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2nd September 2014, 12:24 PM
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WAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!kya baat hai Aadeil sahab....bohat khoob ...dheron dheron daad
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Thanks a lot, Ananthji for your praises.........
Best of wishes,
Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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2nd September 2014, 12:43 PM
narm hoNTHoN ko bhingoyaa jo tune ae saaqii
hum bhii pii leNge agar baada-kashii hoNTHoN se ho
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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2nd September 2014, 02:36 PM
baada-parast* hua main gham-e-ulfat k baad
kaun rehta hosh mein aaisi zillat k baad
*addicted to drinking
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
*pari*
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2nd September 2014, 04:50 PM
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narm hoNTHoN ko bhingoyaa jo tune ae saaqii
hum bhii pii leNge agar baada-kashii hoNTHoN se ho
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baada-parast* hua main gham-e-ulfat k baad
kaun rehta hosh mein aaisi zillat k baad
*addicted to drinking
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Adil ji n Anant ji Aap dono Sath mein gautam gambhir aur sehwaag ki jodi ki tarah chokke-chakke hi lagate jaa rahe ho. Mazaa aa gaya.
Waise ho bhi kyun na aadmiyon ka favorite topic jo le aaye zarraa ji
Aise hi likhte rahiye.
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2nd September 2014, 04:58 PM
Kuch koshish main bhi karti hun
Badaa e ishq mein doobe to jaana
Kyun nashe mein doobta hai zamana
Kitna asaan hai kehna chod do
Kitna mushkil hai isey chod Jana
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2nd September 2014, 08:04 PM
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hahaha...nice collection....
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thanks Zainy ji ....................
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 08:08 PM
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waaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhh!!!!
Zarrasaab,
kya fikr aur kya dard chhalak rahaa hai iis sher se... aur kya addayegii hai sir, gham ko na naapnekii baat jiis khubsurti se aapne paimaaish-e-baada aur paimaane se co-relate kii hai.....
dheroN dheroN daad hamaari jaanibse.
Adil
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Aadeil sahab .... is dariya dil pazeeraaye aur hausla afza daad ka mashqoor hoon !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 10:02 PM
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waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh!
Zarraasaab,
beautiful wordplay. magar ek doubt hai iis sher ko leke..
azaab kise mil rahaa hai? thoRa confusion wahi pe hai iis liye wahi atkaa hooN
muaafee chahunga agar koii galti huii ho...
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Aadeil, bhai shukriya ki aap ne sher ka word play pasand kiya aur is mein dilchaspi bhi dikhaayee.
main sher ke peechhe ka intent bayaan karta hoon .... wo intent sahi se implement hua ke naheen us par aap ka feedback mere liye useful aur madadgaar rahega ....
buri is qadar jo sharaab hai, to phir apna khud hi hisaab hai
jise mil raha ye azaab hai, rahe khush wo baada-gusaar kyooN
- zarraa
is sher mein, "azaab" mil raha hai "baada-gusaar" ko. ye connection "jise" aur "wo" se qaayam karne ki koshsish thi.
yahaan hum "baada-gusaar ko azaab milne" ko 2 tareeke se interpret kar sakte hain (1) face value par le sakte hain, ya (2) sarcastic sense mein le sakte hain
in 2 options mein 2 maani ka intent tha. is ko hum dekh sakte hain as a conversation between a naaseh and a rind
(1) is intpretation mein hazrat naaseh ki bigarhe hue rind ko warning bhari preaching hai
sharaab itni buri cheez hai ki use peena hi apne aap mein saza ke baraabar hai. jis sharaabi ko ye sharaab-roopee saza mil rahi hai wo kabhi khush naheen reh sakta hai (kyunki sharaab pi kar barbaadi milti hai khushi naheen)
(2) is interpretation mein mastaana badtameez rind hazrat naaseh ki khilli urha raha hai. un ki baaton to torh-marorh kar un ka mazaak bana raha hai.
aap ke kehne ke hisaab se agar sharaab itni hi buri cheez hai .... to ise peena hi apne aap hi is ki saza hogi na (said with sarcasm) ... (so why do you bother to lecture us). par ye to bataaiye, agar ye so called saza se peene waale ko mil rahi hai to wo peete waqt itna khush kyooN rehta hai peete waqt.
