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Maham s Trivial creation againest Wordsworth s masterpiece! - 26th September 2007, 06:03 AM





ODE TO THE CUCKOO

By Wordsworth:



O blithe newcomer! I have heard,
I hear thee and rejoice:
O Cuckoo! shall I call thee bird,
Or but a wandering Voice?

While I am lying on the grass
Thy twofold shout I hear;
From hill to hill it seems to pass,
At once far off and near.

Though babbling only to the vale
Of sunshine and of flowers,
Thou bringest unto me a tale
Of visionary hours.

Thrice welcome, darling of the Spring!
Even yet thou art to me
No bird, but an invisible thing,
A voice, a mystery;

The same whom in my schoolboy days
I listened to; that Cry
Which made me look a thousand ways
In bush, and tree, and sky.

To seek thee did I often rove
Through woods and on the green;
And thou wert still a hope, a love;
Still longed for, never seen!

And I can listen to thee yet;
Can lie upon the plain
And listen, till I do beget
That golden time again.

O blessed birth! the earth we pace
Again appears to be
An unsubstantial, fairy place,
That is fit home for Thee!



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This is my trivial creation againest the lengendry wordsworth s masterpiece ..........





"THE UNTOUCHABLE REALITY OF MY LIFE!"



The cuckoo, to Wordsworth,
was nothing more than an invisible thing
But to him it did bring ample mirth!
To your thoughts,o loved one,I similarly cling!

Although,You too are, only a voice,I hear!
A mere emmotion i feel!
sometimes a smile, often a helpless tear!
You re a moment that from my fantacy i steal!

All the same,you too, have brought me immense joy!
your love, like a candle,in my dark nites burn,
Your thoughts bestow my being with poise and coy,
you re the one who gave my life a new turn!


Yet o loved one I yearn one day to see
my blurry visions resulting in clarity!
I someday,hope to feel thee ,touch thee,
Wish my scattered dreams anchor at the destiny of reality!

   
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nice 1 - 26th September 2007, 05:55 PM

fantastic poem i must say..kp it up dear..


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26th September 2007, 08:06 PM

beautiful! this is not a trivial creation this is too a masterpiece by you madam! One of the best poetry I have ever read. It did seem to me that you are writing from a preety long time. Thanks a lot for sharing with us.

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27th September 2007, 12:40 PM

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fantastic poem i must say..kp it up dear..
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27th September 2007, 01:18 PM

Simply superb!!!!!maham azmiji................

just dont have any words to praise your masterpiece..........ummed hain aapka saath yaha bana rahega..

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beautiful! this is not a trivial creation this is too a masterpiece by you madam! One of the best poetry I have ever read. It did seem to me that you are writing from a preety long time. Thanks a lot for sharing with us.

Mayank

Oh goshhhh Mayank ji "MASTERPIECE !!!!!!!!"

Oh no noway sir, u re making me really blush now

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Thanx hazaroun gulistan

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Simply superb!!!!!maham azmiji................

just dont have any words to praise your masterpiece..........ummed hain aapka saath yaha bana rahega..

mausam

aap sab ka piyar milta rahe ga to yaqeenan yahan apke sath hum majud hein sada ke liye .........


Thanx hazaorun gulistaan for all ur wordz that ve made my creation worthy in some way at least

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6th October 2007, 12:26 AM

"THE UNTOUCHABLE REALITY OF MY LIFE!"

The cuckoo, to Wordsworth,
was nothing more than an invisible thing
But to him it did bring ample mirth!
To your thoughts,o loved one,I similarly cling!

Although,You too are, only a voice,I hear!
A mere emmotion i feel!
sometimes a smile, often a helpless tear!
You re a moment that from my fantacy i steal!

All the same,you too, have brought me immense joy!
your love, like a candle,in my dark nites burn,
Your thoughts bestow my being with poise and coy,
you re the one who gave my life a new turn!


Yet o loved one I yearn one day to see
my blurry visions resulting in clarity!
I someday,hope to feel thee ,touch thee,
Wish my scattered dreams anchor at the destiny of reality!


A fascinating piece which I enjoyed reading...!

Keep on with the nice job and do check spelling every now and then, please...!

Take care of yourself, ok...?

Due respects



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Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai

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"THE UNTOUCHABLE REALITY OF MY LIFE!"

The cuckoo, to Wordsworth,
was nothing more than an invisible thing
But to him it did bring ample mirth!
To your thoughts,o loved one,I similarly cling!

Although,You too are, only a voice,I hear!
A mere emmotion i feel!
sometimes a smile, often a helpless tear!
You re a moment that from my fantacy i steal!

All the same,you too, have brought me immense joy!
your love, like a candle,in my dark nites burn,
Your thoughts bestow my being with poise and coy,
you re the one who gave my life a new turn!


Yet o loved one I yearn one day to see
my blurry visions resulting in clarity!
I someday,hope to feel thee ,touch thee,
Wish my scattered dreams anchor at the destiny of reality!


A fascinating piece which I enjoyed reading...!

Keep on with the nice job and do check spelling every now and then, please...!

Take care of yourself, ok...?

Due respects


Whoopssee about the spelling blunders

yeah i m very careless wid 'em

Thanx for pointing out and

last but not the least

THANX HAZAROUN GULISTAN FOR ALL UR APPRECIATION , SIR.....

Due Respects to u to

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31st October 2007, 02:39 AM

great work MahamAzmi jee...



liked your poem very much...
thanks for shairng it...

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un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii

ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa
inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii


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Thanx hazaroun gulistan Aariya sahiba

Its a pleasure for sure to hear from u ,

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Thanx hazaroun gulistan for ur appreciation , sir ,

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How come I cud see this poem in the list of ALL THREADS STARTED BY ME but not in the english poetry section , just wondering n checking it out ,

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ok i can see it now !


wonder if anyone else wud be interested in reading it :-)


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ok i can see it now !


wonder if anyone else wud be interested in reading it :-)
mahamji,,
your rebuttal was also very good........
as worthy as the legendary wordsworth

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gosh noway wz it any close to the legendary masterpiece of WORDSWORTH!!!!but thanx for all ur kind wordz here,

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well written........................................


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15th August 2009, 07:17 PM

very well written....maham
the issue u raise....is as wide spread as the WWW
the emoticons....flow wildly alll around ad a bit rate.....unimaginable....and yet the sum total results ....in a near zero sum game

u have done a very nice piece...
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very well written....maham
the issue u raise....is as wide spread as the WWW
the emoticons....flow wildly alll around ad a bit rate.....unimaginable....and yet the sum total results ....in a near zero sum game

u have done a very nice piece...
cheers and well done
Luved ur way of expression

a very poetic reply , much better than my trivial creation...

thanx hazaroun gulistan sir,

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