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Mohabbat dhundta hoon - 9th December 2003, 12:09 PM

Toote hue khawabon mein haqiqat dhundta hoon
pathar ke dilon mein mohabbat dhundta hoon

naadan hoon mein ab tak yeh bhi nahin samjha
bejaan buton mein ibaadat dhundta hoon

mere jazbaaton ki keemat yahan kuch bhi nahin
beimaani ke baazaron mein sharafat dhundta hoon

is ajnabi dunia mein koi bhi apna nahin
gairon ki aankhon mein apni surat dhundta hoon

umeed ki thi pyar ki bas yehi bhool thi meri
girte hue ashkon mein apni hasrat dhundta hoon.

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9th December 2003, 12:41 PM

Ham na bhoolenge tujhe raah dikhne waale
Naa honge tumjhse khafa chodke jaane waale

Waqt ke saath badal jaate sabhi log yahan
Log milte nahi hai saath nibhane waale

Mera ye dil bada naazuk hai mom ki maanind (tarah)
Naa who samjhe hai na samjhenge jamaane waale

Who jo dariya hai milega kabhi to saagar mein
Hogaa tera bhala E pyaas bujhane waale

Ye jamaana hai kyaa tum jaante nahi shaayad
Ye na tujhe zakham de mujhe zakham lagaane waale

Falak ke aafataab(suraj) se barsati aatish(aag) ko
Kahin bujhaa na de abra(baadal) yahan aane waale.


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kaise ho aap ??
aaj aapki ye maasush gazal mili aate hi yahan to dekha ki ek behtreen rachana hai but gam ke saath.
aaj mein bhi kuch yahn post karne aai thi but laga ki shayad ye mere reply mein thik rahegi apki gazal par.isliye ye yahn post karti hun apki nazar----
Ham na bhoolenge tujhe raah dikhne waale
Naa honge tumjhse khafa chodke jaane waale

Waqt ke saath badal jaate sabhi log yahan
Log milte nahi hai saath nibhane waale

Mera ye dil bada naazuk hai mom ki maanind (tarah)
Naa who samjhe hai na samjhenge jamaane waale

Who jo dariya hai milega kabhi to saagar mein
Hogaa tera bhala E pyaas bujhane waale

Ye jamaana hai kyaa tum jaante nahi shaayad
Ye na tujhe zakham de mujhe zakham lagaane waale

Falak ke aafataab(suraj) se barsati aatish(aag) ko
Kahin bujhaa na de abra(baadal) yahan aane waale.


aapki gazal bhut pyaari hai aur dil ke dard ko juba de rahi hai apke ye to pata hai mujhe .mein apke liye bas dua karti hun ki aapka gam kam ho .
khyaal rakhna apna.
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9th December 2003, 12:56 PM

Ham na bhoolenge tujhe raah dikhne waale
Naa honge tumjhse khafa chodke jaane waale

Waqt ke saath badal jaate sabhi log yahan
Log milte nahi hai saath nibhane waale

Mera ye dil bada naazuk hai mom ki maanind (tarah)
Naa who samjhe hai na samjhenge jamaane waale

Who jo dariya hai milega kabhi to saagar mein
Hogaa tera bhala E pyaas bujhane waale

Ye jamaana hai kyaa tum jaante nahi shaayad
Ye na tujhe zakham de mujhe zakham lagaane waale

Falak ke aafataab(suraj) se barsati aatish(aag) ko
Kahin bujhaa na de abra(baadal) yahan aane waale.

PRIYE SAKHI JI
aap ke kalaam mein chupe dard ko bahoot achi tarah se mehsoos kar sakta hoon mein,,,kin gehraiyon mein utar kar aapne yeh kalaam likha hoga mein samjh sakta hoon...sach kahun to aap ke liye mere dil mein sharadha ke bhaav aa rahe hai....ek ek pankti apne aap mein kasak samete hai,,,aapne behad umda kalaam likha hai,,magar na jane kyun yahan mujhe daad dene ka maan nahin kar raha,,,balki mann kar raha hai aap ko samjhaun,,,ki yeh gam aap ke liye nahin hai....aap hamesha khush raho aur zindgi se bharpoor shayri likho bas yehi dua hai meri...meine hamesha hi aap ko hasta hua dekhna chaha hai aur aaj aapko gamgeen gazal ke saath dard bhari hayri mein dekh kar dukh hua hai...aap apna khayal rakhiye bas yehiye aur khush rahiye bas yehi dua hai meri..
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9th December 2003, 01:23 PM

sorry gadbad ho gai hai reply mein meine two times apni hi new gazal post kar di galti se aapki copy karni thi but apni hi copy past kar di.

ab phir se iskaa ans de rahi hun mein.aap maaf kar denge jaanti hun phir bhi again sorry bol rahi hun dil se.


