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Pehli Koshish... -
31st January 2005, 11:28 AM
For the first time in life... I have tried to write something on my own...Some ppl very dear to me insisted in scuh a manner that i cud not turn it down...Hope you wud bear with me and request the moderators if they decide to throw me out of here
 ... Yeh sirf ehsaas hain(Of the time, I first fall in Love), Technical flaws abound here... but understandably so as this is the first time, I am writing myself... Mere dil me chhupe hain kucch ehsaas, kucch ankahi, kucch ansuni si hai baat, Woh baat kehne main aya hoon... Uska saanson se mehkana mere tan-man ko, aankhon aankhon me kar lena sau baat Uske is andaaz se dil ko ab main naa bachaa paya hoon Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana, sochte rehana unki hi har baat Behekte jaane se khud ko ab main naa rok payaa hoon Kaise kehdoon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhayi thhi, lafz par chaar hi likh paya hoon... -- Pulkit Gupta Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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31st January 2005, 11:45 AM
H Pulkit,
Kya baat hai pehli baar pyaar kiya aur pehli pehli Taaza nazam likhi hai. Bhai kya baat hai. Hunar to hai tumme, Pata nahi kyon chupate ho.... Lagta hai sirf Amrita ke liye hai... Isliye hummse chupate ho... Your words were good Hart felt. That is what is important in writing. To write from the Hart. Agar Ek Shayar yeh soch ke likhe ki usse kuch likhna hai to woh to kuc llikh hi nahi pata accha. Woh to khayal aaye, Kalam chali, Siyahi Kaagaz par lagi aur Dil ke haal ko Kore Kagaz par Lal rang se bayan kar diya. Logon ne socha Yeh to shayar ban gaya.... SO do keep writing. You have the gift of expression dont let it waste. Thanks for sharing the wonderful composition. Rohin |
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31st January 2005, 11:49 AM
Mere dil me chhupe hain kucch ehsaas, kucch ankahi, kucch ansuni si hai baat,
Woh baat kehne main aya hoon... Uska saanson se mehkana mere tan-man ko, aankhon aankhon me kar lena sau baat Uske is andaaz se dil ko ab main naa bachaa paya hoon Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana, sochte rehana unki hi har baat Behekte jaane se khud ko ab main naa rok payaa hoon Kaise kehdoon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhayi thhi, lafz par chaar hi likh paya hoon... Waah waah waah! aur phir ek baar waah! Arre Pulkit... Chupe rustam nikale tum tau...itni saadgi...itni dilkash...yeh aawaaz....wow...dil khush kar diya...messenger pe itna nahin jitna yahan post dekh kar hua...meri duaayein sada tumhare saath hain...kehdo kehdo..jo jee mein aaye kehdo...aur phir yahan post kar do... loved it...sach.. paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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hi pulkit! -
31st January 2005, 12:15 PM
Heyy!! Pulkit!....kya yar..sahi ho!! pehle kahaa the?
 Pehlli baar likha hai lekin... JorrDAAR likha hai.. taazgi se bhara hai tumhara ye pehla prayas! har lafz tumne mazedaar likha hai! keep up writing ok...we wd look 4ward 2 ur next creatn!  komal |
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31st January 2005, 12:25 PM
Hi Pulkit,
Ye hua koyi baat, pehli post mein hi jo keh nahi paya use itna achhe tarike se keh diya. Bas ab likte jana..... Shade in the shadow world |
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31st January 2005, 12:51 PM
Hi,
Pulkit & all freinds, H r U wah-bhai-wah kya kehne aapne to shayro ki aur aashiqoki donoki hi chutti kar di well very well, good work and always good work, hume apki post ka intezaar rahega. By Take care By freinds |
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31st January 2005, 01:35 PM
Hi Pulkit BHai,
CLAP CLAP CLAP CLAP!!! N the whole of shayri.com bursts in2 a standing ovation as the ever dear Pulkit presents his first work. Bhai, bohot khoob. Bohot hi pyaara likha hai tumne. Arey BHai, itna umda likhte ho!!! Bas ab toh yehi umeed karte hai ke sharmaana chhord do ge aur yaha apne khud ke kalaam uhi pesh karte rahoge. Intezaar rahega. Khayal rakhna aur khush rehna mere bhai Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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Re: Pehli Koshish... -
31st January 2005, 02:54 PM
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mere shareef bachae, Mere dil me chhupe hain kucch ehsaas, kucch ankahi, kucch ansuni si hai baat, Woh baat kehne main aya hoon... ~aaj tak jo baate tumhari aankhe bayaan karti thhi wahi baate aaj tumhari kalam se nikhar oothi hai. Uska saanson se mehkana mere tan-man ko, aankhon aankhon me kar lena sau baat Uske is andaaz se dil ko ab main naa bachaa paya hoon ~hmmmmmm... aisa waqt aata hi hai ... jab di ko bhi lagta hai ke bachaa ab bada ho gaya . lol Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana, sochte rehana unki hi har baat Behekte jaane se khud ko ab main naa rok payaa hoon ~bbc par news aaj aani hi hai.... mera pulkit bahek gaya. Kaise kehdoon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhayi thhi, lafz par chaar hi likh paya hoon... ~lafz bhale hi chaar likhe hai par dil apna bayaan kar diya hai. khush raho mere bachae. tumhari yah pahli koshish k liye tumhe lakh abhinandan diiii |
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You are doing Great :)** |
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You are doing Great :)** -
31st January 2005, 04:41 PM
Aap ko dekh kar_ham ko aisa laga jeise ham ko nayi zindegi mil gayi O-mere Dilruba Rab se mangoun main keya_ham ko sare jaahan ki khushi mil gaayi~Aisa Chehra hasin hamne dekha nahin Aap jeisa koi Na Zamane mein_hain yehi wo aada Hain yehi wo bafa_hamko saadiya lagi Jiss ko paane mein_Jaan-e-Aada Jaan-e-Bafa dur na Jaana.......Song**Kuch aisi baat tou nahin ho gayi hain
I am so very Proud of You **Younhi likhte rehna~Dil ki gehraaion se Daad aur ek phul kuboul karlon**(Abhi abhi dekhi hain..., and I feel Why I wasn't here before! but I guess it's ok)Khush rahon ye Duwaaon ke saath ijaazat...**Take Care...God bless You. Keep smilling....... Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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31st January 2005, 04:42 PM
pulkit.....
....ye hui na baat!!!!!kya kalam uthayi hai,,agaaz accha kiya hai...kafi gehra aur roomani..! ...tumhari is baat per ek sher yaad aya,,,, ..unke hazoor-e-arz tamanna ke waste ...kholi hi thi juban ki mere hosh ur gaye....." ...keep it up.. |
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31st January 2005, 06:18 PM
Rohin Dost!!
Well... I have no wordss... So much of encouragemnent simply shows ur love I was feeling so shy posting it here.... Having postedso many nazms by so many wonderful writers, just didnt feel like posting it...but am feeling so good.. that i cant tell u Pyaar tazza nahi.. haan nazm taazi hai  and this wasnt for Amrita... this much i can tell u...Sahi kaha tumne that one shud write what his/her heart says.... Tabhi kucch likha paya hoon dost... Gift of Expression well.. Its just ur affection... I know the words were not that gr8....as u made them to be Par yeh wada raha dost...I will keep trying from now on... Wont say too many of thanks.... Dost ho.. If u wont motivate.. who else wud? Yunhi saath dete rehna Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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31st January 2005, 06:23 PM
Oh oh oh
 Im gladddddddddddddddddd!!! kitna achha lag raha hai tumhari post ke niche tumhara nam padh kar bahot achhe pulkit.. ishq bhale chahe barbad kar de insan ko...par ek bar agar dil me ehsas aa jaye to hotho se lafj or kalam se syahi apne aap girne lagti hai.. keep it up..i insist take care really well done!!! jo ab ye bewaqt hi tuje satane aa gaye logo ne nahi dekha apne girebaan main aur dekho 'sanam' ko aajmane aa gaye -> SaNaM |
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31st January 2005, 06:29 PM
I am feeling on top of the world.... Having made so many posts.. atleast one is here with my name at the bottom
I never thot I cud write a single line even.. It was Paras who insisted me to complete the lines she gives.... My Guru.. in true sense....Fir Meena didi ki khushi aur akshat(bedil) ka pyaar thha jo main likhne ki himmat kar paya hoon ...Kehte hain naa gyani aadmi saath hon to baas unhe sunte raho... I remember... me saying to Vijjn bhai.. that i am not creative...he retorted.. aise kaise keh sakte ho.. jo padhta hai., samjahta hai... he's creative Well...Found a bit of creativity in mysel Well...being in touch with so many umda shayars of shayri.com for so long and sharing a special bond with them... It is your love that instilled a bit of skill here too... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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31st January 2005, 06:33 PM
a-re a-re
tum in umda shayaro me mera nam likhna bhul gaye a-re ha..im coming by default na  kidding but ya....kabhi kabhi hume Self Actualisation ke liye dusro ki jarurat padhti hai.. Hota hai..hota hai mere sath bhi aise hi hua tha.. But now try to keep it constant... c ya jo ab ye bewaqt hi tuje satane aa gaye logo ne nahi dekha apne girebaan main aur dekho 'sanam' ko aajmane aa gaye -> SaNaM |
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31st January 2005, 06:40 PM
Mere dil me chhupe hain kucch ehsaas, kucch ankahi, kucch ansuni si hai baat,
Woh baat kehne main aya hoon... Uska saanson se mehkana mere tan-man ko, aankhon aankhon me kar lena sau baat Uske is andaaz se dil ko ab main naa bachaa paya hoon Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana, sochte rehana unki hi har baat Behekte jaane se khud ko ab main naa rok payaa hoon Kaise kehdoon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhayi thhi, lafz par chaar hi likh paya hoon... Pulkit Bhai... You are on the right path...Do continue ! Weisse ek do sher yaad aaye...Hope you will appreciate... Mohabbat main eisse mukaam aaye na ankhon pe ansoo na labh par aahein Hami ko safar ka saleeka nahin Katheen to na thi mohabbat ki raahein... Amanush... Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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31st January 2005, 07:36 PM
Paras!!
Ek shishya ke liye apne guru ke moonh se waah sunne se zyada accha kya hoga.. if it wasnt u.. i wud have never written this.... I am feelingon the top...that i can get a waah from u.... I am feeling gr88888888.... I know u r always with me.. and i find strength in you... I will not let u down... atleast not on the part of effort Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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31st January 2005, 08:07 PM
Hmmm JanaB Kis Kis ko samjhaayiega ki aap pehli baar likh rahe hai...
