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17th October 2008, 08:32 PM
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sunita ji
apke sayari bahuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuut hi achi lagi ziska m sabado m bayan hi nahi kar sakta
with reg.
ravi.
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shukriya ravindar jii.......................................
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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17th October 2008, 08:36 PM
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toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut
Waaahhhh... bahut hi umda aaghaaz hai.... Doosra sher dil ko chhoo gaya...
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
Bahut khooob... behad khoobsurat bayaani...
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
Behad khoobsurat...
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut
Waahh...Kya baat kahi hai...
Hi Didi,
Kaisi hain aap? ummeed hain acche se hongi...
Aapki yeh ghzal dil ko bahut kareeb se chhoo ke gayi hai... Sach maaniye har sher bhut hi khoobsurat laga... Ravaani bhi khoobsurat hai, expressions bhi kamaal ke hain... dil khush ho gaya yeh ghazal padhkar...
Meri dil se dheron daad kubool kijiyega... bass yun hi likhti rahiye...
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dear pulkit...........main theek hoon, tum apni sunao ????
tumne meri es gazal ko apna keemti waqt diya, aur dil se pasand kiya......mujhe dil se kushi hue ki aapko acchi lagi meri yeh koshish....aapki duao.n ke liye dil se shukriya.
kush raho
aapki diii
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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17th October 2008, 08:40 PM
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sunita ji apne ye bahut bahut bahut hi achcha likha hai kisi aik sher ko achcha nahi kah sakta sabhi aik se badkar aik hai par ye aik sher to gajab hi hai ki
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
bahut hi umda,pls share karte rahe,khush rahe,sukriya
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namaskaar baagi jii, shukriya aapne sabhi sher pasand kiye......mujhe b yeh sher bahut pasand hai.....es mein so sachai hai woh bahut dukh dene wali hai.....yoon hi apni keemti rai detey rahiye.
dil se shukriya
kush rahiye
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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19th October 2008, 12:12 AM
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BAHUT VADIYA KYA KHOOB ARJ KIYA HAI
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shukriya HAPPY jee...................................
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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19th October 2008, 12:13 AM
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bahut khoobsurat ehsaas hain di....
zainy
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dear zainy..........tumne meri poetry ko apna keemti waqt diya aur pasand kiya meri poetry ko dil se shukriya dear.
hush raho
tumhari diii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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19th October 2008, 12:21 AM
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toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut
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Behad khoob sunita ji...aapki is nazm ne ek arse pehle likhi nazm rubaroo kar di...ek ek sher ek kahaNii keh raha hai yahaN
tere jaane ke baad se yeh ehSaaS hua
khud ke liye bhi huye hum paraaYe bahuT
teri yaaDoN ka kabhi hum the caarvaan
ini yaaDoN mein baskar tu sataaYe bahuT
isi tarah se humhe aapne ehsaason se rubaroo karte rahiYeGaa
-aapka apNaa
Qasid
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नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं
क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ
रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें
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23rd October 2008, 11:34 AM
hiiiii sunita ji h r you i m new user to shayri .com and i read your all poem i like
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27th October 2008, 03:59 PM
wah...her ek sher dil ko choo gaya..per jisne emotions ko bhi pighla diya wo ..hain..
mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
swati...............some words about tears in!
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2nd February 2009, 03:25 PM
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sunita ji,
bahut achha likha hai. likhte rahe. apke naye post ka intjarr.......
raj
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2nd February 2009, 03:30 PM
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Adaab !!!
kaafi waqt ke bad lauta hoN SDC per . jab yahaN se gya to aisa laga tha jese ab kabhi likh hi nahi paaoN ga lakin app jese shaa'iroN ko peRhene ke baad jese khoon meN wohi josh doRne lagta hai , appki ghazal behad behad behad achi lagi umeed hai app se bahut kuch aur bhi seekhne ko mile ga ,
duaoN meN yaad rakhiye ga
Mujeeb
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hmmmmmmmmm..........kaafi waqt baad lout ke phir gayab ho aise himmat detey rahogey to meri kalam bhi chalti rahegi.....kush raho, salamat raho, meri duao.n mein tum phele se hi ho, kahne ki jaroorat nahi hai bhai.
