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27th October 2006, 12:52 PM
तीसरा शेएर
ख़ुशिया तेरे साथ ही रूठ कर चली गई है दूर मुझसे,
गमों ने आपनी महफ़िल में कर लिया है शामिल मुझे ......
-सुनीता वीरेंदेर
चौथा शेएर
तेरी सांसो को देता हूँ मैं अपनी सांसो की ज़िंदगी,
बता कहाँ जाऊंगा गर तू भी समझेगी क़ातिल मुझे ......
'वीर'
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Ujala To Tere Ane Se Tha Mehaffil Me Meri,
Biiina Tere Siirff Tariikii Hai Hansil Mujhe....
-pooja
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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Last edited by sunita thakur; 27th October 2006 at 12:54 PM..
Reason: pooja ka share skip ho gaya tha so maine usko gazal mai.n shamil kar diya hai.
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2nd November 2006, 09:53 AM
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तीसरा शेएर
ख़ुशिया तेरे साथ ही रूठ कर चली गई है दूर मुझसे,
गमों ने आपनी महफ़िल में कर लिया है शामिल मुझे ......
-सुनीता वीरेंदेर
चौथा शेएर
तेरी सांसो को देता हूँ मैं अपनी सांसो की ज़िंदगी,
बता कहाँ जाऊंगा गर तू भी समझेगी क़ातिल मुझे ......
'वीर'
5th share
Ujala To Tere Ane Se Tha Mehaffil Me Meri,
Biiina Tere Siirff Tariikii Hai Hansil Mujhe....
-pooja
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6th share
zamaney ki rasmo se uth kar mohabat ki tumse,
be-waffa samjay ab tu to bata kaya hua hansil mujhe...
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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7th November 2006, 04:29 PM
6th share
zamaney ki rasmo se uth kar mohabat ki tumse,
be-waffa samjay ab tu to bata kaya hua hansil mujhe...
-sunita virender
7th share
pathron ke sehar me pathar khake rehta hoon
moom sa hai mera wajood na samajh sangdil mujhe.....
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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zamaney ki rasmo se uth kar mohabat ki tumse,
be-waffa samjay ab tu to bata kaya hua hansil mujhe...
-sunita virender
7th share
pathron ke sehar me pathar khake rehta hoon
moom sa hai mera wajood na samajh sangdil mujhe.....
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tujhe to eh sanam aapne pyar par hi bharosa na tha,
ek baar sachey dil kah kar dekta aapni manzil mujhe....
-sunita virender
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8th November 2006, 01:31 PM
dosto
namaskar,
maine koshish ki hai ek nayii gazal ki shuraaat karne ki
accha lage to ise aage badaiyega
1st sher
Kaise khuda ko ye manzoor ho gaya
Mera pyar meri nazro.n se door ho gaya
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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dosto
namaskar,
maine koshish ki hai ek nayii gazal ki shuraaat karne ki
accha lage to ise aage badaiyega
1st sher
Kaise khuda ko ye manzoor ho gaya
Mera pyar meri nazro.n se door ho gaya
dilip
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pyar ke badley mai.n ki tumne be-waffeai,
aisa karne ko kyu tu majboor ho gaya...
-sunita virender
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13th November 2006, 01:15 PM
2nd sher
pyar ke badley mai.n ki tumne be-waffeai,
aisa karne ko kyu tu majboor ho gaya...
-sunita virender
3rd share
barson jisko seene main chhupaye rakha,
tere chhune se wahi zakham nasoor ho gya......
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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2nd sher
pyar ke badley mai.n ki tumne be-waffeai,
aisa karne ko kyu tu majboor ho gaya...
-sunita virender
3rd share
barson jisko seene main chhupaye rakha,
tere chhune se wahi zakham nasoor ho gya......
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4th sher
teri chahat ki enteha ab dekhi hai maine,
tere pyar par ab mujhe garoor ho gaya....
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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14th November 2006, 10:48 PM
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4th sher
teri chahat ki enteha ab dekhi hai maine,
tere pyar par ab mujhe garoor ho gaya....
-sunita virender
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bhale hiii naa manzuur kar mahobbat meri,
par mere naam se tu badnam jarur ho gaya....
grazie
aapki dost
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5th sher
bhale hiii naa manzuur kar mahobbat meri,
par mere naam se tu badnam jarur ho gaya....
grazie
aapki dost
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bin piye hi kadam bahakne lagey hai ab,
mujhe to tere pyar ka saroor ho gaya.....
