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20th February 2012, 03:24 PM
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ik nazre taghaaful karke tu jo uth bhee gayi rukhsat bhee huyi. [/COLORmat poochho meree haalat mujhse main ro bhee padaa hairat bhee huyi. har saans men rezaa qat-qat ke jeevan ka guzaara karte hai, ab maut hamaari yu samjho hasrat bhee huyi haajat bhee huyi. ye hijr ke mausam guzrenge wo wasl kee raate aayengee, mai khud ko yu hee bahalaata tha par dil men kahee dahasat bhee huyi. kuch log muhabbat karte hai kuch log muhabbat jeete hai, dil-dil pe munhasir hota hai daanaaee huyi wahashat bhee huyi. wo aaye they aake mujhko chhuaa aur chhooke chal bhee diye, kuch pal men dekho kya-kya huyaa main jee bhee uthaa mayyat bhee huyi. kyun haal main apnaa khastaa jaa dunyaa ko ufaq dikhlaata hu, sab mujhpe taras khaate bhee hai so khud se mujhe nafrat bhee huyi. |
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20th February 2012, 07:19 PM
kuch log muhabbat karte hai kuch log muhabbat jeete hai,
dil-dil pe munhasir hota hai daanaaee huyi wahashat bhee huyi. wo aaye they aake mujhko chhuaa aur chhooke chal bhee diye, kuch pal men dekho kya-kya huyaa main jee bhee uthaa mayyat bhee huyi. Masha Allah bohat khoob ................................ Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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20th February 2012, 07:58 PM
Wwaaahh!! Lajawab bemisaal qalaam! Kuchch sochane par majboor bhi kar gaya par saath hi saath mastee se bhi bhar gaya .... yahee iski khasiyat lagi. Apko dheron daad!
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21st February 2012, 01:05 PM
bahut khoob bhai.....meer jaisi si chaal lagi......
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21st February 2012, 05:27 PM
ik nazre taghaaful karke tu jo uth bhee gayi rukhsat bhee huyi. mat poochho meree haalat mujhse main ro bhee padaa hairat bhee huyi. Hmmmmmmmm… Khooob Or Rawaan Matla… har saans men rezaa qat-qat ke jeevan ka guzaara karte hai, ab maut hamaari yu samjho hasrat bhee huyi haajat bhee huyi. Wahhhh….. Acha Kaha ye hijr ke mausam guzrenge wo wasl kee raate aayengee, mai khud ko yu hee bahalaata tha par dil men kahee dahasat bhee huyi. Wah Wah Saheb……. Ye Bhi Umdah Raha kuch log muhabbat karte hai kuch log muhabbat jeete hai, dil-dil pe munhasir hota hai daanaaee huyi wahashat bhee huyi. Hmmmmm wo aaye they aake mujhko chhuaa aur chhooke chal bhee diye, kuch pal men dekho kya-kya huyaa main jee bhee uthaa mayyat bhee huyi. Acha Hai …. Magar Aik Baat Kahun Ga……… Yahan “Mayyat” Lafz Adjust ni Ho Ga… Sher Ke Maf’hoom Ke Mutabiq Yahan “ Maut” Aana Chahiye Tha Magar Ye Hum Qaafia Nahi Hai… Is sab ke Baa-wajood Ye Kahun Ga Ke Aap Ye Lafz “ MAYYAT” Badal Kar Koi Or Laga Len.. Ya Ye Misra Hee Badal Len… kyun haal main apnaa khastaa jaa dunyaa ko ufaq dikhlaata hu, sab mujhpe taras khaate bhee hai so khud se mujhe nafrat bhee huyi. Acha Maqta Hai…. Rawaani Me Hai Magar Aik Baat….. Pehla Misra Agar Aap Seedha Adaa Kren Gay To Samajhnay Me Or Parhnay Me Ziaada Aasaani Aaye Gi…. Kiun KHasta Haal Main Apna Ufaq Dunia Ko Ja Dikhlata Hun Janab Ufaq Sb… In Tamam Baton Ke Sath sath Main Itna Zaruur Kahun Ga Ke Aap ne Boht Rawaan Dawaan Or Achi Ghazal Kahi Hai….. Daaad Qabool Farmaiye……. Likhtay Rahiye Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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21st February 2012, 05:31 PM
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BaDhii RawaaN DawaaN Ghazal Huii Hai Janaab ! Sar Se Paa Talak ! UmdaaH ... Dilkash ... Purkash ... Dilee Mubaaraqbaad !!!  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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21st February 2012, 06:51 PM
ik nazre taghaaful karke tu jo uth bhee gayi rukhsat bhee huyi.
