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20th May 2005, 01:10 PM
Hi Everyone,
Yesterday my sister Warda gave me a wonderful picture..... she wanted me to write about loneliness on it..... But I thought the Picture was wonderful and romantic... So i was trying to write on Loneliness, Love and Pain.... While writing I got a old poem of mine.... So just wanted to share it with you all Hope you all like it..... ============================== | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | lonely without U! | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | ============================== O! Lonely, I am so lonely, ...Without you. Ever since i met you. My world revolved around you. Dreams, emotion , passion all were just for you. Every breath, every hartbeat, was just for you. Now that you are gone. What is left is tears, a bottle of bear , and few old memories of you. Here i sit at the bar, Trying to drain your thoughts away, but the more i try, the more it pains, and what is left is a broken hart. I am lonely, Oh god it hurts real bad but i feel so lonely, without you. -- Rohin Bhargava Special note to Warda... Hey sister.... I will also write another one just for you.... Take Care Rohin |
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20th May 2005, 01:20 PM
O! Lonely,
I am so lonely, ...Without you. Ever since i met you. My world revolved around you. Dreams, emotion , passion all were just for you. Every breath, every hartbeat, was just for you. A beautifull feeling.. expressed beautifully  Now that you are gone. What is left is tears, a bottle of bear , and few old memories of you. Here i sit at the bar, Trying to drain your thoughts away, but the more i try, the more it pains, Hmmmmmmm....... Sabhi lute majnuon ka yahi haal hota hai LOL and what is left is a broken hart. I am lonely, Oh god it hurts real bad but i feel so lonely, without you. Beautifull.....! Hi Rohin! Pain expressed with softness.... this has come out really beauitful.... Mujhe to bahut pasand aayi..... Aise hi likte rhao.. and keep sharing ur Old calssics with us!! TC Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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20th May 2005, 01:20 PM
Big B,
lonely... hmm.. hota hai jab aap kisi ko bahut bhoolaane ki koshish karate ho to wo saks bahut yaad aata hai utna hi akelapan.. lekin usaki yaade hume akela nahi rehane deti tab aur dard lekin pyaar bhari tadap hoti hai.. aapki feelings shayad mujhase alag ho.. lekin meri feelings yehi hai... jo bhi ho aapne likha bahut bahut achha hai.. I love this poem in one touch. with lots of love ur's sis |
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20th May 2005, 03:18 PM
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its awesome dear. wow i wud suggest share ur oldies once again one by one. irs fantstic buddy. the pain in love, the loneliness of dripting apart. wow well expressed buddy. just loved reading each word of it. take care n keep writing such master pieces. may god bless u with his finnest glitters.  mera aashiyaan tha wahan jahan toofanon ka theekana tha, ek naadan dil tha aur ek bedard zamana tha! na jaane kyu ussi pal mil gaya ek dard naya, jab kisi roz mere labon ka muskurana tha! ***************************** Kutch bayani ho ehsaason ki….. Kutch kahani ho jasbaaton ki…. Ek paaq bazm jahan ho sirf pyar….. Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar…. Karein ek dooje se har koi lagaav…. Koi kare shikayat koi de sujaav Naazim kare hifaazat-e-pyar… Dhoondte hain koi aisa manzar yaar…. Buzurgoon ki kahawaat hai… Fal-e-intezaar meetha hai…. Kehte hain Jas- Nal- Aman…. Thoda sa, bus thoda sa intezaar…. 
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20th May 2005, 03:39 PM
O! Lonely,
I am so lonely, ...Without you. Ever since i met you. My world revolved around you. Dreams, emotion , passion all were just for you. Every breath, every hartbeat, was just for you. Now that you are gone. What is left is tears, a bottle of bear , and few old memories of you. Here i sit at the bar, Trying to drain your thoughts away, but the more i try, the more it pains, and what is left is a broken hart. I am lonely, Oh god it hurts real bad but i feel so lonely, without you. -- Rohin Bhargava Rohin Bhai... "I am so lonely,without you" is just outstanding...!Please accept my praise for this poem.And I beg for pardon of the repetitiveness of inspiration I get when I read your poems. "Loneliness, no more" is in workshop...! See you soon Thanks... Amanush... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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20th May 2005, 04:55 PM
Beautiful...!
Rohin .....its really a beauty...love... pain, sorrow, fear.....everything is there. thanks for shareing it. Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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20th May 2005, 06:03 PM
Lonely Lonely Lonely.....
Trying to drain your thoughts away, but the more i try, the more it pains, its nice buddy!! Kuch nagme gaa kar chale gaye kuch aahe bhar kar laut gaye, Wo bhi ek pal ka kissa the mein bhi ek pal ka kissa hoon, Kal tumse juda ho jaaonga jo aaj tumhara hisa hoon[/color] |
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20th May 2005, 08:25 PM
rohin,
kai rachna aisi hoti hai jis ka reply fika hi lagta hai ......... ek aisa ahesaas jo dil ko chhu kar dil mai sama gaya tarif kabul karna di |
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20th May 2005, 08:27 PM
hmm...widout u!
