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18th August 2014, 11:08 PM
~*almiyaa*~
shehar meiN badhati khusk-saali ko dekhte,
parindoN ka aik tolaa sir joD ke betha hai!
num aankhoN se kar raha hai aah-o-fugaaN,
'Qafas' meiN do waQt ka rizQ to naseeb ho jata tha!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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19th August 2014, 12:15 AM
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~*almiyaa*~
shehar meiN badhati khusk-saali ko dekhte,
parindoN ka aik tolaa sir joD ke betha hai!
num aankhoN se kar raha hai aah-o-fugaaN,
'Qafas' meiN do waQt ka rizQ to naseeb ho jata tha!
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waaahh Hassan bhai waaah !! ek pursoz daastaan ho jaise !!
mujhe personally jo ehsaas shayari mein sab se zyada pasand hai wo hai irony ka ehsaas (only a personal opinion, not prescriptive at all) ... aur aap ke qalaam mein is qadar dil ko cheer dene waali irony hai, jo ise bahaut khaas bana deti hai meri nigaah mein. alfaaz ke taur pe bhi, "khushk-saali" aur "num aankhon" ki irony bhi khoob lagi !!
WAAAH !! Dheron daad Hassan bhai !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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19th August 2014, 12:18 PM
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dostoN ... ek chhota sa experience ya experiment keh lein, aap se share karna chaahoonga .... ki kaise is bazm mein huwee guftagoo se kuchh seekh kar use apply karne ki koshish ki hai .. apne ek sher ko improve karne ke liye ...
mera ek pehle kaha huwa sher tha jis meiN lafz "qafas" ka istemaal huwa tha (wo ghazal SDC mein pehle arz kari huwee hai) ...
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=74881
pehle ka sher kucch is tarah tha ...
mere hum-safar barhe shauq se deiN qafas ki mujh ko mubaarakeiN
mera raah-bar saiyaad ki bhi barhe jatan se safaayee de
-zarraa
is sher meiN "qafas" se match karne ke liye haalanki "saiyaad" ka zikr tha, lekin baaki 2 symbols "hum-safar" aur "raah-bar" kisi "safar" se related symbols the na ki "qafas" se related ...haalanki hum ne pehle ye kaha hai ki lafz ke figurative meaning ka bridge ya correlation banaane ke liye ek hint bhi kaafi hai .... lekin phir main ne socha ki symbols ko mix kyoon kiya jaaye, saare ke saare symbols "qafas" se hi relate kar ke dekhte hain, taaki sher single minded ban sake aur shaayad lutf halka sa barh sake ...
to is sher ko modify kar ke, kuchh aisa kar diya hai ....
sabhi hum-nasheen-e-chaman mere deiN qafas ki haNs ke mubaarakeiN
mujhe baaghbaaN saiyaad ki hai barhe jatan se safaayee de
-zarraa
ab ye koshish theek rahi ki ghalat, lutf barh gaya ki ghat gaya, ya koyee aur khaami paida ho gayee hai, ya koyee khaami pehle se hi maujood thi jo durust naheen ho paayee hai, in sab maslon par rehnumaayee ke liye ahl-e-bazm ka muntazir rahoonga ...
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zarraaa bhai main kyaa kahun.... aap apne aap me ek misaal hain, SDC kee is bazm ki shaan hain.... aapke dono sher bemisaal hain aur ek se badh kar ek lutf samete hue hain... meri jaanib se laakhon daad aapki khidmat me pesh hain..... lihte rahiye... ehsaas baanTte rahiye...
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19th August 2014, 12:25 PM
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~*almiyaa*~
shehar meiN badhati khusk-saali ko dekhte,
parindoN ka aik tolaa sir joD ke betha hai!
num aankhoN se kar raha hai aah-o-fugaaN,
'Qafas' meiN do waQt ka rizQ to naseeb ho jata tha!
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behad khoob, behad khoob janaab.... waaaah kyaa kahne... bahot aalaa parwaaz aur takhaiyyul ka namuna hain ye aashar,..... bahot mubaarak ho aapko....
Shaad....
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19th August 2014, 12:28 PM
Zarraa saahab.... Qafas ke lihaaz se ek adnaa si koshish dekhiye.....
ik khooon me bheege qafas ko dekh kar sochaa kiye,
Mar mar miTey kitne parinde zindagee ke waaste.....!!
Shaad.....
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19th August 2014, 12:44 PM
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Aadeil bhai ... teenon aashaar par daad. mere comments laal font mein hain.