-sunita virender
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21st November 2006, 11:16 AM
6th sher
bin piye hi kadam bahakne lagey ab
is qadar tere pyar ka saroor ho gaya.....
-sunita virender
7th share
jab se tu aiya zindagi me khusi banke
har ranj-o-ghan mujhse door ho gaya....
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bin piye hi kadam bahakne lagey ab
is qadar tere pyar ka saroor ho gaya.....
-sunita virender
7th share
jab se tu aiya zindagi me khusi banke
har ranj-o-ghan mujhse door ho gaya....
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diya jabse sahara mujhe tanhayeo mai.n,
tab se tu meri aankho ka noor ho gaya.....
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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24th November 2006, 11:14 PM
hello frnds,
bahut din baad aaye hun is kuuche mai.socha ki is baar gazal ko shuru karne ki himmat karlun.umeed hai ise aage aap sab badhhayenge.najaane sahi bhi hai ya nahi.lijiye pehla sher haazir hai,
zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai,
pal bhar ki khushi phir dheron gham sang laati hai.
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
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1st December 2006, 09:47 AM
1st sher
zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai,
pal bhar ki khushi phir dheron gham sang laati hai....
-akelejaan "sara"
2nd sher
janey kyu har kushi gum mai.n doob jatti hai.n,
yeh mohabat bhi humey kaya kaya rang dikhati hai...
-sunita virender
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1st December 2006, 11:08 AM
1st sher
zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai,
pal bhar ki khushi phir dheron gham sang laati hai....
-akelejaan "sara"
2nd sher
janey kyu har kushi gum mai.n doob jatti hai.n,
yeh mohabat bhi humey kaya kaya rang dikhati hai...
-sunita virender
sara ji or sunita ji ko raj ka salaam...aap dono ne bhut hee umda khyaal pesh kiye hain.....magar thori c gustakhi karne ja raha hoon agar bura laage to muaafi ka talabgaar hoon.....
1st sher
zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai
zara c khushi or dheron gham de jaati hai....
-akelejaan "sara"
2nd sher
kyu har kushi gum mai.n doob jatti hai?
mohabat bhi kaya kaya rang dikhati hai...
-sunita virender
3rd share
khaab me bhe tujhe chhuna mumkin nahi
aata hoon jab kareeb aankh khul jaati hai....
'veer'
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1st sher
zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai,
pal bhar ki khushi phir dheron gham sang laati hai....
-akelejaan "sara"
2nd sher
janey kyu har kushi gum mai.n doob jatti hai.n,
yeh mohabat bhi humey kaya kaya rang dikhati hai...
-sunita virender
sara ji or sunita ji ko raj ka salaam...aap dono ne bhut hee umda khyaal pesh kiye hain.....magar thori c gustakhi karne ja raha hoon agar bura laage to muaafi ka talabgaar hoon.....
1st sher
zindagi bhi kya kya rang dikhaati hai
zara c khushi or dheron gham de jaati hai....
-akelejaan "sara"
2nd sher
kyu har kushi gum mai.n doob jatti hai?
mohabat bhi kaya kaya rang dikhati hai...
-sunita virender
3rd share
khaab me bhe tujhe chhuna mumkin nahi
aata hoon jab kareeb aankh khul jaati hai....
'veer'
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4th sher
to mera koi nahi, par koi rishta to hai,
kyu tere dard se meri aankh bhar aati hai...
-sunita virender
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
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2nd December 2006, 11:05 AM
3rd share
khaab me bhe tujhe chhuna mumkin nahi
aata hoon jab kareeb aankh khul jaati hai....
'veer'
4th sher
to mera koi nahi, par koi rishta to hai,
kyu tere dard se meri aankh bhar aati hai...
-sunita virender
5th share
ashko ke sehar me kiya hai jab se basera
hassi to ab kabhi kabhi khaab me he aati hai....
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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khaab me bhe tujhe chhuna mumkin nahi
aata hoon jab kareeb aankh khul jaati hai....
'veer'
4th sher
to mera koi nahi, par koi rishta to hai,
kyu tere dard se meri aankh bhar aati hai...
-sunita virender
5th share
ashko ke sehar me kiya hai jab se basera
hassi to ab kabhi kabhi khaab me he aati hai....
'veer'
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6th sher
raat bhar jaag jaag kar dekhti hoon raah tera,
kyu meri need raato ko tere paas chali jati hai....
-sunita virender
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12th December 2006, 10:18 AM
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6th sher
raat bhar jaag jaag kar dekhti hoon raah tera,
kyu meri need raato ko tere paas chali jati hai....
