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Havas-Pinjre me bulbul -
19th July 2010, 10:54 AM
PINJRE ME BULBUL
Havas ne aurat ka khilouna bana dala,
jism ko odhna bichouna bana dala.
Vo maa thi bahan thi patni aur beti thi,
Hawaniat ne rishto'n ko bouna bana dala.
istihaar-e-sharaab pe numaish nage badan ki
Masoomiat ko calender ka kona bana dala.
Pinjre me bulbul chahakne se mahroom,
Kismat ka kaisa ye rona bana dala.
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19th July 2010, 12:17 PM
Komal jii,
ahsaas acche aur sacche lage.....keep writing.
god bless u
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19th July 2010, 12:41 PM
ek samajik vikriti ko ukerti ......
aapki rachna ke ehsaas bahut khoob lage mujhe......
likhte rahen...Praveen Ji !
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
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19th July 2010, 07:02 PM
bahut khoob .... Lajawab ghazal hai .... daad qubool kijiye
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PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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19th July 2010, 07:20 PM
bahut khoob ,
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take care
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Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
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19th July 2010, 09:51 PM
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Originally Posted by parveen komal
PINJRE ME BULBUL
Havas ne aurat ka khilouna bana dala,
jism ko odhna bichouna bana dala.
Vo maa thi bahan thi patni aur beti thi,
Hawaniat ne rishto'n ko bouna bana dala.
istihaar-e-sharaab pe numaish nage badan ki
Masoomiat ko calender ka kona bana dala.
Pinjre me bulbul chahakne se mahroom,
Kismat ka kaisa ye rona bana dala.
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komal bhai
radhe radhe
bahut khoob dil se daad likhte rahiye
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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20th July 2010, 01:13 PM
Kya kahu Komal saheb.......aapne lajawab kar diya.........jis andaaz me aapne is kadwi haqeeqat ko bayaan kiya hai woh apne aap me ek kamaal hai.........aapki is peshkash ko mera Koti Koti pranaam, yeh sher ne dil dehla diya kasam se.
Vo maa thi bahan thi patni aur beti thi,
Hawaniat ne rishto'n ko bouna bana dala.
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
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21st July 2010, 09:14 AM
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Komal jii,
ahsaas acche aur sacche lage.....keep writing.
god bless u
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Thanks Suneeta ji Housla afzai ke lie dil se shukria aapka
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ek samajik vikriti ko ukerti ......
aapki rachna ke ehsaas bahut khoob lage mujhe......
likhte rahen...Praveen Ji !
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Naresh ji bahut bahut shukria apka , aise hi mil jul kar paryaas karte rahe'n
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bahut khoob .... Lajawab ghazal hai .... daad qubool kijiye
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Thanks Zainy ji, is hi tarah hosla badhate rahie , Apki anmol daad ke lie shukria.
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bahut khoob dil se daad likhte rahiye
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Ishk bhai , shukria apka , is hi tarah aap se parerna milti rahegi ye vishwaas hai mujhe.
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Kya kahu Komal saheb.......aapne lajawab kar diya.........jis andaaz me aapne is kadwi haqeeqat ko bayaan kiya hai woh apne aap me ek kamaal hai.........aapki is peshkash ko mera Koti Koti pranaam, yeh sher ne dil dehla diya kasam se.
Vo maa thi bahan thi patni aur beti thi,
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Sajid bhai tah-e-dil se apka shukria,
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21st July 2010, 09:40 AM
Komal jee:
namaste!
aapki ees soch ko mai.n salaam kartaa huuN... liKhate rahe.n aage bhee!
KhuSh rahe.n.. duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
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21st July 2010, 09:54 AM
dhaval ji, namaskaar, aapne mujhe utsahit kia , aap ka bahut bahut dhanyabaad sir.
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21st July 2010, 12:07 PM
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21st July 2010, 12:17 PM
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21st July 2010, 12:46 PM
bahut khoob,,,, Dil se daad hazir hai qubool kijiyega....
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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bhot khub bhot bhoot khub bhot bhot bhot khub bhot bhot bhot bhot khub.....................
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dil se shukria sir..............
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21st July 2010, 03:11 PM
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PINJRE ME BULBUL
Havas ne aurat ka khilouna bana dala,
jism ko odhna bichouna bana dala.
Vo maa thi bahan thi patni aur beti thi,
Hawaniat ne rishto'n ko bouna bana dala.
istihaar-e-sharaab pe numaish nage badan ki
Masoomiat ko calender ka kona bana dala.
Pinjre me bulbul chahakne se mahroom,
Kismat ka kaisa ye rona bana dala.