Toote hue khawabon mein haqiqat dhundta hoon
pathar ke dilon mein mohabbat dhundta hoon

/aapke is sher par mein mera khyaal in sabdo mein byaan kar rahi hun--
apne dil ko yuhi daga deke,
hamne gam le liye jamaane ke


dekha usne mujhe yu ki dil mera pathar samjh liya
dil ko sabhaala hamne aur unkaa matlab samjh liya
lekin kahe ye kaise unse ye to haalaat they mere
inse samjhota karna hi hamne mukkadar samjh liya


[COLOR=royalblue]apka ye sher dil ki baat badi gahraai se aur khubsoorti se byaan kar gaya hai.bhut hi acha likha hai apne ye.[COLOR=royalblue]/

naadan hoon mein ab tak yeh bhi nahin samjha
bejaan buton mein ibaadat dhundta hoon

/mil hi jaata jami par agar khuda hota
sir jhukane se koi devta nahi hota.

aap inshaan ko inshaan samjho bas devta nahi kyun ki woh is tarif ko sah paaye ye inshaan ke bas ki baat nahi hai./

mere jazbaaton ki keemat yahan kuch bhi nahin
beimaani ke baazaron mein sharafat dhundta hoon

/aapke jazbaat keemati hai janab aap inhe yu jaaya na kare.ye kisi ke bhut kaam aa sakte hai sabhaal ke rakhiye/

is ajnabi dunia mein koi bhi apna nahin
gairon ki aankhon mein apni surat dhundta hoon

/aap ka ye kahna thik nahi hai aaj apke itne dost yahan hai ye apse behtar kiun jaanta hai.shayri .com par sabhi apke dost gair nahi apne hi to hai.
bas jara is sher par goar kare aur soche again.

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Lekin jara see der lage daali ki tarah inhein katne mein/

umeed ki thi pyar ki bas yehi bhool thi meri
girte hue ashkon mein apni hasrat dhundta hoon.

/apni ankho mein hasrat ko basa ask nahi
apne pyaar ko pyaar samjh bhool nahi
jo ho gya hai usko yaad na kar pareshaan na ho
koi dil tere liye dadkega ye hakikat hai sapna nahi/

ab mein chalti hun
apna khyaal rakhna aur khush rahna
duao ke saath
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9th December 2003, 01:42 PM

meine apko dukhi karne ke liye reply mein ye gazal nahi send ki .

apka bhut bhut dil ki gahraaiyoin se shukriya apne mere gazal ke jazbaatoin ko samjha .


hey mein e kahan hai na ki inshaan ko bas inshaan samjho bhagwaan nahi ok


aap mujhe hardam haste dekhna chahte ho mein apse bata dun ki inshaan ko khushi kaM GAM JAYADA MILTE HAI.
mein bhi unmein se hi hun aur meri rachanao mein bhi mera gam aksar nazar aata hai haan ye alag baat hai meine yahan khhushi waali rachana hi post ki hai jyada gam ki nahi.but gam ki likhi jyada hai meine.khair aap khush rahna aapka gam kam ho jaaye yahi chahti hun mein rab se.apki daad ki nahi bas aapki raai ki jarurat hoti hai mujhe mere qalaam par.

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9th December 2003, 03:09 PM

Toote hue khawabon mein haqiqat dhundta hoon
pathar ke dilon mein mohabbat dhundta hoon

naadan hoon mein ab tak yeh bhi nahin samjha
bejaan buton mein ibaadat dhundta hoon

mere jazbaaton ki keemat yahan kuch bhi nahin
beimaani ke baazaron mein sharafat dhundta hoon

is ajnabi dunia mein koi bhi apna nahin
gairon ki aankhon mein apni surat dhundta hoon

umeed ki thi pyar ki bas yehi bhool thi meri
girte hue ashkon mein apni hasrat dhundta hoon


hamesha ki tarah ye poem bhi lajawab hai aapki..sach..bahut acha likhte hain aap....mujhe bahut pasand aayi aapki ye lines..aisa laga jaise mere dil ka haal suna gayi...really very nice..heart-touching.
bye take caren keep smiling.