duao.n ke saath
baaji
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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2nd February 2009, 03:32 PM
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Hi Di
Bahut khoob ... no words to decribe how well u have written..
dua hai aapki ek khushi puri ho
aur ese likhte raho
aapki
mandeep
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dear mandeep........bahut bahut shukriya, yeh batao ki kahaN gayab ho etne dino.n se, koi khabar nahi aapki
pyar ke saath
diii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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2nd February 2009, 06:32 PM
hi diii..waah kya baat haiiii aapke kalaam ki..bahut zabardast likha hai ..khaaskar ke pehle do sher behad pasand aaye..likhti rahen di yunhin..khush rahen sada
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
--akelijaan--
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2nd February 2009, 07:27 PM
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Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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Awesomely written Di. Reps +++++++
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2nd February 2009, 09:39 PM
MATKOooooooooooo....tu mere se pitai karwaygi.....yeh bata phele kyu yakeen nahu hua ki maine hi likha hai....kya main bahut bura likhti hoon
aur rahi baat mausam ki, usne mujhe dukhi aatma kaha to main uski baat ka bura nahi maanti, jaanti hai na kyuN.... aree uska opper wala portion khali hai wo kuch bhi kah sakti hai par tere to opper wala portion khali nahi hai na, yeh to extra hi chalta hai....to phir tune kyun uski baat ka zikar kiya.
ab tujhe shukriya b kahe deti hooon, tumne etna bada review jo diya hai....kachar kachar - pachar pachar, pata nahi kya kuch likha hai tumne....to socha mujhe bhi shukriya kah hi dena chahiye
pyar aur duao.n ke saath
teri punjabi kudi
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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3rd February 2009, 12:04 PM
sunita di ........... mai badi der se koshish mai hun .. ki daad du . tareef karun .... kuch kahu . par likh raha hun mita raha hun ............. main kaise kahu ye ni samjh pa raha ................
"hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut," ....
baki sab ki tareef kar bhi dun .. lekin ye
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
iske bare mai kya kahu .........
man karta hai ... dil ke sare paiband kured ke rakh dun ....................
" sarhad majhab ke chakle-belan main
koe nahi bas hum ashiq piste hai "
aur kya kahu
salamat rahe khush rahe
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3rd February 2009, 09:43 PM
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wowww didi herat hai ke is se pehle aapki ye ghazal dikhi nahi mujhe bohattttt acha likha hai sab ashaar pasand aye didi yunhi likhte rahiye
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meri pyari pyari -----
tumhe mere yeh ahsaas pasand aaye, bahut bahut shukriya dear
pyar aur duao.n ke saath
diiiii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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3rd February 2009, 09:47 PM
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A really heart touching ghazal by u "sunita jee", congratulation 4 a beautiful peace of work;
keep it up...............................
It is wonderful experience to read ur poetry after such a long time........
i just wanna say
hats off to ur thought of mind, piece of work and off course creativity.
regards
manu
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Namaskaar Manu jiiii.............aapka review padkar bahut accha laga, mujhe woh din bhi yaad hai jab maine shuru shuru mein likhna shuru kiya tha to aapne mujhe msg kiya tha ki abhi aapko bahut mehnat ki jaroorat hai...aap technically bahut peeche haiN, aaj pata nahi main kis mukaam par hoon, par kuch bhi hai aapke es review se mujhe bahut himmat milli hai, ki phele se behtar hoon ab
shukriya.......tah-e-dil se shukriya
kush rahiye aur meri adna si poetry ko waqt detey rahiyega
god bless u
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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3rd February 2009, 09:48 PM
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Bahut Khoob di!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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shukriya dear..............................!
