uhi mehfil ki rounak badhate rahiyega....apna khayal rakhiyega.....
aap ki dost,
aadaab mohtarmaa!!
mere kalaamoN se aapkii muhab'bat zaahir hai! aur is'se merii jo iz'zat o him'mat afzaayii hotii hai, uske liye shukrane ke chand alfaaz kam paRte hai!! bas yahii taman'naa hai keh aapko kabhii niraash nah karu!
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Wah Dheer ji,
Aap kitna achha likhte hai
Aap ka to jawaab nahi
Aap hamesha apne ek alag style me likhte hai
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aadaab mohatarma!!
khuda aapkii duaa qabool kareN! aameen sumameen!!

aapkii duaaoN aur sharik e gham hone ke liye mamnoon huN!!

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bahut khoob dheer janaab,dil se mubarakbad qubool kare is dil nashii kalaam par, ham magar aap ke naana je ke dehant kii baat sun kar dukh bhee hua,bhagwaan unki atma jo shaati paradaan kare aur jannat mile unhe moksha ke saath yeh duaa hai,philhaal vaqt kii kamii ki vajah se shoty men reply kar raha hoon. maaf karna janaab.

lekin aap ki likhi har ghazal behad khoobsurat hoti hai,sidha dil men utar jaati hai nigaah ke jhariye,khaas kar yeh sher suru se aakhirr tak z'han par chhaaya raha,bahoot khoob likha hai waah.

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!


yunhee likhate rahiye
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namaste Manish saHeb!!
kaise haiN!! aapko mere gahm meN sharik hote dekh behad khushii huii! shukriyaa!!
ghazal par aap jaise achchhe shayar kii daad mere liye khaas maa'ine rakhtii hai!! aapkii daad o tahsin sir aaNkhoN pe!!
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lambii gair-haajrii ke liye mazaarat khuaa huN! aj kaii roz o shab ke baad ek ghazal kahii hai, so pesh kar rahaa huN! apnii raa'i dijiyegaa, aisii iltajaa hai!
shukriyaa!


namii baakii rahe aaNkhoN meN, daaman tar naheeN karnaa!
rahe gauhar* samandar meN, unheN beghar naheeN karnaa!

*gauhar - perl

ye fasl-e-khwaab ik din lah-lahaa'egii haqiiqat meN,
nigaahoN ki zameeN ko seeNchnaa, baNjhar naheeN karnaa!

kabhii gairoN kii mehfil meN, na ruswaa kar azeezoN ko,
tu ghar kii baat kaa charchaa kabhii baahar naheeN karnaa!

koii apnaa bhale hii mud'datoN ke baad ghar aaye,
gile-shikwe hazaaroN kar, takal'luf par naheeN karnaa!

kisii chhaatii meN tere laf'z, nashtar se na chubh jaayeN,
kalam ko bas kalam rakhnaa, ise khanjar naheeN karnaa!

rasoyee meN rakhe bartan to zaahir hai ki khankenge,
zaraa sii baat par haal e watan badtar naheeN karnaa!

(apne naanaa jaan (nanaa jii ) ke inteqal (dehavsaan) par unhe naz'r maqta'h)

khudaa ke huq'm se ik zinda'h-dil rukhsat-talab hai "dheer",
use haNste hue rukhsat karo, rokar naheeN karnaa!


wah dheer ji aapne bohat umda kalaam paish kia humesha ki tarah ba maani itna acha likha hai ke aik aik sher pe daad dene ko dil chahta hai ab to mujhe daad dene ke liye alfaaz bhi kam parrte lagte hain yunhi likhte rahiye khush rahiye


Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
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Namaskar Dheer bhai

Dheer bhai mujhe bahut dukh hua yeh sun kar ke aapke Nana ji nahi rahe.
Bhagwaan unki aatma ko shanti de.

Aaj maine bahut dino ke baad aapko padha hai lekin aapko yaad hoga ke maine ek baar aapse kaha tha ke aap bahut hi gehrayi se likhte hai. aur is baar bhi aapne waisa hi kiya hai.
Itna achha likha hai aapne ke mere paas shayad shabd bhi nahi hai tareef ke liye lekin khushi hai to is baat ki ke itna khushnaseeb hu ke aapki iss rachna ko padhne ka mauka mila hai. jaise ek ek lafz mein itni jaan hai ke seedha hi zehan mein utar gya aur bahut hi khoob laga.
Itni khoobsoorat nazm ko padhne ka mauka dene ke liye main aapka tah-e-dil se shukarguzaar hun.
Bhagwaan aapki kalam ko aur taaqat bakshe.

Khush rahiye hamesha.
sasri'akal Jasdeep bhaiya!
kaise haiN aap? sharik e gham hone ke liye aapkaa shukriyaa adaa karta huN! mujhe jaan kar behad khushii hotee hai keh aap jaise kadra daanoN ke chalte kalaam hamesha se muqam'mal ho jaataa hai!! aapkii duaaoN ke liye to bas chup hi rahna chahunga, shukriyaa adaa karna bas meN hii naheeN hai!!
rab kare ye rishta aise hii banaa rahe!!

khush rahiyega!

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Wah Dheer ji,
Aap kitna achha likhte hai
Aap ka to jawaab nahi
Aap hamesha apne ek alag style me likhte hai
Very Nice!

Reshma,
bahut bahut shukriya Reshma ji!! hamesha ki tarah is baar bhee aapne mera hoNslaa baDhaayaa!! tah e dil se mamnoon huN!!

khairandesh!!
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wah dheer ji aapne bohat umda kalaam paish kia humesha ki tarah ba maani itna acha likha hai ke aik aik sher pe daad dene ko dil chahta hai ab to mujhe daad dene ke liye alfaaz bhi kam parrte lagte hain yunhi likhte rahiye khush rahiye
mani ji!! aadaab ar^z!!
aap bhee der se aayee, mujhe bhee der ho gayii, hisaab baraabar ... kasii haiN aap? mere kalaamo kii jaan to aap jaise kadra daano ki naz'r hai, warnaa naachiz ki kahaa itni auqat kii aapkii zabaaN se daad ke alfaaz chheen le!!
bahut bahut shukriyaa !!

apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa!

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