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Komal
Bhaut achcha laga
kaash insaan main insaniat hoti to her aurat maan,behen aur baeti hi hoti
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22nd July 2010, 10:22 AM
Razia ji,
aapne bahut achhe comment die, aapka behad shukarguzar hoon
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22nd July 2010, 10:33 AM
PINJRE ME BULBUL
Havas ne aurat ka khilouna bana dala,
jism ko odhna bichouna bana dala.
Vo maa thi bahan thi patni aur beti thi,
Hawaniat ne rishto'n ko bouna bana dala.
istihaar-e-sharaab pe numaish nage badan ki
Masoomiat ko calender ka kona bana dala.
Pinjre me bulbul chahakne se mahroom,
Kismat ka kaisa ye rona bana dala.
aap ne bhut achi gazal likhi hai, jisme aap ne ek aurat ke dard ke ehsas ko in gazalo ke shabdo me dala hai, awasum
Anil Arora
Naulekahe par tere khoon ki boond hai,
Motiyo ki jagah par jada kaun hai,
Jiski khatir daga chandini se kare,
Puch suraj ki woh dilruba kaun hai?
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22nd July 2010, 11:31 AM
ek aurat ke dard ko aapne bakhubi likha hai par ab samay aa gaya hai komal sahab ki aurat ke shashakt hone par kuchh likha jaaye jisse uski hausla afzaii ho aur vo aur tezi se aage badhe
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22nd July 2010, 02:39 PM
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PINJRE ME BULBUL
Havas ne aurat ka khilouna bana dala,
jism ko odhna bichouna bana dala.
Vo maa thi bahan thi patni aur beti thi,
Hawaniat ne rishto'n ko bouna bana dala.
istihaar-e-sharaab pe numaish nage badan ki
Masoomiat ko calender ka kona bana dala.
Pinjre me bulbul chahakne se mahroom,
Kismat ka kaisa ye rona bana dala.
aap ne bhut achi gazal likhi hai, jisme aap ne ek aurat ke dard ke ehsas ko in gazalo ke shabdo me dala hai, awasum
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Shukria aap ka , Is disha me bahut sara kaam karne ki bhi jaroorat hai.
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22nd July 2010, 02:48 PM
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ek aurat ke dard ko aapne bakhubi likha hai par ab samay aa gaya hai komal sahab ki aurat ke shashakt hone par kuchh likha jaaye jisse uski hausla afzaii ho aur vo aur tezi se aage badhe
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Thanks sandeep ji aapka, aapki baat shi hai, lekin system ki khamio,n ke chalte aaj bhi Aurat ko sharmindgi ke ahsaas se do-chaar hona padta hai.
Aurat sahi artho,n me tabhi powerful hogi jab mumbai-Calcutta aur delhi me chal rahe kotho,n par Aurat ko beparda hone se bachaya jaega. Desh ka nizam chalane wale andhe nahi lekin bahre hain jinhe apni awaj sunaane ke lie aurat ko hi powerful karke aage lana hoga. is mission ke lie sabhi ko mil jul kar Kaam karna chahie.
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22nd July 2010, 03:35 PM
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PINJRE ME BULBUL
Havas ne aurat ka khilouna bana dala,
jism ko odhna bichouna bana dala.
Vo maa thi bahan thi patni aur beti thi,
Hawaniat ne rishto'n ko bouna bana dala.
istihaar-e-sharaab pe numaish nage badan ki
Masoomiat ko calender ka kona bana dala.
Pinjre me bulbul chahakne se mahroom,
Kismat ka kaisa ye rona bana dala.
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Komal Sahab Aadab o Tasleemat,,
Achi Taqleeq pe Dad o Mubarak Baad mustahiq hain app .. Talq Haqeeqath ho Alfazon Ka jama Pahenana Mushkil kaam hai .. Magar apna baqobi Nibhaya hai .. Uske liye eak nahi Hazarah Dad apki nazar qubool karen ..Bouna Ka istemaal Waqai Bahoth qoob kiya hai apne ..wah Uske liye alag se dad ...
Havas ne aurat ka khilouna bana dala Yahan Imle me Ka se Murad Shayad ko hai .. Dekh len ..
Allah apko aur bhi taraqiyun se nawaze .. Khush rahen hamesha ..
Dua go o Khair Andesh
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22nd July 2010, 04:02 PM
qadeer bhai daad kre lie shukria. Aap jaise dost aur bhi taqat dete hain mujhe. pahle ka ki jagah ko hi likha tha lekin iska kuchh aur sa matalab niklta laga , aurat khud khilouna nahi bani balki uska.
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