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izhaar-e-khyaal(ek aise bazam jo sabke liye khuli hai) -
22nd August 2006, 12:04 PM
dosto ajj hum ek naya silsila shuru karne ja rahe hai....jisme app sab ka tahe dil se sawagat hai....isme app khulke apne khyalon ka izhaar kar sakte ho.......is main hum sab milkar ek nai gazal shuru kiya karainge or hum sab milkar usko poori kiya karainge...jis me hum koshish karainge ki hum jo bhee likhe wo ehsaaso se bharpoor ho......jisme umda khyaal ho....beshak appko gazal ki jiyada jaankari na bhee ho phir bhee app khulkar apne dil ke jajbaton ko likhe.....agar app kafiya milana jante ho to appka is bazam main khule dil se sawagat hai........umeed karta hoon appsab ka bharpoor saath milega........app ka dost .........rajveer.......
chalo phir is silsile ko shuru kare......khuda ka naam lekar.....
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meri ibadat mera pehla pyar ho tum,
aankho ka sapna dil ka qaraar ho tum......
'veer'
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Re: izhaar-e-khyaal(ek aise bazam jo sabke liye khuli hai) -
22nd August 2006, 12:11 PM
1st share
meri ibadat mera pehla pyar ho tum,
aankho ka sapna dil ka qaraar ho tum......
'veer' [/B][/QUOTE]
raj sahab
sukriya aapne jo izahare khayal naya sawalo jawab shuru kiya
main ise shuru karne ke liye tahe dil se mubarkbaad deta hoon.
tumhara dost
dilip
chaha hai maine tumhe khuda se badkar
pa gaya hoon jannat mere khuda ho tum.
dilip
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Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
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Re: izhaar-e-khyaal(ek aise bazam jo sabke liye khuli hai) -
22nd August 2006, 12:16 PM
Quote:
Originally posted by rajveeer
dosto ajj hum ek naya silsila shuru karne ja rahe hai....jisme app sab ka tahe dil se sawagat hai....isme app khulke apne khyalon ka izhaar kar sakte ho.......is main hum sab milkar ek nai gazal shuru kiya karainge or hum sab milkar usko poori kiya karainge...jis me hum koshish karainge ki hum jo bhee likhe wo ehsaaso se bharpoor ho......jisme umda khyaal ho....beshak appko gazal ki jiyada jaankari na bhee ho phir bhee app khulkar apne dil ke jajbaton ko likhe.....agar app kafiya milana jante ho to appka is bazam main khule dil se sawagat hai........umeed karta hoon appsab ka bharpoor saath milega........app ka dost .........rajveer.......
chalo phir is silsile ko shuru kare......khuda ka naam lekar.....
1st share
meri ibadat mera pehla pyar ho tum,
aankho ka sapna dil ka qaraar ho tum......
'veer'
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kushiyo ki subha lekar aaye ho tum,
mere pyar ki phele bahar ho tum.........
-sunita virender
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Re: Re: izhaar-e-khyaal(ek aise bazam jo sabke liye khuli hai) -
22nd August 2006, 12:24 PM
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Originally posted by sunita virender
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kushiyo ki subha lekar aaye ho tum,
mere pyar ki phele bahar ho tum.........
-sunita virender
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sawan ne chedi hai pyar ki sargam
mere pahle pyar ka izhar ho tum.
dilip
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Re: Re: Re: izhaar-e-khyaal(ek aise bazam jo sabke liye khuli hai) -
22nd August 2006, 12:28 PM
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Originally posted by dilip200
3rd sher
sawan ne chedi hai pyar ki sargam
mere pahle pyar ka izhar ho tum.
dilip
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teri bahho mai aakar sakoon milta hai mujhe,
kaya meri tarah aise hi bekarar ho tum......
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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hi -
22nd August 2006, 12:40 PM
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teri bahho mai aakar sakoon milta hai mujhe,
kaya meri tarah aise hi bekarar ho tum......
