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Maham s Trivial creation againest Wordsworth s masterpiece! -
26th September 2007, 06:03 AM
ODE TO THE CUCKOO
By Wordsworth:
O blithe newcomer! I have heard,
I hear thee and rejoice:
O Cuckoo! shall I call thee bird,
Or but a wandering Voice?
While I am lying on the grass
Thy twofold shout I hear;
From hill to hill it seems to pass,
At once far off and near.
Though babbling only to the vale
Of sunshine and of flowers,
Thou bringest unto me a tale
Of visionary hours.
Thrice welcome, darling of the Spring!
Even yet thou art to me
No bird, but an invisible thing,
A voice, a mystery;
The same whom in my schoolboy days
I listened to; that Cry
Which made me look a thousand ways
In bush, and tree, and sky.
To seek thee did I often rove
Through woods and on the green;
And thou wert still a hope, a love;
Still longed for, never seen!
And I can listen to thee yet;
Can lie upon the plain
And listen, till I do beget
That golden time again.
O blessed birth! the earth we pace
Again appears to be
An unsubstantial, fairy place,
That is fit home for Thee!
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This is my trivial creation againest the lengendry wordsworth s masterpiece ..........
"THE UNTOUCHABLE REALITY OF MY LIFE!"
The cuckoo, to Wordsworth,
was nothing more than an invisible thing
But to him it did bring ample mirth!
To your thoughts,o loved one,I similarly cling!
Although,You too are, only a voice,I hear!
A mere emmotion i feel!
sometimes a smile, often a helpless tear!
You re a moment that from my fantacy i steal!
All the same,you too, have brought me immense joy!
your love, like a candle,in my dark nites burn,
Your thoughts bestow my being with poise and coy,
you re the one who gave my life a new turn!
Yet o loved one I yearn one day to see
my blurry visions resulting in clarity!
I someday,hope to feel thee ,touch thee,
Wish my scattered dreams anchor at the destiny of reality!
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26th September 2007, 05:55 PM
fantastic poem i must say..kp it up dear..
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26th September 2007, 08:06 PM
beautiful! this is not a trivial creation this is too a masterpiece by you madam! One of the best poetry I have ever read. It did seem to me that you are writing from a preety long time. Thanks a lot for sharing with us.
Mayank
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27th September 2007, 12:40 PM
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fantastic poem i must say..kp it up dear..
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Thanx hazaroun gulistan Anamicka sahiba :-)
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27th September 2007, 01:18 PM
Simply superb!!!!!maham azmiji................
just dont have any words to praise your masterpiece..........ummed hain aapka saath yaha bana rahega..
mausam
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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27th September 2007, 03:50 PM
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Originally Posted by Mayank
beautiful! this is not a trivial creation this is too a masterpiece by you madam! One of the best poetry I have ever read. It did seem to me that you are writing from a preety long time. Thanks a lot for sharing with us.
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Oh goshhhh Mayank ji "MASTERPIECE !!!!!!!!"
Oh no noway sir, u re making me really blush now
plz aisa nai kuch bhi hei , ye to apka husn e nazar hei mehaz ...........
ji buahat arsa to nai hoa hamae shayeri ki taang torte hoaye aur angrezi ki shayeri to bas abhi eik saal bhi nai hoa
buahat acha nai likh pate jante hien kyun ke islaah nahi koi , bass jazobn ko lafzon ka roop de dete hein aur aap se courteous afraad un tehreeron ko apne lafzon se qeemtee bana daalte hein
I m really really truely obliged , sir,for all ur wordz here
Thanx hazaroun gulistan
Due Respects
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29th September 2007, 03:25 AM
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Simply superb!!!!!maham azmiji................
just dont have any words to praise your masterpiece..........ummed hain aapka saath yaha bana rahega..
mausam
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aap sab ka piyar milta rahe ga to yaqeenan yahan apke sath hum majud hein sada ke liye .........
Thanx hazaorun gulistaan for all ur wordz that ve made my creation worthy in some way at least
Due Respects
MahamAzmi
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6th October 2007, 12:26 AM
"THE UNTOUCHABLE REALITY OF MY LIFE!"
The cuckoo, to Wordsworth,
was nothing more than an invisible thing
But to him it did bring ample mirth!
To your thoughts,o loved one,I similarly cling!
