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sukh ki meri khoj -
3rd May 2003, 05:34 PM
Ek barsati subah maie, apni hathheli maie
Pani ko girte sarkte dekhti rahi...... Aur mere is khel ko door se tum dekhte rahae. Meri to sukh ki kalpna bas itni si.... Tum paas aaye aur sukh to .... Mere pichhe pichhe daudta aaya. Dophar hui, hawa maie asar thhi barsaat ki Maine tumse puchha... bataaw to Meri muthhi maie kya hai??? Tum muskuraaye aur kaha..... Tera aur mera. Hum dono ka sukh. Aur sukh to aa khada huaa mere paas hi. Meri to sukh ki kalpna bas itni si.... Tum muskuraayae aur sukh to.... Chhalkne laga meri muthhi maie. Shaam to aayi khalipan si, aur aashmaan bhi khali Hathheli bhi khali-khali aur .... Pani ki tarah sukh bhi sark gaya sarsar.... Aankh se barsa sawan par oonhae Tumne nahi thhama, tumhara sukh alag Aur mera sukh alag, Meri to sukh ki kalpna thi bas itni si.. Phool bhi nahi maangi thhi nanhi kali si Par sukh to daud gaya mere aagae aagae.. Raat hui, aur maine jana Sukh nahi koi kalpna maie aur nahi kisi ke sathh maie Sukh to hai apne hi apne rishte maie Hum jo haste hai wo hai sukh Hum jo jitae hai wo hai sukh Aashmaan maie tarae zilmilaaye Maine dekha....... sukh to muskurata huaa Aa baithha mere man vishaal maie. |
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4th May 2003, 10:49 AM
meena ji
bohat zabadast dil ko choo lene wali kavita likh daali hai aap ne. tabiat khush ho gaee. ek hassaas dil ki bilkul sahee akkasi ki hai aap ne. aisi tehreeren parh ker dil bohat khush hota hai. please keep writing and take care. musharrafhusain |
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dost -
4th May 2003, 11:12 AM
dost,
aapne hamesha meri kalam ko saraha hai. aap jaise dosto ki wajah se hi aaj maie yaha apnae kadam rakh paayi hu. aapki shukr gujaar hu |
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5th May 2003, 12:50 AM
Meenachheda ji,
Aapki "Rachna" padi aur usme hindi ke shabdon ka sangam jo paaya tow mann kara parhta hee jaoon. Aapki rachna ke shirshak se hee mujhe gyaat ho chuka tha ki kuch alag parhne ko milega. Sach mein yeh ek lajawaab soch ki prastuti hai. Umeed karta hoon ki aap shayri.com aur hum sab ko aisi hee bhent nirantar deti rahengi. Dhanyavaad Vipinbox ...ek shoonya 
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13th September 2003, 03:07 AM
vipin dost,
yaha par aa kar tumne meri sukh ki khoj pasand ki... oose heere ki tarah parkha saraha... aur muje pata tak nahi chala.... n jaane kyun aisa hota hai zindgi maie? sukh aata hai aur hum ooski aahat tak nahi samaj paate... maafi bhi chahti hu aur shukriaa bhi.... |
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Bahut Khoob -
13th September 2003, 10:51 AM
Meenaji, aapka kuchh kehne ka andaaz bhale hi saada rahe par, dil ko chhu jaata hai, Aap ki ye Sukh ki Khoj is kala ka ek namuna hai, mujhe bahut pasand aaya.
Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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13th September 2003, 11:36 AM
chaand dost,
tumhe agar mera kuchh likha huaa pasand aa jaaye.... woh mere liyae kya maaina hai tum bhi khub jaante ho...... shukriaa meri nazam ko roshni dene k liyae. |
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15th September 2003, 04:34 PM
meena ji,
sukh ki khoj aapne jin sundar shabdo mein ki hai, uski jitani tarrif karu kam hai. bahut ummda likha hai aapne.likhate rahiye. Akant... आहट सी कोइ आये तो समझ लेना कि तुम हो... AahaT si koi aaye to samajh lena ki tum ho... |
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Didi!!! bahut acha likha aapne... |
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Didi!!! bahut acha likha aapne... -
16th September 2003, 12:02 PM
Meena didi,
Sukh to hum sab ke saath hi rehta hai, bas kabhi kabhi aankhon se ojhal ho jata hai.. baadal hat te hain aur sukh phir nazar aane lag jata hai.. sukh hai apne dil mein, sukh hai unke dil mein.. sukh hai tanhai mein, sukh hai apne saath mein.. sukh hai apne haath mein, sukh hai chaaron dishaaon mein.. jahan talk bhi nazar utha ke dekhoge sukh ko hi paaoge.. pad jaati hai kabhi jo dukh ki chaaya, to sukh ko uske peeche hi khada paaoge.. "Dikha kar khawaab in aankhon ko, De gaye aansoon in mein Tum.. Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.." ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Sirf Tanu Ki ChaahaT...... ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ |
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Re: sukh ki meri khoj -
17th September 2003, 04:43 AM
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Par woh yeh nahi jaante ki yeh bhi ek adaa hai gam chupaane ki. |
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17th September 2003, 10:35 AM
akant dost,
yah sukh ki meri khoj... zindgi ka aaina hi to hai..... mere khayal se zindgi ki sachhai hai... kam se kam, maie to yahi maanti hu... jo bhi hai apne andar hai... oose aap kaise dekhte ho? kaise samjte ho? kaise lete ho? aur kaise prastuut karte ho... sab aap par hi nirbhar hai. tumhe pasand aayi... tahe dil se shukriaa. |
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17th September 2003, 10:40 AM
meri priya,
Sukh to hum sab ke saath hi rehta hai, bas kabhi kabhi aankhon se ojhal ho jata hai.. baadal hat te hain aur sukh phir nazar aane lag jata hai.. sukh hai apne dil mein, sukh hai unke dil mein.. sukh hai tanhai mein, sukh hai apne saath mein.. sukh hai apne haath mein, sukh hai chaaron dishaaon mein.. jahan talk bhi nazar utha ke dekhoge sukh ko hi paaoge.. pad jaati hai kabhi jo dukh ki chaaya, to sukh ko uske peeche hi khada paaoge.. sukh ko bahot khubsurti se tumne prastuut kiya hai..... didi ko bahot pasand aaya. hamesha khush raho. |