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Zarraasaab,
bas aapki mohabbat aur hausla afzaaee hi hai jo hum meN itna jazbaa taamir karta hai... aapka har lamha mamnoon hooN....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:00 PM
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jab sabaa bhii azaab lagne lagii
ye qafas aashiyaanaa lagne lagaa
wwaaahh bahaut khoob !! khoob maani ka khel khela Aadeil bhai !! mere interpretation mein is mein cause and effect ka khel hai jis ki 2 sooratein nazar aa hai hain (1) oola ka phenomenon is the cause and the saani ka phenomenon is the effect (i.e.oola ki baat se saani ki baat paida huwee hai) (2) both these 2 phenomena of oola and saani are the twin effects of a third cause which is left to the reader's imagination
pata naheen, may be I have completely mis interpreted the deeper meaning, par jo bhi hai laajawaab hai !!! dheron dheron daad !!!
naye naye ashiyaane ko maiN saraab samjhaa
qafas qafas-aaraa* samjhe maiN to azaab samjhaa
ek bahaut hi zabardast aur falsafaanaa sher se nawaaza hai Aadeil bhai !! mazmoon bilkul saaf hai aur maani bhi takreeban ayaan hi hai (90% tak) ... bas saani ke interpretation mein halka sa atak gaya hoon.... sawaal jo mere man mein hai ki "qafas qafas-aaraa samjhe" - in alfaaz mein qafas-aaraa ka qafas ke mutalliq kya rawaiyya pinhaan hai, jis par shayar react kar raha hai by saying "maiN to azaab samjha" ? haalaanki main ne 1-2 hypothesis form ki hain, but why speculate when the master craftsman of this sher is there with us !!! ek baar phir se dheron daad !!!
(*one who decorates cage)
jabiin-e-khaaksii meN ek jabiin-e-saNg bhii aisa
yahaaN nazr-e-qafas jaaN aur safhaa-e-dahr dikhaataa hai
Wwwaaahhh !!! Bahaut khoob !! Is sher ne lafz-e-jabeen ki guftagu ko bhi munawaar kiya tha aur ab lafz-e-qafas ki charcha ko bhi darakshaan kar raha hai !! Tah e dil se daad Aadeil bhai !!
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Phir se bahaut bahaut si daad Aadeil bhai ... mere commets oopar red font mein hain ....
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waaaaaahhhh!!! Zarraasaab,
pehle sher pe aapne bilkul sahi farmaayaa... jaise aapne hamaare dil kii baat paRh li ho..
dusre sher meN.. maiN samajhta tha ki qafas qafas-aaraa samjhe pe doubt zaroor hoga
ye sher ko ek aam aadmi kii nazar se paRhenge to bilkul saamaanya baat baahar aati hai...
hum jab nayaa ghar kharidte haiN to humse zyaadaa jazbaati hamaare dost aur qaribii ho jaate haiN .. aur hamaare saath wo bhi use sajaane lagte haiN... ab iisme kaii baateN kahi hai..
ki vaise bhii mere liye to ye nayaa aashyaanaa ek saraab (illusion) hai.. magar kuch aise bhii log hote haiN jo ki use iis liye sajaane aaye haiN kyuN ki unko rashk hai mujhse aur wo samajhte haiN ki ye mere liye qafas banne wala hai.. per maiN to jaantaa hi hooN ki ye mera azaab hai.
maine koshish kii hai sher ke maanee bataane kii.. aapke sujhaav ka intezaar rahega...
aapka maskoor..... Adil
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:14 PM
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Aaj qayaamat dhaane ke iraade se aap mehfil mein daakhil huwe the Aadeil bhai, aur is maqsad mein aap pooree tarah qaamyaab huwe hain Wwwaaahh kya kya dilangez jigardoz sher farmaaya hai !! AAAAH AUR WAAAH !!!
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Zarraasaab,
aapki itnii muhabbat aur hamaarii adnaa si koshish pe paziraii ka kiis qadar se shukriya adaa karooN?......
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:15 PM
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Zarra bhai.....aapki bazm me kuch waqt haazir na ho saka iske liye....muaafi ataa kare....,,bhai....Qafas par meri bhi do - teen tukbandi pesh hai......
pade saiyyaad jab piichhe parinde ko samajh aaya
Qafas me'n hi raha hota , bhala hota , bura hota.
mujhko rahane hi De baaho.n me yu apni daayam
Tu qafas kholke panchhi ko udaata kyun hai
deed e falak navardee ki lazzat chali gayi
To kyaa huya qafas me'n agar andliib hai
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waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh!!!!