Aadeil bhai .... lekin ye sab khayaali pulaav hain audience to sher ke bayaan ki biryaani hi khaayegi na ki shayar ke man ke khayaalon ka pulaav proof of the pudding is in the eating
jaisa main ne kaha, ki ye mere intended maani the. it is possible ki ye maani sher mein khul kar saamne naheen aa paye hon.
mujhe aap ke feedback ka intezaar rahega ki kis had tak ye maani ayaan hue, aur kis had tak nihaan rahe. I value your opinion and it will help me to learn and improve
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 10:22 PM
N@zneen ji .... bahaut khushi huwee ki aap ne is masale ko itni accurately samajh liya aur khud hi correct bhi lar liya.
Baad-paimaayee mere liye bhi naya concept hai jo main ne bhi pehli baar usee link mein dekha jo main ne aap se share kiya tha, jis la literal meaning hai "measuring the wind" aur figurative meaning hai "a futile task" as per that commentary.
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 10:25 PM
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meri ek ghazal se...
baadaa ko yagaanoN* meN maanaa jo gayaa yakta*
har gham ka wo saathi hai har jashn sajaataa hai
(donoN lafzoN ke maanii 'Best' hai, to be read as best among the best)
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Waaah waaah waaaah !!! Bahaut khoob Aadeil sahab !!! Umdah sher jis ne rindon ke dil ki baat ko asardaar alfaaz diye dheron daad !!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 10:28 PM
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mat puchh ki parastish kii misaal kya hai mujhe rind
maiN baada-o-jaam ko bhii khuda-saaz* samajhtaa hooN
(* God's gift)
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Waaahhh !!! Bahaut khoob Aadeil sahab !!! Parastish aur khuda-saaz ka kya khoob wordplay kiya hai !!! Daad hi daad !!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 10:53 PM
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baadaa-kade ke paas valii kyuN mile mujhe?
shaayad koii firaaq-e-muhabbat kii baat hai?
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rind zaraa chal ki aaj baada-kashii ho
kal na ho jhumbish kahiN iin uzv-e-badan* meN
(* parts of body)
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yuN mere gaye itne daur-e-baada-paimaaii*
sab kashiid-e-khooN** ko baada-e-naab*** samajhte haiN
(*period of drinking wine; **drawing of blood; ***red wine [bahot baRHiyaa sharaab])
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baad-e-baada-aashaamii aks-e-naayaab* aate rahe
jitne aaye utne hi shauq-e-naayaab** aate rahe
(*rare reflections; **rare desires)
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pilaa pilaa ki hangaam-e-sahar* talak, saaqii
shamaa ke pahl-e-pahal khatm ho na baada aaj
(*morning chaos)
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zulmat meN piyuN roz magar aaj huaa yuN
aaftaab meri baada-parastii ka gavaah tha
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bismillah! baada-kHvaar karo phir,
yuN kHud ko khuda-parast banaa do
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baada-kHvaarii se agar maiN aaj laa-haasil huaa
phir muhabbat meN fanaa hoke bhii kya haasil huaa
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narm hoNTHoN ko bhingoyaa jo tune ae saaqii
hum bhii pii leNge agar baada-kashii hoNTHoN se ho
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WWWWWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
saare ke saare aashaar behad hi khoobsurat aur pur-asar hain, aur lutf-o-nafaasat se sarshaar !!!
Aadeil bhai .... maanna padega ..... aap mein kamaal ki capacity hai sher kehne ki jis se lafz ke mukhtalif rang ubhar aate hain aur hazireen-e-mehfil ko lafz ko pooree 360 degree tareeke se appreciate karne mein bahaut madad mil tee hai.
Jaisa N@zneen ji ne kaha tha .... is activity mein fusoon-e-aadeil chaaya rehta hai jis se sabhi shayari ke deewaane mantra-mugdh rehte hain.