-sunita virender
5th share
taaron ki wadi me chaand ki aagosh me,
mera pyaar bhara sansaar ho tum.......
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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22nd August 2006, 12:47 PM
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Originally posted by rajveeer
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teri bahho mai aakar sakoon milta hai mujhe,
kaya meri tarah aise hi bekarar ho tum......
-sunita virender
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taaron ki wadi me chaand ki aagosh me,
mera pyaar bhara sansaar ho tum.......
'veer'
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teri bahoo ke jooley mai jool jaugi mai.
meri kushiyo ka doosra naam ho tum......
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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22nd August 2006, 01:03 PM
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Originally posted by sunita virender
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teri bahoo ke jooley mai jool jaugi mai.
meri kushiyo ka doosra naam ho tum......
-sunita virender
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doori sab mita kar kareeb aa jao tum
mere khile gulshan ka gulzar ho tum
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22nd August 2006, 02:22 PM
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doori sab mita kar kareeb aa jao tum
mere khile gulshan ka gulzar ho tum
dilip
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mera bekarar dil ka karar ho tum.....
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22nd August 2006, 02:43 PM
rajveer ji..
thanx a ton for starting this thread..
i really aapreciate it..
thank u thank u thank u thank u soooooooooooo much..
pehli nazm khatm karne pe badhai aur ab nai shuruat..
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mere dil ki rakh kured mat..ise muskura ke hawa na de..
ye charaag fir bhi chiraag hai.. kahi tera haath jala na de..
nisha
Go zaraa si baat par barsoN ke yaaraane gaye...
par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye...
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hi -
22nd August 2006, 04:25 PM
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mere dil ki rakh kured mat..ise muskura ke hawa na de..
ye charaag fir bhi chiraag hai.. kahi tera haath jala na de..
nisha
nisha ji bhut khub surat shuruwaat hai.....bhut acha kaha appne or is thred ki badai un sab dosto ko jo apne dil main bhut kush dabaiye huie baithe hai.....wo bhee apne khyaal or apne jajbaat ek doosre se share karain.......wel come.......
2nd share
tere bina jeevan guzarna na mumkin maloom parta hai,
ya to meri ho ja tu ya phir mujhe jeene ki duaa na de.......
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
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23rd August 2006, 09:12 AM
mere dil ki rakh kured mat..ise muskura ke hawa na de..
ye charaag fir bhi chiraag hai.. kahi tera haath jala na de..
nisha
2nd share
tere bina jeevan guzarna na mumkin maloom parta hai,
ya to meri ho ja tu ya phir mujhe jeene ki duaa na de.......
'veer' [/B][/QUOTE]
3rd shere
ki hai aabad maine tere dil me mohhabt ki duniya kayam
dar hai koi rusbai tere dil se meri mohhabt ko mita na de
raj sahab kuch jam nahi raha ye sher pls help karo.
dilip
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23rd August 2006, 10:11 AM
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mere dil ki rakh kured mat..ise muskura ke hawa na de..
ye charaag fir bhi chiraag hai.. kahi tera haath jala na de..
nisha
2nd share
tere bina jeevan guzarna na mumkin maloom parta hai,
ya to meri ho ja tu ya phir mujhe jeene ki duaa na de.......
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ki hai aabad maine tere dil me mohhabt ki duniya kayam
dar hai koi rusbai tere dil se meri mohhabt ko mita na de
raj sahab kuch jam nahi raha ye sher pls help karo.
dilip [/B][/QUOTE]
4th share
tujse ishq karney ke baad tujhe paney ki bhi chahat hai,
par darty hai ki kahi paney ke baad tujhe hum kho na de,
-sunita virender
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tujse ishq karney ke baad tujhe paney ki bhi chahat hai,
par darty hai ki kahi paney ke baad tujhe hum kho na de,
-sunita virender [/B][/QUOTE]
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paa liya hai pyar tera ab or kya mangu khuda se
e khuda inyat karna kahin yaar mera dhokha na de.
dilip
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tujse ishq karney ke baad tujhe paney ki bhi chahat hai,
par darty hai ki kahi paney ke baad tujhe hum kho na de,
-sunita virender
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paa liya hai pyar tera ab or kya mangu khuda se
e khuda inyat karna kahin yaar mera dhokha na de.
dilip [/B][/QUOTE]
6th share
dua karti hu mai kudha se yeh rishta yu hi banna rahey,
par darti hu ki dunia es rishtey ko nazar lagga na de.....
