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15th August 2011, 03:53 PM
DostoN ek nayee koshish ko ghazal kaa anjaam de raha hooN, Shaayd aashiqaana lage... Aapke views/opinion ke intezaar me
Dekhaa KarooN Rastaa teraa har ek Shaam ko,
Deedar apnaa De bhi De ik Din Ghulaam Ko.
Aate nahi ho Saamne Lekin Mujhe Yaqee'N,
Chupke Se Tum bhi Padhte ho Mere Kalaam ko.
GhazloN Mein merii jab huaa Zikre-Sanam kabhi,
LafzoN meiN kho kar DhooNdtee ho apne Naam ko.
Dil to yeh Chaahe Saath Uske DaastaaN banuuN,
Ab tak magar tarsaa hi hooN ik ik Salaam ko.
Shabnam se AaNsu haiN, PaseeNa motiyoN sa hai,
Inkaa Nashaa Utre to phir, SochuNgaa Jaam ko.
Is Dil ne maanaa hai agar Sarkaar Aap ko,
To Aye Sanam Dheere zaraa KheeNcho Lagaam ko.
""Shaad""
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15th August 2011, 10:29 PM
Sameer 'Shaad' sahib ko aadaab arz hai, ek ba-husn,ba-saroor,tar-e-ishq ghazal ki takmeel par dhairon daad qaboul kijiye. Mujhe ajeeb laga a mean taajjub hai k itni dair huay post is Jameel-O-haseen ghazal per kisi ne comment nahi kiya...I mean this particular piece is ir-resistable. Jisske liye likhi hai usper rabba khair karay
Honaa Hai Fenaah Yaad Rakh Aye Shams Tujhko Bhi,
Is Kehkashaan Mein Mai He Nahi Waahid Shaye Faanee!
Ajnabi
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20th August 2011, 10:46 AM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
DostoN ek nayee koshish ko ghazal kaa anjaam de raha hooN, Shaayd aashiqaana lage... Aapke views/opinion ke intezaar me
Dekhaa KarooN Rastaa teraa har ek Shaam ko,
Deedar apnaa De bhi De ik Din Ghulaam Ko.
Aate nahi ho Saamne Lekin Mujhe Yaqee'N,
Chupke Se Tum bhi Padhte ho Mere Kalaam ko.
GhazloN Mein merii jab huaa Zikre-Sanam kabhi,
LafzoN meiN kho kar DhooNdtee ho apne Naam ko.
Dil to yeh Chaahe Saath Uske DaastaaN banuuN,
Ab tak magar tarsaa hi hooN ik ik Salaam ko.
Shabnam se AaNsu haiN, PaseeNa motiyoN sa hai,
Inkaa Nashaa Utre to phir, SochuNgaa Jaam ko.
Is Dil ne maanaa hai agar Sarkaar Aap ko,
To Aye Sanam Dheere zaraa KheeNcho Lagaam ko.
""Shaad""
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WOW !!!! so sweet ....I like this......nayab tohpha for all..............
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21st August 2011, 01:43 AM
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Sameer 'Shaad' sahib ko aadaab arz hai, ek ba-husn,ba-saroor,tar-e-ishq ghazal ki takmeel par dhairon daad qaboul kijiye. Mujhe ajeeb laga a mean taajjub hai k itni dair huay post is Jameel-O-haseen ghazal per kisi ne comment nahi kiya...I mean this particular piece is ir-resistable. Jisske liye likhi hai usper rabba khair karay
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Ajnabi aadaab... awwal to aapki beshkeemti tareef aur duaaoN ke liye khaaksaar ka shukrana quboool farmaaeN.. baad uske ke ye kalaam me koi comment nahi aaye.. to bhai SDC jaisi mahfil me humse kai bahot bade aur acchaa likhne waale log pahle hi maujood hain, aur ho sakta hai ye kalaam us meyaar ka na ho jo pasand aaya ja sake.. Logon ne kubool kiya na kiyaa sabhi kuch apni koshish pe tikaa hai.. ho sakta hai ye nakaami nahi shaayd aage badhne ka zariyaa hhai aur hame har haal me ye tagaaful manzoor hai.. shukriyaa jo aapko pasand aa saki ye koshish.. aate rahiyegaa..
