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Sdc collective ghazal. ..2 - 1st July 2014, 02:20 PM

Agla matla isi thread per dena hai ya alag thread banega?




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1st July 2014, 03:27 PM

Ok my Matla for new Sdc ghazal:


Ek tarahi ghazal ka matla hai..



Beh'r 122/122/122/122



Hua'a Bekhudi ka asar dheere dheere
Idhar dheere dheere udhar dheere dheere


Kafiya:Asar, Udhar.....
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Also let her know why????????????????


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1st July 2014, 08:08 PM

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1st July 2014, 08:22 PM

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both cannot be used in this ghazal.
mujhe pata tha behr ki prob hogi :'(:'(:'(

mujhe kafiye ka breakup batao.

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1st July 2014, 09:05 PM

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mujhe pata tha behr ki prob hogi :'(:'(:'(

mujhe kafiye ka breakup batao.

'magar' kya ab ye hai behr mein?
Magar poori tarah bahr meN hai Nazneen sahiba.

Qaafiye ka break up i..dhar, u..dhar aise hoga. El chhoti aawaaz phir ek lambi aawaaz.


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1st July 2014, 09:58 PM

Sumit bhai..wah...agla sher pesh-e-kidhmat hai..

Khudaai khud zameen par aa gayi hai
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1st July 2014, 10:37 PM

Waah ! Zainy ji ! Behad khoobsurat matla diya hai aapne !!

Aur Anjaan ji aur Mast ji ne bhi khoob sher kahe !!

Meri or se ye shikastah koshish ...

adoo hai zamaana unheiN dil ki baateiN
kaho jaldi jaldi magar dheere dheere

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Zainyji,
bahot hi khubsurat matla pesh kiya hai..
Sumeetji, Anuji, Zarraaji, aapke sher bhii behad khubsurat haiN...

lijiye, Mera sher....


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Waah ! Zainy ji ! Behad khoobsurat matla diya hai aapne !!

Aur Anjaan ji aur Mast ji ne bhi khoob sher kahe !!

Meri or se ye shikastah koshish ...

adoo hai zamaana unheiN dil ki baateiN
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bahot hi khubsurat matla pesh kiya hai..
Sumeetji, Anuji, Zarraaji, aapke sher bhii behad khubsurat haiN...

lijiye, Mera sher....


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ki jaise huii ho sahar dheere dheere
Masha Allah bohat khoob dostoN. ..superb




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2nd July 2014, 07:57 PM

Sheri silsile ko aage badhaate hue meri jaanib se bhi ek sher arz hai...


khabar hai ke tum bin nahee jee sakenge,
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Khudaai khud zameen par aa gayi hai
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shaayad 'zehar' kaafiye meN nahi baith rahaa hai.. beher ke hisaab se nahiN.. 'asar', 'udhar', 'nazar', 'magar', 'sahar', 'basar' isee dhun meN honaa chaahiye..



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3rd July 2014, 12:53 PM

Aik Sher Meri Jaanib Se Bhi Pesh hai...

Ajab Qehar Dhaata Raha Dil Pe Koi
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Sumit bhai..wah...agla sher pesh-e-kidhmat hai..

Khudaai khud zameen par aa gayi hai
uff teri nazar ka zehar dheere dheere
ijaazat ho toh sujhav dene kii gustakhee karta hoo.n

Zamee.n pe khud aane lagee ab khudaii
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Honay lagay ham amar dheere dheere!



Masha Allah Masha Allah. ..bohat khoob. ..

ek se badhker ek sher ban rahe hain...

Lagta hai bohat khoob surat ghazal banne waali hai...




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Ahmedbhai,
behad khubsurat sher pesh kiya hai... mere khayaal meN shuruaat meN ek ek taktee kam hai.. dono ula aur saani meN

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11th July 2014, 12:16 AM

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bohat khoobsurat nazam ban rahi hai Maine bhi cahaha kuch arz karu kuch ban nahi raha tha dimag pe zor dene k bad ek do line bani hai jo pesh karna chahta hu Pata nahi kaisi hai ummeed hai aap sab ko pasand aaye

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bohat khoobsurat nazam ban rahi hai Maine bhi cahaha kuch arz karu kuch ban nahi raha tha dimag pe zor dene k bad ek do line bani hai jo pesh karna chahta hu Pata nahi kaisi hai ummeed hai aap sab ko pasand aaye

pilaa do mujhe ishq ka jaam lab se
behak jaay ham tum magar dheere dheere.....
bahut accha sher kaha hai furqann bhai....bilkul beherband.

ek aur koshish ho jaaye kisi dusre qafiye me?...ye qafiya ho gaya hai

once more furqann bhai.

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bahut accha sher kaha hai furqann bhai....bilkul beherband.

ek aur koshish ho jaaye kisi dusre qafiye me?...ye qafiya ho gaya hai

once more furqann bhai.

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shukriya zidd sahab aur ek baat batana chahta hu mujhe urdo aati hai bt itni ziyada nahi aati aap sabka saath rahe to Insha Allah zarur Sikh jayege qafiya k meaning nahi Pata hai mujhe



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bahut accha matla pesh kiya hai zainy g.........main bhi try kar raha hoon......



