 |
|
|
|
|
 |
 |
Ghazal: Kadam Fisalte HoNge...! |
 |
|
 |
|
(#1)
|
|
Sifar
  
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
Ghazal: Kadam Fisalte HoNge...! -
6th July 2010, 01:38 AM
आदाब,
एक ताज़ा ग़ज़ल महफ़िल की नज़र कर रहा हूँ .. आप सब अपने इज़हार-ए-ख्याल ज़रूर अता फरमाएंगे उम्मीद रहेगी... ------------------------- बहर:- हज़ज मुसद्दस अखरब मक्बूज़ महजूफ (221 1212 122 - गिनती मे) ------------------------- आँखों मे नमी सी रखते होंगे.. कुछ रस्तों को जब भी तकते होंगे.. लहरों मे कमी सी लगती होगी... साहिल पे कदम फिसलते होंगे... यादों की मज़ार दिल मे लेकर ... गैरों से गले वो मिलते होंगे ... दीदार किये जमाने गुज़रे... अब सोच के दम निकलते होंगे .. रब्बा मेरे तू सुकूँ दे उनको .. अरमां कई दिल मे जलते होंगे... घटती हुई उम्र कह रही है.. मौसम तेज़ी से बदलते होंगे.. उम्मीद है आखिरी सफ़र मे ... वो साथ 'सिफ़र' के चलते होंगे .. --------------------------- कुनाल (सिफ़र) :- 06-07-2010 --------------------------- In Roman :- Aadaab , Ek taazah ghazal mehfil ki nazar kar raha huN.. aap sab apne izhaar-e-khyaal zaroor ata farmaayeNge umeed rahegi … ------------------------------------- Behar :- Hazaj musaddas akhrab makhbuuz mahzuuf (221 1212 122 – In Digit) ------------------------------------- AankhoN mai namii si rakhte hoNge.. Kuch rastoN ko jab bhi takte hoNge … LehroN mai kami si lagti hogi.. Saahil pe kadam fisalte hoNge … YaadoN ki mazaar dil mai lekar.. GairoN se gale wo milte hoNge… Deedaar kiye zamaane guzre.. Ab soch ke dum nikalte hoNge… Rabba mere tu sukooN de unko.. ArmaaN kayi dil mai jalte hoNge… Ghat-ti hui umra keh rahi hai… Mausam tezi se badalte hoNge … Ummeed hai aakhiri safar mai.. Wo saath ‘sifar’ ke chalte hoNge… ------------------------------------- Kunaal (Sifar) :- 06-07-2010 ------------------------------------- Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
  |
|
 |
 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#2)
|
|
|
Tanhaa Raahi
Offline
Posts: 3,700
Join Date: Oct 2003
Rep Power: 54
|
6th July 2010, 01:50 AM
Quote:
Keep it up, ok...? With blessings  Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
|
|
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#3)
|
|
Registered User
Offline
Posts: 1,089
Join Date: Jun 2004
Location: Toronto,Canada
Rep Power: 31
|
6th July 2010, 02:46 AM
Kunal jee,
Jab bhi likhety ho kamal likhety ho .... keep up good work take care duaaon ke saath mandeep ~ Mandeep Kaur ~ |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#4)
|
|
Anshumali
Offline
Posts: 7,420
Join Date: Apr 2009
Location: DELHI (INDIA)
Rep Power: 87
|
6th July 2010, 07:55 AM
लहरों मे कमी सी लगती होगी...
साहिल पे कदम फिसलते होंगे... यादों की मज़ार दिल मे लेकर ... गैरों से गले वो मिलते होंगे ... दीदार किये जमाने गुज़रे... अब सोच के दम निकलते होंगे .. Its too good.........kunal Ji......Very impressive......very nice creation...dil se daad !  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#5)
|
|
|
RADHE RADHE
Offline
Posts: 4,115
Join Date: Oct 2009
Location: DELHI
Rep Power: 58
|
6th July 2010, 09:23 AM
Quote:
radhe radhe bahut khoob dil se daad matla aur makta dono hi bahut khoob hain duaon ke saath Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#6)
|
|
Registered User
Offline
Posts: 1,849
Join Date: Feb 2009
Location: Mumbai
Rep Power: 32
|
6th July 2010, 12:54 PM
Bohat khoob ek simple aur effective peshkash.........har sher pasand aaya par yeh sher kuch khas raha.