Shaad..
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21st August 2011, 05:51 PM
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Ajnabi aadaab... awwal to aapki beshkeemti tareef aur duaaoN ke liye khaaksaar ka shukrana quboool farmaaeN.. baad uske ke ye kalaam me koi comment nahi aaye.. to bhai SDC jaisi mahfil me humse kai bahot bade aur acchaa likhne waale log pahle hi maujood hain, aur ho sakta hai ye kalaam us meyaar ka na ho jo pasand aaya ja sake.. Logon ne kubool kiya na kiyaa sabhi kuch apni koshish pe tikaa hai.. ho sakta hai ye nakaami nahi shaayd aage badhne ka zariyaa hhai aur hame har haal me ye tagaaful manzoor hai.. shukriyaa jo aapko pasand aa saki ye koshish.. aate rahiyegaa..
Shaad..
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Kisne kehdia ye nakaami hai....par mai todi zinda dili de sadke javan yaara! Mujhe to aisa lgda ha ki kuch log bout bz han aur kuch nu laaj aave comment dete! Mai kiyan zindgi zinda dili da naam hai, so jo dil vich khyaal or feelings aati hen wahi byaankerdeta hun..kyunke jindgi to safar hai na jane fir mauka mile na mile sach sahi waqt pr byaan krne ka!
Honaa Hai Fenaah Yaad Rakh Aye Shams Tujhko Bhi,
Is Kehkashaan Mein Mai He Nahi Waahid Shaye Faanee!
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21st August 2011, 07:19 PM
thanks for sharing this wonderful post
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22nd August 2011, 06:51 PM
Thanks once again for your support and encouragement Ajanbi and Mittal jee..
Do keep coming, Take care...
Shaad...
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7th September 2011, 08:05 PM
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DostoN ek nayee koshish ko ghazal kaa anjaam de raha hooN, Shaayd aashiqaana lage... Aapke views/opinion ke intezaar me
Dekhaa KarooN Rastaa teraa har ek Shaam ko,
Deedar apnaa De bhi De ik Din Ghulaam Ko.
Aate nahi ho Saamne Lekin Mujhe Yaqee'N,
Chupke Se Tum bhi Padhte ho Mere Kalaam ko.
GhazloN Mein merii jab huaa Zikre-Sanam kabhi,
LafzoN meiN kho kar DhooNdtee ho apne Naam ko.
Dil to yeh Chaahe Saath Uske DaastaaN banuuN,
Ab tak magar tarsaa hi hooN ik ik Salaam ko.
Shabnam se AaNsu haiN, PaseeNa motiyoN sa hai,
Inkaa Nashaa Utre to phir, SochuNgaa Jaam ko.
Is Dil ne maanaa hai agar Sarkaar Aap ko,
To Aye Sanam Dheere zaraa KheeNcho Lagaam ko.
""Shaad""
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pehli baar ise padh raha hun..mujhe to bahot pasand aaye aapke ehsaas...kyunki dil se nikla hai..kisi ke liye..aisaa maalum hota hai..khuda kare ki woh padh le ise jaldi...
god bless
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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9th September 2011, 09:03 PM
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pehli baar ise padh raha hun..mujhe to bahot pasand aaye aapke ehsaas...kyunki dil se nikla hai..kisi ke liye..aisaa maalum hota hai..khuda kare ki woh padh le ise jaldi...
god bless
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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Aap late ho gaye mere bhai... DuaaeN to kab ki kubool ho gayeeN hain..
baharhaal shukriyaa bahot bahot kalaam ko waqt dene ke liye... aate rahiye
Shaad....
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10th September 2011, 05:56 AM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
DostoN ek nayee koshish ko ghazal kaa anjaam de raha hooN, Shaayd aashiqaana lage... Aapke views/opinion ke intezaar me
Dekhaa KarooN Rastaa teraa har ek Shaam ko,
Deedar apnaa De bhi De ik Din Ghulaam Ko.
