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Adaa hai tumhari - 3rd February 2013, 02:34 PM

Ek ghazal haazir hai, islaah ke liye...Ishq per kuch likhne ki ghustakhee ki hai..

Behr aur khayaal dono ke lihaaz se ghaltiyaN batayengay tou badi meherbaani hogi...




Mili jo yeh nazreiN hamaari tumhaari
Tou lagne lagi saari dun'ya hi pyaari

Woh ek muskuraahat ke sadQe meri jaaN

Yeh dil bhi maiN haari, yeh jaaN bhi maiN haari

Zara unse kehdo, ke nazreiN jhukaaleiN

Ke badhne lagi hai,sanam beQaraari

Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko

Gaye jaaN se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari

Yeh madhoshiyaN apni badhne lagi haiN

Yeh kaisa hai aalam, yeh kaisi khumaari

Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho

Ke gin gin sitaare woH raateiN guzaari

Yeh khamoshiyaN humse kuch keh rahi haiN

Sunati hain yeh raaz-e-dil baari - baari

Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"

Kahe raaz-e-ulfat yeh aakheiN hi saari..




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Aadaab Zainy Saahiba, Masha Allaah behad Lutf Milaa aapki is khoobsurat Ghazal ko padh kar... waah kya khayal hai kyaa Rawaani hai....
Sub'haan Allaah..





Mili jo yeh nazreiN hamaari tumhaari
Tou lagne lagi saari dun'ya hi pyaari

waaahhh..... khoobsurat Matlaa hai.....



Woh ek muskuraahat ke sadQe meri jaaN
Yeh dil bhi maiN haari, yeh jaaN bhi maiN haari


Haayee marr jaawaaaN ............................... kya Andaaze-shiqvaa hai waaahhhhh



Zara unse kehdo, ke nazreiN jhukaaleiN
Ke badhne lagi hai,sanam beQaraari


Masha Allaah.......... Kisi ki Aankh ki Lau se Shamaa ka pighalnaa jaayaz hai.... Waaaahhh


Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaaN se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari


Ye sher mujhe lagtaa hai thodaa Uljha hua hai.... ise aur saaf kar saktii haiN, bayaani ke lihaaz se....

yahaaN pe 2 conditions ban rahi haiN...

1) agar hum jaan se gaye to adaa hogi tumhaari... ya

2) gaye jaan se hum... yaani ke hum already jaan se jaa chuke hain???
agar jaan se jaa chuke hain to sher kis soorat me keh rahe hain..

Please wazaahat farmaaiye... mujhe bahot pareshan kar raha hai ye sher..




Yeh madhoshiyaN apni badhne lagi haiN
Yeh kaisa hai aalam, yeh kaisi khumaari

Ye Khumaari Muhabbat ki hai... aisi hai ke Zindgee bhar ke liye kaafii hai.... Dawaa bhi Ishq hai, Duaa bhi Ishq hai.... khoob sher kaha hai aapne.... waaahhh


Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho
Ke gin gin sitaare woH raateiN guzaari


Woh raateN.... Acchaa sher hai.. par lafz Woh thodaa uljhaa raha hai... ise ek baar fir se dekh leiN...



Yeh khamoshiyaN humse kuch keh rahi haiN
Sunati hain yeh raaz-e-dil baari - baari


bahot khoob hai ....... bahot khoob hai.... bhai waaahhh....


Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"
Kahe raaz-e-ulfat yeh aakheiN hi saari..


Waaaahhhh..... Brilliant, Superbb, Awessome............. bahot khoob Maqtaa hai...

Aapki ghazal ne Sar se Paa tak hame mutassir kiyaa hai.... behad lutfandoz Ghazal hai.... Aur sabse khoobsurat Maqte me aapka takhallus "Zainy" hame bahot pasand aaya....

Likhti raheN.......................... khush raheN....

Shaad...


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4th February 2013, 03:05 PM

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Aadaab Zainy Saahiba, Masha Allaah behad Lutf Milaa aapki is khoobsurat Ghazal ko padh kar... waah kya khayal hai kyaa Rawaani hai....
Sub'haan Allaah..