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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paa liya hai pyar tera ab or kya mangu khuda se
e khuda inyat karna kahin yaar mera dhokha na de.
dilip
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dua karti hu mai kudha se yeh rishta yu hi banna rahey,
par darti hu ki dunia es rishtey ko nazar lagga na de.....
-sunita virender [/B][/QUOTE]
lagne lagi ye duniya khoobsurat aap jo isme rahne lage
rahoon tere daman se door esi mout mujhe khuda na de...
dilip
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ab iske antim sher main makta hona chahiye.
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dua karti hu mai kudha se yeh rishta yu hi banna rahey,
par darti hu ki dunia es rishtey ko nazar lagga na de.....
-sunita virender
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lagne lagi ye duniya khoobsurat aap jo isme rahne lage
rahoon tere daman se door esi mout mujhe khuda na de...
dilip [/B][/QUOTE]
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'sunita' karti hai mohabat tumse dil ke gahreyo se,
par darti hu ki kahi kudha humey judda kar na de.....
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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23rd August 2006, 05:22 PM
main bhi aik naya sher pesh ker rahi hoon i don't know ye is qabil hai k ise agay barrhaya jaye ager aap logon ko is qabil lagay to plz mujhay khushi hogi
main ne zindagi jin yadon main guzaar di
woh yaaadain jin khuwabon main guzar di
un khuwabon ko haqeeqat main dhaal de
ger lagay main ne kismat ko maat di
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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main bhi aik naya sher pesh ker rahi hoon i don't know ye is qabil hai k ise agay barrhaya jaye ager aap logon ko is qabil lagay to plz mujhay khushi hogi
dear frind
mujhe samajh nahi aa raha ki is sher ka main kya reply doon. shayad ye meri nadani ka sabab hai. chalo fir bhee koshish karta hoon.
1st sher
main ne zindagi jin yadon main guzaar di
woh yaaadain jin khuwabon main guzar di
un khuwabon ko haqeeqat main dhaal de
ger lagay main ne kismat ko maat di
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isliye maine aaj tanhai main jindgi guzar di.
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24th August 2006, 10:33 AM
IInd sher
yaden or khwab kabhi sach ho nahi sakate
isliye maine aaj tanhai main jindgi guzar di.
'dilip'
3rd share
sadiyon se bikhri huie thee meri zindagi,
kisi ne meri zindagi pal main sawaar dee.....
'veer'
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yaden or khwab kabhi sach ho nahi sakate
isliye maine aaj tanhai main jindgi guzar di.
'dilip'
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sadiyon se bikhri huie thee meri zindagi,
kisi ne meri zindagi pal main sawaar dee.....
'veer'
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aaj wo jo itne kareeb baithe the mere,
unki chahat main humne jindgi waar dee...
dilip
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4th sher
aaj wo jo itne kareeb baithe the mere,
unki chahat main humne jindgi waar dee...
'dilip'
5th share
teri yaadon ke sahare jeet li thee zindagi,
tujhe bhool ke maine apni zindagi haar dee.....
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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teri yaadon ke sahare jeet li thee zindagi,
tujhe bhool ke maine apni zindagi haar dee.....
'veer'
6th sher
khuda se manga humne tujhe har ghadi har pal,
aur usne hamari jholi me mayusi beshumar dee....
(veer ji,sunita ji,dilip ji.. plz help.. kuch ajeeb sa sher lag raha hai.. kuch galat ho to sudharein..)
nisha
Go zaraa si baat par barsoN ke yaaraane gaye...
par itnaa to huaa, kuchh log pahchaane gaye...
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24th August 2006, 11:33 AM
6th sher
khuda se manga humne tujhe har ghadi har pal,
aur usne hamari jholi me mayusi beshumar dee....
(veer ji,sunita ji,dilip ji.. plz help.. kuch ajeeb sa sher lag raha hai.. kuch galat ho to sudharein..)
nisha
6th share
khuda se manga tujhe har ghadi har pal,
usne hamari jholi me mayusi beshumar dee....
'nisha'
bhut pyara izhaar hai .......ek khubsurat gilla us dene wale se.....nisha bhut acha kaha......or haan tera massage box full ho gaya hai usko khali karo.......
7th share
jisne mera daman kanto se bhar diya,
jiske chaman ko humne har bahar dee.....
,veer'
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24th August 2006, 11:41 AM
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6th sher
khuda se manga humne tujhe har ghadi har pal,
aur usne hamari jholi me mayusi beshumar dee....
(veer ji,sunita ji,dilip ji.. plz help.. kuch ajeeb sa sher lag raha hai.. kuch galat ho to sudharein..)
nisha
6th share
khuda se manga tujhe har ghadi har pal,
usne hamari jholi me mayusi beshumar dee....
'nisha'
bhut pyara izhaar hai .......ek khubsurat gilla us dene wale se.....nisha bhut acha kaha......or haan tera massage box full ho gaya hai usko khali karo.......
7th share
jisne mera daman kanto se bhar diya,
jiske chaman ko humne har bahar dee.....
,veer'
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yaaden unki ban gayi sahara tere jeevn ka "dilip"
chalni ho gaya jigar unke marne ki jo khabar dee
dilip
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24th August 2006, 12:04 PM
ek bhut he pyari or umda gazal anzaam tak pounchi.......ab ek nai gazal shuru kar raha hoon......
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mere aansuon ko yu girne se roka usne,
apni dasta sare mehfil kehne se roka usne.....
'veer'
umeed karta hoon app sab apne khus surat ehsaas is main shamil karaige........raj......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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24th August 2006, 12:28 PM
[QUOTE]Originally posted by rajveeer
[B]ek bhut he pyari or umda gazal anzaam tak pounchi.......ab ek nai gazal shuru kar raha hoon......
1st share
mere aansuon ko yu girne se roka usne,
apni dasta sare mehfil kehne se roka usne.....
'veer'
pila rahi thi sari mahfil ko apni masti ka jaam
hum bhi madhosh huye to peene se roka usne...
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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24th August 2006, 12:40 PM
[QUOTE] Originally posted by dilip200
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Quote:
Originally posted by rajveeer
ek bhut he pyari or umda gazal anzaam tak pounchi.......ab ek nai gazal shuru kar raha hoon......
1st share
mere aansuon ko yu girne se roka usne,
apni dasta sare mehfil kehne se roka usne.....
'veer'
pila rahi thi sari mahfil ko apni masti ka jaam
hum bhi madhosh huye to peene se roka usne...
dilip
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is sher ko main dubara se post kar raha hoon
2nd sher
pila rahi thi mahfil ko apni masti ka jaam,
dekh ke meri pyaas peene se roka usne...
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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24th August 2006, 03:37 PM
Quote:
Originally posted by dilip200
is sher ko main dubara se post kar raha hoon
2nd sher
pila rahi thi mahfil ko apni masti ka jaam,
dekh ke meri pyaas peene se roka usne...
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3rd sher
Chand apne noor se pila raha tha jaam koi...
badh rahi thi pyaas or mujhe roka usne......
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24th August 2006, 04:11 PM
dosto aapsab ke bich me ek sher mera bhi..................
Laga baithe hai hum to rog dil se ishq ka,
Haath thaam ke humara, dard hone se roka usne.....
meine likh to diya hai lekin agar aap words chang karna chahe to kar sakte hai.
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24th August 2006, 04:37 PM
dosto aapsab ke bich me ek sher mera bhi..................