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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3rd February 2009, 09:51 PM
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Behad khoob sunita ji...aapki is nazm ne ek arse pehle likhi nazm rubaroo kar di...ek ek sher ek kahaNii keh raha hai yahaN
tere jaane ke baad se yeh ehSaaS hua
khud ke liye bhi huye hum paraaYe bahuT
teri yaaDoN ka kabhi hum the caarvaan
ini yaaDoN mein baskar tu sataaYe bahuT
isi tarah se humhe aapne ehsaason se rubaroo karte rahiYeGaa
-aapka apNaa
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mast bhai....sabse phele to muaffi chahti hoon ki bahut dino baad aapko shukriya kah rahi hoon.....!
aapne jo sher jahan share kiye hain hume behad pasand aaye....bhai ahsaas to ahsaas hi haiN, bas lafzo.n ke heir pher se un ahsaaso.n ki surat zara badal jati hai.....hai na!
thanks alot
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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3rd February 2009, 10:00 PM
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Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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aap bahut achcha likhti hai SUNITA JI. yaha aap ko sab 'didi' bulate hai.kya hum bhi aap ko 'didi' keh sakte hai??
***shifa***
Fizaai.n rukti hain raaho.n par,jinse hum guzrai.n
ghatayai.n aaj bhi jhuk kar salaam karti hain
har shab ye suna hai falak se kuch pariya.n
wafa ka chand hamare hi naam karti hain.!!!
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3rd February 2009, 10:05 PM
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aap bahut achcha likhti hai SUNITA JI. yaha aap ko sab 'didi' bulate hai.kya hum bhi aap ko 'didi' keh sakte hai??
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Dear shifa...........sabse phele to yeh baat ki mujhe tumhara naam bahut accha laga "SHIFA" aur rahi baat didi kahne ki to aap shouq se kah sakti hai, bhala es mein poochne ki kya baat hai
meri shayri pasand karne ke liye bahut bahut bahut shukriya dear
pyar ke saath
didi
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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3rd February 2009, 10:10 PM
thank u didi aap ko hamara naam pasand aaya zahe-nasib
***shifa***
Fizaai.n rukti hain raaho.n par,jinse hum guzrai.n
ghatayai.n aaj bhi jhuk kar salaam karti hain
har shab ye suna hai falak se kuch pariya.n
wafa ka chand hamare hi naam karti hain.!!!
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4th February 2009, 08:34 PM
bahut ache sunita ji...kya khub likha hai
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
pad kar bahut achha laga..aur meri ye dua hai ye udassi ke pal kisi ke jindgi mein na aaye..keep on writing
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Originally Posted by sunita virender
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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mera kya hai main to deewana hu
kya bataoo tumko baare mein apne
mein to khud se hi begaana hu
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7th February 2009, 10:33 PM
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hiiiii sunita ji h r you i m new user to shayri .com and i read your all poem i like
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bahut bahut shukriya rahul jii..........................
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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8th February 2009, 10:11 PM
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Originally Posted by sunita virender
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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nice lines....touchy..........!
Mera daman jalega tau jalogai tum bhi yeh samajhte ho,phir aag lagate kyu ho
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3rd April 2009, 08:33 PM
bahut khoob sunita ji
bahut khoob.............
..aryan
Aise to lafja yun bhatkate rah jayenge,
Koi parh lega to alfaj suku payege...
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3rd April 2009, 10:39 PM
Wah sunita ji wah,
kyaa baaat hai,
maine aaj 1st time shayri-e-dard forum padhi, is forum pe mai kuch ehsaas dhoond raha tha,
kuch mil gaye the, par jb aapki ye ghazal padhi to laga k wakai me kyaaaa ehsaaas hain... Sach me shaaandaaar aur dil ko chu lene wale...
Vaise to maine aapki ye ghazal pehle b padhi thi shayad aapke blog pe, par us waqt mera mood is type ki ghazal padhne ka nahi tha...
Par aaj mujhe aapki ye ghazal aaj bahut pasand aayi, dil ko chu gayi....
Thanx 4 sharin, nd thanx 2 aryanvishu, coz agar aaj wo is ghazal ko reply na krte to ye ghazal frnt page pe ni aa paati...
Thanx alot Sunita ji....
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25th April 2009, 03:07 PM
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wah...her ek sher dil ko choo gaya..per jisne emotions ko bhi pighla diya wo ..hain..
mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
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sawati jii...........muaaf kijiyega, bahut dino baad aapse mukhatib hoon....aapne hume pada aur dil se pasand kiya....aapka tah-e-dil se shukriya.
aapki dost
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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25th April 2009, 03:16 PM
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hi diii..waah kya baat haiiii aapke kalaam ki..bahut zabardast likha hai ..khaaskar ke pehle do sher behad pasand aaye..likhti rahen di yunhin..khush rahen sada
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shukriya Dear...............aap kaisi haiN ???