Ufaqsaab,
ek se ek laajawaab aashaar.....
dheroN dheroN daad-o-mubaarakbaad
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:19 PM
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wahhh... wahh... onchaaiyoN ko chuu rahi hai aap ki shayri, Adil bhai!
aise hi aur taraqqi karte rahiye... hur pal dua hai..
waaHHH! hur lafz pur-asar... behad umdaH shair kaha
hai bhai... dherooN daad...
wahhhh... bohat khoob!!...
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seedhe lafzoN se seedha dil per waar kiya hai Adil bhai..
bohat bohat khoob..
wahhh!!! bohat hi zaberdast aur aik achhuta khiyaal...
dil se nilkli dherooN daad pesh-e-nazar hai...
bohat khoob!
masha Allah! kia khiyaal pesh kiya hai .. wahh! wahh!
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Hassanbhai,
aapka teh-e-dil se shukr guzaar hooN itnii muhabbat aur hausla-afzaaee ke liye.. duaoN ke saath... Adil
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na qafas kaa kHauf jinko na chaman kii chaah rakhte
maiN guloN se puchhtaa hooN wo parinde ab kahaaN hai
ye qafas hai raen-basera aur maiN taaIr*-e-dil
jo chaman se uD ke khud aa mila sayyaad se
kamar se baandh ke wo khinch rahaa suunaa qafas-e-ruuh
kise uthaanee hai azaab is sard murde baar ki
Aadeil bhai aadaab......
waah janaab aapke is hunar ke to ham qaayal ho ggaye hain...... aap insaan hain ya sher kahne ki machine..... idhar huqm huaa nahi ke udhar sher chapne shuru aur wo bhi is kadar ke bas waah waaahhh hi nikalta hai.................
har sher me aapki alag kareegaree nazar aatii hai bhai.... likhte rahen mahfil jamaate rahen....
Shaad.......
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Shoaibbhai,
aapki itnii paziraaii aur itnii muhabbat ke to hum qaayal haiN
bas yuN hi saath dete rahiyega.... aapka mamnoon hooN....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:21 PM
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teri yaadoN ke qafas meiN aise jakray haiN jese!
zanjeereN jo lipti haiN paaoN se, humeN virsaa meiN mili hooN!
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Qafas meiN qaid panchi ki khaber rakhna, ae saheb!
mazloom ki aah farsh to kia arsh tak hilaa deti hai....
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waaaaaaaaaaaaahhhh!!!
hassanbhai,
dono aashaar behad hi khubsurat haiN... dheroN dheroN daad....
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:23 PM
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rooh ka dard kisiii ko nazar nahii aataa...
Qafas me qaid ye bulbul bahot tadaptee hai...
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waaaaaaahhhh...
Shoaibbhai,
bahot hi sahej si baat magar khub gehraai se bayaaN kii hai.....
dheron daad-o-mubaarakbaad
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:44 PM
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shaq-o-gumaaN ke qafas khud bana liye hum ne
falak ko choomte girne ka jo n dar hota
- zarraa
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dostoN ... ek chhota sa experience ya experiment keh lein, aap se share karna chaahoonga .... ki kaise is bazm mein huwee guftagoo se kuchh seekh kar use apply karne ki koshish ki hai .. apne ek sher ko improve karne ke liye ...
mera ek pehle kaha huwa sher tha jis meiN lafz "qafas" ka istemaal huwa tha (wo ghazal SDC mein pehle arz kari huwee hai) ...
http://www.shayri.com/forums/showthread.php?t=74881
pehle ka sher kucch is tarah tha ...
mere hum-safar barhe shauq se deiN qafas ki mujh ko mubaarakeiN
mera raah-bar saiyaad ki bhi barhe jatan se safaayee de
-zarraa
is sher meiN "qafas" se match karne ke liye haalanki "saiyaad" ka zikr tha, lekin baaki 2 symbols "hum-safar" aur "raah-bar" kisi "safar" se related symbols the na ki "qafas" se related ...haalanki hum ne pehle ye kaha hai ki lafz ke figurative meaning ka bridge ya correlation banaane ke liye ek hint bhi kaafi hai .... lekin phir main ne socha ki symbols ko mix kyoon kiya jaaye, saare ke saare symbols "qafas" se hi relate kar ke dekhte hain, taaki sher single minded ban sake aur shaayad lutf halka sa barh sake ...
to is sher ko modify kar ke, kuchh aisa kar diya hai ....
sabhi hum-nasheen-e-chaman mere deiN qafas ki haNs ke mubaarakeiN
mujhe baaghbaaN saiyaad ki hai barhe jatan se safaayee de
-zarraa
ab ye koshish theek rahi ki ghalat, lutf barh gaya ki ghat gaya, ya koyee aur khaami paida ho gayee hai, ya koyee khaami pehle se hi maujood thi jo durust naheen ho paayee hai, in sab maslon par rehnumaayee ke liye ahl-e-bazm ka muntazir rahoonga ...
