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18th October 2008, 04:23 PM
Aap logon ne apne naam itne shairana rakhhe hain ke unko apni ghazal ka hissa banane ka dil chahta hai aur shayar ko achhi zameen mil jati hai………………..isi koshish me maine ‘Koi to ho’ ki zameen par kuch ashaar nazm karne ki koshish ki hai……………………………….Mulaheza farmayen:
Na gird kaante hon jiske, gulab koi to ho Halal ho jise peena,sharab koi to hoKahun main jisko mera intiqaab, koi to ho Mere liye bhi kabhi behijaab, koi to ho Wo jisko dekh ke sara jahan haseen lage Jahan me aisa hasin behisaab koi to ho Mujhe to chand ke rukh par bhi ek daag mila Na jisme daag mile,mahtaab koi to ho Waraq waraq pe hon jiske hasin hasin chehre Jamal-o-husn ki aisi kitaab, koi to ho Ye kaise log hain jo zulm sehte rehte hain Khilaf-e-zulm yahan inqilaab, koi to ho Bujhe bujhe se hain chehre phati phati ankhen Talash karta hun ankhon me khwab, koi to ho Sawal jisse bhi karta hun chup hi rehta hai Jafa ke shehr me hazir jawaab, koi to ho Adu ke dil me tamanna ye reh gayee, Fezan Meri Ghazal jise keh de kharaab, koi to ho . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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21st October 2008, 05:19 PM
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keep writing... Koi to bata de yeh shab hai ya Sahar.. Mujhe nahi hain apni hi khabar... |
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22nd October 2008, 08:16 PM
bahut khoob!! aapkee ghazleN bataatee hai keh aap is fan ke ahl e ilm haiN.
aise hee apnee ghazloN se roo ba roo karvaate rahiyegaa dheer |
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24th October 2008, 01:58 AM
bohat khoob........ likhte rahiye....
apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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24th October 2008, 06:07 PM
fezan saaHeb:
aadaab arz hai!! apki yeh Ghazal be-had pasand aa'ii.. aSh'aar bahot Khuub lageN .. ummid kartaa huuN aap bahot jald bazm mein apnii ek aur nayii tazaah Ghazal ek aur naye Shaayaraanaa naam ko saath haaZir hoNge.. KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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29th October 2008, 08:30 PM
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Aplogon ki mohabbat sath hai to toda bahot likh leta hun.................... tc Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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29th October 2008, 08:32 PM
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tc Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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29th October 2008, 08:35 PM
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Ghazal apko pasand ayi apki mohabbat hai.................... phir haazir hunga.............. apka dost Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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22nd November 2008, 11:23 AM
masha allaah fezan saahib !
beintihaaN khoosoorat ghazal hai ! itne mushkil radeef pe Qaafiaa milana aasaan baat naa thii ... tamaam Qaaide Qaanoon ki paaband aapki ye ghazak juzbaat se bharpoor hai , mujhe har sher apne aap meiN ek daastaaN laga ! aapka zurf har maaayne meiN Qaabil e taareef hai ! maalik aapko aur Qaifiyat taQseem kare ! daad Qabool kii jaaye ! |
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22nd November 2008, 11:40 AM
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behad hi umda gazal likhii hai aapne.... wakai main ek kathin rediff per gazal ko anjaam diya hai aapne..... dil se merii daad kabool farmaiyega shukriyaa dilip  " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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22nd November 2008, 07:47 PM
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zarranawazi ke liye bahot bahot shukriya aplogon ki mohabbat sath rahi to aur likhne ki koshish karenge apka dost Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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22nd November 2008, 07:53 PM
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Apki itni tarif zarranawazi hi kahi jayegi,bahot bahot shukriya aplogon ki mohabbat sath rahi to aur likhne ki koshish karenge,vaise kal maine ek aur ghazal 'Qatl kaliyon ka'post ki thi usko bhi mulaheza farmaiyega Khuda haafiz apka dost Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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22nd November 2008, 07:56 PM
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Ap log tarif karte hain to bahot khushi hoti hai,bahot bahot shukriya aplogon ki mohabbat sath rahi to aur likhne ki koshish karenge,vaise kal maine ek aur ghazal 'Qatl kaliyon ka'post ki thi usko bhi mulaheza farmaiyega Khuda haafiz apka dost Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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22nd November 2008, 10:28 PM
