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could not think of a title.... - 16th January 2005, 08:21 PM

Rooth kar saahil se
lehron ka kaarwaan kho gaya

Rooth kar manzil se
jaise raasta kahin kho gaya

Kho gaye hain
kadmon ke nishaan reth par se

Kho gaye hain
kshitij ke armaan aasmaan par se

Paseej ke
akshar kaagaz par se kho gaye

Pighal ke
aansoo palkon par se kho gaye

Nahi khoti hai jo
wo marne ki aarzoo hai

Nahi mithti hai jo
wo haath par se jeeven rekha hai

Bojhal nahi hoti hai jo
wo umeed ki ek muskaan hai

Dhundlati nahi hai jo
wo vartmaan ki pehchaan hai........


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17th January 2005, 12:26 AM

Hi Shivani,

Too Good title hum de dete hain...

Bahut khoob...

Its amazing....I really loved the thought...It inspired me to think and write what i wrote below...Not as good as urs but a few lines thought i will share it with u

Ret par se kadmon ke nishan mit jaayenge
Wartaman bhi bhoot ban kar reh jaayega
maut ka bhi samna ho hi jaayega
na mitega to bus woh hai astitv mera

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Thumbs up hi - 17th January 2005, 09:59 PM

hi rohin!

u know it was very very wrong of u to say that the lines u wrote r not as good as mine rather they r much much better than wat i wrote!!!!!!!!!!.........thanx a lot for appreciating and sharing with me ur wonderful little composition.thanx a lot once again........bye 4 now! take care!!!!!!!!!


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17th January 2005, 10:28 PM

Hi Shivani,

Never compare compositions...

Mine was inspired from you....
So how can mine b better than yours...

Yours was fantabulous

Please never say it again

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Thumbs up hi - 18th January 2005, 09:19 PM

hi rohin!!!!!!!!

sorrrrrrrrryyyyyy!!!! for doing that i know that all compositions ru unique and special in their own way...but u know what u were the one who wrote that urs was not as good as mine and so i replied to that...but u know i really really like ur compositions especially the ones in the dard forum........


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18th January 2005, 10:38 PM

Aye Shivani tu lagti hai nani...
Juice ki dookan pe maang ti hai paani....

Thoda sa mazak kiya hai . Ummed karta hoon bura nahi manogi...

Well thanks aapko meri poetry pasand aayi ... Bhai dard har ek ke dil mein hota hai...isliye dard ke kavita sab ko achi lagti hai....
Kash hum kuch aisa likh pate jisse sab ke aankhon mein Aansoon nahi khushi dekh pate....

I hope in future you will never underestimate your writing power and continue to write.. You write very welll. Thoda sa hi sahi magar hummein apna talent de do na please....

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hi! shivani - 19th January 2005, 12:50 PM

hi! shivani!

U wrote wonderful..n rohin has beautifuuly ended up putting a period 2 it!...Dont mind u ppl..its just a feeling......U both write awsome!...i luved it shivani..do keep wriiting!

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19th January 2005, 03:36 PM

gumshuda kii talaash hai


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it becomes more and more universal.
   
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Thumbs up hi - 20th January 2005, 10:30 PM

hi rohin!!!

u know ab to meri aadat ho gayi wo gaana sun ne ki aur sach maniye ab to achcha bhi lagta hai jab koi ye gaana mujhe dedicate karta hai haalaanki pehle ajeeb lagta tha par ab to achcha lagta hai......and i thank you a lot once again from the bottom of my heart for appreciating me this much....thanx!! ...bye 4 now!!!!take care!!!!!


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Thumbs up hi - 20th January 2005, 10:33 PM

hello komalji!

thanx a lot for praising my composition....u know this kind of appreciation really encourages and cheers a writer..and ur praise has done that to me.thanx a lot!!!!! bye 4 now!!!!!!take care!!!!!!!!!!!


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20th January 2005, 10:35 PM

hello paplupopatji

thanx for replying although i really didnt understand as to wat u meant .........


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20th January 2005, 10:37 PM

Hi shivani a thread for u to cheer up see if u like it

http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthr...threadid=30297

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