Mili jo yeh nazreiN hamaari tumhaari
Tou lagne lagi saari dun'ya hi pyaari

waaahhh..... khoobsurat Matlaa hai.....



Woh ek muskuraahat ke sadQe meri jaaN
Yeh dil bhi maiN haari, yeh jaaN bhi maiN haari


Haayee marr jaawaaaN ............................... kya Andaaze-shiqvaa hai waaahhhhh



Zara unse kehdo, ke nazreiN jhukaaleiN
Ke badhne lagi hai,sanam beQaraari


Masha Allaah.......... Kisi ki Aankh ki Lau se Shamaa ka pighalnaa jaayaz hai.... Waaaahhh


Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaaN se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari


Ye sher mujhe lagtaa hai thodaa Uljha hua hai.... ise aur saaf kar saktii haiN, bayaani ke lihaaz se....

yahaaN pe 2 conditions ban rahi haiN...

1) agar hum jaan se gaye to adaa hogi tumhaari... ya

2) gaye jaan se hum... yaani ke hum already jaan se jaa chuke hain???
agar jaan se jaa chuke hain to sher kis soorat me keh rahe hain..

Please wazaahat farmaaiye... mujhe bahot pareshan kar raha hai ye sher..




Yeh madhoshiyaN apni badhne lagi haiN
Yeh kaisa hai aalam, yeh kaisi khumaari

Ye Khumaari Muhabbat ki hai... aisi hai ke Zindgee bhar ke liye kaafii hai.... Dawaa bhi Ishq hai, Duaa bhi Ishq hai.... khoob sher kaha hai aapne.... waaahhh


Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho
Ke gin gin sitaare woH raateiN guzaari


Woh raateN.... Acchaa sher hai.. par lafz Woh thodaa uljhaa raha hai... ise ek baar fir se dekh leiN...



Yeh khamoshiyaN humse kuch keh rahi haiN
Sunati hain yeh raaz-e-dil baari - baari


bahot khoob hai ....... bahot khoob hai.... bhai waaahhh....


Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"
Kahe raaz-e-ulfat yeh aakheiN hi saari..


Waaaahhhh..... Brilliant, Superbb, Awessome............. bahot khoob Maqtaa hai...

Aapki ghazal ne Sar se Paa tak hame mutassir kiyaa hai.... behad lutfandoz Ghazal hai.... Aur sabse khoobsurat Maqte me aapka takhallus "Zainy" hame bahot pasand aaya....

Likhti raheN.......................... khush raheN....

Shaad...

Hmmmmmmmm 60 views and only one reply...not bad...chalo kisi ko tou ghazal per kuch theek laga...maiN tou is impression me thi ke shayed itni bakwaas hai ke koi is per kuch kehna hi nahi chahta..

Anyway sab se pehe tou aapka bohat bohat shukriyaH aap ghazal per aaye ...ghazal ki pasandegi ke liye dusra shukriyah...

ab rahi baat is sher ki


Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaaN se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari

is sher meiN shayer yeh kehna chahta hai ke "tum mujhe apni ankhoN se mat cheda karo, tumhari tou adaa hai, per koi is adaa se ghayal hoker jaan se jaa raha hai.."

ab yahaan jaaN se jaana ka matlab yeh nahi ke sach me shayer mar gaya.....(sach me marr gayi tou sdc kaun sambhalega.....kidding..)

poetic language me ayse words use karte haiN...taaki situation ki gehraayi samjha sakeiN...

just a poetic language bro...

Ek example deti huuN


Amar akber anthony movie me ek gaana hai parda hai parda , us me ek stanza hai

Khuda Ka Shukra Hai, Chehara Nazar To Aaya Hai
Haya Ka Rang Nigaahon Pe, Phir Bhi Chhaya Hai
Kisiki Jaan Jaati Hai, Kisiko Sharm Aati Hai
Koi Aansoo Bahata Hai, To Koi Muskurata Hai


Ab isme me wahi situation hai....ab isme kisi ki jaan chali gayi tou gaana kaun gaa raha hai...

hope u r getting my point.....


chaliye aapka hi ek sher lete haiN

ZubaaN khole binaa hi Tum se Haal-e-Dil bayaaN kar dooN,
Jhukii NazroN se hote haiN, kayee Israar Posheedah.


ab isme aap kehnna chahtay haiN ke bina zubaaN khole baat ho sakti hai..lekiN practically yeh mumkin nahi...baat karne ke liye zubaaN kholna zaruri hai...per shayri me mumkin hai......U see..everything is possible in shayri..

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Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho
Ke gin gin sitaare woH raateiN guzaari


Is sher me aapne kahA "woh" word uljha hua hai...behr ke mutalliq ya khayaal ke ...aapne bataya nahi...

mera andaza hai "woh" ka wazn 1 ya 2..dono mumkin hai...

Khair koi baat buri lagi ho to sorry.....I was only trying to defend myself...

Ek baar phir bohat bohat shukriyaH...




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Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...

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4th February 2013, 03:17 PM

Bahut achhe zainy saahiba ..

Aapki ghazal bahut achhi ..ishq se sarabor hai

Mera khyaal se ishq pe likhna aapko shuruaat se hi pasand hai

Sarsari taur pe Chautha sher beher se khaarij hai

Isko durust kar leiN

Baaki baateiN itminaan se hoti rahengi

Daad haazir hai

Qubool farmaaeiN


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Bahut achhe zainy saahiba ..

Aapki ghazal bahut achhi ..ishq se sarabor hai

Mera khyaal se ishq pe likhna aapko shuruaat se hi pasand hai

Sarsari taur pe Chautha sher beher se khaarij hai

Isko durust kar leiN

Baaki baateiN itminaan se hoti rahengi

Daad haazir hai

Qubool farmaaeiN
Ghazal per aane ka shukriyah kshitiz ji...per pls puri baat tou bata dijiye...

ke kahaaN maine mistake KI..taaki durust kar sakuN..

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Ga1ye2 jaa2N1 se2 hum2 , a1daa2 hai2 tu1mha2ari2




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Hmmmmmmmm 60 views and only one reply...not bad...chalo kisi ko tou ghazal per kuch theek laga...maiN tou is impression me thi ke shayed itni bakwaas hai ke koi is per kuch kehna hi nahi chahta..

Anyway sab se pehe tou aapka bohat bohat shukriyaH aap ghazal per aaye ...ghazal ki pasandegi ke liye dusra shukriyah...

ab rahi baat is sher ki


Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaaN se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari

is sher meiN shayer yeh kehna chahta hai ke "tum mujhe apni ankhoN se mat cheda karo, tumhari tou adaa hai, per koi is adaa se ghayal hoker jaan se jaa raha hai.."

ab yahaan jaaN se jaana ka matlab yeh nahi ke sach me shayer mar gaya.....(sach me marr gayi tou sdc kaun sambhalega.....kidding..)

poetic language me ayse words use karte haiN...taaki situation ki gehraayi samjha sakeiN...

just a poetic language bro...

Ek example deti huuN


Amar akber anthony movie me ek gaana hai parda hai parda , us me ek stanza hai

Khuda Ka Shukra Hai, Chehara Nazar To Aaya Hai
Haya Ka Rang Nigaahon Pe, Phir Bhi Chhaya Hai
Kisiki Jaan Jaati Hai, Kisiko Sharm Aati Hai
Koi Aansoo Bahata Hai, To Koi Muskurata Hai


Ab isme me wahi situation hai....ab isme kisi ki jaan chali gayi tou gaana kaun gaa raha hai...

hope u r getting my point.....


chaliye aapka hi ek sher lete haiN

ZubaaN khole binaa hi Tum se Haal-e-Dil bayaaN kar dooN,
Jhukii NazroN se hote haiN, kayee Israar Posheedah.


ab isme aap kehnna chahtay haiN ke bina zubaaN khole baat ho sakti hai..lekiN practically yeh mumkin nahi...baat karne ke liye zubaaN kholna zaruri hai...per shayri me mumkin hai......U see..everything is possible in shayri..

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Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho
Ke gin gin sitaare woH raateiN guzaari


Is sher me aapne kahA "woh" word uljha hua hai...behr ke mutalliq ya khayaal ke ...aapne bataya nahi...

mera andaza hai "woh" ka wazn 1 ya 2..dono mumkin hai...

Khair koi baat buri lagi ho to sorry.....I was only trying to defend myself...

Ek baar phir bohat bohat shukriyaH...


Zainy saahiba.... mujhe aapki kisi bhi baat ka bura nahi lagaa... jab shaayar se koi sawaal kartaa hai to dekhaa jaae wo khud ek tarah ki gustaakhi hotii hai... isi tarah agar shaayar jab uski baat ka jawaab detaa hai, to sawaal karne waale ko bura maanne ka koi sawaal hi paida nahi hona chahiye..

Main sher apne tareeqe se samjahne ki koshish kar raha tha... Asal me aapke examples dekhe maine, aur aapka nazariyta bhi dekhaa, ab sher samajh me aaya mere ...

shukriyaa bahot bahot aapka....


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Ghazal per aane ka shukriyah kshitiz ji...per pls puri baat tou bata dijiye...

ke kahaaN maine mistake KI..taaki durust kar sakuN..

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Ga1ye2 jaa2N1 se2 hum2 , a1daa2 hai2 tu1mha2ari2
aapse ek typo ho gaya hai...aapne 'jaan' ka 'n' capitalise kar diya 'N'
kshitij sahab ne fast padte padte 'N' ko aspirate kar diya hoga...kyuki aapne jaise likha hai use 'jaa^' padna hoga ,typo ki wajah se....is liye unko flow nahi mila hoga.
   
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aapse ek typo ho gaya hai...aapne 'jaan' ka 'n' capitalise kar diya 'N'
kshitij sahab ne fast padte padte 'N' ko aspirate kar diya hoga...kyuki aapne jaise likha hai use 'jaa^' padna hoga ,typo ki wajah se....is liye unko flow nahi mila hoga.
ok got it...

How about "tumhaarii.".is word ka break jo maine kiya...yeh possible hai......??


tu1 mhaa2 rii
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ok got it...

How about "tumhaarii.".is word ka break jo maine kiya...yeh possible hai......??


tu1 mhaa2 rii
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4th February 2013, 04:14 PM

jaaN ka wuzn 2
aur
jaan ka wuzn 2 1

aapne sher meiN jaaN istemaal kiya hai isliye beher se baahar ja raha hai

agar jaan kahti to parhne meiN dikkat na aati aur sher beher meiN rehta

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4th February 2013, 04:16 PM

Zidd saahab... sarsarii taur pe ek sawaal poochna chahunga.. aur chaahta ahoon jawaab bhi apa simplest way me de deian for a layman like me...

Ye "X" wala kya Funda hai.... i mean i better know where to use 1 or 2.....but i am not very sure where is "X"

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aap ek kaam kijiye jaaN ke baad " YE " laga dijiye

sher beher meiN bhi aa jayega , jaaN bhi laga rahega aur sher ki soorat kuch aur saaf ho jaayegi ..


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Agar is sher ko kuch yoon likhen to kaisaa ho..... shaayad isse meaning aur clear ho jaae...

Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaaN se hum aur , adaa hai tumhaari..


waise aapki baaton se sahmat hoon main.. mera sawaal magar wo nahi tha jo aap samajah rahi theeeN... asal me mera sawaal tha conditions ke uupar ke Jaan jaane ke pahle sher kaha gaya tha ya jaan jane ke baad ..


Aur main jaanta hoon thod abahot ke shaayri me khamoshi se baat kaise ki jaati hai... hehehehe

i hope u dont mind, and in case i hurt you, accept my apologies....

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Zidd saahab... sarsarii taur pe ek sawaal poochna chahunga.. aur chaahta ahoon jawaab bhi apa simplest way me de deian for a layman like me...

Ye "X" wala kya Funda hai.... i mean i better know where to use 1 or 2.....but i am not very sure where is "X"

So ye "X" kin kin jagah pe istemaal kiya jaaega... agar samjhaaenge to mehrbaani hogii bahot bahot...
bhai koi complex funda nahi hai

1& 2 use waha kar rahe hai jaha wazan change hone ki possibility hi nahi hai

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jaan ka wuzn 2 1

aapne sher meiN jaaN istemaal kiya hai isliye beher se baahar ja raha hai

agar jaan kahti to parhne meiN dikkat na aati aur sher beher meiN rehta

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aap ek kaam kijiye jaaN ke baad " YE " laga dijiye

sher beher meiN bhi aa jayega , jaaN bhi laga rahega aur sher ki soorat kuch aur saaf ho jaayegi ..

Jaan ke baad "ye"..??

Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaaN ye se hum , adaa hai tumhaari..


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Agar is sher ko kuch yoon likhen to kaisaa ho..... shaayad isse meaning aur clear ho jaae...

Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaaN se hum aur , adaa hai tumhaari..


waise aapki baaton se sahmat hoon main.. mera sawaal magar wo nahi tha jo aap samajah rahi theeeN... asal me mera sawaal tha conditions ke uupar ke Jaan jaane ke pahle sher kaha gaya tha ya jaan jane ke baad ..


Aur main jaanta hoon thod abahot ke shaayri me khamoshi se baat kaise ki jaati hai... hehehehe

i hope u dont mind, and in case i hurt you, accept my apologies....

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Jee yeh soorat bhi sahi hai....




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Muaaf kijiyega mera kahne ka matlab tha ada se pehle baat jaaN ki ho rahi thi aur mujhe office k liye der ho rahi thi to jaldi jaldi me bhool gaya ki jaaN aur adaa ke beech meiN do lafz bhi haiN. Lol


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Kshitiz ji......main samajh gayi thi ke aapne zaroor jaldbaazi me likha hoga......main tou bas yuhi zara aapki taaNg kheech rahi thi....hope you did not mind..............




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Behr aur khayaal dono ke lihaaz se ghaltiyaN batayengay tou badi meherbaani hogi...




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Woh ek muskuraahat ke sadQe meri jaaN

Yeh dil bhi maiN haari, yeh jaaN bhi maiN haari

Zara unse kehdo, ke nazreiN jhukaaleiN

Ke badhne lagi hai,sanam beQaraari

Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko

Gaye jaaN se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari

Yeh madhoshiyaN apni badhne lagi haiN

Yeh kaisa hai aalam, yeh kaisi khumaari

Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho

Ke gin gin sitaare woH raateiN guzaari

Yeh khamoshiyaN humse kuch keh rahi haiN

Sunati hain yeh raaz-e-dil baari - baari

Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"

Kahe raaz-e-ulfat yeh aakheiN hi saari..


wahhh...bahut umda....behr ka to pta nahi sahi hai ya galat par ahsaas behad khoobsurat hai....!


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Ek ghazal haazir hai, islaah ke liye...Ishq per kuch likhne ki ghustakhee ki hai..

Behr aur khayaal dono ke lihaaz se ghaltiyaN batayengay tou badi meherbaani hogi...

Zainy JI... Bahot Khubsurat Ghazla Kahi Hai...Andaaz BHi Muhabbat Se Sarshaar Aur Kalaam Ki Rawaani BHi Umdah Rahi..
Dheron DAAAAAAAD Qabool Farmaaiye

Mili jo yeh nazreiN hamaari tumhaari
Tou lagne lagi saari dun'ya hi pyaari


KHUBSURAT Matla hai, iska pehla misra jo aap ne kaha hai, wo bhi acha hai....Magar


Mili Jo NIGAAHEN Hamari Tumhaari

Agar Ye Misra ho to kaisa rahay ga.....? Is Me "YEH" Lafz Khatam Ho gaya hai aur misra bhi wazn me hee raha hai, Is Se Misra Me Mazeed Pukhtagi Aa Jaaye Gi, Ye Sirf Meri Raaye Hai..


Woh ek muskuraahat ke sadQe meri jaaN
Yeh dil bhi maiN haari, yeh jaaN bhi maiN haari

Khusrat, Bahot Piyaar sher kaha hai, Piyaar se bhara hua...

Pehlay Misra ME "WO" Ki Jagah "US" KAr L:Ia jaaye To....?


Zara unse kehdo, ke nazreiN jhukaaleiN
Ke badhne lagi hai,sanam beQaraari

Wahhhhhh Bahot Acha Sher Kaha Hai, Bahot Si Daaaad

Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaaN se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari

Wah Wahhhh Aankhon Se Chena KHooob Kaha Hai, Bahot Hee Umdah Sher Hai...Dheron DAAAAAD


Yeh madhoshiyaN apni badhne lagi haiN
Yeh kaisa hai aalam, yeh kaisi khumaari

Ye Bhi MUhabbat Ki Rau ME Beh Jaanay Walay Jazbaat Se BHarpoor Sher Kaha Hai...DHeron DAAAAD


Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho
Ke gin gin sitaare woH raateiN guzaari

IS Sher Ke Ahsaasaat BHi Bilaa-shuba Ishq Ki Kefiyaat se Pur Hain...

Yahan Misra Saani Me Aap "Raaten" Istemaal Kar Rahi Hain.Jo Ke Jama Hia Aur Is Ke Sath Aap "GUZAARI" Istemaal Kar Rahi Hain, Halaanke Asoolann Yahan Bhi Jama Ke Sath Jamaa Ka Seegh Hee Aana Chaahiye Jo Ke GUZAARIIN" Banta Hai, Magar IS Tarha Qaafia Badal Jaaye Ga.
Kiun Na Main Aap Ko Is Ka Mutabaadal Misra Bataa Dun...

KE GIN GIN SITAARAY SHAB-E-GHAM GUZAARI


Yeh khamoshiyaN humse kuch keh rahi haiN
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Wah Wah Wahhhh BAhot Khusburat Sher Kaha Hai...DAAAAD

Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"
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Acha Maqta Hai.... Yahan Misra Saani Me "SAARI" Ka Ishaara Kis Taraf Hai...?
Zainy Ji Taakheer KE Liye Ma'azrat KHawaah Hun...Aap Ki Ye Ghazal Mujhay Pasand Aayi....
Yahan Jo Kuch Bhi Main Ne Likha hai Wo Sirf MEri Raaye Hai...Aap Ko Jahan Kaheen Behtari Ki Mazeed Gunjaayish Nazar Aaye Aap Mujhay Bataa Dijiye Ga...

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Sab se pehle tou aapka bohat bohat shukriyaH Ahmad sahab... meri guzarish per aap meri ghazal per aaye...

aapki di gayi har salaah sar aankhon per...Aapki hausla afzaai aur daad ki mamnooN huuN mai...

maine saare mistakes note kar liye haiN....

jee maqte ko lekar maiN bhi zara confused hi thi...

Isme "saari" ka matlab hai..yeh ankheN ulfat ke saare raaz khol rahi haiN..

kyuN ke aakheN feminine hai maine "saari" lafz liya hai....

lekin shayed yahaaN "saare" sahi lafz hoga...not very sure...





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Sab se pehle tou aapka bohat bohat shukriyaH Ahmad sahab... meri guzarish per aap meri ghazal per aaye...

aapki di gayi har salaah sar aankhon per...Aapki hausla afzaai aur daad ki mamnooN huuN mai...

maine saare mistakes note kar liye haiN....

jee maqte ko lekar maiN bhi zara confused hi thi...

Isme "saari" ka matlab hai..yeh ankheN ulfat ke saare raaz khol rahi haiN..

kyuN ke aakheN feminine hai maine "saari" lafz liya hai....

lekin shayed yahaaN "saare" sahi lafz hoga...not very sure...
Zainy JI.....!