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Awesomely written Di. Reps +++++++
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Shukriya Amit Bhai..............
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Originally Posted by vinaydahiya
bahut ache sunita ji...kya khub likha hai
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
pad kar bahut achha laga..aur meri ye dua hai ye udassi ke pal kisi ke jindgi mein na aaye..keep on writing
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shukriya Vinay jiii, aapne hamari shayri ko pada ur saraha.
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nice lines....touchy..........!
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Shukriya ALI jii..........yoon saath detey rahiyega.
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bahut khoob sunita ji
bahut khoob.............
..aryan
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Shukriya Aryan jiiiiiii...................................!
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Originally Posted by Buland Shayar
Wah sunita ji wah,
kyaa baaat hai,
maine aaj 1st time shayri-e-dard forum padhi, is forum pe mai kuch ehsaas dhoond raha tha,
kuch mil gaye the, par jb aapki ye ghazal padhi to laga k wakai me kyaaaa ehsaaas hain... Sach me shaaandaaar aur dil ko chu lene wale...
Vaise to maine aapki ye ghazal pehle b padhi thi shayad aapke blog pe, par us waqt mera mood is type ki ghazal padhne ka nahi tha...
Par aaj mujhe aapki ye ghazal aaj bahut pasand aayi, dil ko chu gayi....
Thanx 4 sharin, nd thanx 2 aryanvishu, coz agar aaj wo is ghazal ko reply na krte to ye ghazal frnt page pe ni aa paati...
Thanx alot Sunita ji....
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Buland Raj jii...........aapne etne il se hamare ahsaas pade hume behad accha laga, ki hamare likhey ko bhi aap dost log pasand karte haiN.....bahut bahut shukriya jiii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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25th April 2009, 03:46 PM
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Originally Posted by sunita virender
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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Dii so amazing, dil ko jhinjhor ke rakh dene wale aapke in ahsason ki tarif shyad hi
kisi lafzon me ho paye...........
Har ek sher apne aap me intehayi khubsoorat hai.......
Apni chotisi Gazal me aapne jazbaton ka samander undel diya dil ko chu gaya hamare..
Yunhi likhti rahiye..........
Duaon ke sath daad kabool kijiye......
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27th April 2009, 10:28 PM
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Dii so amazing, dil ko jhinjhor ke rakh dene wale aapke in ahsason ki tarif shyad hi
kisi lafzon me ho paye...........
Har ek sher apne aap me intehayi khubsoorat hai.......
Apni chotisi Gazal me aapne jazbaton ka samander undel diya dil ko chu gaya hamare..
Yunhi likhti rahiye..........
Duaon ke sath daad kabool kijiye......
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Dear Sameer...aapne mere ahsaao.n ko dil se saraha aur mere ahsaaso.n ko samja...mujhe accha laga, vaise main kuch khaas accha to nahi likhti hoon, par jo baat dil mein hoti hai usko khul kar kahne ki koshish jaroor karti hoon, aur agar padne wale ko ahsaas samaj aa jayeN to main samjati hoon ki mera likhna saarthak hua.
dil se shukriya .
kush raho
aapki dii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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2nd September 2010, 10:50 PM
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sunita di ........... mai badi der se koshish mai hun .. ki daad du . tareef karun .... kuch kahu . par likh raha hun mita raha hun ............. main kaise kahu ye ni samjh pa raha ................
"hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut," ....
baki sab ki tareef kar bhi dun .. lekin ye
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
iske bare mai kya kahu .........
man karta hai ... dil ke sare paiband kured ke rakh dun ....................