Kaise kehdoon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhayi thhi, lafz par chaar hi likh paya hoon... Lagta to nahi....Behad khoobsurat pulkit aab aage bhi is kalam ko side par mat rakhna bhai yunhi likhte rehNaa -aapka apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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31st January 2005, 11:33 PM
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Jaanta hoon dost yeh amrita ke liye nahi hai.... Dost hoon tumhare dil ki baat nahi janoonga kya? Yeh to sab se sach chupane ke liye tha... Ab tumhare shayri ka critical analysis .... Thoda chintan karna padga...Thoda dhyan dena ... Padhke lagta hai ki shayar sahab kaam pe dhyan nahi de rahein hain... Har waqt ussi ke baare mein soch rahein hain. Aajkal tanhayee kuch jyada hi achi lag rahi hai... Aur ab ek nayi zuban bhi sikh li hai.... Ankhon hi ankhon mein ishara ho gaya .... Bhai shayri to perfect hai... But doctor ko bulao... Pulkit Bhai ko pyaar ho gaya hai...LOL Just wanted to scare you with my critical analysis... Thanks Rohin |
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31st January 2005, 11:54 PM
hi pulkit
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1st February 2005, 11:28 AM
Too good too good Pulkit,
ab itne umada shayaron se appreciation milne ke baad ab mere pass kahne ko jaada kuch bachta nahi hai, bas just add 100's of chocos, 1000's of kasatta and millions of blessings frm my side!!!!!....i'll b eagerly waiting for the next post frm this cool dude in red shirt n blue trousers passionately typing his new work!! Take care bbye Kuch nagme gaa kar chale gaye kuch aahe bhar kar laut gaye, Wo bhi ek pal ka kissa the mein bhi ek pal ka kissa hoon, Kal tumse juda ho jaaonga jo aaj tumhara hisa hoon[/color] |
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1st February 2005, 02:34 PM
Hello Pulkit bhai
Aaj tumhare pehli koshish dekhe.Bahut pyari si Rachna hay.Main hamesha sochtey thi tumhare paas hamesha itna achha collection hota hay poetry ka jab tum apna qalam likhoge to who kitna khuubsoorat hoga.Aur aaj dekha kitna pyara likha hay.Hamesha tum mere rachnao ki tareef kartey ho aaj tumhari likhi Rachna ki tareef karne ka maqka mila bahut accha laga. Mere dil me chhupe hain kucch ehsaas, kucch ankahi, kucch ansuni si hai baat, Woh baat kehne main aya hoon... Uska saanson se mehkana mere tan-man ko, aankhon aankhon me kar lena sau baat Uske is andaaz se dil ko ab main naa bachaa paya hoon Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana, sochte rehana unki hi har baat Behekte jaane se khud ko ab main naa rok payaa hoon Kaise kehdoon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhayi thhi, lafz par chaar hi likh paya hoon... Wahh..................Nicely Composed.Tanhaiyon mein zara muskurana ...............this line I liked the best. Sada kush Raho |
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1st February 2005, 06:59 PM
are wah pulkit...gr8....
3 cheers 4 u! waise tumhara kalam dekhke to nahin lagta ki first time likha hain...bade chupe rustam ho....kehte firte ho mujhse likha nahin jaata....abse zaroor likhna....bahut acche ehssas piroye hain...waise pyar cheez hi aisi hain. kuch bhi karva deta hain .......dekha na tumhe shayar ki lines mein bitha diya....reaaly liked the lines you wrote..alll the 4 stanzas were good par niche wali lines zara jyada acchi lagi.....keep it up! Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana, sochte rehana unki hi har baat Behekte jaane se khud ko ab main naa rok payaa hoon mausam Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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2nd February 2005, 07:33 AM
Mere dil me chhupe hain kucch ehsaas, kucch ankahi, kucch ansuni si hai baat,
Woh baat kehne main aya hoon... Uska saanson se mehkana mere tan-man ko, aankhon aankhon me kar lena sau baat Uske is andaaz se dil ko ab main naa bachaa paya hoon Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana, sochte rehana unki hi har baat Behekte jaane se khud ko ab main naa rok payaa hoon Kaise kehdoon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhayi thhi, lafz par chaar hi likh paya hoon... Wakai hi bahut accha likha hai, Pulkit ji Tum to bade shayron ke bhi Shayar ho, aab ye baat bata rahe ho... Thank you very much for sharing with us... |
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3rd February 2005, 12:24 PM
Komal!
Well i was here only buddy...But kisi ne itne pyaar se insist nahi kiya pehle... Koshish kee thee.. tumhe pasand aayi... bahut accha laga... Aage bhi saath deti rehna... TCLagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 12:25 PM
Hi shadow!!
Thanks for the aapreciation buddy... Well... Itna pyaar mila hai.. who wud like to stop... I will keep trying.. thanks .. saath dete rehna Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 12:27 PM
Hi Irfan!
