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23rd August 2008, 11:00 AM
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
mushkil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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23rd August 2008, 11:07 AM
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Originally Posted by sunita virender
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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wah...sunita di....aag laga di mehfil me....daad kubool kijiyega
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23rd August 2008, 11:08 AM
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Originally Posted by sunita virender
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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hello didi
aaj ek bahut hi shandar gazal likhi hai aapne
sach poochiye to jitni gazal maine padii hai uname se ye mujhe behad pasand aayii... poori ki poori gazal behad pasand aayii
gazal ke har ek sher per daad.....
shukriyaa
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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23rd August 2008, 11:13 AM
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Pranaam!!
bazm meiN aapki taazaah Ghazal naZ'r aaii .. aapne apne dil ke ehsaasoN ke saath pooraa iNsaaf kiyaa haii.. lafzoN kaa bhee ba-Khuubee istemaal kyaa haii... Ghazal kaa mat'laa aur maq'taa mujhe sab se zeyaadaah pasaNd aayaa.. dil par gehraa asar kar gaii aapki yeh Ghazal... duaa hay Khudaa aapki KhaahiSh bahot jald poorii kareN.. YuuNhi bazm ki raunaq afzA'ii karte raheN aage bhee.. daad.. !
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka chhoTu
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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23rd August 2008, 05:36 PM
Aadaab sunita ji Bahut kamaal likha hai aapne dil khush ho gaya kafi waqt baad koi itna accha kalaam padne ko mila unhi likhti rahiye..........Khuda Hafiz
Quote:
Originally Posted by sunita virender
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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"Do Pal Ruka Khushio.n ka Karwan"
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko,
wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain.
Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif''
Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.
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23rd August 2008, 06:49 PM
wah meri dukhi atma..... kya ghazal likhi hain...............badhiya hain
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
nice nice.....
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
sahin hain di........
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
hai di ..kya baat hain....
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
bahut khub di..............
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
bahut pasand aaya di apka yeh kalam.............daad....aise hi likhte rahe...........
apki...
mausam
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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24th August 2008, 08:11 AM
Hello Sunita ji
kaise ho?
aapne ne Bahut hi khooooooooob and bahut hi pyara likha hai
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24th August 2008, 12:40 PM
Ek dam First Class , aisay hi sunatey rahe to maza aajaayega
thanx
masood ahmed
UAE
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25th August 2008, 11:19 AM
sunita jee !
bahut khoob kaha aapne !
har ashaar apne aap meiN ek daastaN chupaye hue hai !
ghazal vakeyi daad ki haQdaar hai !
tareef Qabool ki jaye !
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26th August 2008, 03:06 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by sunita virender
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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Bahat khoob Didi.......bahot zyada pasand aayi yeh nagme aapke.....
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut
yeh to aapne dil ki baat humare yahan likh diye hain.......
Didi ur too good..........
Jab apna haal kisi se chhupana padta hai
Hon zakhm dil mein magar muskurana padta hai..nm
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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27th August 2008, 11:14 AM
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Originally Posted by sunita virender
Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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Namaskar Sunita G.
In shabdon ke peechhe ki udaasi ko main bahut achhi tarah se samajh sakta hun.
Khuda se guzaarish rahegi ke yeh judaai ke baadal jald hi hat jayein aur milan ka aasman aapke sahmne ho.
Mashroof rehne ki wajah se reply karne mein deri ke liye muaafi chahta hun..
Aapke ehsaas bahut achhe lage.
Khush Rahiye
Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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wah...sunita di....aag laga di mehfil me....daad kubool kijiyega
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raj bhai....bahut badkau compliment hai
aapne pada aur pasand kiya....shukriya
aapki diii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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31st August 2008, 12:41 PM
sunita ji namaskaar....bhut dino baad aiya mehfil mein magar bhut khushi huyii aapki gazal se ru b ru ho kar, kyaa andaaz hai har khyaal pukhta or purkashish hai....likhi rahiye....Raj..