..gud one rohin!tc komal! |
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20th May 2005, 11:13 PM
hi dear..
aapne bahut acha likha hai, dard aur tanhayi ka sath ajeeb sa hota hai. i cud imagine the person sitting at bar crying and drinking beer so he can forget the pain..but it does is....jitna bhulne ki koshish karo utna hi vo shaks yaad aata hai. LOnely without YOU Priya ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Jisnu Lagey, ohi'yo jaane, Kaun Jaane peer parayi! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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21st May 2005, 12:12 AM
hi bhai,
thanx for writing one for me....and this poem is very nice...shows all of love, pain, loneliness keep writing your sis warda by the way....thanx for being there for me..... »~:¤.·ş`·.»WARDA«.·´ş·.¤:~« *(¸.·'´(¸.·'´*¤*`'·.¸)`'·.¸)* I'm a wanderer...on the roads of life, marveling at the different plants and flowers on the way....some hurt, yet some love... ~*~Ek Nanny Si Jaan...Chotta Sa Bacha...Thas Me!~*~ |
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21st May 2005, 12:19 AM
Hi Rohin,
nice poem........too good.... Regards Nidhi Friend Nidhi - A Silent Tear "Shedding a Tear When You are Lonely - So Peaceful yet so Painful...." |
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21st May 2005, 11:13 AM
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Old is Gold pain without softness cannot be felt.... right? I am really very happy that you liked this one. Thanks Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:16 AM
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Wahi to is poem mein hai.... Akelapan to bheed mein bhi lag sakta hai.... Feelings alag hai... soch nahi.... God Bless you Ur Big B Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:19 AM
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Pulkit ko bhi jawab diya tha Old is Gold.... Well I am glad you liked it. If only words could express... By the way these are not masterpieces... I always cherish the replies I get.... I will consider my work a masterpiece when I get that one reply which I have been waiting for. Thanks Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:21 AM
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Outstanding not sure... but your work is for sure... Arre mujhe to khushi hai ki aapko meri rachnao se kuch inspiration milta hai.... Thanks Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:24 AM
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Aapka yahan dekh mujhe khushi hui... I am happy that you liked it... Thanks Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:25 AM
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I am glad u liked it... thanks Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:27 AM
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Dil ko chu le to rachna aur bhi bhi pyaari lagti hai... Aapko achi lagi .... mujhe bahut kushi hui... Thanks Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:28 AM
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Widout U  Without me .... hehehheI am glad u liked it Thanks Komal |
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21st May 2005, 11:30 AM
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Lonely wothout U Yeah very true.... Dard to hota hi apna koi jab duur chala jaata hai... right... Thanks Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:35 AM
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I am glad you liked it.... Hai na tumhari tasveer se mail khati hui.... Glad you liked it.... thanks Tumhara bhai Rohin |
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21st May 2005, 11:36 AM
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I am glad you liked it yaar.... Thanks Rohin |
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22nd May 2005, 02:30 AM
Hey rohin
this peom reminds me of a song that is kinda my current fav. it goes like this "lonely--Im am so lonely, i have nobody ,all on my own" Yes lonliness is a bitter pill to swallow and it hurts like hell.more so lonliness in love. why do men always like to drown their sorrows in alcohol?????????? is it only a man- thing? how do women deal with it? just curious thats all!!!!!! your poem reveal ur skills for expressing what many of us feel yet try as we may cant express--thanks for putting into words , our feelinsg for us. take care Munnia |
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22nd May 2005, 10:48 AM
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Well that song is really good.... Well true that lonliness kills..... Men do not always drown their sorrow in alcahol... Its just that with tear beer rhymed...  People do many more things then just drink beer, They sulk.... they cry, .... they try to suicide.... god knows what all more on does... some eat and eat.... lol... Women well they can do the above too.... If only words could express.... then I would have been glad dear... But words can never express what is in our heart.... Take Care Rohin |
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22nd May 2005, 06:39 PM
O! Lonely,
I am so lonely, ...Without you. Ever since i met you. My world revolved around you. Dreams, emotion , passion all were just for you. Every breath, every hartbeat, was just for you. Now that you are gone. What is left is tears, a bottle of bear , and few old memories of you. Here i sit at the bar, Trying to drain your thoughts away, but the more i try, the more it pains, and what is left is a broken hart. I am lonely, Oh god it hurts real bad but i feel so lonely, without you. -- Rohin Bhargava ek dam apni baat lagi apki ye poem. pata hai yahi kuch lagta hai mujhe bhi. but ham jitna kisi ko bhulana chahte hai woh utna jyada yaad aata hai. bahut khub dil ko choo gya. sakhi शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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Dua hai koi akela na rahe... akela ho to saath botal na ho... aur Akela ho bhi to saath khushi ke pal yaad ke liye hoon.. I am glad it touched your heart.... I try to .... I am glad sometimes i succed Thanks Rohin |
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