Ek baar phir se ....Waaah !!!! Daad !!! Is bazm ko aap ke qalaam ki roshni hamesha milti rahi yahi dua hai !!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 11:06 PM
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aaghaaz hai baada-khasii ka tujh se ,tujh se anjaam nahi
tu hai badnaam sharab se,sharab tujh se badnaam nahi
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wwwwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh !!!!!!!!! Bahaut hi gehra, taazaa aur mega-khayaal hai !!!!!! bahaut bahaut daad aap ko Ananthpak sahab !!!!!
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2nd September 2014, 11:14 PM
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raaz-e-dil chhupa rakhha tha taa-umr,dil-figaarii* k baad
bak diya junuu main kya kuch,baada-kHvaarii k baad
*Heart break
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Waaahhhhh bahaut khoob !!!! Ye waaqayee aap ne aisi baat kahee hai jo har peene waale ke saath kabhi na kabhi zaroor huwee hai .... aur kuchh mayy-gusaaron ke saath aksar hoti rehti hai bahaut si daad Ananthpak sahab !!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 11:16 PM
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baada-parast* hua main gham-e-ulfat k baad
kaun rehta hosh mein aaisi zillat k baad
*addicted to drinking
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Waaahhh ...... bahaut khoob Ananthpak sahab ..... daad !!!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 11:19 PM
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Adil ji n Anant ji Aap dono Sath mein gautam gambhir aur sehwaag ki jodi ki tarah chokke-chakke hi lagate jaa rahe ho. Mazaa aa gaya.
Waise ho bhi kyun na aadmiyon ka favorite topic jo le aaye zarraa ji
Aise hi likhte rahiye.
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Hahahha .... aap ne bade hi naayab tareeke se hausla-afzaayee ki Sarika ji .... aur hausla afzaayee mein nihaan taang-khichaayee ne use aur bhi dilchasp bana diya
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 11:26 PM
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Kuch koshish main bhi karti hun
Badaa e ishq mein doobe to jaana
Kyun nashe mein doobta hai zamana
Kitna asaan hai kehna chod do
Kitna mushkil hai isey chod Jana
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WWWWWWAAAAAHHHHHHHH !!!!!!! Behad hi dilkash qit'a kaha hai Sarika ji !!!! Ishq aur Baada-parasti ka barha hi pur-lutf comparison kiya hai aur analogy di hai.
3rd & 4th misron mein kahi baat ishq aur baada-khwaari donon par laagoo hoti hai jo aap ne "ise" keh kar khula bhi chhorh diya aur zaahir bhi kar diya .... aur is se sukhan ka lutf aur bhi bardh gaya. Bahaut bahaut khoob aur dheron daad !!!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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2nd September 2014, 11:37 PM
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zulmat meN piyuN roz magar aaj huaa yuN
aaftaab meri baada-parastii ka gavaah tha
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is sher mein mujhe "zulmat" aur "aaftaab ke gavaah hone" ki technique behad hi khoob lagi. zulmat mein jo hota hai wo taareekee ke parde mein chhipa rehta hai lekin jab koyee cheez had se bardh jaaye to us ka koyee na koyee gawaah ban jaata hai .... aur yahaan par baada-parastee ke saath ye hua .... literally as well as figuratively ..... SUPERB !!! bahaut bahaut daad !!
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3rd September 2014, 12:28 AM
Bahaut bahaut shukriya N@zneen ji, sher ko pehchaanne ka aur apna positive feedback dene ka.
And THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE EXTREMELY CARING THOUGHT ! I am touched by your kind consideration.
ji bilkul, aisa zaroor ho sakta hai ki is maheene main waqt ko le kar thorha sa struggle karoon - donon threads ke saath insaaf karne ke liye.
lekin main ye bhi naheen chaahoonga ki fusoon-e-alfaaz thread ka momentum toote ya slowdown kare. hum sab yahaan seekhne ke saath saath enjoy bhi kar rahe hain
par asal mein, ye thread mere akele ki wajah se thorhe hi na chala raha hai is ko asal mein aap sab committed members hi mil kar chala rahe hain to meri ilteja hai ki aap ye silsila jaaree rakkhein is mahine bhi. main zaroor aata jaata rahoonga .... har post par shaayd comment na kar paaoon, par thread ko follow zaroor karta rahoonga ... har hafte lafz bhi pesh karta rahoonga .... agar meri urgent haaziri ki zaroorat mehsoos ho to PM ke zariye ittela kar sakte hain. main haazir ho jaaoonga. aur jald hi back to normal form !
again, bahaut bahaut shukriya is pehloo ke baare mein sochne ke liye. aur ummeed hai isee tarah se hum saare ek doosre ka hum-dardi se saath dete jaayenge.
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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3rd September 2014, 02:29 AM
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Bahaut bahaut shukriya N@zneen ji, sher ko pehchaanne ka aur apna positive feedback dene ka.
And THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE EXTREMELY CARING THOUGHT ! I am touched by your kind consideration.
ji bilkul, aisa zaroor ho sakta hai ki is maheene main waqt ko le kar thorha sa struggle karoon - donon threads ke saath insaaf karne ke liye.
lekin main ye bhi naheen chaahoonga ki fusoon-e-alfaaz thread ka momentum toote ya slowdown kare. hum sab yahaan seekhne ke saath saath enjoy bhi kar rahe hain
par asal mein, ye thread mere akele ki wajah se thorhe hi na chala raha hai is ko asal mein aap sab committed members hi mil kar chala rahe hain to meri ilteja hai ki aap ye silsila jaaree rakkhein is mahine bhi. main zaroor aata jaata rahoonga .... har post par shaayd comment na kar paaoon, par thread ko follow zaroor karta rahoonga ... har hafte lafz bhi pesh karta rahoonga .... agar meri urgent haaziri ki zaroorat mehsoos ho to PM ke zariye ittela kar sakte hain. main haazir ho jaaoonga. aur jald hi back to normal form !
again, bahaut bahaut shukriya is pehloo ke baare mein sochne ke liye. aur ummeed hai isee tarah se hum saare ek doosre ka hum-dardi se saath dete jaayenge.
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Jee Zarraa saheb.... aap bikul sahi farma rahe haiN!
Bikul theek faisla hai aap ka! .. aur meHfil-e-fusoon-e-alfaaz ko hum
insha Allah roshan karte raheN ge sab dost mil ke!
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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3rd September 2014, 03:54 AM
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Adil ji n Anant ji Aap dono Sath mein gautam gambhir aur sehwaag ki jodi ki tarah chokke-chakke hi lagate jaa rahe ho. Mazaa aa gaya.
Waise ho bhi kyun na aadmiyon ka favorite topic jo le aaye zarraa ji
Aise hi likhte rahiye.
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Bohat bohat shukriya Sarika ji ....waise filhaal to gambhir aur sehwag dono hi out of form and team hain...Aadeil sahab ka pata nahi par mera to katai ye favorite topic nahi hai
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
*pari*
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wwwwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh !!!!!!!!! Bahaut hi gehra, taazaa aur mega-khayaal hai !!!!!! bahaut bahaut daad aap ko Ananthpak sahab !!!!!
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Waaahhh ...... bahaut khoob Ananthpak sahab ..... daad !!!!
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Bohat bohat shukriya Zarraa sahab...aap k comments dil ko bohat tassalli dete haim aur saath hi aur achhi batting karne ka hausla bhi ..thanx
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
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3rd September 2014, 03:59 AM
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Waaahh! jij bahot khoob likha hai......dheron daad
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Thanx for the appreciation saali sahiba
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
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Jab tak tum hum mile na the
*pari*
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waaaaaaaaaaaah! waaaaaaaaaaaaaah! Ananth sir...
Best Signatures Line... 10 out of 10
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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3rd September 2014, 05:41 AM
Thanx Hassan bhai..........