YaadoN ki mazaar dil mai lekar.. GairoN se gale wo milte hoNge… Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#7)
|
|
~"REBELLIOUS IN LOVE"~
Offline
Posts: 3,264
Join Date: Feb 2008
Location: Ruatonga, Cook Islands
Rep Power: 52
|
6th July 2010, 01:15 PM
beautiful lines KunaaL ji
Regards _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
 Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota Ananthpak |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#8)
|
|
|
DIL KI BAAT DIL TAK
Offline
Posts: 1,185
Join Date: Apr 2007
Location: MORADABAD (U.P.)
Rep Power: 37
|
6th July 2010, 01:16 PM
Aadaab Kunaal Sahab lajawaab gazal iss baar bhi aapki aur se padhne ko mili dil se nikli daad kubool kijiye
Quote:
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko, wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain. Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif'' Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.  |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#9)
|
|
"Taish meN hai Taish"
Offline
Posts: 5,535
Join Date: Jan 2005
Location: Lost In The Cobwebs Of Mah Mind...!!
Rep Power: 48
|
6th July 2010, 01:48 PM
hmmmmmmmmm choyi beher me baat kehna humesha thoda mushkil hota hai, waise ahcha likha hai bade, haaN khaas taur pe maqta bahut pasand aaya, haasil-e-ghazal raha maqta, bas umeed rakhuNga ki tumhare kalam ki dhaar aage aur v tej hoti rahe...!!
tumhara CHOTA....!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#10)
|
|
'Bismil'
Offline
Posts: 773
Join Date: Mar 2006
Rep Power: 38
|
6th July 2010, 03:44 PM
Kunal bhai,
bahot khoob...daad...ek kahaani si thi yeh ghazal..it was more of a visual treat..har sher ko padh ke zehen mein kuch tasveere bani.. very good..tk cr god bless u.. aapka dost, Pradhyuman gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai? musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai? -------------------------------------------------- |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#11)
|
|
Aapki dost
Offline
Posts: 7,325
Join Date: Feb 2008
Rep Power: 57
|
6th July 2010, 06:29 PM
Shuru se aakhir tak...lajawaab...har sher mukammal laga mujhe..
Excellent work!!.. Dard bohat hai per.....dil ko chu gaye ehsaas... You deserve reps for this..+++ Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#12)
|
|
beautiful moment.........
Offline
Posts: 6,429
Join Date: Jul 2007
Location: u.s.a
Rep Power: 42
|
6th July 2010, 06:30 PM
Kunaal,
awesome creation..... dil chhu gaye aapke ye ehsaas... ek behtreen pesh kash pe dil se daad haazir hai.... yuhi likhte rahiye.... khush rahiye.... rep+++++++++++++  "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#13)
|
|
Registered User
Offline
Posts: 484
Join Date: Oct 2009
Location: Kolkata-City of Joy
Rep Power: 19
|
7th July 2010, 12:56 AM
kunal bhai!!!