mat poochho meree haalat mujhse main ro bhee padaa hairat bhee huyi. Puraane Zakhm taaaza kar diye aapke is sher ne saab.. shukriyaaa Ghame_jaaana se milwaane ke liye... har saans men rezaa qat-qat ke jeevan ka guzaara karte hai, ab maut hamaari yu samjho hasrat bhee huyi haajat bhee huyi. ye hijr ke mausam guzrenge wo wasl kee raate aayengee, mai khud ko yu hee bahalaata tha par dil men kahee dahasat bhee huyi. kuch log muhabbat karte hai kuch log muhabbat jeete hai, dil-dil pe munhasir hota hai daanaaee huyi wahashat bhee huyi. waahhh kya baaat hai mere yaar.. in sheron ne ghaazal me jaan daal di hai.... bahot khoob.. wo aaye they aake mujhko chhuaa aur chhooke chal bhee diye, kuch pal men dekho kya-kya huyaa main jee bhee uthaa mayyat bhee huyi. aure ye sher to Haasile gahzal hai bhai... baahoot ummdah khayaal.. bahed khoob andaaze bayaaan.... Duaa hai Rab se ho zore qalam aur bhi ziyaadah.. likhte raheN.... khush rahen.. Shaad.... |
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24th February 2012, 05:26 PM
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24th February 2012, 05:54 PM
uff ak ji ,
bahat hi umdaa likha hai aapne daad kabool kijiye take care :-ek bujhaa hua dhumil palak jhapakte hi jo aankh se hu'aa ojhal woh lauT kar nahiiN aayaa gaye dinoN ki taraH
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28th February 2012, 05:15 PM
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1st March 2012, 01:05 PM
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aise hi likhte rahiye daad qabool karein taecaer jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai uth jati hai kalam likhne ko wo pyar deewana hota hai kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan wo kalaam shayraana hota hai jab yaad karte hai kisi ko wo waqt suhana hota hai... ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* duniya mein kitna gam hai apna gam phir bhi kam hai ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* |
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1st March 2012, 01:46 PM
bhayee is ghazal ka jo byaaN hai... bahut hi shayarana hai.... meer ka patta patta..... ya zafar ka style... isko mugl-e-azam movie main hona chahiye tha kuch baten kah duN do char fir bhi ik nazre taghaaful karke tu jo uth bhee gayi rukhsat bhee huyi. mat poochho meree haalat mujhse main ro bhee padaa hairat bhee huyi. bhayee thodaa aage peechy karke dekho ... tu aur jo ko... ik nazre taghaaful karke jo tu uth bhee gayi rukhsat bhee huyi. mat pooch jo meri halat thi maiN ro bhee padaa hairat bhee huyi. mat pooch huee kya halat ki mai ro bhi pada hairat bhi huee -------------------------- har saans men rezaa qat-qat ke jeevan ka guzaara karte hai, ab maut hamaari yu samjho hasrat bhee huyi haajat bhee huyi. bhayee aage ke har sher ke oolaa maiN ek takhta kam hai.... plzz chek the meter again .... Please let me know if i am not correct ....!! |
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1st March 2012, 05:07 PM
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wahhhhh....kya khoob likhtey hai aap.....aapko padna accha lga....! god bless u .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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4th March 2012, 03:08 PM
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ahmad sahab bahut -2 acchaa lagaa ki aapne apnaa beshqeemti waqt mere is qalaam ko diya aur apnee daad o islaah se nawaaja.aapkee is qaramnawaazi ke liye aapka tahedil se shukrguzar hu . yu hee saath banaaye rakhiye............take care |
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4th March 2012, 03:22 PM
Tasleemaat Ufaq bhaee,
Buhat aala buhat umdaah! Iskay aalaa meyaar ka saboot oopar ataa kee gayee daad haye SDC kay daalinda shuraa kee. Duagoh Ahmad |
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5th March 2012, 12:28 PM
wo aaye they aake mujhko chhuaa aur chhooke chal bhee diye,
kuch pal men dekho kya-kya huyaa main jee bhee uthaa mayyat bhee huyi. Acha Hai …. Magar Aik Baat Kahun Ga……… Yahan “Mayyat” Lafz Adjust ni Ho Ga… Sher Ke Maf’hoom Ke Mutabiq Yahan “ Maut” Aana Chahiye Tha Magar Ye Hum Qaafia Nahi Hai… Is sab ke Baa-wajood Ye Kahun Ga Ke Aap Ye Lafz “ MAYYAT” Badal Kar Koi Or Laga Len.. Ya Ye Misra Hee Badal Len… bhai mere khyaal se mayyat word is misre men poori-2 tarah se nibhta hai. Janab Uffaq Ji...... Aap Ke Khayal Me Yahan MAYYAT" Bilkul Theak nibha Hai, Magar Mere KHayal Me Bilkul Theak Nahi Nibha... Mayyat...Ka Ma Maani Hai "Dead Body..... Aap Agar Mujhy Thoda Sa Waazeh Kar Den Ke Ye Bilkul Theak Kaisay Adjust Ho Raha Hai, To Kuch Mere Ilm Me Bhi Izaafa Ho Jaaye Ga....... Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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