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
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hai insaan baada-kash sukuun-e-dil-o-jigar k liye
miyaa.n tanz to ye hai k sharab ussi ko jalaata hai
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
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Kuch koshish main bhi karti hun
Badaa e ishq mein doobe to jaana
Kyun nashe mein doobta hai zamana
Kitna asaan hai kehna chod do
Kitna mushkil hai isey chod Jana
Please agar kuch galat ho to zaroor bataiyega.
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Bohat khoob Sarika ji .......
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
*pari*
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3rd September 2014, 09:33 AM
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baada-parast* hua main gham-e-ulfat k baad
kaun rehta hosh mein aaisi zillat k baad
*addicted to drinking
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhh!!!!
Ananthji,
kya khub bayaanaat hai... dard aur fikr dono saaf nazar aate haiN iis sher meN.
dheroN dheroN daad....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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3rd September 2014, 09:35 AM
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Adil ji n Anant ji Aap dono Sath mein gautam gambhir aur sehwaag ki jodi ki tarah chokke-chakke hi lagate jaa rahe ho. Mazaa aa gaya.
Waise ho bhi kyun na aadmiyon ka favorite topic jo le aaye zarraa ji
Aise hi likhte rahiye.
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haa haa haa.....
bilkul, aur weekend ke baad toh jazbaa aur bhii baRH jaataa hai
aapka bahot bahot shukriya, Sarikaji
khush rahiye.....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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3rd September 2014, 10:01 AM
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Waaah waaah waaaah !!! Bahaut khoob Aadeil sahab !!! Umdah sher jis ne rindon ke dil ki baat ko asardaar alfaaz diye dheron daad !!!
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Waaahhh !!! Bahaut khoob Aadeil sahab !!! Parastish aur khuda-saaz ka kya khoob wordplay kiya hai !!! Daad hi daad !!!
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WWWWWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
saare ke saare aashaar behad hi khoobsurat aur pur-asar hain, aur lutf-o-nafaasat se sarshaar !!!
Aadeil bhai .... maanna padega ..... aap mein kamaal ki capacity hai sher kehne ki jis se lafz ke mukhtalif rang ubhar aate hain aur hazireen-e-mehfil ko lafz ko pooree 360 degree tareeke se appreciate karne mein bahaut madad mil tee hai.
Jaisa N@zneen ji ne kaha tha .... is activity mein fusoon-e-aadeil chaaya rehta hai jis se sabhi shayari ke deewaane mantra-mugdh rehte hain.
Ek baar phir se ....Waaah !!!! Daad !!! Is bazm ko aap ke qalaam ki roshni hamesha milti rahi yahi dua hai !!!
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Originally Posted by zarraa
is sher mein mujhe "zulmat" aur "aaftaab ke gavaah hone" ki technique behad hi khoob lagi. zulmat mein jo hota hai wo taareekee ke parde mein chhipa rehta hai lekin jab koyee cheez had se bardh jaaye to us ka koyee na koyee gawaah ban jaata hai .... aur yahaan par baada-parastee ke saath ye hua .... literally as well as figuratively ..... SUPERB !!! bahaut bahaut daad !!
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Zarraasaab,
aapkii yehi muhabbat aur rehnumaaii hameN josh deti rehtii hai
aur kaii baar aap hamaare sher kii interpretation humse bhii behtar kar dete haiN jo aapne aakhri comment meN kiya hai, waaaah! kya khub interpretation kii hai, bilkul jaise ki aapne hi ye sher keh diya ho
aapkii hausla afzaaii aur daad ke liye aapka mamnoon hooN...
Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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3rd September 2014, 10:08 AM
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Originally Posted by masti
Kuch koshish main bhi karti hun
Badaa e ishq mein doobe to jaana
Kyun nashe mein doobta hai zamana
Kitna asaan hai kehna chod do
Kitna mushkil hai isey chod Jana
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Sarikaji,
bahot hi khubsurat qit'a pesh kiya aapne......
ek savaal hai, 'baada-e-ishq' ko lekar.... vaise ye bhii ek khubsurat andaaz hai, wine of love, magar yahaaN aap ka matlab wo hi hai ya phir 'baada-o-ishq' wine & love bhii ho sakta tha?
