***chor "DUNIYA" ko tere "DIL" mein bas jaayeinge *** -
30th November 2005, 07:58 PM
zyada accha nahi likh pati hoon ........ per koshish karti hoon likhne ki..... plz padiyega or batayiyega kaisa likkha hai.... koi galti ho to batayiyega.... mein sikhna chahti hoon......
jab jab "DIL" mein umangein jaagi
teri "CHAHAT" ko dil mein basaya
Hmmmmmmmm.....Nice words...!
jab jab ye "BAAHEIN" failaayin
tujhe apne "AAGOSH" mein paya
jitna "DURR" hua tu mujhse
utna tujhe "KAREEB" paya
Beautifulll...!
bekhabar tu mujhse "AAJ" bhi hai
per... "DIL"l mein teri "CHAHAT" aaj bhi hai
teri "CHAHAT" mein is hadd se guzar jaayeinge
gar "MAUT" bhi aayegi.. to us se bhi ladd jaayeinge
Nice words...!
na aaye "YAKEEN" to aazmaa ke dekh lena
"HIMMAT" ho to mere "PYAR" ko mita ke dikhana
jitne bhi ho "DURR"
tujhe "PAAS" nazar aayenge
teri "CHAHT" pakar aise "SANVAR" jaayeinge
chor "DUNIYA" ko tere "DIL" mein bas jayeinge.....
Nice words....!
Dear ShWeta,
Bahut hi pyaara likha hai tumne is baar bhi.. padhkar bahut accha laga...Aise hi likhti raho....!
Ek baat kahoon...The way u write certain words in Quotes and in Caps... breaks the flow... u cant read it as a poem...they act as speed-breakers...This is what i felt....hope u wont mind it...!
Do keep writing... TC....!
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai