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27th October 2006, 12:52 PM
तीसरा शेएर
ख़ुशिया तेरे साथ ही रूठ कर चली गई है दूर मुझसे, गमों ने आपनी महफ़िल में कर लिया है शामिल मुझे ...... -सुनीता वीरेंदेर चौथा शेएर तेरी सांसो को देता हूँ मैं अपनी सांसो की ज़िंदगी, बता कहाँ जाऊंगा गर तू भी समझेगी क़ातिल मुझे ...... 'वीर' 5th share Ujala To Tere Ane Se Tha Mehaffil Me Meri, Biiina Tere Siirff Tariikii Hai Hansil Mujhe.... -pooja  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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2nd November 2006, 09:53 AM
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zamaney ki rasmo se uth kar mohabat ki tumse, be-waffa samjay ab tu to bata kaya hua hansil mujhe... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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7th November 2006, 04:29 PM
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zamaney ki rasmo se uth kar mohabat ki tumse, be-waffa samjay ab tu to bata kaya hua hansil mujhe... -sunita virender 7th share pathron ke sehar me pathar khake rehta hoon moom sa hai mera wajood na samajh sangdil mujhe..... 'veer' ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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tujhe to eh sanam aapne pyar par hi bharosa na tha, ek baar sachey dil kah kar dekta aapni manzil mujhe.... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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8th November 2006, 01:31 PM
dosto
namaskar, maine koshish ki hai ek nayii gazal ki shuraaat karne ki accha lage to ise aage badaiyega 1st sher Kaise khuda ko ye manzoor ho gaya Mera pyar meri nazro.n se door ho gaya dilip  " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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9th November 2006, 05:02 PM
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pyar ke badley mai.n ki tumne be-waffeai, aisa karne ko kyu tu majboor ho gaya... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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13th November 2006, 01:15 PM
2nd sher
pyar ke badley mai.n ki tumne be-waffeai, aisa karne ko kyu tu majboor ho gaya... -sunita virender 3rd share barson jisko seene main chhupaye rakha, tere chhune se wahi zakham nasoor ho gya...... 'veer' ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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14th November 2006, 10:14 AM
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4th sher teri chahat ki enteha ab dekhi hai maine, tere pyar par ab mujhe garoor ho gaya.... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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14th November 2006, 10:48 PM
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bhale hiii naa manzuur kar mahobbat meri, par mere naam se tu badnam jarur ho gaya.... grazie aapki dost pooja  ===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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17th November 2006, 04:17 PM
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6th sher bin piye hi kadam bahakne lagey hai ab, mujhe to tere pyar ka saroor ho gaya..... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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21st November 2006, 11:16 AM
6th sher
bin piye hi kadam bahakne lagey ab is qadar tere pyar ka saroor ho gaya..... -sunita virender 7th share jab se tu aiya zindagi me khusi banke har ranj-o-ghan mujhse door ho gaya.... 'veer' ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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diya jabse sahara mujhe tanhayeo mai.n, tab se tu meri aankho ka noor ho gaya..... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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24th November 2006, 11:14 PM
hello frnds,
bahut din baad aaye hun is kuuche mai.socha ki is baar gazal ko shuru karne ki himmat karlun.umeed hai ise aage aap sab badhhayenge.najaane sahi bhi hai ya nahi.lijiye pehla sher haazir hai, zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai, pal bhar ki khushi phir dheron gham sang laati hai. gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi?? --akelijaan-- |
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1st December 2006, 09:47 AM
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zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai, pal bhar ki khushi phir dheron gham sang laati hai.... -akelejaan "sara" 2nd sher janey kyu har kushi gum mai.n doob jatti hai.n, yeh mohabat bhi humey kaya kaya rang dikhati hai... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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1st December 2006, 11:08 AM
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zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai, pal bhar ki khushi phir dheron gham sang laati hai.... -akelejaan "sara" 2nd sher janey kyu har kushi gum mai.n doob jatti hai.n, yeh mohabat bhi humey kaya kaya rang dikhati hai... -sunita virender sara ji or sunita ji ko raj ka salaam...aap dono ne bhut hee umda khyaal pesh kiye hain.....magar thori c gustakhi karne ja raha hoon agar bura laage to muaafi ka talabgaar hoon..... 1st sher zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai zara c khushi or dheron gham de jaati hai.... -akelejaan "sara" 2nd sher kyu har kushi gum mai.n doob jatti hai? mohabat bhi kaya kaya rang dikhati hai... -sunita virender 3rd share khaab me bhe tujhe chhuna mumkin nahi aata hoon jab kareeb aankh khul jaati hai.... 'veer' ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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1st December 2006, 11:31 AM
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to mera koi nahi, par koi rishta to hai, kyu tere dard se meri aankh bhar aati hai... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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2nd December 2006, 11:05 AM
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khaab me bhe tujhe chhuna mumkin nahi aata hoon jab kareeb aankh khul jaati hai.... 'veer' 4th sher to mera koi nahi, par koi rishta to hai, kyu tere dard se meri aankh bhar aati hai... -sunita virender 5th share ashko ke sehar me kiya hai jab se basera hassi to ab kabhi kabhi khaab me he aati hai.... 'veer' ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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7th December 2006, 11:24 AM
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6th sher raat bhar jaag jaag kar dekhti hoon raah tera, kyu meri need raato ko tere paas chali jati hai.... -sunita virender .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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12th December 2006, 10:18 AM
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chahta hoon bhool jau teri har raah-gujar, phir kyu jaha b jata hoon nazar teri gali aati hai... -veer ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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12th December 2006, 10:40 AM
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mumkin nahi is janam main tera sath fir bhi, jindgi kyo.n ajeeb se sapne mujhe dikhati hai........ dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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22nd December 2006, 10:54 AM
dosto ek naye gazal ka aagaz kar raha hoon, umeed hai aap sab ka sahyog jaroor mileyga.........!
1st sher kitne chehre hai.n es dunia mai.n humko ek hi chehra nazar aata hai, dunia ko ab hum kaya dekhe teri yaddoN mai.n sara waqt gujar jata hai.... -veer ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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23rd December 2006, 10:10 AM
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2nd sher jab se dekha hai tujko, tab se maine tod diye ghar ke sab aainey tere barey mai.n soch kar mera roop kuad hi sanwar jata hai...... -sunita virender singh .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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20th January 2007, 06:35 PM
3rd sher tumhari chahat meiN aey jaan, meri har subha-shaam guzarti hai tum jo itni kariib aati ho mere ,na jane kyuN ye waqt thehar jaata hai... --dhaval-- |
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23rd January 2007, 04:03 PM
rajveer ji agar aap bura na maney to pls yeh gazal yahi chorr kar koi chotti se sher wali gazal shuru kijiye, kyuki yeh poori hi nahi ho paa rahi, etna lambha sher likhna aapne bas mai.n nahi hai ji
so pls....new sher .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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23rd January 2007, 08:29 PM
sunita ji ko raj ka salaam......aapki guzarish pe lijiye ek chhoti behar ki gazal shuru kar raha hoon umeed hai aapka saath milega.....
1st share saaki maikadde mei.N aksar aata raha hoon asko.N se dil ki aag main bhujata raha hoon...... 'veer' kafiya hai......aata....bhujata.....lagata......sunata... ..banata.....or radeef hai.....raha hoon......ab aap isko aage chalaiye........raj...... ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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23rd January 2007, 11:45 PM
2nd sher meri har khwahisheN sirf tujhse hi judi hai iNtezar me apni aankhoN ko rulata raha huN --dhaval-- |
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29th January 2007, 02:45 PM
3rd Sher
haaye! kaisi aalam-e-dewaanagii hai, mere rab! hai voh Guzra waqt lekin maiN bulaata rahaa huuN -Mayank |
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29th January 2007, 04:16 PM
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saaki maikadde mei.N aksar aata raha hoon asko.N se dil ki aag main bhujata raha hoon...... 'veer' 2nd sher meri har khwahisheN sirf tujhse hi judi hai iNtezar me apni aankhoN ko rulata raha huN --dhaval-- 3rd Sher haaye! kaisi aalam-e-dewaanagii hai, mere rab! hai voh Guzra waqt lekin maiN bulaata rahaa huuN -Mayank jo khade hain yahaaN hume "ghayal" banane ko, main kambakth unhi ko dard dikhaata raha huN. -Ghayal ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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29th January 2007, 06:24 PM
myank ji or ghyal ji aapki aamad se is segment ki taqdeer khul gayii umeed karta hoon yun hii aapka saath bana rahega......
1st share saaki maikadde mei.N aksar aata raha hoon asko.N se dil ki aag main bhujata raha hoon...... 'veer' 2nd sher meri har khwahisheN sirf tujhse hi judi hai iNtezar me apni aankhoN ko rulata raha huN --dhaval-- 3rd Sher haaye! kaisi aalam-e-dewaanagii hai, mere rab! hai voh Guzra waqt lekin maiN bulaata rahaa huuN -Mayank jo khade hain yahaaN hume "ghayal" banane ko, main kambakth unhi ko dard dikhaata raha huN. -Ghayal 5th share shayad neendo.N se nahi raha ab koi rishta uska khaab banke jiski aankho.N mei.N aata raha hoon..... 'veer' ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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9th April 2007, 07:30 PM
ek naye Sher se Ghazal ka aaghaaz karta huuN... taa'ke aap sab ke sahyog se ek achchhiii sii co-operative Ghazal ban sake..
Raadif: meiN Qaafiye: wafaaoN, duaaoN, balaaoN, dhoop chaaoN, adaaoN, hawaaoN, etc etc.. 1st Sher : Hoti Shiddat teri wafaaoN meiN MaaNg lete tujhe duaaoN meiN -Mayank |
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9th April 2007, 09:31 PM
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Jisne kasam meri khushiyo ki li wahi chhod gayaa balaon meiN grazie aapki dost pooja ===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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10th April 2007, 12:39 AM
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jisne manjil dikhai mohabbat ki wahi chod gaya rahon mein shukriya manish Life is filled with goodbyes, a million goodbyes, and it hurts every time....and every time my heart dies a little... Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time....  |
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10th April 2007, 10:18 AM
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tujhe kaise kahu main kafir, tu to shamil hai mere kudao mein -sunita .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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10th April 2007, 10:40 AM
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jumbish-e-nazar se humko lootaa kyaa baat hai teri adaaon mein gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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10th April 2007, 11:11 AM
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na gilla karti kabhi kudha se, gar tu kho jata meri waffon mein.... -sunita .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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10th April 2007, 05:34 PM
1)Hoti Shiddat teri wafaaoN meiN
MaaNg lete tujhe duaaoN meiN -Mayank 2)Jisne kasam meri khushiyo ki li wahi chhod gayaa balaon meiN -puuja 3)jisne manjil dikhai mohabbat ki wahi chod gaya rahon mein -manish 4)tujhe kaise kahu main kafir, tu to shamil hai mere kudao mein -sunita Virender(kudaaoN means?) 5)jumbish-e-nazar se humko lootaa kyaa baat hai teri adaaon mein -Parastaar 6)na gilla karti kabhi kudha se, gar tu kho jata meri waffon mein -Sunita Virender 7)yeh wafaaeN na sah sakuuNga maiN tum nah karna kamii jafaaoN meiN  -Mayank |
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10th April 2007, 05:38 PM
7)yeh wafaaeN na sah sakuuNga maiN
tum nah karna kamii jafaaoN meiN  -Mayank 8th sher phalkon mein chupakar rakthe the ajj beh gaye tum aansuyon mein tc manish aka musafir ek pal Life is filled with goodbyes, a million goodbyes, and it hurts every time....and every time my heart dies a little... Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time.... |
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13th April 2007, 01:32 PM
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phalkon mein chupakar rakthe the ajj beh gaye tum aansuyon mein aap ke ess Sher meiN qaafiya badal gaa hai, jaise kii pahle ke SheroN meiN hai adaaoN, wafaaoN, balooN, jafaaoN, etc etc..ess liye yeh Sher Ghazal meiN Shaamil nahiiN ho sakta.. .aap ko qaafiya badalna paRegaa.. Mayank |
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13th April 2007, 06:54 PM
aadaab aziz doston,
ek baar phir haazir hun ek nayi gazal ka aghaaz karne ke liye.umeed hai aap sab ka saath milega isay ek mukammal karne mai. to lijiyee haazir hai pehla sher, AA!TERE ASHKON KO APNI AANKHON MAI UTAARDUN, TERI ZINDAGI KO APNI KHUSHIYON SE SAWAANRDUN, -akelijaan gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi?? --akelijaan-- |
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13th April 2007, 07:00 PM
ohh sorry mayank ji,aapki is post per nazar baadmai padi.i m so sorry.ek gazal mukammal hui nahi aur maine dusri ka aghaaz kardiya.
manish ji aap se bhi sorry kehna chahungi,yeh sher aapko durst karna tha,par maine gaur nahi kiya. umeed hai aap mujhe muaaf karenge. gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi?? --akelijaan-- |
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