Laga baithe hai hum to rog dil se ishq ka,
Haath thaam ke humara, dard hone se roka usne.....
meine likh to diya hai lekin agar aap words chang karna chahe to kar sakte hai.
Laga baithe hai hum to rog dil se ishq ka,
Haath thaam ke humara, dard hone se roka usne.....
pooja bhut acha likha ehsaas bhut khub hai .....acha likha appne...
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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24th August 2006, 05:20 PM
Laga baithe hai hum to rog dil se ishq ka,
Haath thaam ke humara, dard hone se roka usne.....
aik meri taraf se bhi
hum to dena chahatay the ta qayamat saath us ka
mager janay kion humaray badhtay howe qadmon ko roka us ne
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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24th August 2006, 05:26 PM
4th sher
Laga baithe hai hum to rog dil se ishq ka,
Haath thaam ke humara, dard hone se roka usne.....
"pooja"
5th sher
nazare jhukakar ishq ka izhar kar diya usne
jab hone lage betab kadam, dil ko roka usne
"lovely'
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24th August 2006, 05:48 PM
wah doston kya silsile chal rahe hai sheron-shayriyon ke. bahot hi achha lag raha hai.
khuda kare ye silsila kabhi ruke na.
sab ke saath se ye badta rahe. sabhi bahot hi khooob likh rahe hai.
6th sher
Chal rahe hai sooni dagar pe manzil ki aas liye,
Humsafar banke raah bhatak jane se roka usne.....
aapki dost
pooja
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24th August 2006, 08:20 PM
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Originally posted by pooja4588
wah doston kya silsile chal rahe hai sheron-shayriyon ke. bahot hi achha lag raha hai.
khuda kare ye silsila kabhi ruke na.
sab ke saath se ye badta rahe. sabhi bahot hi khooob likh rahe hai.
6th sher
Chal rahe hai sooni dagar pe manzil ki aas liye,
Humsafar banke raah bhatak jane se roka usne.....
aapki dost
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rahe manzar me hamsafar banne ka wada karke
mazil ke raste pe saath aane se roka usne....
dilip
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24th August 2006, 10:24 PM
hi bhai ye to bohat buri baat hai beech main se mera sher kion gol ker diya gaya hai ye kesi monoply hai is ka to matlab ye howa k ye sirf kuch logon k sheron k liye hi hai jagah
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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24th August 2006, 10:32 PM
koi to ho ji(aapka naam nahi pata isi liye) mein bhi yahi soch rahi thi ki aapka sher kaha gaya, mein apne sher ko koi number nahi diya thha lovely ji ne nu de diya 4th aur fir apne sher ko 5th bana diya. bahot hi galat baat hai. lovely ji se shikayat rahegi ye.
aapke sher ka nu. 4th hai, mera 5th ,lovely ji ka 6th, fir mera 7th, dilip ji ka 8th hai.
dekhiye ab sabhi iss baat ka khayal rakhiye ki ye sab ke liye hai. number sahi diya jaye sabhi ko.
mein aapse maaffi mangti hu. sorry.
aapki dost
pooja
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24th August 2006, 10:52 PM
Chal rahe hai sooni dagar pe manzil ki aas liye,
Humsafar banke raah bhatak jane se roka usne.....
pooja tumne kaha aur main likha raha hoon..to dosto ek sher meri aur se bhi....
Chal rahe hai sooni dagar pe manzil ki aas liye,
Humsafar banke raah bhatak jane se roka usne.....
" BAITHA HU MAIN AKELA DIL ME KUCH AAS LIYE........
ZINDAGI KO JI RAHA HU MAIN DIL ME ARMNAAN KUCH KHAS LIYE........."
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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25th August 2006, 01:03 AM
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doori sab mita kar kareeb aa jao tum
mere khile gulshan ka gulzar ho tum
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7th sher
Door thi manjil,rasta bahut kathin....
Raah-e-manjil ka nishaan ho tum
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