Aate nahi ho Saamne Lekin Mujhe Yaqee'N,
Chupke Se Tum bhi Padhte ho Mere Kalaam ko.
GhazloN Mein merii jab huaa Zikre-Sanam kabhi,
LafzoN meiN kho kar DhooNdtee ho apne Naam ko.
Dil to yeh Chaahe Saath Uske DaastaaN banuuN,
Ab tak magar tarsaa hi hooN ik ik Salaam ko.
Shabnam se AaNsu haiN, PaseeNa motiyoN sa hai,
Inkaa Nashaa Utre to phir, SochuNgaa Jaam ko.
Is Dil ne maanaa hai agar Sarkaar Aap ko,
To Aye Sanam Dheere zaraa KheeNcho Lagaam ko.
""Shaad""
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Fine
pal pal sadiya si lage her sham begani
ek tere aane ki aahat se chanchal naina bhari
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10th September 2011, 08:44 AM
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Fine
pal pal sadiya si lage her sham begani
ek tere aane ki aahat se chanchal naina bhari
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bahot bahot shukriyaa veena jee... aati rahiyegaa..
shaad...
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10th September 2011, 08:46 AM
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WOW !!!! so sweet ....I like this......nayab tohpha for all..............
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thanks a lot Kumkum.. sorry for delay in reply, hope you dont mind.. Take care.
Shaad.
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24th September 2011, 11:17 AM
Shaad - Well written... every writer has a strength.... yours lie in choice of words... great... keep writing....
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Shaad - Well written... every writer has a strength.... yours lie in choice of words... great... keep writing....
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Dear Rohin, After a long long time you came here its very nice to see u back and for your Appreciation i cant say a word my dear...
Itnii tareef kar di aapne ke bas kyaa kahuN.. Aapki bareek nazroN ke liye intehaai shukrguzaar hooN.. aate rahiyegaa.. Shukriyaa
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3rd October 2011, 07:16 PM
Aate nahi ho Saamne Lekin Mujhe Yaqee'N,
Chupke Se Tum bhi Padhte ho Mere Kalaam ko
Wow Indeed it happens
Is Dil ne maanaa hai agar Sarkaar Aap ko,
To Aye Sanam Dheere zaraa KheeNcho Lagaam ko.
Qatl... Good ending....that may prompt the beginning in someone's heart...
Pallavi...
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3rd October 2011, 10:10 PM
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Aate nahi ho Saamne Lekin Mujhe Yaqee'N,
Chupke Se Tum bhi Padhte ho Mere Kalaam ko
Wow Indeed it happens
Is Dil ne maanaa hai agar Sarkaar Aap ko,
To Aye Sanam Dheere zaraa KheeNcho Lagaam ko.
Qatl... Good ending....that may prompt the beginning in someone's heart...
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hehehe.. nice guessing pallo. may be it would help to become a beginning for a beautiful relation called Love but it totally depends on fate of a person... in my case, luck didn't support me and i was unable to utilize these lines... hope anyone else can use these to full his emotions with beauty... thanks
Shaad...
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4th October 2011, 06:51 PM
Aate nahi ho Saamne Lekin Mujhe Yaqee'N,
Chupke Se Tum bhi Padhte ho Mere Kalaam ko.
GhazloN Mein merii jab huaa Zikre-Sanam kabhi,
LafzoN meiN kho kar DhooNdtee ho apne Naam ko.
wah wah!!...kya kehne......................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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5th October 2011, 07:23 PM
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Aate nahi ho Saamne Lekin Mujhe Yaqee'N,
Chupke Se Tum bhi Padhte ho Mere Kalaam ko.
GhazloN Mein merii jab huaa Zikre-Sanam kabhi,
LafzoN meiN kho kar DhooNdtee ho apne Naam ko.
wah wah!!...kya kehne......................
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Shukriyaa Zainy Sahiba.. Inaaayat aapki...
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