" sarhad majhab ke chakle-belan main
koe nahi bas hum ashiq piste hai "
aur kya kahu
salamat rahe khush rahe
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Vikas.....aapne etne dil se mere ahsaasoN ko pada aur samja, bahut bahut shukriya....aapki baat se maiN sahmat hoon...yeh sarhadeN na hoN to kitna accha ho....
khush raho
duaoN ke saath
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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2nd September 2010, 11:34 PM
bahut hi umda...... lafz nahi hai mere pass........dil ki awaaz lagi mujhe......dil tak pahuch gayi.....
abhi bhi shabd dhoond raha hu.....milte hi nahi......nishabd kar diya aapne......surely one of ur best......
meri dhero shubhkamnaye......
amit7600
Aandhiya Gam Ki Chalegi To Sawar Jaoonga Me
Mai To Dariya Hu Samoondar Me Utar Jaaonga Me
Mujhe Suli Pe Chadane Ki Jaroorat Kya Hai Logo
Mere Haato Se Kalam Cheen Lo Yuhi Mar Jaoonga Me
(When i received You in my heart everything changed for me)
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2nd September 2010, 11:52 PM
Sunita jee,,,
Sabse pehle maiN aapse bohat bohat muafi maangna chahta huN ...ki aapki itni umda likha hua nazraana aaj tak main nahi padh saka ... aapki kavish ke baare main jitna kahunga kam lagega .. bohat hi bhadiya .... seeedha saaf saccha aur accha ... har sher ek se badh kar ek hai ... meri dheroN duayeN aapke naam ...
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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3rd September 2010, 12:23 AM
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Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
mushkil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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sunita ji,
aapki ye ghazal bahut bahut khaas hai...maiN aapko mubaraqbaad dena chaahta hooN...ehsaas aur alfaaz dono hi khoob, is se zyada kya keh sakta hooN....har sher badhiya....ehsaasoN se labrez...jitni bhi daad di jaye kam hai...
iswar aapko sada khush rakhe...
aapka dost...
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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1st April 2017, 10:46 AM
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bahut hi umda...... lafz nahi hai mere pass........dil ki awaaz lagi mujhe......dil tak pahuch gayi.....
abhi bhi shabd dhoond raha hu.....milte hi nahi......nishabd kar diya aapne......surely one of ur best......
meri dhero shubhkamnaye......
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Originally Posted by KunaaL
Sunita jee,,,
Sabse pehle maiN aapse bohat bohat muafi maangna chahta huN ...ki aapki itni umda likha hua nazraana aaj tak main nahi padh saka ... aapki kavish ke baare main jitna kahunga kam lagega .. bohat hi bhadiya .... seeedha saaf saccha aur accha ... har sher ek se badh kar ek hai ... meri dheroN duayeN aapke naam ...
Kunaal
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sunita ji,
aapki ye ghazal bahut bahut khaas hai...maiN aapko mubaraqbaad dena chaahta hooN...ehsaas aur alfaaz dono hi khoob, is se zyada kya keh sakta hooN....har sher badhiya....ehsaasoN se labrez...jitni bhi daad di jaye kam hai...
iswar aapko sada khush rakhe...
aapka dost...
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Amit ji, Kunaal ji aur Vikram ji....muaafi chahti hu ki bahut waqt baad aaj es gazal ko dekha to paaya ki aap sabka shukriya tak aada nahi kar paaye maiN, aap sabhi ka dil se shukriya...Kunaal ji aap jaisi hasti es andaaz meiN housla badaye to bahut accha lagta hai.
aaj pad kar yakeen nahi ho rha ki kabhi maiN bhi likha karti thi
aap sab dosto ke saath aur pyar ka bahut bahut shukriya
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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Bahot khoob ghazal Di...Har ek ashaar me dard piroya his hai...
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
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Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
mushkil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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waahh sunita dee........ aaj aapki is puraani ghazal pe nazar gayee to dil khush ho gayaa... aapse guzaarish ahai ke aage bhi hame padhne ke muqe deti rahen...
duaaon ki guzaarish
Shaad.......
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Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
mushkil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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Ek arse baad yahan aana hua aur aapke yeh Ehsaas dil choo gaye!! Yaad hoti hi Aisi hai jab aati hai bada sataati hai.
Loved every word Di! Love u! Missed u a lot! Hope u r doing well.
~Priya
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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Bahot khoob ghazal Di...Har ek ashaar me dard piroya his hai...
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Madhu...pasand karne ke liye shukriya
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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