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9th December 2003, 05:35 PM

Toote hue khawabon mein haqiqat dhundta hoon
pathar ke dilon mein mohabbat dhundta hoon

naadan hoon mein ab tak yeh bhi nahin samjha
bejaan buton mein ibaadat dhundta hoon

mere jazbaaton ki keemat yahan kuch bhi nahin
beimaani ke baazaron mein sharafat dhundta hoon

is ajnabi dunia mein koi bhi apna nahin
gairon ki aankhon mein apni surat dhundta hoon

umeed ki thi pyar ki bas yehi bhool thi meri
girte hue ashkon mein apni hasrat dhundta hoon.

Dear Manoj Jee, kalam toh hamesha ki tarha khub likhha hein aapne. Waise ek gana yaad agayi hein, haan aapko bhi likhte hue yaad zaroor ayi hogi. Kuch aise hein, Toote hue khwabone humko yeh sikhaya hein dilne, dilne jishe chaha tha aankhone gawaya hein.......Mohd. Rafi Jee ke awaz meh. Shukriya. Likhte rahiyega. Take care. God bless you.


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dear manojbhai,
bilkul sahi likha hai aapne. sachai ki awaz aati hai aapki shayrio mai. lajawab,behtarin......please keep it up. ishwer se prarthna aap ki her manokamana puri ho.
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10th December 2003, 05:47 AM

Toote hue khawabon mein haqiqat dhundta hoon
pathar ke dilon mein mohabbat dhundta hoon

naadan hoon mein ab tak yeh bhi nahin samjha
bejaan buton mein ibaadat dhundta hoon

mere jazbaaton ki keemat yahan kuch bhi nahin
beimaani ke baazaron mein sharafat dhundta hoon

is ajnabi dunia mein koi bhi apna nahin
gairon ki aankhon mein apni surat dhundta hoon

umeed ki thi pyar ki bas yehi bhool thi meri
girte hue ashkon mein apni hasrat dhundta hoon

Manoj....

aaj phir ho udaas udaas...? kis duniya mein jaakar yeh sab dhoondate ho...koyi faayda nahin...yeh ek chota sa kalaam aapke liye...gaur farmaayiega...

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10th December 2003, 11:59 AM

priye sakhi ji
ismein muafi ki bhala kya baat hai???? yeh to meri khushkismati hai ki meri gazal ko aapki gazal ka saath mil gaya...mere tanha kalaam ko hamsafar mil gaya....aap ne waqai behtreen rachna likhi hai...hamesha ki tarah...

dekha usne mujhe yu ki dil mera pathar samjh liya
dil ko sabhaala hamne aur unkaa matlab samjh liya
lekin kahe ye kaise unse ye to haalaat they mere
inse samjhota karna hi hamne mukkadar samjh liya

is sher ki tareef karne ke liye mere pass alfaaz nahin hai sakhi ji...sach kehta hoon,,mein soch mein pad gaya hoon ki kya likhun,,,aapne dil ki kalam se likha hai yeh sher...mein kuch yun kahunga aap ke liye....

dhadakte dil ko pathar kehne ki bhool ki hai
majboori ko muqaddar samjhne ki bhool ki hai
naadan hoon mein yeh bhi na samjh ...
apnon ko sitamgar samjhne ki bhool ki hai


mil hi jaata jami par agar khuda hota
sir jhukane se koi devta nahi hota

bahoot khoob likha hai yeh sher bhi aapne....laajawab....daad kubool kijiye...


Banate banate ristey gahre kai saal gujar jaaya karte
Lekin jara see der lage daali ki tarah inhein katne mein/

wah...wah....bahoot khoon sakhi ji...jitni bhi tareef ki jaye kam hai...

