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Mere mehbub ko ye azeeb hunar aata hai..... -
13th July 2009, 12:19 AM
Sabhi doston ko mera salaam.....
Aaj fir kuch likhne ka dil kya to khud ko rok nahi paya..... koshish ki hai...... Galtiyon k liye maafi chahunga...... Mere mehboob ko ye azeeb hunar aata hai..... Har shahks ki aankhon me wahi nazar aata hai... Bada paakeeza sa hai dil me wo kahin.... Labon pe to aaj bhi uske zehar aata hai..... Husn ki baarish me bhigoya nahi kabhi usne.... Haan!! Jab bhi aata hai lekar kehar aata hai.... Mera dil hai ya tooti hui panaah koi..... Jo bhi aata hai rukne dopahar aata hai..... Aaj bhi khade hai usi mukaam par kahin.... Milne har ek se jahaan unka humsafar aata hai... Sooni si nigaahein,Viraan si haweli meri.... Ab jo kabhi bhoole se hi wo idhar aata hai.... Phooti thi kismat,ya jala tha aashiyaa humara.. Jo mere naam ke saath juda beghar aata hai.... +R@j |
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13th July 2009, 03:07 AM
Yeh Sher Bahut Umda hai......
keep up the good work Quote:
Nalin Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe, Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe, Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka, woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe  Please Honor me and my creative writing by visitng my website @ www.nalin-mehra.blogspot.com |
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13th July 2009, 06:05 PM
AadaaB doctor saheB......
Achchi koshish rahe aapki but mujhe kisi bhi her mein rabta nazar nahi aaya, har sher ki first line ko secound line proper uported nahi lagti hai.... Iska tafseera agar koi aur kare to shayad aap samajh jayenge.. Well kohish achchi hai, likhate rahiye... Aur meri baat se naraaz mat hoiye ..... Khush rahiye... 
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14th July 2009, 04:28 PM
hmm
tanaa marne mein janab ustad hai .......aise yeh tane kisse maar rahe ho aap dr jee  ehesaas achha hai .......likhte rahna DuaoN ke saath Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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14th July 2009, 08:07 PM
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haan ji....to kya keh rahi thi aap mam...... hum ustaaad hai taana maarne me....hai na....??? aji thoda bahut hunar to aap hi se sikha hai....  ye jiske liye hai use samaj aa gayi hogi....... Samajhne wale samajh gaye hai.....Na samjhe,wo ANARI hai...  |
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14th July 2009, 09:18 PM
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aap gaur kijiye....mujhe doctor sahab ke har sher me rabt lagti hai............. lagti hai nahin.........bilkul hai ap gaur karein.............. mujhe aisa lag raha hai ap rabt ko TUTANK samajh rahe hai.............. matlab cause aur effect ki shayri.............sirf us type ke sher ko aap rabt me kehte hai shayad.......................agee jahaan aur bhi hai........ tutank ka bhi ik example hai yaha...bilkul clear..yeh dekhiye Mera dil hai ya tooti hui panaah koi..... Jo bhi aata hai rukne dopahar aata hai..... tutank me hai.....ap gaur karein to ap turunt samajh jayenge........ regards........kuch clarification chahe to bejhijhak pm karein ya yaha bayaan karein |
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14th July 2009, 10:58 PM
Raj sahab ji.......yun toh aapki tamam nazm behadd khubsurat lagi mujhe....sabhi sher umda hai..... yeh mujhe bahut acha laga........ Mera dil hai ya tooti hui panaah koi..... bahut khub likha aapne.....tahe dil daad detaa hu....  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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15th July 2009, 05:24 AM
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Shukriyaa naresh ji..... apne keemati waqt me se kuch ghadiyaan gazal par gaur karne k liye aapka tah-e-dil se shukraguzaar hun..... apna dhyan rakhiyega.... |
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