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Zarraasaab,
kya khub aashaar pesh kiye haiN aapne.... ek se badHkar ek sher hai.... aur aapke sher meN hum-safar aur raah-bar se aapne ek relation banaayii bhii thiiN haalaanki ye sher ko thoDa kamzor banaa rahaa tha jise aapne ba-khubii lutf badHaa diya hai....
daad hi daad aapko hamaari jaanibse...
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:46 PM
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Zarraa saahab.... Qafas ke lihaaz se ek adnaa si koshish dekhiye.....
ik khooon me bheege qafas ko dekh kar sochaa kiye,
Mar mar miTey kitne parinde zindagee ke waaste.....!!
Shaad.....
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh!!!!
kya khubsurat fasafaanaa khayaal pesh kiya hai, Shoaibbhai..... kya adaaegii hai, kya manzar hai, kya tegh hai iis sher meN.......
dheroN dheroN daad-o-mubaarakbaad hamari jaanibse qubul farmaaiye
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 01:48 PM
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~*almiyaa*~
shehar meiN badhati khusk-saali ko dekhte,
parindoN ka aik tolaa sir joD ke betha hai!
num aankhoN se kar raha hai aah-o-fugaaN,
'Qafas' meiN do waQt ka rizQ to naseeb ho jata tha!
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waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!!!
bahot hi aalaa khayaal bayaaN kiya hai, Hassanbhai......
dheroN dheroN daad.............
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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19th August 2014, 05:52 PM
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waaahh Hassan bhai waaah !! ek pursoz daastaan ho jaise !!
mujhe personally jo ehsaas shayari mein sab se zyada pasand hai wo hai irony ka ehsaas (only a personal opinion, not prescriptive at all) ... aur aap ke qalaam mein is qadar dil ko cheer dene waali irony hai, jo ise bahaut khaas bana deti hai meri nigaah mein. alfaaz ke taur pe bhi, "khushk-saali" aur "num aankhon" ki irony bhi khoob lagi !!
WAAAH !! Dheron daad Hassan bhai !!
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Zarraa saheb,
khaak lafzooN ko iss qadar wuQQat bakhshne ke liye be-had mamnooN hoon!
aap ki tareef aur daad sir aankhoN per!
Milte rahiye ga,,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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19th August 2014, 05:55 PM
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behad khoob, behad khoob janaab.... waaaah kyaa kahne... bahot aalaa parwaaz aur takhaiyyul ka namuna hain ye aashar,..... bahot mubaarak ho aapko....
Shaad....
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janab-e-wala hausla afzaai aur pazeeraayi ke liye
dil ki attaH gehraiyoN se manooN hooN!
Milte rahiye,,
DuaooN ke saath,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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19th August 2014, 05:57 PM
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waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!!!
bahot hi aalaa khayaal bayaaN kiya hai, Hassanbhai......
dheroN dheroN daad.............
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Adil bhai,
Daad aur hausla afzaai liye bohat bohat shukriyaaH!
Milte rahiye ga,
DuaooN ke saath,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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19th August 2014, 06:11 PM
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waaaaaaaaaaaaaaH!
bohat khoob... aik naya aur behtareeen khiyaal..
DherooN daad-o-mubarakbaad Zarraa saheb...
meHfil roshan karte rahiye...
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Is pyaar bhari daad ka bahaut bahaut shukriya Hassan bhai
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha
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19th August 2014, 06:14 PM
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wahhh zarraa saheb...
shair ke dono roop haseeN haiN.....
pehle shair ki apni aik khasiyat aur jagaH hai...
kyuN ke ussi ke wajah se aap ki aik behtareen ghazal mukamal huii!
aur dosre shair ne fusoon-e-alfaaz ke liye khaas jalway bikharay...
Allah kare zor-e-Qalam aur ziyaadaH! ..