Main Aapka Mashkoor HUn Jo Aap Ne Meri Adnaa Tajaaweez Ko Pasand Kia,

Aap Ne Maqta Ke Baray Me Jo Kaha, Us Lehaaz Se Yahan Qafia "SAARI" Nahi Aaye Ga, Aur " SAARAY" Hee Theak Ho Ga, Magar................ Is Tarah Ye Hum Qaafia Nahi Rahay Ga, Aap Ko Ye Misra Zaruuuuuuuuur Tabdeel Karna Ho Ga,.... Main BHi Is Ka Mutabdal Sochta HUn , Aur Aap Bhi Sochiye.......




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Zainy ji , Namaskar ..
Aapne prem rang ki aisi mari pichkari, Main tere rang mein rang ke duniya hari..

Kuch aisa hi alam hua ji hamara aap ki ghazal per ke ...kya flow of thoughts hai, unbeatable..Dher sari daad aur shubkamnayen is ke liye .

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Zainy JI.....!

Main Aapka Mashkoor HUn Jo Aap Ne Meri Adnaa Tajaaweez Ko Pasand Kia,

Aap Ne Maqta Ke Baray Me Jo Kaha, Us Lehaaz Se Yahan Qafia "SAARI" Nahi Aaye Ga, Aur " SAARAY" Hee Theak Ho Ga, Magar................ Is Tarah Ye Hum Qaafia Nahi Rahay Ga, Aap Ko Ye Misra Zaruuuuuuuuur Tabdeel Karna Ho Ga,.... Main BHi Is Ka Mutabdal Sochta HUn , Aur Aap Bhi Sochiye.......

Theek hai...maiN kuch sochti huuN.......aapko koi suurat zehan meiN aaye tou zaroor bataiyega....




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SDC mein aaj mach gaya Shor, Bayane Ishk me Zainy ka na koi sani aur.....

Zainy ji , Namaskar ..
Aapne prem rang ki aisi mari pichkari, Main tere rang mein rang ke duniya hari..

Kuch aisa hi alam hua ji hamara aap ki ghazal per ke ...kya flow of thoughts hai, unbeatable..Dher sari daad aur shubkamnayen is ke liye .

apka ye sher :

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main abhi thoda nadaan hun per yahan woh ki jagah hain laga kar dekhiyega.

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Bohat bohat shukriyah sehgal sahab....mujhe khushi hai ke aapko meri ghazal pasand aayii...

Aapne sher me tabdeeli ki jo surat batayi hai....hai tou lajawaab,lekin "hain" lagane se misra behr se kharij ho jayega....

But anyways thanks a lotttttttt......




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Bohat bohat shukriyah sehgal sahab....mujhe khushi hai ke aapko meri ghazal pasand aayii...

Aapne sher me tabdeeli ki jo surat batayi hai....hai tou lajawaab,lekin "hain" lagane se misra behr se kharij ho jayega....

But anyways thanks a lotttttttt......
mere kayaal se hamdum ji ka idea reasonable hai zainyji....kyuki nahi to aisa mehsuus ho raha hai ki past tense hai,,,,,'hain' se continuity ka bharam to hai kam se kam..(bhale ho na ho)
   
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mere kayaal se hamdum ji ka idea reasonable hai zainyji....kyuki nahi to aisa mehsuus ho raha hai ki past tense hai,,,,,'hain' se continuity ka bharam to hai kam se kam..(bhale ho na ho)

Mujhe bhi yeh idea bohat pasand aaya zidd sahab....but what about behr....?

Chalega?...




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Mujhe bhi yeh idea bohat pasand aaya zidd sahab....but what about behr....?

Chalega?...
'hain' flexible hi hai,zainyji.....aspirated and nasalised sounds are not counted to ascertain the weight.
   
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Ok fine.........got it.......




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Zainy JI.....!

Main Aapka Mashkoor HUn Jo Aap Ne Meri Adnaa Tajaaweez Ko Pasand Kia,

Aap Ne Maqta Ke Baray Me Jo Kaha, Us Lehaaz Se Yahan Qafia "SAARI" Nahi Aaye Ga, Aur " SAARAY" Hee Theak Ho Ga, Magar................ Is Tarah Ye Hum Qaafia Nahi Rahay Ga, Aap Ko Ye Misra Zaruuuuuuuuur Tabdeel Karna Ho Ga,.... Main BHi Is Ka Mutabdal Sochta HUn , Aur Aap Bhi Sochiye.......