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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23rd September 2008, 10:32 AM
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hello didi
aaj ek bahut hi shandar gazal likhi hai aapne
sach poochiye to jitni gazal maine padii hai uname se ye mujhe behad pasand aayii... poori ki poori gazal behad pasand aayii
gazal ke har ek sher per daad.....
shukriyaa
dilip
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namaskaar dilip bhai....har baar ki tarah es baar bhi aapne meri shayri mere ahsaaso.n ko pada....bahut accha laga....par es baar aapka review bahut accha laga....kyuNki es baar 3-4 nahi sabhi sher acche lage haiN...shukriya bhai...yoon hi aap sab ka saath rahega to meri kalam bhi chalti hi rahegi
kush rahiye
aapki didi
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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23rd September 2008, 10:46 AM
sunita jee:
aap ne to bohat khuub likha hai.. kyaa baat hai kamaal hai! aap to bohat dil-farb likhti hai.n.. ehsaas ko aap ne achchhi taah se lafzo.n me.n piroya hai, is liye mere jaanib se daad haazir hai! yuu.n hi likhati rahe.n.. mujhe yeh sher behad pasand aaye...
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
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23rd September 2008, 02:22 PM
sunita ji
apke sayari bahuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuut hi achi lagi ziska m sabado m bayan hi nahi kar sakta
with reg.
ravi.
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23rd September 2008, 03:14 PM
toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut
Waaahhhh... bahut hi umda aaghaaz hai.... Doosra sher dil ko chhoo gaya...
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
Bahut khooob... behad khoobsurat bayaani...
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
Behad khoobsurat...
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut
Waahh...Kya baat kahi hai...
Hi Didi,
Kaisi hain aap? ummeed hain acche se hongi...
Aapki yeh ghzal dil ko bahut kareeb se chhoo ke gayi hai... Sach maaniye har sher bhut hi khoobsurat laga... Ravaani bhi khoobsurat hai, expressions bhi kamaal ke hain... dil khush ho gaya yeh ghazal padhkar...
Meri dil se dheron daad kubool kijiyega... bass yun hi likhti rahiye...
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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23rd September 2008, 03:31 PM
DEAR
PULKIT
WAHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA KYA LIKHA H DIL KO BAHUT ACHA LAGA...................
THANKSSSSSSSSSSSS A LOTSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
RAVI.
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23rd September 2008, 06:13 PM
sunita ji apne ye bahut bahut bahut hi achcha likha hai kisi aik sher ko achcha nahi kah sakta sabhi aik se badkar aik hai par ye aik sher to gajab hi hai ki
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
bahut hi umda,pls share karte rahe,khush rahe,sukriya
ibadat bhi khuda hai,bagavat bhi khuda hai
khuda baagi kahi hai,kahi baagi khuda hai.
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23rd September 2008, 06:17 PM
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Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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BAHUT VADIYA KYA KHOOB ARJ KIYA HAI
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25th September 2008, 05:14 AM
bahut khoobsurat ehsaas hain di....
zainy
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Sister:
Pranaam!!
bazm meiN aapki taazaah Ghazal naZ'r aaii .. aapne apne dil ke ehsaasoN ke saath pooraa iNsaaf kiyaa haii.. lafzoN kaa bhee ba-Khuubee istemaal kyaa haii... Ghazal kaa mat'laa aur maq'taa mujhe sab se zeyaadaah pasaNd aayaa.. dil par gehraa asar kar gaii aapki yeh Ghazal... duaa hay Khudaa aapki KhaahiSh bahot jald poorii kareN.. YuuNhi bazm ki raunaq afzA'ii karte raheN aage bhee.. daad.. !
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka chhoTu
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28th September 2008, 11:16 PM
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Aadaab sunita ji Bahut kamaal likha hai aapne dil khush ho gaya kafi waqt baad koi itna accha kalaam padne ko mila unhi likhti rahiye..........Khuda Hafiz
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shukriya khashif jee....aapko hamari shayri acchi lagi, aapke lafzo.n se hume tasali hue ki humne sahi likha hai....yoon hi padtey rahiyega.
god bless u
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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29th September 2008, 11:01 AM
sunita ji,
bahut achha likha hai. likhte rahe. apke naye post ka intjarr.......
raj
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29th September 2008, 10:48 PM
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wah meri dukhi atma..... kya ghazal likhi hain...............badhiya hain
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm....
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
nice nice.....
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
sahin hain di........
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
hai di ..kya baat hain....