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17th September 2003, 10:41 AM
rani,
meri dost...... tumhe yah rachna pasand aayi... to meri sukh ki khoj maie aur ek sukh ki lahar muskuraai tumhaare liyae. |
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17th September 2003, 06:25 PM
Meenaji,
Bahot khoob!!! Aap Hindi aur Gujarati dono language mai lovely shayri ker leto ho. My compliments!! Gujarati maa pan tamari lakhel shayri vanchel chey, Kharekhar kehvu padey. Please koi navi kavita gujarati maa vanchva maley tem kari shaksho? Aabhar!!! Rajan |
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18th September 2003, 12:24 AM
rajan,
meri yah rachna tumhe pasand aayi aur sathh hi tumne meri gujrati rachnao ki bhi taarif jki hai...... tumhari aabhari hu ji jaroor koshish karish... gujrati kavita post karwani... darasal ahi je pan kavita post karu chhu aemani ghani kavita gujrati kavita no hindi anuwaad j hoi chhae. |
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18th September 2003, 12:56 AM
Dear Meena, aapka yeh rachna kuch aur logoki zindegi ki haqikat se bohot hi milta jhulta hein. May be most of us?
Bohot achhi tarha likhha hein aapne. bohot khub. Really liked it. Likhte rahiyega. Aapna khayal rakhiyega. God bless. Shimul. Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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18th September 2003, 01:06 AM
shimul,
meri dost, thanx tumhe yah pasand aayi... yah rachna maine bahot samay pahlaey likhi thhi... aaj kal to maine likhna chhod diya hai..... aur nahi jaanti fir se kab likhu....... |
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18th September 2003, 01:19 AM
saru che tamaro kalam ...
 kyun sahi baat kahi khyun na kuch or kaha ab to chaaron hi taraf band hei mehfil ki gali hamse kya bhool hui jo ye saza hamko mili |
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18th September 2003, 10:08 AM
g c n 1,
aapko meri rachna pasand aayi.... aapka shukriaa. |
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6th January 2006, 11:22 AM
bahoot achha likha hai maa aapne.. sukh ki khoj hum har jagah kar lete hai.. nahi karte hai to khood me.. khood ko ek baar dekhe to pata lagega yeha itani khushi hai ki khood ke saath sabhi ke chehare par muskaan laayi ja sake
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Re: sukh ki meri khoj -
13th January 2006, 03:00 PM
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Didu, Aaj aapki is rachna ne sukh ki us paribhasha ka varnan kiya hai jise shayad humne sirf door se samjha tha par mehsoos nahin kiya tha... yaan mehsoos karne ki koshish hi nahin ki thi... Hamesha ki tarah khoobsurat aur bahut kuch kehti hain aapki rachnayein! ... jab se kisi ne karli hai suraj ki chori aao chal ke suraj dhoondhein aur na mile toh kiran kiran phir jama karein hum aur ik suraj naya banyein -NM |
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hello meena |
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hello meena -
14th January 2006, 12:13 PM
yes every one look for peace .......
tears in my eyes ur kalam touched my heart dear keep it up ..... its a gift from GOD that u write so well ............ wordless i cant say any thing more yaar its really fab..... n fan....... faiq waljee |
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bheegee ankhen |
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bheegee ankhen -
27th January 2006, 02:11 PM
Ek barsati subah maie, apni hathheli maie
Pani ko girte sarkte dekhti rahi...... Aur mere is khel ko door se tum dekhte rahae. Meri to sukh ki kalpna bas itni si.... Tum paas aaye aur sukh to .... Mere pichhe pichhe daudta aaya...oh my god itne achee kavita likhnee bhee ban honee chahiye ------------------------------------------------------------ dil se ek ek harf par raha hoon aur ye parh ke...Meri muthhi maie kya hai??? Tum muskuraaye aur kaha..... Tera aur mera. Hum dono ka sukh...ankh bhar gayee mujeh achee kavita bahut andar rak chotee hai abhee yaheen tak parhee hai ----------------------------------------------------------------------- Tum muskuraayae aur sukh to.... Chhalkne laga meri muthhi maie. plz itana bhee achha na likha karo ki ankh chalak jaye -------------------------------------------------------------- Raat hui, aur maine jana Sukh nahi koi kalpna maie aur nahi kisi ke sathh maie Sukh to hai apne hi apne rishte maie Hum jo haste hai wo hai sukh Hum jo jitae hai wo hai sukh Aashmaan maie tarae zilmilaaye Maine dekha....... sukh to muskurata huaa Aa baithha mere man vishaal maie....shabd nahee bas ankh main panee hai agar samjh sako ki kya kahana chahta hoon in panktiyon ke liye -------------------------------------------------------- jane kaise log de dete hain remarks tum ko main to parh ke bas apnee hee bharee ankhen dekh raha hoon kaheen meree ankho se sukh chalak to nahee raha ansoo ban ke? ------------------------------------------------------------------------ ye kabhee puranee bhee hogee kavita? na kabhee nahee agar 10 sal baad bhee kisee ko sunayo to yahee kahana ye meree nayee kavita hai kyon ki purnee hona is kavita kee kismat main nahee bas ek shabdheen Anil |
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