-sunita virender
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7th sher
chahta hoon bhool jau teri har raah-gujar,
phir kyu jaha b jata hoon nazar teri gali aati hai...
-veer
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7th sher
chahta hoon bhool jau teri har raah-gujar,
phir kyu jaha b jata hoon nazar teri gali aati hai...
-veer
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8th sher
mumkin nahi is janam main tera sath fir bhi,
jindgi kyo.n ajeeb se sapne mujhe dikhati hai........
dilip
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22nd December 2006, 10:54 AM
dosto ek naye gazal ka aagaz kar raha hoon, umeed hai aap sab ka sahyog jaroor mileyga.........!
1st sher
kitne chehre hai.n es dunia mai.n humko ek hi chehra nazar aata hai,
dunia ko ab hum kaya dekhe teri yaddoN mai.n sara waqt gujar jata hai....
-veer
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dosto ek naye gazal ka aagaz kar raha hoon, umeed hai aap sab ka sahyog jaroor mileyga.........!
1st sher
kitne chehre hai.n es dunia mai.n humko ek hi chehra nazar aata hai,
dunia ko ab hum kaya dekhe teri yaddoN mai.n sara waqt gujar jata hai....
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2nd sher
jab se dekha hai tujko, tab se maine tod diye ghar ke sab aainey
tere barey mai.n soch kar mera roop kuad hi sanwar jata hai......
-sunita virender singh
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tumhari chahat meiN aey jaan, meri har subha-shaam guzarti hai
tum jo itni kariib aati ho mere ,na jane kyuN ye waqt thehar jaata hai...
--dhaval--
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rajveer ji agar aap bura na maney to pls yeh gazal yahi chorr kar koi chotti se sher wali gazal shuru kijiye, kyuki yeh poori hi nahi ho paa rahi, etna lambha sher likhna aapne bas mai.n nahi hai ji
so pls....new sher
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23rd January 2007, 08:29 PM
sunita ji ko raj ka salaam......aapki guzarish pe lijiye ek chhoti behar ki gazal shuru kar raha hoon umeed hai aapka saath milega.....
1st share
saaki maikadde mei.N aksar aata raha hoon
asko.N se dil ki aag main bhujata raha hoon......
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meri har khwahisheN sirf tujhse hi judi hai
iNtezar me apni aankhoN ko rulata raha huN
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haaye! kaisi aalam-e-dewaanagii hai, mere rab!
hai voh Guzra waqt lekin maiN bulaata rahaa huuN
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29th January 2007, 04:16 PM
1st share
saaki maikadde mei.N aksar aata raha hoon
asko.N se dil ki aag main bhujata raha hoon......
'veer'
2nd sher
meri har khwahisheN sirf tujhse hi judi hai
iNtezar me apni aankhoN ko rulata raha huN
--dhaval--
3rd Sher
haaye! kaisi aalam-e-dewaanagii hai, mere rab!
hai voh Guzra waqt lekin maiN bulaata rahaa huuN
-Mayank
jo khade hain yahaaN hume "ghayal" banane ko,
main kambakth unhi ko dard dikhaata raha huN.
-Ghayal
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29th January 2007, 06:24 PM
myank ji or ghyal ji aapki aamad se is segment ki taqdeer khul gayii umeed karta hoon yun hii aapka saath bana rahega......
1st share
saaki maikadde mei.N aksar aata raha hoon
asko.N se dil ki aag main bhujata raha hoon......
'veer'
2nd sher
meri har khwahisheN sirf tujhse hi judi hai
iNtezar me apni aankhoN ko rulata raha huN
--dhaval--
3rd Sher
haaye! kaisi aalam-e-dewaanagii hai, mere rab!
hai voh Guzra waqt lekin maiN bulaata rahaa huuN
-Mayank
jo khade hain yahaaN hume "ghayal" banane ko,
main kambakth unhi ko dard dikhaata raha huN.
-Ghayal
5th share
shayad neendo.N se nahi raha ab koi rishta uska
khaab banke jiski aankho.N mei.N aata raha hoon.....
'veer'
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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9th April 2007, 07:30 PM
ek naye Sher se Ghazal ka aaghaaz karta huuN... taa'ke aap sab ke sahyog se ek achchhiii sii co-operative Ghazal ban sake..
Raadif: meiN
Qaafiye: wafaaoN, duaaoN, balaaoN, dhoop chaaoN, adaaoN, hawaaoN, etc etc..
