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'All My Pains...!' - 30th July 2005, 05:31 PM

Remembering you
Due to shortage of the air
I breathe all my pains!


Senryu Poem (also called human haiku) is a
Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed
lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5)



Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai


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Re: 'All My Pains...!' - 30th July 2005, 07:34 PM

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Remembering you
Due to shortage of the air
I breathe all my pains!


Senryu Poem (also called human haiku) is a
Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed
lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5)



so sweet . mai to koshish karati reh gayi haiku likhane ki ,, lekin gagar me sagar bharane ki kala mujhe nahi aati..

aapne bahoot bahoot achha likha hai..

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Re: 'All My Pains...!' Very Sweet My Love :)** - 30th July 2005, 08:14 PM

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Remembering you
Due to shortage of the air
I breathe all my pains!


Senryu Poem (also called human haiku) is a
Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed
lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5)


Hoti Gairaat To Tere Saath Hi Maar Jaati SaJaan_Lash Kandhon Pe Youn Aapni Na Uthhaii Hoti_Haath Keya Aaya Mere Ek Seeyahi Ke SIva_Dekhne Haal Mera Tu Bhi To Aayi Hoti~Pata Nahin Kyun Yahin Ghazal Ki Lines Yaad Aa Gayi...! Haan, Ek Aur Jo Dil Ke Bohot Kareeb Hain: Main Bhatak-ta Hi Raha Dard Ke Veerane Mein_Waqt Likhhta Raha Chehre Pe Harr Pal Ka Heesab_Meri Shohraat Meri Deewangi Ki Nazaar Houi_Pee Gayi Mai Ki Botal Mere Geeton Ki Keetab~Aaina Mujhse Meri Pehli Si Suraat Mange~~~Aur Abbu Ko Bohot Miss Karne Lagi Houn...**Khair, Ye To Koii Nayi Baat Nahin Hain...**What Can I Say About Your Writing...I Loved It Very Much~And I Love You**Dil Ki Gehraaion Ki Gehraaion Se Dher Dher Sare Phoul Aur Shukriya_Daad Bhi Kuboul Karon **Likhhte Rehna~Khush Rahon ye Duwaaon ke saath ijaazat...**Take Care...God bless You.

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Re: Re: 'All My Pains...!' - 1st August 2005, 05:50 PM

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so sweet . mai to koshish karati reh gayi haiku likhane ki ,, lekin gagar me sagar bharane ki kala mujhe nahi aati..

aapne bahoot bahoot achha likha hai..

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Isse pasand karne ke liye bahout Shukriya...Garima Ji!

Haiku likhna vakai gagar mein saagar bharna jeissa hai...!You
should think only of when and what or why!

I mean...: When something happens,what happens or why does
it happen!
Put then the thought in few words,and let the reader find for
himself what is your message...The pattern must always be 5,7,5
(syllables)

Just try...I know that you'll do it!



Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai

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