kuch rishte aise bhi hote hai jo toota nahin karte
phool se khushboo kabhi juda nahin hote

apni ankho mein hasrat ko basa ask nahi
apne pyaar ko pyaar samjh bhool nahi
jo ho gya hai usko yaad na kar pareshaan na ho
koi dil tere liye dadkega ye hakikat hai sapna nahi

bahoot khoob sakhi ji....laajawab...
aap ne jis mehnat aur apnepan se mujhe reply kiya hai ...mein kuch bhi likhu wo kam hai...bas yehi kahunga ki aap ka dil bahoot bada hai...jo ki dusron ke jazbaaton ko samjh sakta hai...aur unka gam baat sakta hai...aap sada khush rahiye aur khushiyon ke phool aise hi bikherti rahiye bas yehi dua hai meri....apna khayal rakhiyega...
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priye sakhi ji
aap ki gazal mein chupe zazbaaton ki gehrai mein samjh sakta hoon,,,aur isiliye padh kar dukh hua,,,kyun ki ismein gam jhalak raha tha na....aur meine sada aap ko khush dekhna chaha hai...bas.
yeh sach hai ki likhne se gam kam ho jata hai.....magar aise haalat aap ke saath na aaye yehi chahat hai meri....aap bahoot acha likhti hai sada yu hi likhte rahiye...meri rai aur daad sada aapke saath hai....khush rahiye.
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roopali ji
kaisi hai aap???? shukriya aapka ki aapne meri koshish ko pasand kiya...aap bhi bahoot acha likhti hai,,mein aapke sabhi kalaam padhta hoon magar waqt ki kami aur kuch majbooriyon ke chalte sab par reply nahin kar pata...iske liye muafi chahta hoon....aapki hauslaafzai ke liye dil ki gehraiyon se shukrguzar rahunga..
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apka bahoot baoot shukriya...aap ne mera hausla hamesha badhaya hai...aap ka likha geet mera bhi pasandida hai...aise hi likhte rahiye...apna khayal rakhiye
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yaad-e-Khudaa kiye jaa tujh ko Khudaa milegaa

daulat ho yaa hukuumat taaqat ho yaa javaanii
har chiiz miTane vaalii har chiiz aanii-jaanii
ye sab Guruur ik din miTTii me.n jaa milegaa

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parastar ji
bahoot acha kalaam se rub ru karwaya hai aapne....aap ka bahoot bahoot shukriya.aap ne bahoot acha likha hai...mein sehmat hoon aapse...magar kabhi kabhi gam bhi apne se lagte hai...dard ka bhi ek alag sukoon hota hai...bas unhi lamhon mein likhi hui gazal hai yeh..likhte rahiye aur apna khayal rakhiye.
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aap to hardam mujhe is kadar ans dete ho sher se ki kuch kahte nahi banta haiapka ye sher bhi acha laga hamesha


dhadakte dil ko pathar kehne ki bhool ki hai
majboori ko muqaddar samjhne ki bhool ki hai
naadan hoon mein yeh bhi na samjh ...
apnon ko sitamgar samjhne ki bhool ki hai

chalo daad deti hun apko .

kuch rishte aise bhi hote hai jo toota nahin karte
phool se khushboo kabhi juda nahin hote

ye bhi thik kaha hai phoolo se khoosboo kabhi juda nahi ho sakti hai.

thanx itne ache reply ke liye.
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priye sakhi ji
aap ne kadam kadam par na sirf mera saath diya hai balki hausla bhi badhaya hai....meri nazron mein aapke liye bahoot bada sthan hai....aap sada khuash rahen aur yun hi khushiyan bikherti rahe...yehi kaamna hai.....apna khayal rakhiye..
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Manoj saaHeb: namaste!

maiN kabhee kabhee idhar aa jaataa hooN lekin ab tak kisee kee nazm yaa Ghazal per likhaa naheeN hai. aap kee Ghazal dekh kar bohat Khushee hu'ee. aap ke Khayaalaat bohat hee sundar haiN. lekin chooN.k aap ne Ghazal kee ta'leem naheeN lee hai in Khayaalaat ko adaa naheeN kar sake haiN. bal.k yeh kehnaa ziyaada saHeeH ho gaa k in Khayaalaat ko Ghazal ke DhaNg meiN naheeN keh sake haiN. maiN ne sochaa k in ko Ghazal ke roop meiN likh kar dekhooN k kaise lagte haiN so aisaa hee kiyaa. nateeja aap ke saamne hai.

