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20th May 2005, 05:11 PM
Loneliness...no more!
At times it seems that a mirror divides us... And now you say: "It’s all finished" I know ... I have also tried to say this so many times. But your words are a bridge for the emotions, and we meet there, and now I see your float on that beach again, in some angle of the mind...! I will wait for you, every time that you will want, on this sensory bridge. We will meet again, crossing the frontiers of a virtual world that is not this, but the reality… You exist because you already know the script of this sad performance. You exist because you have jumped the obstacle of hypocrisy. You exist because you give life to the withered flower of my soul... You exist for endless motives. Every now and then I will lit on a fire on the beach, if you will want to stop... and I won't be again destined to wander in loneliness ancient labyrinths of my memory, because you will accompany me down there Thanks... Amanush... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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20th May 2005, 05:25 PM
Hi Amanush... bhai
Bahut khoob... Wonderful... Loneliness is lonely no more... Thanks Rohin |
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Re: Loneliness...no more! -
20th May 2005, 06:08 PM
Every now and then
I will lit on a fire on the beach, if you will want to stop... and I won't be again destined to wander in loneliness ancient labyrinths of my memory, because you will accompany me down there Quite different from others! first i read ur Untitled...the name was simply eye catching! how culd i stop myself frm coming 2 this post....I liked it Kuch nagme gaa kar chale gaye kuch aahe bhar kar laut gaye, Wo bhi ek pal ka kissa the mein bhi ek pal ka kissa hoon, Kal tumse juda ho jaaonga jo aaj tumhara hisa hoon[/color] |
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20th May 2005, 07:25 PM
At times it seems that a mirror divides us...
And now you say: "It’s all finished" I know ... I have also tried to say this so many times. Aaaahh... Well Said!! But your words are a bridge for the emotions, and we meet there, and now I see your float on that beach again, in some angle of the mind...! I will wait for you, every time that you will want, on this sensory bridge. Beautiful! We will meet again, crossing the frontiers of a virtual world that is not this, but the reality… You exist because you already know the script of this sad performance. You exist because you have jumped the obstacle of hypocrisy. You exist because you give life to the withered flower of my soul... You exist for endless motives. Classsiiccc.... Love these lines... beautifully written Every now and then I will lit on a fire on the beach, if you will want to stop... and I won't be again destined to wander in loneliness ancient labyrinths of my memory, because you will accompany me down there Wonderfulll!! Bhaiya! Another masterpiece flowing down from ur pen... I simpy loved this one 2.... So so well expressed.... Do accept my praises... aise hi likhte rhaiye.. do TC  Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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20th May 2005, 07:33 PM
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wow exceleent flow of thoughts. just loved reading each word of it. do keep writing such masterpiece. take care n may god bless u with his finnest glitters.  mera aashiyaan tha wahan jahan toofanon ka theekana tha, ek naadan dil tha aur ek bedard zamana tha! na jaane kyu ussi pal mil gaya ek dard naya, jab kisi roz mere labon ka muskurana tha! ***************************** Kutch bayani ho ehsaason ki….. Kutch kahani ho jasbaaton ki…. Ek paaq bazm jahan ho sirf pyar….. Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar…. Karein ek dooje se har koi lagaav…. Koi kare shikayat koi de sujaav Naazim kare hifaazat-e-pyar… Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar…. Buzurgoon ki kahawaat hai… Fal-e-intezaar meetha hai…. Kehte hain Jas- Nal- Aman…. Thoda sa, bus thoda sa intezaar…. 
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20th May 2005, 07:42 PM
wah chachu!!!!! bhot hi acha likha hai apne!!!!!!!
Ansowon ke shabd hai behe jayenge... |
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21st May 2005, 12:20 AM
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(Hamein aapke Amanush bhai hi rehne dijiye )Amanush Bhai... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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21st May 2005, 12:25 AM
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taken time to read "Untitled"! Take care and keep coming... Amanush... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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21st May 2005, 12:30 AM
Bhaiya!
Another masterpiece flowing down from ur pen... I simpy loved this one 2.... So so well expressed.... Do accept my praises... aise hi likhte rhaiye.. do TC Chote Bhaiya...! Your praises rejoice my heart...so do keep showering them on me... !Amanush Bhaiya... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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21st May 2005, 12:34 AM
dear amanush,
wow exceleent flow of thoughts. just loved reading each word of it. do keep writing such masterpiece. take care n may god bless u with his finnest glitters. [/QUOTE] Ruhani ji...! Aap ko yahan dekh kar hum bahout khoush houe...Your comments are highly appreciated. Take good care of yourself and keep coming...! Amanush... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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21st May 2005, 12:38 AM
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Chachu ki kavita pasand karne ke liye bahout shukriya... Amanush Chachu... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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23rd May 2005, 09:44 PM
Hi Amanush
hhm this poem is different form some of what u wrote before. what i lkiked best was this verse " You exist because you already know the script of this sad performance. You exist because you have jumped the obstacle of hypocrisy. You exist because you give life to the withered flower of my soul... You exist for endless motives" somehow its so poignant. keep writing Munnia |
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