Bohat koshish ki Ahmad sahab per koi misra hi nahi ban raha..

Actually mere saath ek masla hai...ek hi baar me puuri ghazal likh deti huuN ..phir woh mood ,woh flow chala jaaye tou ek misra bhi theek se nahi ban paata...

khair dekhiye

ek do koshish ki hai..


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Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"
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per in dono maqtoN se maiN khush nahi....

aap hi koi madad kar dijiye...




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Bohat koshish ki Ahmad sahab per koi misra hi nahi ban raha..

Actually mere saath ek masla hai...ek hi baar me puuri ghazal likh deti huuN ..phir woh mood ,woh flow chala jaaye tou ek misra bhi theek se nahi ban paata...

khair dekhiye

ek do koshish ki hai..


Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"
Bataati haiN baateiN yeh aankheN hi saari


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Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"
Sunaati haiN aankheN kahaani yeh saari

per in dono maqtoN se maiN khush nahi....

aap hi koi madad kar dijiye...
pls try this and feel the change..

Batati hain ankheyn kahani yeh saari

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Yeh bhi sahi........................




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Mili jo nigaaheN hamaari tumhaari
Tou lagne lagi saari dun'ya hi pyaari

Us ek muskuraahat ke sadQe meri jaaN
Yeh dil bhi maiN haari, yeh jaaN bhi maiN haari

Zara unse kehdo, ke nazreiN jhukaaleiN
Ke badhne lagi hai,sanam beQaraari

Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaan se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari

Yeh madhoshiyaN apni badhne lagi haiN
Yeh kaisa hai aalam, yeh kaisi khumaari

Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho
Ke gin gin sitaare shab-e-gham guzaari

Yeh khamoshiyaN humse kuch keh rahi haiN
Sunati hain yeh raaz-e-dil baari - baari

Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"
Bataati haiN ankheiN kahaani yeH saari


Ab theek hai?.............




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Zainy ji 10 out 10 marks for revised ghazal



khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
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saani me zainy ji ...................yeh ke badle agar
'to' = more indefinite ,kyki koi kahani bayaa to hui nahi hai specifically....to specific 'yeh' kyu?...

ya

hi' = isme emphasis hai.

ya

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Bataati haiN ankheiN kahaani hi saari

Waise teeno options badhiya haiN , per mujhe "hi" better lag raha hai...

THANKS...




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Mili jo nigaaheN hamaari tumhaari
Tou lagne lagi saari dun'ya hi pyaari

Us ek muskuraahat ke sadQe meri jaaN
Yeh dil bhi maiN haari, yeh jaaN bhi maiN haari

Zara unse kehdo, ke nazreiN jhukaaleiN
Ke badhne lagi hai,sanam beQaraari

Na cheda karo apni aankhoN se humko
Gaye jaan se hum ,adaa hai tumhaari

Yeh madhoshiyaN apni badhne lagi haiN
Yeh kaisa hai aalam, yeh kaisi khumaari

Mohabbat me furqat ka aalam na pucho
Ke gin gin sitaare shab-e-gham guzaari

Yeh khamoshiyaN humse kuch keh rahi haiN
Sunati hain yeh raaz-e-dil baari - baari

Chupaogi kaisay mohabbat ko "Zainy"
Bataati haiN ankheiN kahaani yeH saari


Ab theek hai?.............
Aadaab Zainy behna aur deegar Bhaiyo dosto... aapsab ki shirkat is section mayn daykh badee masarrat ho raheee haye.... badee khushee ki baat haye jis terha ka khushgawaar mahaul barqaraar haye....

Zainy behna aapki yay kavish bayhad aalatareen pahlay say hee thee... aur ab ismayn solah chaand lag chukay hayn..... bas apni adna si raaye paysh karoonga... penultimate shayr is ultimate in my view....... ya'ni hamayn bayhad pasand aayaa....

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