DuaooN ke saath,
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Is qadar meethee daad daad ataa farmaayee Hassan bhai aap ne ki rom rom khushi se bhar gaya Hassan bhai !! Tah e dil se mashqoor hoon aap ka !!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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19th August 2014, 06:16 PM
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zarraaa bhai main kyaa kahun.... aap apne aap me ek misaal hain, SDC kee is bazm ki shaan hain.... aapke dono sher bemisaal hain aur ek se badh kar ek lutf samete hue hain... meri jaanib se laakhon daad aapki khidmat me pesh hain..... lihte rahiye... ehsaas baanTte rahiye...
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Aap ki is qadar mohabbat se bhari huwee zarranawaazee aur hausla afzaayee ka main qarzdaar hoon Shaad bhai !! Aap ke saath se bahaut sahaara milta hai !!
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19th August 2014, 06:23 PM
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Zarraa saahab.... Qafas ke lihaaz se ek adnaa si koshish dekhiye.....
ik khooon me bheege qafas ko dekh kar sochaa kiye,
Mar mar miTey kitne parinde zindagee ke waaste.....!!
Shaad.....
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wwwwwwaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhh !!!!!!! baakamaal laajawaab shaandaar !!!
khoon mein bheega qafas, mar mitey zindagi ke waaste ... an iconic statement !!!
ye sher sulagta hua shola bhi hai, aansoo ka nam qatra bhi hai aur dard bhari khoon ki dhaar bhi hai !!! is par anginat daad nisaar Shaad bhai !!!
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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19th August 2014, 06:28 PM
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waaaaaahhhh!!! Zarraasaab,
pehle sher pe aapne bilkul sahi farmaayaa... jaise aapne hamaare dil kii baat paRh li ho..
dusre sher meN.. maiN samajhta tha ki qafas qafas-aaraa samjhe pe doubt zaroor hoga
ye sher ko ek aam aadmi kii nazar se paRhenge to bilkul saamaanya baat baahar aati hai...
hum jab nayaa ghar kharidte haiN to humse zyaadaa jazbaati hamaare dost aur qaribii ho jaate haiN .. aur hamaare saath wo bhi use sajaane lagte haiN... ab iisme kaii baateN kahi hai..
ki vaise bhii mere liye to ye nayaa aashyaanaa ek saraab (illusion) hai.. magar kuch aise bhii log hote haiN jo ki use iis liye sajaane aaye haiN kyuN ki unko rashk hai mujhse aur wo samajhte haiN ki ye mere liye qafas banne wala hai.. per maiN to jaantaa hi hooN ki ye mera azaab hai.
maine koshish kii hai sher ke maanee bataane kii.. aapke sujhaav ka intezaar rahega...
aapka maskoor..... Adil
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Waah waah !!! Bahaut khoob !!! Jitna khoobsurat sher, utna hi khoobsurat explanation bhi diya hai Aadeil bhai !! Mujhe bhi takreeban aisa hi laga tha, par aap ne jis khoobsurti aur saadgi se samjhaaya hai, lutf aur bhi bardh gaya hai. Phir se dheron dheron daad aap ko !!!
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19th August 2014, 06:28 PM
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Zarraa saahab.... Qafas ke lihaaz se ek adnaa si koshish dekhiye.....
ik khooon me bheege qafas ko dekh kar sochaa kiye,
Mar mar miTey kitne parinde zindagee ke waaste.....!!
Shaad.....
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waaHH wahhh wahhh.......
bas daad hi daad.. because I'm speechless!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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19th August 2014, 06:31 PM
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Zarraasaab,
kya khub aashaar pesh kiye haiN aapne.... ek se badHkar ek sher hai.... aur aapke sher meN hum-safar aur raah-bar se aapne ek relation banaayii bhii thiiN haalaanki ye sher ko thoDa kamzor banaa rahaa tha jise aapne ba-khubii lutf badHaa diya hai....
daad hi daad aapko hamaari jaanibse...
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Bahaut bahaut shukriya Aadeil sahab ... koshish ko saraahne ke liye aap ka tah e dil se shukrguzaar hoon !!!
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19th August 2014, 08:32 PM
ae insaan! hum haiN aadi-e-qafas, azaadi nahi humeN matloob!
yeHi guzar basar hai apna! bahir nikle to mar na jayeN gay!??
matloob : desire
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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19th August 2014, 08:53 PM
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ae insaan! hum haiN aadi-e-qafas, azaadi nahi humeN matloob!
yeHi guzar basar hai apna! bahir nikle to mar na jayeN gay!??
matloob : desire
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Wah wah wah !! Qafas ko panaah ke roop mein pesh kar ke aap ne ek alag hi ehsaas numaayaan kiya hai !! Kya kehne !! Bahaut khoob Hassan bhai !!