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Welcome to sdc furqaan....achchi jagah aye ho yahan tumhe bahot kuch seekhne milega aur tum direct 'Shayri ki Paatshala' section me aye ho tht means u seriously want to learn abt ghazal writing.....Zidd yahan ka moderator hai teacher bhi keh sakte ho lekin he's cool abhi tak bachcha hai dimag se

Rahi qafiya ki baat to tumne jo 'magar' word use kiya hai apni sher me wo qafiya hai...waise to ye word maine register karwai thi lekin zarra aur zidd dono ne use kar liya aur tumne bhi anjane me use kar liya

Isliye qafiya change karo....waise to tumne zidd se pucha tha sawaal lekin mujhe bich me koodne ki adat hai
shukriya naaz bich me koodne k liye :P zidd saahab Pata nahi kab reply karne waale the waise mujhe shayri karna nahi aata Sikh raha hu itne mushkil se ye do line socha tha ab phir se dimag pe zor daalna padega



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Great meri category ke ho qki mujhe bhi dimag par zor daalna padta hai

15th July last date hai uske pehle post kar dena

maine abhi qadam rakha hai shayri ki dunya me us liye dimaag pe zorr daalna padta hai aap to purane ho to kyu????

koshish karuga 15th July se pehle nahi hua to phir dusri gazal pe try kar lege



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Meri progress kachue ki raftar jaisi hai ek wajah ye hai aur ek wajah ye bhi hai ki mujhe dimag par zada zor daalna pasand nhi

Tum har section me jake posting karo ghazals par comment karo dost banao sath sath ghazal bhi seekhte raho

Abhi to kuch nhi pehle sdc par bahot raunak hoti thi waise koi baat nhi hum hain to raunak bhi ajaegi
tumhare paas hai dimag sun k acha laga dont mind

aap sabka saath yun hi bane rahe to Insha Allah ham bhi zarur Sikh jayge aur rahi baat ronaq ki to jaha aap sabka saath ho waha ronaq na ho ye mumkin nahi

aap itne bhi aam nahi k ham aapko
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Zehan hil jata hai jab aap yaad Aate hai.....





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aapne kahaa Furqaan bhai aapko qaafiye ka matlab nahi maloom.....

bas tajjub ye hotaa hai ke aapne apne signature ke itnaa meyaari shher daala hai jo poori tarah beharband hai aur khayaalon ki parwaaz kisii meyaari shaayar jaisee hai....

Qalam hai haath me khanjar ki kya zarurat hai....
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aapne kahaa Furqaan bhai aapko qaafiye ka matlab nahi maloom.....

bas tajjub ye hotaa hai ke aapne apne signature ke itnaa meyaari shher daala hai jo poori tarah beharband hai aur khayaalon ki parwaaz kisii meyaari shaayar jaisee hai....

Qalam hai haath me khanjar ki kya zarurat hai....
parha likha hu saliqe se khoon karta hu........


kyaa ye sher aapka hai...????
shaad sahab mujhe shayri ka bohat shoq hai aksar do line sher 4line sher jo waqt k hisaab se zubaan pe Aa jate hai wo kabhi kahi sune hue hote hai aur kai baar khud kahe hue lafz sher ban jaate hai
rahi baat qafiye to ye Urdu word hai mujhe Urdu likhna padhna Aata hai lekin bohat se Urdu word aise hai jiska matlab nahi Pata hota aise moqe pe main puch liya karta hu aur kisi se Pata nahi chalta to andaza lagata hu k uska kya meanings hoge jaise k beharband is word ka matlab to samajh Aa bt explain karna mere liye thoda mushkil hai ummeed hai aapko meri baat samajh rahi ho bcz mera explain kabhi kabhi khud main nahi samajh paata



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Aur shaad sahab waise to lafzo se khelne k liye kai cizo ko jaanna hota hai samajhna hota hai lekin meri samajh se sher likhne ko bs dil ka dard zubaan pe laana hota hai jab dil me dard bhara ho to zubaan pe sher laana koi mushkil nahi hota ye meri soch hai jo bata raha hu baqi aap mujhse ziyada jaante ho k ek shayar ko sher kehne k liye kya zaruri hota hai kuch bol diya ho to nadaan samajh k maaf kar Dena naraaz mat hona



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Aapki har baat jaayaz hai magar mera sawaal wahi ka wahii hai...
Kyaa above mentioned sher aapka hai...jawaab zaroor dijiyega..