'pyaar kii sharaab' meN Dubnaa aur 'pyaar aur sharaab' meN Dubnaa dono yahaaN possible hai, iis liye ye savaal zehn meN aayaa hai
agar gustakhii huii ho to muaafii chaahunga
dheroN daad aapke iis qit'eh pe....
duaaoN ke saath...
Adil
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3rd September 2014, 10:09 AM
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Waaahhh! bahot khoob rumaani andaaz
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Thanks a lot dear .........................
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अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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3rd September 2014, 10:24 AM
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Aadeil, bhai shukriya ki aap ne sher ka word play pasand kiya aur is mein dilchaspi bhi dikhaayee.
main sher ke peechhe ka intent bayaan karta hoon .... wo intent sahi se implement hua ke naheen us par aap ka feedback mere liye useful aur madadgaar rahega ....
buri is qadar jo sharaab hai, to phir apna khud hi hisaab hai
jise mil raha ye azaab hai, rahe khush wo baada-gusaar kyooN
- zarraa
is sher mein, "azaab" mil raha hai "baada-gusaar" ko. ye connection "jise" aur "wo" se qaayam karne ki koshsish thi.
yahaan hum "baada-gusaar ko azaab milne" ko 2 tareeke se interpret kar sakte hain (1) face value par le sakte hain, ya (2) sarcastic sense mein le sakte hain
in 2 options mein 2 maani ka intent tha. is ko hum dekh sakte hain as a conversation between a naaseh and a rind
(1) is intpretation mein hazrat naaseh ki bigarhe hue rind ko warning bhari preaching hai
sharaab itni buri cheez hai ki use peena hi apne aap mein saza ke baraabar hai. jis sharaabi ko ye sharaab-roopee saza mil rahi hai wo kabhi khush naheen reh sakta hai (kyunki sharaab pi kar barbaadi milti hai khushi naheen)
(2) is interpretation mein mastaana badtameez rind hazrat naaseh ki khilli urha raha hai. un ki baaton to torh-marorh kar un ka mazaak bana raha hai.
aap ke kehne ke hisaab se agar sharaab itni hi buri cheez hai .... to ise peena hi apne aap hi is ki saza hogi na (said with sarcasm) ... (so why do you bother to lecture us). par ye to bataaiye, agar ye so called saza se peene waale ko mil rahi hai to wo peete waqt itna khush kyooN rehta hai peete waqt.
Aadeil bhai .... lekin ye sab khayaali pulaav hain audience to sher ke bayaan ki biryaani hi khaayegi na ki shayar ke man ke khayaalon ka pulaav proof of the pudding is in the eating
jaisa main ne kaha, ki ye mere intended maani the. it is possible ki ye maani sher mein khul kar saamne naheen aa paye hon.
mujhe aap ke feedback ka intezaar rahega ki kis had tak ye maani ayaan hue, aur kis had tak nihaan rahe. I value your opinion and it will help me to learn and improve
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Zarraasaab,
bahot hi khubsurti se aapne iis sher kii interpretation dii hai.... shaayad maiN misra-e-ulaa meN 'to phir apnaa khud hi hisaab hai' ko sahi interpret nahi kar paayaa tha aur iis liye, sarcasm nahi dekh paayaa , magar aapkii explanation ne mujhe baar baar uus pe gaur karvaayaa
aur jaise Naaz ne bataayaa, un lafzoN se ye baat ayaan ho jaati hai aur sher ek shishe kii maanind saaf nazar aata hai
Thanks for the explanation...
duaaoN ke saath
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3rd September 2014, 10:39 AM
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And THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE EXTREMELY CARING THOUGHT ! I am touched by your kind consideration.
ji bilkul, aisa zaroor ho sakta hai ki is maheene main waqt ko le kar thorha sa struggle karoon - donon threads ke saath insaaf karne ke liye.
lekin main ye bhi naheen chaahoonga ki fusoon-e-alfaaz thread ka momentum toote ya slowdown kare. hum sab yahaan seekhne ke saath saath enjoy bhi kar rahe hain
again, bahaut bahaut shukriya is pehloo ke baare mein sochne ke liye. aur ummeed hai isee tarah se hum saare ek doosre ka hum-dardi se saath dete jaayenge.