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
bahut khub di..............
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
bahut pasand aaya di apka yeh kalam.............daad....aise hi likhte rahe...........
apki...
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mujhe tera review bhi bahut pasand aaya......sarahne ke liye dil se shukriya....yoon hi meri adna si koshishy padte rahna.
tumhari diii
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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4th October 2008, 07:11 AM
Adaab !!!
kaafi waqt ke bad lauta hoN SDC per . jab yahaN se gya to aisa laga tha jese ab kabhi likh hi nahi paaoN ga lakin app jese shaa'iroN ko peRhene ke baad jese khoon meN wohi josh doRne lagta hai , appki ghazal behad behad behad achi lagi umeed hai app se bahut kuch aur bhi seekhne ko mile ga ,
duaoN meN yaad rakhiye ga
Mujeeb
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4th October 2008, 09:11 AM
Hi Di
Bahut khoob ... no words to decribe how well u have written..
dua hai aapki ek khushi puri ho
aur ese likhte raho
aapki
mandeep
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5th October 2008, 10:22 PM
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Hello Sunita ji
kaise ho?
aapne ne Bahut hi khooooooooob and bahut hi pyara likha hai
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Heer ji bahut bahut shukriya aapne hume pada aur saraha....aap dard thread par bahut kun aati, phir bhi aapne yahaN aakar mujhe pada...bahut accha laga.
aati raha kijiye
rab raakha
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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5th October 2008, 10:26 PM
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Ek dam First Class , aisay hi sunatey rahe to maza aajaayega
thanx
masood ahmed
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Masood ji namaskaar.....aap yoon hi hume padtey rahoge to humari kalam bhi chalti rahegi.
god bless u
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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5th October 2008, 10:28 PM
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sunita jee !
bahut khoob kaha aapne !
har ashaar apne aap meiN ek daastaN chupaye hue hai !
ghazal vakeyi daad ki haQdaar hai !
tareef Qabool ki jaye !
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Shitiz ji aapki daad humey dil se kabool hai....yeh shayri bas aap jaise dosto.n ki vajaha se yahaN tak aa pahuNchi hai, SDC se sab kuch seekha hai aur usi ke naam kar rahe haiN.
kush rahiye
god bless u
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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5th October 2008, 10:29 PM
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...............kuch samaj nahi aaya, kaya etna bura likha hai .....
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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5th October 2008, 10:31 PM
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Bahat khoob Didi.......bahot zyada pasand aayi yeh nagme aapke.....
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut
yeh to aapne dil ki baat humare yahan likh diye hain.......
Didi ur too good..........
Jab apna haal kisi se chhupana padta hai
Hon zakhm dil mein magar muskurana padta hai..nm
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Thanks diya............tumne mujhe pada aur kuch ek sher pasand bhi kiye...yoon hi saath banaye rakhna.
tumhari didi
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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5th October 2008, 10:38 PM
Di,
Sat sree akaal,
Wah ji wah..as mausam di said...dukhi aatma..kya likh diya...i m damn sure...jab gazal likhi tab aapki jiju se baat hui hogi..or fir aap phone rakhne ke baad roi...or ye gazal likhi...ale meli pyaali chi panjaabi kudi...aise thhode udaas hote hain.......chalo smile....like this
Pata hai..maine na abhi kidnap movie dekhi..khatam hone ke baad socha sdc pe silent hoke jaau...kisiko pata nahi chalega..lekin aapki gazal padhi to khud ko rok nahi saki online aane se...damn...mujhe login karna hi padaa aapko replay dene ke liye...nevermind...
Di its supab...mind blowing gazal...really yaar aapne likha pahale to yakeen hi nahi hua...lekin fir baad me yakeen aa hi gaya...sacch kahu to kuch kuch apni jaisi lagi ye gazal...sacch me insaan kabhi kabhi jisse bahot pyaar karta hai usi se hi door ho jaata hai...well i wish ke aapko jaldi se vo mile jo aapko chaahiye...u know something...main aajkal god ko manne lagi hu..i mean maanti to thhi..god se fight thha..vo finish kar diya..aapke liye pray jo kani thhi isi liye.....shuuuuu!!! kisiko batana nahi...its secrat ok......
abhi bye...
or haa..jaate jaate thhodi si daad lelijiye meri or se...