Welll..Chhutti to meri ho gyai LOL ... Never expected such a warm welcome on a small effort...Aap doston ka pyaar hai.. I will keep trying Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 12:30 PM
Salim mere bhai!
Your reply made me Smile, made me laugh and made me feell on top of the world... It was just a small effort buddy... Its just your love that u r making it so special... Tumne sahi pakda mujhe... I was infact a bit shy .. thought several times beofre posting it... even logged off messenger and didnt login to shayri for some time after posting it Glad that u liked it.... Tumhara saath humesha banaye rakhna Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 01:16 PM
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aapki paheli koshish achhi rahi balke bahot badiya keep writing... aur ha vakt mile to meri.."Pyar kuchh aisa kijiye" padh lijiyega -Priya |
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3rd February 2005, 04:00 PM
Didi!
Di ko bhi lagta hai ke baccha bada ho gaya LOL... Bada hue to zamna ho gaya na di aur behke hue bhi BBC par news aayegi... Well BBC ki khushi ke liye hi likha hai... Aap logon ka pyaar hai... jo aaj kucch likh paya hoon... Hope kabhi gujarati me bhi likh paaoonn... "Taari matae coffe banaavi chche" (Kucch hain naughty chashmish log unhe dikhana hai )Aapka support to har do do lines ke baad thha... apne aap se kabhi post nahi kar paata main... Aap apna khayal rakho... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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Re: You are doing Great :)** |
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3rd February 2005, 04:14 PM
Shimull!
Gaana to bahut accha hai... PPar ab sunne me zyada mazaa aata hai... hwat we shud do is request the Site moderators to Make a Music Player software... Gaane hi gaaen chalao...Necche bol likh honge hi Well... Tumhe to sab pata hai.. kya hua hai aur kya nahin Phool tumhara catch kar liya hai...Abhi abhi dekhi hain? I guess its ok Hitler waali baat bhool gayin kya Neways... Tumhari Duayein humesha saath hi hain jaanta hoon... Be as u r alwayss...Keep smiling n Take Care Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 04:20 PM
Swati!
Aapki taareef sunakr to main aur oopar chad jaoonga naa.. Pehle hi kisi ne kasar nahi chhodi..... Thank u so much for all ur appreciation and encouragement.... Sher bahut accha hai Likhti rahiyega... aur apna khayal rakhiyaga Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 04:26 PM
Hiiiiii Sanam!!
Sooo good to see ur reply here.... WEll.. mujhe bhi accha lag raha hai apni p[ost pe apna naam padh kar Lolz...Well... My Love didint do ne harm to me...Barbaad karna to door ki baat hai... What if we r not together today... I have some beautiful memories to cherish... atleast good enough to write one shayri.. kidding Well.. buddy... Itna insist karogi to main kaise mana karoonga... cannot just refuse my friends and dear ones U will never find a lack of effort on my part..... Tum apna khayal rakhna...Aur haan... Dont make fun of my gujarati.. u know naa who's my Guru.. bahut maar padegi tumhe Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 04:34 PM
Mohabbat main eisse mukaam aaye
na ankhon pe ansoo na labh par aahein Hami ko safar ka saleeka nahin Katheen to na thi mohabbat ki raahein... Amanush... Bade Bhaiya! Your appreciation and encouragement doo mean a lot ot me....If u feel this is the right path... I will keep walking on it Aapka sher gazab thha... Aap pahunch gaye wahan jo main kehna chata thha... Chaar shabon me saar bayan kar diya aapne post kaaa... Aur Kyun naa samjhen.. mere bhai jo hain Apna khayal rakhiyga...Saath dete rahiyga Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 05:48 PM
Anant shubhkamnaye pulkit.. bahut achchhi pakad hai aapki...bas likhane ki kami thi jo ki aap pryas mein laane lage hain... bahut achchha likha hai aapne... agar yah pahali koshis hai to super duper hai... i am happy ki aap likhe...
