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Koi kisi se mohabbat karta hai -
15th February 2011, 11:31 AM
Pehli baar dard aur ishq se hatkar kuch alag likhne ki koshish ki hai.....
Bataiye aapko kaisa laga.. Aap sab ki Rehnumaayi ki zarurat hai......... Thandi jab lagti hai Maa ko Bacche ko sweater pehnati hai Bhuka ho jo apna baccha tou KyuN Maa so nahi paati hai Tez jo daude baccha tou Maa ka dil ghabraata hai, Mamta ke thandi chaaNv me Sabka bachpan sanwarta hai Koi, kisi se mohabbat karta hai Beta ko maiN afsar banaunga Koi baap yeh shaan se kehta hai Din raat chalaaker rikshaw woh Aadha pet khaker sota hai Dekh shikher per bete ko Woh phule nahi samaata hai Taqdeer kisi ki banane ko LakhoN toofaN se guzarta hai Koi, kisi se mohabbat karta hai Todker khilona behna ka Jhagda woh, usse karta hai Rooth jaaye apni behna tou Hasker usay manaata hai Behna ke haath ka banaa Jala paratha bhi bhaata hai Doli me baithi,dekh behna ko Woh chupker rone lagta hai Koi, kisi se mohabbat karta hai Dilbar 'gar ho door kisi ka Din raat woH aaheN bharta hai Chitthi jab aati hai uski Choom ke usay,sharmaata hai, Seene se lagaaker us chitthi ko phir,AankheN nam kar leta hai Toote dil me ,jhooti aas liye Judaai ka gham woH sehta hai Koi ,kisi se mohabbat karta hai Mehboob ki ek jhalak paane ko Koi aashique kyuN tarasta hai Bas thandi hawa ka ek jhoNka KyuN usko tadpa jaata hai Sajaaker khwaab apni aankoN me NeendoN ko udaaye baitha hai Na manzil ka pata,na saahil ki khabar KaantoN ki raahoN per chalta hai koi ,kisi se mohabbat karta hai... koi, kisi se mohabbat karta hai.. Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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15th February 2011, 11:54 AM
Iss rachna ko saraahne ke liye lafz nahiN mil rahe heiN, Bitiya...! Aap ne bahut khoob likhaa hai...! Mohabat na hoti to ye kahkashaan tak na hota...!
Umdaa shaayri ke liye tah-e-dil se daad qabul kareiN...! Ashirvaad ke liye...!  Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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Behtareen koshish sachaai ko vyakat karne ki..........!!! Pyaar ke itne saare roop ek hi nazam me bahut khoobi se dikhaaye hai aapne.....!!! Bahut acha laga padhkar......!!! Dil se hazaaro croro daad hazir hai......!!! kabool kijiyega.....!!! Aise hi likhti rahiyee....!!! khush rahiyee...........!!! Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!! Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!! |
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15th February 2011, 07:59 PM
Namaste !
Zainy Ji !! Nazm ke ehsaas itne acche hai ki ... taareef ke liye shabd kyaa likhuN sochnaa laazmi saa ho gaya hai ... bahut paas ke chitr aapne itni khoobsurti se khiinche hai ... acchaa laga Padhkar ... main toh kahunga ... aapka leek se haatkar likhnaa safal raha ... ! iss khoobsurat peshkash ko tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... qubuul farmaayeN ... ! haa yeh naa samjhe ki main yunhi taareef kar raha hoon ... aapne sach meN bahut acchi koshish ki hai ... jo kaamiyaab bhi rahi ... ! khush rahen ... apna theek se khayaal rakhen ... duaaoN ke saath ... !  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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15th February 2011, 09:20 PM
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namaste! dil ko sukooN milaa aapki yeh koShiSh paRh ke.. ehsaasoN meiN baDii hi gehrA'ii hay.. yuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee..! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~Dhaval |
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Sahi kaha aapne.. mohabbat na hoti tou yeh aashiyaaN na hota mohabbat na hoti tou shayed kuch bhi na hota........... Yuhi saath dete rahiye............. Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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16th February 2011, 11:27 AM
Very Good work Zainy Jee..........very beautifully explained.
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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radhe radhe insaani rishtoN ko agar koi jode aur yahaa baandhe hai toh woh hai mohabbat ke dhaage ... bahut sacchi aur acchi nazm kahi hai aapne ... dilee daad aur mubaarakbaad humari bhi qabool farmaayeN .. yunhi likhti rahiye ... Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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bahut achy narm nazuk ahsaas hai, bas byaaN thoda kam laga....... nayapan nahi hai, aisa padh bhi chuke haiN..... aur tum itna laprwaahi se nahi likhti ho ....... par haaN, nazm dil ko chooni chahiye, so chu gayee , keep writing .... |
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18th February 2011, 10:10 AM
Zainy saahiba aadaab.. aaj subah jab apki ye rachna padhi yakeen maniye meri aankhon me nami utar aai... wo ehsaas dil me aise chaaye ki bas saara manzar saamne aa gaya... Aisi behtareen manzarkashi pesh karne ke liye main tahe dil se shukrguzaar hoon aapka. Duaa karta hoon ki aage bhi aap yoonhi ehsaason ka khazaana hum pe luTaati rahen.. khush rahiye..
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Aapka bohat bohat shukriyah Kavita jee.. Mujhe khushi hai ke aapko meri nazm pasand aayi.. Yuhi saath deti rahiye.. Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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Aapka tareef karne ka andaaz tou meri nazm se bhi zyada khoobsurat hai... Aapki tareef hum sab ke liye bohat mayine rakhti hai Yuhi saath dete rahiye Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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20th February 2011, 10:09 PM
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Apke pehle 3 band dard ke hain...aur last ke 2 band ishq ke..... Aise hi likhti rahiye....... khush rahiye....... . . Koi Aisa Kamaal Ho Jaye Zindigi Be-Misaal Ho Jaye
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Jee sahi kaha aapne...saare rishte ek dusre se 'mohabbat' naam ke jasbe se hi jode haiN.... Mujhe khushi hai ke aapko meri nazm pasand aayi.. yuhi saath dete rahiye... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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Koshish karungi ke agli baar kuch accha likhun................... ..nazm dil ko chu gayi...matlab mehnat zaaya nahi gayi.............. aagey bhi yuhi rehnumaayi karte rahiyega.. Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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First of all I would like to congratulate you on completing a picture of 'true, selfless and unconditional' Love with words. An art that is. It paints no... it captures a picture of Love which is everpresent in society but often neglected or ignored by 'most' of us. True to your words in your last nazm this one is a rocking one! Often in poetry it happens that the message gets stifled or suffocated when the poet stresses too far on how the poem is structured and whether the metre and rhyming and consistency etc. I salute your ability and your courage to stick to your theme and message! I liked this one will be an understatement! Kudos! May The Almighty Bless You and increase your already abundant talent! Khush Rahein! Abaad Rahein! |
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Tez jo daude baccha tou Maa ka dil ghabraata hai, this is very insighful.....experience se kah raha hu...bus maa ko baap se badalna hoga...wakai jab baccha jab josh me bhagta hai to jab tak vo ruke nahi dil ki dhadkan ruk jaati hain. aapki nazm bahut khoobsurat hai...daad meri taraf se. regards |
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23rd February 2011, 08:23 PM
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 Hamari Bitiya bahut samajhdaar hai, wo samajh gayi thi...! Duaaon main aapko yaad karte heiN hum...! Regards Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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kya koi quota bana liya hai kya ? ki sone se pahle jab pray karenge jab zidd ko yaad karenge? waise ye to bataiye ki apki list me aur kaun kaun hai?..... waise ashirwaad dene ka style accha hai...... |
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23rd February 2011, 08:45 PM
kabhi yun bhi yaad kar liya karo bhai....
Yaad aaye aap lo hum ro roke muskuraaye Zakhm ko ashkon se dho dho ke muskuraaye kya koi quota bana liya hai kya ? ki sone se pahle jab pray karenge jab zidd ko yaad karenge? Sote waqt hum pray kiya nahiN karte, Bhaiya...! SubhaH Khudaa Ji se yahi veenti karte heiN hum ki hamare sabhi jaan pehchaan waalon ko sahi salaamat rakheiN...!  waise ye to bataiye ki apki list me aur kaun kaun hai?..... Mera jigar kahkashaan sa hai mere yaar...! Iss maiN bahut saare logon ke list hai...!  waise ashirwaad dene ka style accha hai... Issi ko kehte heiN Mushkil-e-style...! Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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waise khudaji nahi hota...sirf khuda hota hai.. kabhi suna hai maa apne bete ko kahe..'betaji'? aur ye bhi sahi kaha...muskile style...yani style ki mushkil??? ab bhi waqt hai badal do......style e mushkil ' kar do |
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Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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duudh me gira vo baal accha hai..... jo nahi kharida vo maal accha hai.... bandar ka muh laalam laam accha hai.... kisika gora gora gaal accha hai..... ......ab milaoo qafiya |
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Saiyaad samjhe usska jaal accha hai... Aapne jo kiyaa wo kamaal accha hai... Ashk ke liye kewal rumaal accha hai... Bisaat par mera bhi chaal accha hai... Lagaa diyaa...! Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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aapke naye ghode ka naal accha hai... magar meri ghode ka shawl accha hai... chawal ke saath ye neela daal accha hai.... daal ke andar magar babaal accha hai... daal se jo jala ho, vo behaal accha hai.... behaal apne ghar fatehaal accha hai..... aaiye agee..... |
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Apko pahli bar padha ishq aur dard se hatkar likhne ko koshish ki aapne ...ishq , dard ,pyar ka har ek rup ko bahut khubsurti se bayaan kiya hai aapne sahi hai bilkul maa har dard sahkar bhi apne bachon ko har khushi deti hai har haal me vo sirf apna farj nbhati hai .... Bhuka ho jo apna baccha tou KyuN Maa so nahi paati hai bahut sahi kaha aapne.... insaniyat k har ek har rishte ko badi khubsurti se swaarne ki apki koshish pyari lagi  na rok saka maalik ki ibadat se use koi ye banda hai us parwar digaar ka dafan har riwaj ab us kabra me hai jis par chada hai kafan us pahredar ka.. |
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yuhi saath dete rahiyega........... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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Good to see u back on SDC Fezan sahab...... Shayed aap sahi keh rahe haiN...har rishta dard ya mohabbat se hi juda hota hai.. Yuhi saath dete rahiye, hosake tou Sdc ko waqt diya kijiye... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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Thanks a lott enigma sahab.................... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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29th January 2013, 12:27 PM
La-Jawaab Zainy Sahab, Bohot Khoob... Selfless and pure... Daad kubool kare...
Duaon ke saath Ijazat... Abrar.  Hum to pattharon se mohabbat ka hunar rakhte hain, Tum to phir bhi moom ho "Abrar" ke gale lag kar pighal jaoge... |
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29th January 2013, 05:43 PM
zainy jee.....bahut hee senstive creation hai....touched heart in many ways, u hv described love in its pious form....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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29th January 2013, 09:24 PM
Zainy Sahiba ,
Aap ne jis jazbe se yeh likha hai, main aap ki ghahrai tak jaane wali soch ka mashkoor ho gaya....your poem depicts love (is ke kuch ahsaas meri Poem Love English poetry mein bhi dekhne ko milengea) ..Main aapki Ghazal ki gahraee mein utar gaya hun ki bahar aane ko ji nahin chahta ...Indeed very 2222222222 beautiful. Reps+++ Added. sanjay Sehgal khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar , Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar. |
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