bahut khoob........aapke dard bhare nagmo me saare samundar ki geharayi hain.....par jaane kyu doob jaane ki khawaish rehti hain har baar.......jab bhi aapke dil ke taar bajte hain..... zakhmo ko aur zakhmi kar dena aapki purani aadat hain!!! main bhi pradhyumanji ki baat se sehmat hu......rachna ka flow itna sateek hain ki visualisation aur continuity bahut khoobsurat ban padi..........it was indeed a visual treat!!! hamari subhkamanye reps+++ Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me (When i received You in my heart everything changed for me) |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#14)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
9th July 2010, 05:24 PM
Quote:
aapko pasand aayi .. mujhe khushi hai is baat ki .. aapka aashirwad yuN hi milta rahega umeed hai ... Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#15)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
12th July 2010, 05:23 PM
Quote:
Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#16)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
12th July 2010, 05:25 PM
Quote:
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#17)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
12th July 2010, 05:26 PM
Quote:
Ishq Saahab.. Aapki daad dil se kabool hai mujhe .. aap aaye naacheez ko padha .. aapka shukra guzaar huN .. Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#18)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
12th July 2010, 05:28 PM
Quote:
Shukriya Sajid sir.... aapko pasand aaya to zaroor kuch accha raha hoga ... aapke aane ka shukriya ... Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#19)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
20th July 2010, 04:00 AM
Quote:
khushi hui jaan ke tum ab bhi ho yahin kahin ... Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#20)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
20th July 2010, 04:02 AM
Quote:
aapne aake man ko khush kar diya ... Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#21)
|
|
|
Registered User
Offline
Posts: 289
Join Date: Jun 2010
Rep Power: 0
|
20th July 2010, 11:10 PM
Quote:
kunal sahab aadab, darja kiya gaya sher husn-e-ghazal kaha ja sakta hai ,, kya hi jurrath hai bhai .. kya talq haqeeqath bayan ki hai apne ,, sachai pe mabni wahhhhh..dad hi dad ,, ghazal sar se pa tak ghazal hai .. apki is murassa ghazal ke liye app mubarak baad ki mustahiq hain .. allah apko khush rakhe .. dua go qadeertoopchi |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#22)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
21st July 2010, 01:56 PM
Quote:
Shukriya aane ke liye Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#23)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
21st July 2010, 01:59 PM
Quote:
Sabse pehle to aane ka shukriya ... aur aapne jis khuloosi andaaz mai ghazal ko aara se nawaaza hai .. mujhe behad khushi mehsoos hui hai .. aapka teh dil se shukriya ada karna chahta huN maiN ... aapka bohat bohat shukriya .. Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#24)
|
|
|
RooH Se RooH Tak
Offline
Posts: 1,247
Join Date: Feb 2010
Location: Delhi
Rep Power: 53
|
21st July 2010, 03:10 PM
Quote:
Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#25)
|
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
22nd July 2010, 05:32 PM
Quote:
Aap jaisi hasti ko humaari likhi koi cheez pasand aayi .. dil mutmain hai aapki zarra-nawaazi pe ... aapke har alfaaz ke liye shukriya ... Kunaal Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#26)
|
|
|
Moderator
Offline
Posts: 15,199
Join Date: May 2006
Location: Chandigarh (Mohali)
Rep Power: 63
|
5th September 2015, 02:38 PM
Quote:
Kunaal ji....bahut hi kamaal ka likhtey hai aap, aapki maximum gazlen ham pad chuke hai...aur chahte hai jo bad-kismati se pad nahi paaye...unko bhi pad liya jaaye...bahuttttt hi accha lihtey hai aap. .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
(#27)
|
|
Sifar
Offline
Posts: 4,757
Join Date: Aug 2004
Location: Dubai, UAE
Rep Power: 41
|
8th September 2015, 10:17 AM
Aisa lag raha hai sunita ji koi mujhpe research kar raha hai .. hahhaha khair aapki zarra nawazi hai ye .. waise ye aashaar shuruwaati daur ke hai takneeki taur pe .. jo mujhe ab zaati taur pe pasand nahi .. dekhta hun to sochta hun main itna bekaar kyun likhta tha..
Behrhaal aapko pasand aaya mujhe khushi is baat ki .. nacheez pe nazar e karam banaye rakhe Sifar Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa.. Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi.. |
|
|
|
|
|
|
 |
«
Previous Thread
|
Next Thread
»
| Thread Tools | |
| Display Modes | Rate This Thread |
Linear Mode
|
|
Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.5
Copyright ©2000 - 2024, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
vBulletin Skin developed by: vBStyles.com
Copyright ©2000 - 2024, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
vBulletin Skin developed by: vBStyles.com