Although,You too are, only a voice,I hear!
A mere emmotion i feel!
sometimes a smile, often a helpless tear!
You re a moment that from my fantacy i steal!
All the same,you too, have brought me immense joy!
your love, like a candle,in my dark nites burn,
Your thoughts bestow my being with poise and coy,
you re the one who gave my life a new turn!
Yet o loved one I yearn one day to see
my blurry visions resulting in clarity!
I someday,hope to feel thee ,touch thee,
Wish my scattered dreams anchor at the destiny of reality!
A fascinating piece which I enjoyed reading...!
Keep on with the nice job and do check spelling every now and then, please...!
Take care of yourself, ok...?
Due respects
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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8th October 2007, 05:57 AM
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Originally Posted by Mushkil
"THE UNTOUCHABLE REALITY OF MY LIFE!"
The cuckoo, to Wordsworth,
was nothing more than an invisible thing
But to him it did bring ample mirth!
To your thoughts,o loved one,I similarly cling!
Although,You too are, only a voice,I hear!
A mere emmotion i feel!
sometimes a smile, often a helpless tear!
You re a moment that from my fantacy i steal!
All the same,you too, have brought me immense joy!
your love, like a candle,in my dark nites burn,
Your thoughts bestow my being with poise and coy,
you re the one who gave my life a new turn!
Yet o loved one I yearn one day to see
my blurry visions resulting in clarity!
I someday,hope to feel thee ,touch thee,
Wish my scattered dreams anchor at the destiny of reality!
A fascinating piece which I enjoyed reading...!
Keep on with the nice job and do check spelling every now and then, please...!
Take care of yourself, ok...?
Due respects
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Whoopssee about the spelling blunders
yeah i m very careless wid 'em
Thanx for pointing out and
last but not the least
THANX HAZAROUN GULISTAN FOR ALL UR APPRECIATION , SIR.....
Due Respects to u to
maham azmi
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31st October 2007, 02:39 AM
great work MahamAzmi jee...
liked your poem very much...
thanks for shairng it...
regards
aarya
khwaabo.n ke par kabhii kaTne na denaa
inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii
lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste
un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii
ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa
inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii
regards aarya
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17th November 2007, 12:08 AM
Thanx hazaroun gulistan Aariya sahiba
Its a pleasure for sure to hear from u ,
Due Respects!
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hi maham -
17th November 2007, 07:58 PM
wah maham kya likha hai bahut achha laga bas yu hi likhte rahena tumhara dost krenil
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22nd November 2007, 11:49 AM
Thanx hazaroun gulistan for ur appreciation , sir ,
Due Respects ,
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10th April 2008, 08:09 AM
How come I cud see this poem in the list of ALL THREADS STARTED BY ME but not in the english poetry section , just wondering n checking it out ,
Bear wid me !
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8th August 2009, 05:37 PM
ok i can see it now !
wonder if anyone else wud be interested in reading it :-)
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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8th August 2009, 05:45 PM
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ok i can see it now !
wonder if anyone else wud be interested in reading it :-)
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mahamji,,
your rebuttal was also very good........
as worthy as the legendary wordsworth
regards
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10th August 2009, 03:31 PM
gosh noway wz it any close to the legendary masterpiece of WORDSWORTH!!!!but thanx for all ur kind wordz here,
Due Respects,
MahamAzmi
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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11th August 2009, 12:12 AM
well written........................................
Enthusiasm can be like a fire that needs an occasional poke with a stick.
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11th August 2009, 04:50 PM
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Thanx hazaroun gulistan
MahamAzmi
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
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15th August 2009, 07:17 PM
very well written....maham
the issue u raise....is as wide spread as the WWW
the emoticons....flow wildly alll around ad a bit rate.....unimaginable....and yet the sum total results ....in a near zero sum game
u have done a very nice piece...
cheers and well done
Not self but God and others
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15th September 2009, 06:01 PM
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very well written....maham
the issue u raise....is as wide spread as the WWW
the emoticons....flow wildly alll around ad a bit rate.....unimaginable....and yet the sum total results ....in a near zero sum game
u have done a very nice piece...
cheers and well done
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Luved ur way of expression
a very poetic reply , much better than my trivial creation...
thanx hazaroun gulistan sir,
Due Respects,
Maham Azmi
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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