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27th April 2004, 05:42 PM
Aadaab dosto.
aaj hamane jo likha he....wo ek dost ki faramaaish he...i mean topic usane muje diya tha...ab maine to usake baad koshish ki he....i dont know ki maine kaisa likha he..aur techanically aap dekhenge to shaayad aapako isame gazal ka nazam ka ya poem ki kisi bhi roop nazar bhi naa aaye...par phir bhi dil ne jo mahesoos kiya unhe labzo me baayaaa karane ki ek koshish ki he...!! Bichhade huve do dil...baraso baad raah me achaanak mil jaate he....koi varta-laap to nahi hota..par us vaqt jo huva wo image karane ki ek koshish ki he....!!! " Raah me achaanak mil gaye wo aaj....pal do pal ke liye, mahek gaya dil ka aashiya puraani yaado se....pal do pal ke liye. "ruk gai saanse hamaari........ tham gai dhadakan unaki bhi....... mit gaya saare aalam ka astitva, thahar gai zindagi............pal do pal ke liye." "tha unaki aankho me wo hi pyaar........ mere dil me bhi tha wo hi khumaar......... saare bandhan, saari simaaye todakar, mil gaye do pyaase nain.................pal do pal ke liye." " wo chhup-chhup kar milana.......wo pyaar bhari baate, wo ruthana-manaana................wo sooni raate, wo pyaar jataana......................wo adhuri mulaakaate, dafan huve saare lamhe jaise phir zinda ho gaye...pal do pal ke liye." " khwaabo ki duniya jo hamane sajaai thi, saath milake jo hamane alag duniya banaai thi, saari be-basi saari majabooriyo ko bhulakar........ kho gaye ham apani ek alag duniya me......pal do pal ke liye." " dabe hoth puchh rahe the kai savaal.......... sooni aankhe de rahi thi saare jawaab...... kisiko kuchh puchhane ki jaroorat mahesoos na rahi, chahere ka taasur bayaa kar raha tha saara haal..... yaad aa gaya hame vaqt ka wo sitam..........pal do pal ke liye." " chal diye phir wo apane hisse ka gam lekar, chal pada me bhi saath apani tanhaari lekar, aaj bhi ham ye baat bhul gaye the..hamesha ki tarah, ke ye milana bhi tha hamaara sirf ..........pal do pal ke liye." |
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28th April 2004, 10:36 AM
Shyam!!
Tum itne dino baad aate ho, magar jab bhi aate, koi na koi haseen saugaat zaroor laate ho.. ab is kalaam ko hi dekh lo.. maana ki isme shayri ki technicalities nahi.. magar jazbaaton ka jo bayaan hai wo itni saadgi aur safaii se kiya gaya hai ki kalaam lajawaab ho gaya! Sach kaha tumne.. aksar zindagi ke tanha safar me log hume milte hain.. dil aap hi unse juD jaata hai aur hum bhool jaate hain ki 'Jeevan ke safar me raahi milte hain bichhaR jaane ko, Aur de jaate hain yaadein tanhai me taRpaane ko'  Magar ye pal do pal ka saath agar khushi se guzre, to yaadein haseen hoti hain.. ye baat aur hai ki yaadein jitni haseen hogi, judai ke baad utni hi chhubhegi..Khair, enough of my lecture!  nacheez ki chhoti si tareef kubool karo.. likhte raho aur sabse baR kar, muskuraate raho.. |
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28th April 2004, 10:53 AM
Mere dost shyam
Aap ke kalam ko parah. Aur jaisa aap ne kaha, yeh na ghazal hai, na nazm, Magar phir bhi yeh shahkaar hai Aap ke zehan aur soach ka mayaar hai. Is mein khayal ki bulandi bhi hai, Zindagi ki talkh haqiqat bhi hai. Ise kehte hain “DER AIYED—DURUST AIYED” Shyam mere bhai meri purkhaloos duayen aur khuahishaat aap ke hamesha saath hain. Well said and well read. musharrafhusain |
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28th April 2004, 07:41 PM
Afshan.
pyaari dost afshan...thanks for ur reply...really thanks..is post to khaash muje raay ki jaroorat thi...!! hamesha ki tarah aapane is post ko padha aur hamesha ki tarah aapane usaki taarif bhi ki usake liye bahot bahot shukriya. bye for now. apana khayal rakhana aur muskuraate rahena. bhai jaan. bhai jaan...bahot dino ke baad aapase mulaakaat huvi..how r u?? bhai jaan aapane bhi hamesha ki tarah mera kalaam padhakar aur taarif karake mera housala afazaai kiya usake liye hamesha ki tarah bahot bahot shukriya..bhai jaan aap kaise he??? pls pm karake jaroor batana. waiting for ur reply. apana khayala rakhiyega bhai jaan. khuda hafiz. |
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29th April 2004, 02:23 PM
shyam mitr,
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29th April 2004, 05:33 PM
SHAYAM
AFTER A LONG TIME .MAY BE I READ. EXELLENT |
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30th April 2004, 07:03 PM
meena ji
meena ji how r u ??? meena ji thanks very much...aapane hamaara kalaam padha aur us par apani raay di..taarif ki..usake liye bahot bahot shukriya mem. meena ji apana khayal rakhiyega... aur muskuraate rahiyega. bye for now. mita ji. mita ji. bahot lambe arase ke baad aap se mulaakaat huvi..mita ji how r u??? mita ji thanks....bahot bahot shukriya aapaka ki aapane hamaare kalaam ko padha aur us par apani raay di...thanks very much. pls take care.. bye for now. |
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So simple but really so touching... |
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5th May 2004, 05:12 PM
Dear Shyam Jee, Pehle tou dilse mafhi chahungi kyun ke der se reply kar rahi hun...umeed karti hun aap samajh paayenge. Keise hai aap? Kaha hote hai aap? Kuch jiyada hi masroofh hote honge shayad..yeh jo aapne likhha hai...itni khubsurti se aapne khushi aur dard ko samne rakhha hai...lajawab...really so simple & at the same time so touching...waise milne ke baad phir se judai kyun? I guess I understand.......and it really hurts...aapka likhha hua bohot hi jiyada dilko chhoo gaayi hai...sach maniye aur iss liye hi derse reply kar rahi hun...dilki gehraion se shukriya qabulkijiye. Haan, ek gana hai: Ek arman ishpar hein ek arman ushpar hein
humne khudh hi banayi thi jo rashte meh woh deewar hein Ek khushi dilne keya mangli haar khushi ko nazar lag gayi Zindegi jab kareeb aye toh Zindegi ko nazar lag gayi Ab tamanna ho dil meh koi mein tamanna hi karti nehi Aur daarti toh sunle sanam* Haan, judai se daarta hai dil.......(female voice)-Kareeb film ki gana hai lekin dard-e-dil bayan bhi shayad...Khuda kisi ko aisi judai na de*.......yeh Duwa hamesha rehti hai...khush rahiye yeh Duwaon ke sath izazat chahungi. Take care. God bless you.  Keep smilling....... Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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5th May 2004, 06:43 PM
Hi shyam ji,
"Pal do pal ke liye" to mein hairaan reh gayi.....aapki ye khobsoorat shayri padhne ke baad..waqui bahut achha likha hai.. dil se nikli ye daad kabool kijiye.. pari  |
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5th May 2004, 10:05 PM
Shyam Bhai,
Bahut dino baad yahan aana hua hai aapka is baar.. Aaj yahan aakar jo nazm aapne post ki bahut hi pasand aayi hamen..agar sab kuchh mil jaaye jeevan mein,beshak pal do pal ke liye hi ,tau bhi kitna achha ho,haina!! Aate raha keejiye bazm mein.. chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai... |
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6th May 2004, 06:31 PM
Dear Shimul ji.
aadaab. shimul ji aapane meri hesiyat se kuchh jyaada hi ijjat baksh di..shimul ji dil ki gaheraaiyo se ham aapaka shukriya ada kar rahe he..kabool kijiyega...shimul ji aapane jo gaana likha he..usaki ek line hame chho gai..ek khushi dil ne kya maangli..har khushi ko nazar lag gai...wow great line...anyway shimul ji daad to aapako is baat ki dena chaahata hu ki aap jab bhi..jisako bhi reply karati he...unka hosala badhaati he..tab likhati he "god bless u"....kitana pyaar chhupa hota he uname......shimul ji unake liye vaakai me bahot bahot shukriya. shimul ji chalata hu. apana khayal rakhiyega.. bye for now. pari ji. hi. thanks pari ji... dil se nikali huvi daad ka dil se shukriya adaa kar rahe he..kabool kijiyega. thanks...direct dil se. bye for now. apana khayal rakhiyega. virendar ji thanks virendar ji..waise hame aapako takhallus se hi bulaana achha lagata he..Paravana ji...agar aapako koi etaraaz na ho to. aapane hamaara kalaam padha aur reply kiya..vaakai kitani khush-kismat he ye nazam..janaam dil se bahot bahot shukriya hosala afazaai ka. apana khayal rakhiyega. bye for now. |
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7th May 2004, 07:12 AM
[QUOTE]Originally posted by shyam
[B]Dear Shimul ji. aadaab. shimul ji aapane meri hesiyat se kuchh jyaada hi ijjat baksh di..DILNE JO KAHA WOHI LIKHDI HAI, HAAN AAPKO JIYADA LAGRAHA HOGA...but believe me, you deserve more then what I said...shimul ji dil ki gaheraaiyo se ham aapaka shukriya ada kar rahe he..kabool kijiyega...QABUL KARNA HI PADEGA LAGTA HAI... shimul ji aapane jo gaana likha he..usaki ek line hame chho gai..ek khushi dil ne kya maangli..har khushi ko nazar lag gai...wow great line...MUJHE TOU PURI GANA BOHOT ACHHA LAGTA HAI...anyway shimul ji daad to aapako is baat ki dena chaahata hu ki aap jab bhi..jisako bhi reply karati he...unka hosala badhaati he..SHUKRIYA KEHDUN? tab likhati he "god bless u"....kitana pyaar chhupa hota he uname......AAPKO PATA CHALGAAYA, WAH...shimul ji unake liye vaakai me bahot bahot shukriya. AAPKA KAHA SAR-AANKHON PAR...DILSE SHUKRIYA...shimul ji chalata hu. KHUSH RAHIYE YEH DUWA HAMESHA RAHEGI... apana khayal rakhiyega..AAP BHI AAPNA KHAYAL RAKHIYEGA. bye for now. GOD BLESS YOU. Keep smilling....... Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche** *~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~** *Pure Love** |
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