1st Sher :
Hoti Shiddat teri wafaaoN meiN
MaaNg lete tujhe duaaoN meiN
-Mayank
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9th April 2007, 09:31 PM
2nd sher
Jisne kasam meri khushiyo ki li
wahi chhod gayaa balaon meiN
grazie
aapki dost
pooja
===========Deepika=========== Pyaar Hai Yaa sazaa ayi mere Dil bataa Toot'ta Kyu.N naHi.N Dard Kaa Silsilaa
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10th April 2007, 12:39 AM
3rd sher
jisne manjil dikhai mohabbat ki
wahi chod gaya rahon mein
shukriya
manish
Life is filled with goodbyes, a million goodbyes, and it hurts every time....and every time my heart dies a little...
Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time....
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10th April 2007, 10:18 AM
4th sher
tujhe kaise kahu main kafir,
tu to shamil hai mere kudao mein
-sunita
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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10th April 2007, 10:40 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by sunita virender
4th sher
tujhe kaise kahu main kafir,
tu to shamil hai mere kudao mein
-sunita
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5th sher
jumbish-e-nazar se humko lootaa
kyaa baat hai teri adaaon mein
nayi ruton mein wo kuchh aur qareeb aaye
gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho
mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai
rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho
--Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan
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10th April 2007, 11:11 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by Parastaar
5th sher
jumbish-e-nazar se humko lootaa
kyaa baat hai teri adaaon mein
-Paras
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6th sher
na gilla karti kabhi kudha se,
gar tu kho jata meri waffon mein....
-sunita
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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10th April 2007, 05:34 PM
1)Hoti Shiddat teri wafaaoN meiN
MaaNg lete tujhe duaaoN meiN
-Mayank
2)Jisne kasam meri khushiyo ki li
wahi chhod gayaa balaon meiN
-puuja
3)jisne manjil dikhai mohabbat ki
wahi chod gaya rahon mein
-manish
4)tujhe kaise kahu main kafir,
tu to shamil hai mere kudao mein
-sunita Virender(kudaaoN means?)
5)jumbish-e-nazar se humko lootaa
kyaa baat hai teri adaaon mein
-Parastaar
6)na gilla karti kabhi kudha se,
gar tu kho jata meri waffon mein
-Sunita Virender
7)yeh wafaaeN na sah sakuuNga maiN
tum nah karna kamii jafaaoN meiN
-Mayank
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10th April 2007, 05:38 PM
7)yeh wafaaeN na sah sakuuNga maiN
tum nah karna kamii jafaaoN meiN
-Mayank
8th sher
phalkon mein chupakar rakthe the
ajj beh gaye tum aansuyon mein
tc
manish aka musafir ek pal
Life is filled with goodbyes, a million goodbyes, and it hurts every time....and every time my heart dies a little...
Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time....
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13th April 2007, 01:32 PM
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Originally Posted by musafir ek pal
7)yeh wafaaeN na sah sakuuNga maiN
tum nah karna kamii jafaaoN meiN
-Mayank
8th sher
phalkon mein chupakar rakthe the
ajj beh gaye tum aansuyon mein
tc
manish aka musafir ek pal
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Dear Manish:
phalkon mein chupakar rakthe the
ajj beh gaye tum aansuyon mein
aap ke ess Sher meiN qaafiya badal gaa hai, jaise kii pahle ke SheroN meiN hai adaaoN, wafaaoN, balooN, jafaaoN, etc etc..ess liye yeh Sher Ghazal meiN Shaamil nahiiN ho sakta.. .aap ko qaafiya badalna paRegaa..
Mayank
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13th April 2007, 06:54 PM
aadaab aziz doston,
ek baar phir haazir hun ek nayi gazal ka aghaaz karne ke liye.umeed hai aap sab ka saath milega isay ek mukammal karne mai.
to lijiyee haazir hai pehla sher,
AA!TERE ASHKON KO APNI AANKHON MAI UTAARDUN,
TERI ZINDAGI KO APNI KHUSHIYON SE SAWAANRDUN,
-akelijaan
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
--akelijaan--
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13th April 2007, 07:00 PM
ohh sorry mayank ji,aapki is post per nazar baadmai padi.i m so sorry.ek gazal mukammal hui nahi aur maine dusri ka aghaaz kardiya.
manish ji aap se bhi sorry kehna chahungi,yeh sher aapko durst karna tha,par maine gaur nahi kiya.
umeed hai aap mujhe muaaf karenge.
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
--akelijaan--
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