aur ha aapki likhi rachana mein kuchh correction kiye hain maine jise aap khud hi dekhiyega aur phir sochiyega ki maine kya correction kiya hai.. Originally posted by Pulkit_gupta Mere dil me chhupe hain kucch ehsaas, ankahi ansuni si kuchh baat, Woh baat kehne main aya hoon... Uska saanson se mehkana mere tan-man ko, aankhon aankhon me kar lena hajaaro baat Uske is andaaz se dil ko naa bachaa paya hoon Tanhaiyon me zara muskurana, sochte rehana unki hi har ek baat Behek jaane se khud ko naa rok payaa hoon Kaise keh doon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhaya lafz chaar hi likh paya hoon... bas ek baat kahunga ki jab bhi hum kavita ya shayri likhate hain to hamesha koshis kerte hain ki kam shabdo mein apani puri baat kah de... well likhate rahiye..humari shubhkamnaye aapke sath hain... Akant... आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो... AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho... |
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3rd February 2005, 05:58 PM
Pulkit gupt.....?
aapne tau apne hunar ko baDe lambe samay tak gupt rakha shrimaan...lekin aaj aapke andar ke shayar se mulakaat ho hi gayee....aisa laga jaise bharat mulq ke do alag alag pradeshoN ke log mil rahe hain... bhasah to ek hi hai ...lehja thoda alag hai.. aap qalam thaame rakhiye... aur hum apna dil thame rakhte hai... safar suhana guzrega.. Kaise keh doon dil ki baat unse, kaise karloon izhaar-e-mohabbat Badi shiddat se kalam uthhaya lafz chaar hi likh paya hoon bohot khoobsurat khayaal hai..... mein akant sahab ki baat se bilkool sehmat hoon ke kam lafzon mein apni baat kehna acchi shayri ke liye bohot zaroori hai...likhte rahiyega....dua go. Talib. |
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3rd February 2005, 07:19 PM
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Main kahan samjha raha hoon... Aap to jaante ho sab... Aapko accha laga jaankar kjhushi hui...Aap logon ka pyaar aur encouragement saath hai... to main koshihs karta rahoonga Apna khayal rakhan bhai Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 07:23 PM
Rohin!!
Tum aur tumhara critical analysis...Maine socha finally tum to tips doge kucch... but u r such a shrewd professional Tnahyee is not a part of me....I love to be surrounded by ppl now Doctor ki zaroorat nahi hai... tum jaisa dost hai .. main beemar kaise padoonga Arre baat baat me bhai mat add karo.. i am just 6 months elder to you... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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3rd February 2005, 07:36 PM
Hi Pulkit Bhai....LOL
Bhai bole to MunnaBhai... Bada bhai wala nahi..... Woh dusra Bhai...LOL Ab sach much ka critical analysis... Pehle baar ke prayas ke liye bahut acha hai.... Magar tum kuch bhul gaye... Tumne kuch likha kuch mitaya aur phir likha.... Tum soch mein pad gaye ki kaise aage linkhon.... Woh to hota hai.... Now when you look back at it you will realise more words coming to your mind and you will feel like i can change a bit of it.... you will feel arre ek aur line aa gayi dimag mein.... But don't worry.... Your emotions are flowing well .... Keep it up.... Just ensure you don't strangle your feelings with the technicalities of writing which in actual are not important at all as ensuring that the feelings get transpired to the reader.... Simple hart felt words of yours will touch everybody... Hope these help you in future... Thanks Rohin |
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3rd February 2005, 09:22 PM
Beshaq mere yaar ...lafz tum chaar hi likh paaye ho...
Beshaq mere yaar ...lafz tum chaar hi likh paaye ho... per kasam se...per kasam se ey dil In chaar lafzoN me ho....hamaara dil jeet laaye ho. Pulkit...Great...mere dost... weise ek baat hai bhai...dam hai tumhaari is creation me. YooNhi likhte rahna dost. Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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4th February 2005, 09:53 AM
Hi Soni!!
Aapko accha laga jaankar bahut khushi hui... Saath deti rahiyega... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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