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Aapki har baat jaayaz hai magar mera sawaal wahi ka wahii hai...
Kyaa above mentioned sher aapka hai...jawaab zaroor dijiyega..
maafi chahta hu shaad bhai in sab baat me aapki baat ka jawaab reh gaya aur mujhe khayaal bhi nahi hua
ji Nahi ye mera nahi hai kafi pehle kahi padha tha Mujhe ye bhi thk se nahi Pata k jo main typ kiya hu Singh me wohi pada tha ya kuch kuch lafz Cheng hai



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Tumhe qafiya kya hota hai pata nahin behr ke bare mein pata nahin lekin jo sher tumne post kiya uska qafiya bhi sahi tha aur jaisa ki zidd ne kaha wo behr mein bhi thi......eda banke humein peda to nahin khila rahe
hahaha naaz ji ye bhi khoob rahi waise peda mujhe pasand nahi to main luga hi kyu peda ?? I like kaju katri
aur ye baat Sach hai mujhe uska means Pata nahi ye alag baat hai k ab Pata chal gaya jaise k main bola tha mujhe Urdu padhna likhna aati hai bt kuch kuch Urdu words k meanings nahi Pata hote aur rahi baat k Sach aur jhut ki to aapko bata du waise to main jhut bolta hu lekin jaldi nahi bolta aur kisi buzurg ne mujhe naseehat ki thi beta hamesha talib-e-ilm ban k chalna ustaad nahi sikhne waalo ki galti ki maafi hoti hai aur sikhane waale galti kare to us galti ki pakad hoti hai

ilm ki shuruwaat tab hoti hai jab insaan kehta hai mujhe nahi Aata
aur ilm us waqt khatam ho jaata hai jab insaan kehta hai MUJHE Aata hai...........

I hope u understand



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dua hai rahe saath yun hi hamara
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maafi chahta hu shaad bhai in sab baat me aapki baat ka jawaab reh gaya aur mujhe khayaal bhi nahi hua
ji Nahi ye mera nahi hai kafi pehle kahi padha tha Mujhe ye bhi thk se nahi Pata k jo main typ kiya hu Singh me wohi pada tha ya kuch kuch lafz Cheng hai
Furqan ji bahot shukriya jo aapne is baat ko khudd qubool kiyaa.... mujhe pata hai e sher aapne khud nahi likhaa hai ... na hi wo dusre sher

Apne Haalaat ka khud ehsaas nahi hai mujhko...
Maine logo se suna hai k pareshan hu main....


mere kahne ka sabab yahii thaa ke ham kissiii doosre shaayar ke sher ko apnaa nahi kah sakte ... kisii aur ki mehnat ko ham apnaa haq nahi maaan sakte na hi uskaa credit khud le sakte hain.... we have to give proper judgement with the related shaayr.... aapko agar us shaayar na naam nahi maloom hai to aap not mine ya unknown likh sakte hain bajaae chuppchaap use apne signature me post kaarne ke....

SDc mee ye rule ham strictly follow karte hain and as you are new here we are here to help you to understand the basic guidelines.. so please try to not do these acts again...

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Furqan ji bahot shukriya jo aapne is baat ko khudd qubool kiyaa.... mujhe pata hai e sher aapne khud nahi likhaa hai ... na hi wo dusre sher

Apne Haalaat ka khud ehsaas nahi hai mujhko...
Maine logo se suna hai k pareshan hu main....


mere kahne ka sabab yahii thaa ke ham kissiii doosre shaayar ke sher ko apnaa nahi kah sakte ... kisii aur ki mehnat ko ham apnaa haq nahi maaan sakte na hi uskaa credit khud le sakte hain.... we have to give proper judgement with the related shaayr.... aapko agar us shaayar na naam nahi maloom hai to aap not mine ya unknown likh sakte hain bajaae chuppchaap use apne signature me post kaarne ke....

SDc mee ye rule ham strictly follow karte hain and as you are new here we are here to help you to understand the basic guidelines.. so please try to not do these acts again...

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shaad bhai main ye baat pehle bhi kai baar bol chuka hu aur ek baar phir bol raha hu Maine kisi bhi shayri ko apna name nahi diya hai hmm yaha k rules Pata na hone ki wajhe se galti zarur ki thi Maine bt ah us galti ko sudhaar bhi liya hai aur rahi baat quboolne ki to aap mujhe kahi ek comnt Aisa bata do jaha maine is baat se mana kiya ho aur ek baat aapko batana chahuga main yaha wah wai k liye post nahi karta mujhe shoq hai shayri padne ka likhne ka bs is liye karta hu aur ek baat ye bhi hai k main kabhi shayri copy pest nahi karta is jo meri read Kari hui hai zehan me ho to typ karta hu is wajhe se mujhe shayar ka name pata nahi hota main jis tarha fb pe post karta tha waise hi yaha bhi karne laga bt rules na maaloom hone k wajhe se ye misunderstand hui thi ab maloom ho agya hai so aainda khayaal rakhuga ummeed hai aap meri baat ko samajh rahe ho aur rahi mere khud sher likhne to wo bhi Insha jaldi pesh karuga aur ye baat aapko abhi bata du us nazam k sur churaye hai Maine kisi nazam se



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18th July 2014, 02:49 PM

shergoyi ke fatique (lol) ki wajah se ye activity pause mode par rakh raha hu...
august 1 ko final sdc ghazal no1 aur ghazal no 2 post karunga.
plus mai thoda busy bhi rahunga agle 10 din.
but u may carry on with additional shers

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