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19th August 2014, 09:00 PM
maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
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20th August 2014, 10:20 AM
na chaman rahaa na qafas rahe ye parinde aaj yateem hue
mere saamne ye ujaR gayaa mere saamne wo tabaah hue
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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20th August 2014, 11:00 AM
par katartaa kyuN hai ae saiyaad tu
jab qafas hi hai thikaanaa ban gayaa
sajaane do qafas-aaraa ko phir aaj
qafas meN bhii zaraa si taazgii ho
qafas-ba-dosh* hi to saiyaad ka azaab rahaa
mera to aaj qafas-zaad** phir khitaab rahaa
(*cage on shoulder, **born in cage)
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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20th August 2014, 11:19 AM
tiiliyaaN ginte ginte chaman tang hue
waaN bayaabaaN hue yaaN qafas zang hue
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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20th August 2014, 12:28 PM
shor-e-parind sun, ki kahiN ittihaam* mera
leke qafas na aaye ho saiyaad baaG meN
(*suspicion)
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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20th August 2014, 12:39 PM
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ae insaan! hum haiN aadi-e-qafas, azaadi nahi humeN matloob!
yeHi guzar basar hai apna! bahir nikle to mar na jayeN gay!??
matloob : desire
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waaaahh!!!
Hassanbhai,
kya khub sher taamir kiya hai.......
daad qubul kijiye...
ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से
अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता
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20th August 2014, 01:43 PM
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na chaman rahaa na qafas rahe ye parinde aaj yateem hue
mere saamne ye ujaR gayaa mere saamne wo tabaah hue
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waah !! anokha khayaal aur khoobsurat bayaan !! Daad hi daad Aadeil bhai !!
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20th August 2014, 01:46 PM
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par katartaa kyuN hai ae saiyaad tu
jab qafas hi hai thikaanaa ban gayaa
sajaane do qafas-aaraa ko phir aaj
qafas meN bhii zaraa si taazgii ho
qafas-ba-dosh* hi to saiyaad ka azaab rahaa
mera to aaj qafas-zaad** phir khitaab rahaa
(*cage on shoulder, **born in cage)
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Wwwwwaaaaaaahhhhhhhh !!!!!! teenon aashaar kamaal ke hain !! aapne qafas ko ek general symbol se utha kar ek personal space bana diya hai jo bahaut khaas laga. Saath hi teenon aashaar mein gehri fiqr aur khoobsurat bayaan to hai hi !!! Beshumaar daad Aadeil bhai !!!
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20th August 2014, 01:47 PM
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tiiliyaaN ginte ginte chaman tang hue
waaN bayaabaaN hue yaaN qafas zang hue
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Wwwwaaaahhhhh !!! Behtareen khayaal aur kamaal ka bayaan !!! Bahaut si daad Aadeil sahab !!!!
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20th August 2014, 01:49 PM
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shor-e-parind sun, ki kahiN ittihaam* mera
leke qafas na aaye ho saiyaad baaG meN
(*suspicion)
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Wwwwwaaaaahhhhhhhh !!!!!! Ehsaas cheekh cheekh ke apne hone ka suboot de rahe hain aur baat gosh se ho kar dil tak utar ja rahi hai !!! Dheron daad Aadeil bhai !!!!
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20th August 2014, 07:19 PM
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Kis tarah maiN todta qafas ka aasraa
Aye kaash key yaad hota ghar ka raastaa
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back with a bang!
wahhh.. bohat khoob.
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20th August 2014, 08:07 PM
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Kis tarah maiN todta qafas ka aasraa
Aye kaash key yaad hota ghar ka raastaa
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Welcome back N@zneen ji !!
Aur waah ! Kya zabardast sher kaha aap ne ! Agar ghar ka raasta chhoot jaaye to qafas ke hi aasre rehte hain ... aur kab qafas qafas hote hue bhi ghar ban jaata hai !!! Bahaut khoob !!! Dher saari daad !!
aur ye bhi bahaut achchha hua ki bilkul in the "nick of time" aap ka khoobsurat sher humein mil gaya ... kyunki bas 1 ghante mein hum agle lafz par jaane waale hain
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20th August 2014, 08:24 PM
kuch haseeN khwaab saja bethe haiN tere sung ae koyal!
yeH qafas ab humeN jaaN se bhi piyaara lagne laga hai!
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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