Grazie
Apki
Matko
===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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6th October 2008, 12:10 AM
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Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
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wowww didi herat hai ke is se pehle aapki ye ghazal dikhi nahi mujhe bohattttt acha likha hai sab ashaar pasand aye didi yunhi likhte rahiye
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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6th October 2008, 12:51 AM
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Namaskaar dosto
phir se bazm mein hazir hoon apne ahsaas lekar....kuch udhasi ke palo.n mein kagaz par likhe ahsaas aap sabke saath share kar rahi hoon.
"Yaad Aaye Bahut"
“toot kar jo hum bikhrey to gabraye bahut,
teri bahho.n ke sahaarey yaad aaye bahut,
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
mazhabi junoon mein, sarhad bana daalii,
Phir apne faisley pe haiN pachtaye bahut,
kis kis ko batauN apnii udhaasi ka sabab,
ki “Sunita” ko ek pardesi yaad aaye bahut.
(22.08.2008)
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A really heart touching ghazal by u "sunita jee", congratulation 4 a beautiful peace of work;
keep it up...............................
It is wonderful experience to read ur poetry after such a long time........
i just wanna say
hats off to ur thought of mind, piece of work and off course creativity.
regards
manu
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6th October 2008, 05:15 PM
Bahut Khoob di!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
"Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum..
Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Sirf Tanu Ki ChaahaT...... ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~
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7th October 2008, 10:26 AM
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Namaskar Sunita G.
In shabdon ke peechhe ki udaasi ko main bahut achhi tarah se samajh sakta hun.
Khuda se guzaarish rahegi ke yeh judaai ke baadal jald hi hat jayein aur milan ka aasman aapke sahmne ho.
Mashroof rehne ki wajah se reply karne mein deri ke liye muaafi chahta hun..
Aapke ehsaas bahut achhe lage.
Khush Rahiye
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namaskaar jasdeep jee.....aapne apni masrofiyat se kuch pal meri shayri padne ke liye nikaaley, bahut bahut shukriya....yoon hi aate rahiyega.
kush rahiye
god bless u
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7th October 2008, 10:30 AM
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sunita ji namaskaar....bhut dino baad aiya mehfil mein magar bhut khushi huyii aapki gazal se ru b ru ho kar, kyaa andaaz hai har khyaal pukhta or purkashish hai....likhi rahiye....Raj..
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namaskaar rajveer jee.....bahut accha laga aapko mahfil mein dekh kar...jane aap kahaN busy rahte haiN aaj-kal, SDC ke liye ab waqt hi nahi hai aapke paas, par kabhi kabhi aa jaya kijiye, SDC ko aap jaise shayro.n ki bahut jaroorat hai.....aapne meri poetry padne ke liye waqt nikala....hume behad kushi hai es baat ki....pls mahfil mein aate raha kijiye.
god bless u
aapki dost
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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17th October 2008, 08:30 PM
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sunita jee:
aap ne to bohat khuub likha hai.. kyaa baat hai kamaal hai! aap to bohat dil-farb likhti hai.n.. ehsaas ko aap ne achchhi taah se lafzo.n me.n piroya hai, is liye mere jaanib se daad haazir hai! yuu.n hi likhati rahe.n.. mujhe yeh sher behad pasand aaye...
hatheli par rakh ashq, jo tumne choom liya,
hua afsos! Ab tak yeh moti ganvaye bahut,
muskil mein kyu koi haath na thaam saka,
kahne ko to dost humne bhi banaye bahut,
jane kaya tha uski udhaas si aanko.n mein,
woh jab bhi yaad aaye hain, rulaaye bahut,
umr-e-jawani apni kyuN tanha hi beet gaye,
yeh khalish abhi tak hai dil dukhaye bahut,
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hmmmmmm...........mayank ji aap aur meri gazal par kaya baat hai....ek baar to yakeen hi nahi hua ki yeh aap hi ka review hai.....kyuNki aapko arse baad apni gazal par dekha hai....aapne mujhe pada mere ahsaas pasand kiye.....bahut accha laga mujhe, esi tarah aage bhi aapka saath chahiye....dil se shukriya.
god bless u
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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