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Zarraji hum is thread ka fusooN barkaraar rakhne ki koshish karenge aapko jab bhi waqt mile tab aiyega aapke aane se thread ko zindagii milti rahegii
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Originally Posted by Hassan
Jee Zarraa saheb.... aap bikul sahi farma rahe haiN!
Bikul theek faisla hai aap ka! .. aur meHfil-e-fusoon-e-alfaaz ko hum
insha Allah roshan karte raheN ge sab dost mil ke!
Apna khayaal rakhiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,,
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Zarraasaab,
ji billkul. ye fusoon bilkul nahi rukega aap apnii fursat meN aate rahiyega aur agar aapko vaqt kii paabandii hai to aap har hafte ke bajaaye 10 din kaa vaqt rakhiye har lafz ke liye . Just a suggestion
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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3rd September 2014, 10:43 AM
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Bohat bohat shukriya Sarika ji ....waise filhaal to gambhir aur sehwag dono hi out of form and team hain...Aadeil sahab ka pata nahi par mera to katai ye favorite topic nahi hai
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Ananthji,
sahi baat kahi
vaise shaayaroN ka bhii yehi haal hota hai, jab tak form meN haiN to apnaa fusoon chalaate rehte haiN aur out of form ho gaye to out ho jaate haiN
aur aapke fusoon kaa javaab nahi, aapne kahaa ye aapka fav topic nahi hai phir bhii aap perfect stroke play kar rahe haiN, iis tarah to aap Tendulkar kii category meN aa gaye jo football player bante bante God of Cricket ban gayaa
yuN hi aapka fusoon chalta rahe ye duaa ke saath...
Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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3rd September 2014, 10:45 AM
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hai insaan baada-kash sukuun-e-dil-o-jigar k liye
miyaa.n tanz to ye hai k sharab ussi ko jalaata hai
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh!!!, Ananthji,
kya khubsurat tanz hai..........
dheroN daad-o-mubaarakbaad.....
Adil
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3rd September 2014, 11:24 AM
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Zarraasaab,
ji billkul. ye fusoon bilkul nahi rukega aap apnii fursat meN aate rahiyega aur agar aapko vaqt kii paabandii hai to aap har hafte ke bajaaye 10 din kaa vaqt rakhiye har lafz ke liye . Just a suggestion
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Yes we all are with you Zarraa sahab...devote more time on your interview ...yahan ki fikr na kare
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
*pari*
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3rd September 2014, 11:32 AM
Bohat bohat shukriya saali sahiba....thanx a lot
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
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3rd September 2014, 11:36 AM
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Ananthji,
sahi baat kahi
vaise shaayaroN ka bhii yehi haal hota hai, jab tak form meN haiN to apnaa fusoon chalaate rehte haiN aur out of form ho gaye to out ho jaate haiN
aur aapke fusoon kaa javaab nahi, aapne kahaa ye aapka fav topic nahi hai phir bhii aap perfect stroke play kar rahe haiN, iis tarah to aap Tendulkar kii category meN aa gaye jo football player bante bante God of Cricket ban gayaa
yuN hi aapka fusoon chalta rahe ye duaa ke saath...
Adil
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Bohat bohat shukriya Aadeil sahab aapki duaon k liye ...ab aap sharminda na kare sirji ...yahan k master blaster aap hain Aadeil sahab
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
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3rd September 2014, 11:38 AM
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhh!!!, Ananthji,
kya khubsurat tanz hai..........
dheroN daad-o-mubaarakbaad.....
Adil
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Ek baar fhir tah-e-dil se shukrguzar hun aapka
Mohabbat ke ye silsile na the
Jab tak tum hum mile na the
*pari*
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