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talkhiyaaN..... (nazm) ( a very personal one\) |
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talkhiyaaN..... (nazm) ( a very personal one\) -
22nd November 2014, 07:09 AM
aadaab yaaran-e-mehfil,
ek nazm, jo dar asl haqeeqat ka aainaa hai, aapki khidmat meiN haazir kar raha hooN. aaj kaifiiyat kuch aisi hai is nazm ko post karte hue jhijhak nahiiN ho rahi hai vagarnaa aam haalaat meiN yeh kabhi post na hui hoti mulaiiza kijiye na maa ne mujhe goad hi meiN uThaaya na waalid ne apne gale se lagaaya mehruum rakkha gaya har khushi se haaN! mujhko bahot hai gilaa ziNdagi se na seene se apne kisi ne lagaaya na baahoN ke ghere meiN jhuula jhulaaya na mujhko kabhi lo'riyaaN hi sunaayiiN na zaaNooN pe rakh ke kisi se sulaaya na bachpan bhi mujhko milaa ziNdagi se haaye! kyoN na karuN maiN gilaa ziNdagi se? thokaroN ne nawaaza, saNbhaltaa raha hooN dehaktee rehguzar pe bhi chala raha hooN chaltee rahiiN aaNdhiyaaN nafratoN ki chiraaGhoN ki maaniNd jaltaa raha hooN mere waalid-e-mohtaram ne kahaa hai : "mere haath se qatl tera likhaa hai" lekin kabhi zikr mujhse kiya naa ke aakhir gunaah mujhse kya ho gaya hai maine kahaa , mere pyaare se abbu meri jaan par haq tumhaara bajaa hai tumhiiN ne mujhe ziNdagi se nawaaza tumhi maar daalo , meri iltijaa hai na jeene ki himmat na marne ka dam hai khuda tu, rihaayi, dillaa ziNdagi se haaN....mujhko bohat hai gilaa ziNdagi se is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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22nd November 2014, 07:39 AM
Maikash sahib ,
Namaskar ..Aap ki mazm mein jo dard chipa hai ..uski chuban apne dil pe mehsoos ki aur agar beadabi na ho apne dard mein likhi do lines likh raha hun , jo kuch saal pehle likhi thi. Aye zindagee tujh se hai mera gila , Meri masoomiyat ka diya hai ye sila ; Jinke liye kurbaan kardi sari Zindagee, Vo chand sikke dal kar keh gaye alvida. Regds Sanjay Sehgal khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar , Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar. |
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22nd November 2014, 10:13 AM
Maikash ji kya kahoon itna dard hai aapki is nazm me...padkar emotional ho gayi main...
hamesha khush rahein aap yahi dua hai.. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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22nd November 2014, 06:22 PM
mere waalid-e-mohtaram ne kahaa hai :
"mere haath se qatl tera likhaa hai" lekin kabhi zikr mujhse kiya naa ke aakhir gunaah mujhse kya ho gaya hai Amaa kyaa likh rahe ho maikash bhai.... ab rulaa ke maanoge kyaa........ aapki nazm khatam hone se pahle hi aankhen nam ho gayeen meri bas kuch kaha na jaaega...... Allaah aapke sabr ko aur mazboot de aur iskaa bahot accha sila de.. yahi baargahe rab me meri duaa hai...... salaamat rahen .... Shaad... |
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23rd November 2014, 06:42 PM
Maikash sahab ye kya likh diya aapne...
Ek line padne ke bad dusri line padni musqil ho gayi...itna dard bhar diya hai aapne Maaf kijijiyega main tareef nahi karunga kyonki jo mahsus karaya hai aapne mujhe.... dil se jod liya aapne Khuda aapko lambi umar se navaje... mera kya hai main to deewana hu kya bataoo tumko baare mein apne mein to khud se hi begaana hu ...................vinaydahiya |
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24th November 2014, 09:39 AM
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Maikash bhai...aapki yeh nazam jab se aapne post ki hai, kai baar padi hai maine aur aik aik lafz dil meiN chuban paida karta rha hai jitni baar bhi pada hai, sab kuch jaanti hu main aapke bare meiN, shayad esi liye takleef jayada hue aur reply karne ki himmat nahi ho rhi thi. aap bahut brave ho, zindgi ka saamna aapne bahut himmat se kiya hai, to phir aaj kyu etne toot gye. ham hai na aapke saath...dosto ka sahara kam nahi hota...dosti meiN dekho to dost maa-baap, bhai-behan sabki kami door kar detey hai  apna khayal rakhiye acche se, aur khush rahiye. .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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25th November 2014, 10:04 PM
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zindagi se gilaa rakhne waale hi zindagi ki ahemiyat jaante hai...apke har misre mein ek alag sa aks nazar aaya mujhe kahi ranjish to kahin razaa, gilaa bhi kahi to kahi tha silaa... Behad khoob andaad-e-bayaan ustaad ji... nacheez ki duaa aur daad qubool farmiYeGaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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2nd December 2014, 04:04 AM
aadaab dosto,
aalam-e-iz'teraab ke haathoN majboor ho kar yeh nazm post kar baiThaa tha aur aap sab dostoN ki muhabbat dekh dil ne to bohat chaaha ke aapka alehdaa-alehdaa shukriya adaa karuuN go himmat ne saath nahiiN diya agli baa taq ke liye muaafi ka talabgaar hooN aur is vaayide ke saaTh ijaazat chaah raha hooN ke do-ek roz meiN jawaab haazir karne ki koshish karooNga khuda kareem aapko har ne'mat se nawaazey dua'go maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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