"Sawal jisse bhi karta hun,chup hi rehta hai,
jafa ke shehr me.n hazir jawab,koi to ho" kya baat hai fezan bhai!!! Bahut umda! Jabardast! Ek ek ehsaas is kadar dil ko chho gaya jaise mera apna dard hi bol raha ho. . . . Sach me.n janaab,aisi baarish agar aap karte rahe toh hum to beh hi jayenge. . . . God bless u. Life smiles at you when you are happy.. But, Life salutes you when you make others happy!!" # Feel The Difference # |
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23rd November 2008, 09:21 PM
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zarranawazi ke liye bahot bahot shukriya hum aap ko kabhi behne nahi denge chahe jitni barish ho......................kyonki hame swimming bhi ati hai............................ TC Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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13th January 2009, 09:54 PM
Fezan Bhai.....wakai mein aapne bahut accha likha hai, aap manjhe hue shayar lagte haiN, kisi ke id se aapko idea mil gaya kaya baat hai, acche shayar ki yehi to khaasiyat hoti hai.....bahut khoob
 kush rahiye aur likhtey rahiye .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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26th January 2009, 04:00 PM
fezan jee,
aap ki yeh Ghazal, maine dekhi to thee, lekina aj tak paDhne ka mauqa haasil nahii huaa.. aaj paDha to to ta'ajuub bhi huaa aur behad khushii bhii.. aapne waqa'ii ek mushkil me.n zameen me.n khuub-suurat Ghazal pesh kiya hai... matle se maqta tak har sher pasand aaya.. yuu.n hi likhte rahe.n mere jaanib se daad-o-mubaaraqbaad haazir hai... Mayank |
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9th March 2009, 12:24 PM
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Izzatafzai ke liye apka shukrguzar hun... main apne ko manjha hua shayer to nahin manta..........magar maine bahot mehnat se shayri ka fun seekha hai...................isiliye kuchh likh leta hun................................. der se aane ke liye muafi chahta hun apna khayal rakhen apka dost Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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9th March 2009, 12:26 PM
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Daad aur Izzatafzai ke liye bahot bahot shukrguzar hun... .................. der se reply ke liye muafi chahta hun apna khayal rakhen apka dost Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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9th March 2009, 12:48 PM
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AAj Paheli baar aap ki koi ghazal padhi hai. ( Ghazal Comp. wali ghazal ko chhod kar) .. har sher bahot hee khoobsurat hai... Ab bhala Itni acchi ghazal ko kharab kahne wala kaun hoga???  Aise hee likhte rahiye ... Ghazal |
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12th March 2009, 09:52 AM
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Izzatafzai aur qadrdani ke liye shukriya Jab khud ek ghazal hi doosri ghazal ki taarif kare to isse badhkar taariif ho hi nahin sakti.......... Khush rahiye aur likhti rahiye..... Apka dost Fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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29th March 2009, 06:57 AM
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beautiful.....................! aap se aur kya kahu...bahot hi khubsurat ghazal hai aap ki thnx 4 sharing keep writing Regards Praneeta _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
 Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota Ananthpak |
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2nd April 2009, 03:02 PM
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Thanks waise aaapki Ghazal Comp wali Ghazal bhi kuchh kam achhi nahin hai keep it up aapka dost fezan . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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10th July 2013, 12:36 PM
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26th August 2013, 10:56 PM
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. . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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17th November 2013, 12:20 PM
Adu ke dil me tamanna ye reh gayee, Fezan
Meri Ghazal jise keh de kharaab, koi to ho....... Jaan Nikaal Di Aapne Mere dost...Bht Bht Bht Khoob Likha ... Keep Writing TC |
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30th November 2013, 04:23 PM
Waaaaaaaaaaaaah bahot khubbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbbb
तुझे होगी मुहब्बत किसी से मैं तुझे अपना रुब्ब मानता हूँ.!! |
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