Ghazal meiN aik cheez hotee hai jiss ko :beHr: (meter) kehte haiN, ya'nee Ghazal kee her line (=misre') ko aik hee lambaa'ee kaa honaa chaahiye aur paRhne meiN in kaa :rhythmic: honaa bhee zarooree hai. maiN ne koshish kee hai k aap ke Khayaalaat ko iss roop meiN DhaalooN. iss koshish meiN kaheeN kaheeN aap ke bunyaadee Khayaal se thoRaa sa haTnaa paRaa hai varna baat naheeN bantee thee. ummeed hai k aap buraa naheeN maaneN ge.

maiN samajhtaa hooN k aap ko agar meree yeh koshish pasand naheeN aa'yee to aisee buree bhee naheN lage gee. apnee raa'e likhiye. shukriya!

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Toote hue khawabonmein haqiqat dhundta hoon
pathar ke dilon mein mohabbat dhundta hoon

(Khwaab TooTey per Haqeeqat DhooNDtaa hooN
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naadan hoon mein ab tak yeh bhi nahin samjha
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(kiss qadar naadaan hooN samjhaa na ab tak
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mere jazbaaton ki keemat yahan kuch bhi nahin
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(kon detaa hai yahaaN jazboN kee qeemat?
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:jazba: singular hai, :jazbaat: uss kaa plural hai lekin :jazbaatoN: ko'ee lafz naheeN hai.
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is ajnabi dunia mein koi bhi apna nahin
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thanx manoj ji
meine to bas dosti ka frz nibhane ki koshish ki hai
khushi mein chahe mein ek baar naa aao apke saath but gam mein har pal saath dungi mein apka,

apne mere ko jo staan diya hai pata nahi uske kabil hun ya nahi.but thanx a lot

khyaal rak ke khush rahna ok
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Bohot sahi likhhe hein aap. I hope Manoj Jee will like it too. Thank you. Aachha laga aapko yeaha dekhke aur aapka likhha dekhte hue. Aise hi likhte rahiyega. Shukriya. Aapna khayal rakhiyega. God bless you. Allah Hafiz.


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Sarwar sahib,

Shukriya, yahan aakar hamein yoon ghazal ke baare batane kaa...aapki koshish ne manoj ji ke jazzbaton ko char chaand laga diye...i'm sure manoj ji ko bhi pasand ayega yeh naya roop...
plz...feel free to hamari mamuli koshishon ko suthra banaane kee...i would feel honored...aapki shayri jitni padhi bahut hee umda lagi...masroofiyat kee wajah se jyada padh nahin paayee...lekin padhti rahoongi...

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Khwaab TooTey per Haqeeqat DhooNDtaa hooN
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kiss qadar naadaan hooN samjhaa na ab tak
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kon detaa hai yahaaN jazboN kee qeemat?
kaisee bastee meiN sharaafat DhooNDtaa hooN!

:jazba: singular hai, :jazbaat: uss kaa plural hai lekin :jazbaatoN: ko'ee lafz naheeN hai.
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ajnabee dunyaa hai Khud bhee kho gayaa hooN
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sarwar bhai saheb
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aapne jis apnepan aur mehnat se hamari koshish ko padha samjha aur sudhara hai uska shukriya kehne ko mere paas alfaaz nahin hai....aap jaise maahir aur hunarmand shaksh ki sangat mein bahoot kuch sikhne ko milega......mein to ek shaukiya shayar hoon,,,jo dil mein aata hai ,likh deta hoon,,magar shayri ke usool nahin maloom the,,,aaj aap ne hamein woh kaayde samjha kar ek nayi raah dikhayi hai....mujhe khushi hai ki aapne meri koshiah ko is laayak samjha ki us par apne khayalat zaahir kiye ja sake.
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doasto: aadaab aur namaste!

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Keise hein aap? Shukriya bohot bohot link dene ke liye. Likhte rahiyega. Aapna khayal rakhiyega. Allah Hafiz.


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priye sakhi ji
sacha dost aur sacha saathi to wohi hota hai jo bure waqt mein bhi saath na chode...mein sehmat hoon aapse...aur yeh bhi janta hoon aap ek sachi dost aur ek achi saathi hai...jo sada dusron ko khushiyan deti rehti hai......sada aise hi rahiyega....apna khayal rakhiyega
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sakhi ji,,shimul ji..parastar ji

Sarwar bhai ka shukrguzar ham sab ko hona chayiye,,unhone jis khoobi aur saralta se is gazal ko sudhara hai uska koi jawab nahin......unko padh kar meine jana ki kitni kami thi meri gazal mein,,,zazbaat wahi hai,,magar kehne ka tarika badal diya sarwar bhai ne....bahoot khoob....
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manoj ji apne to mujhe itna bada samaan de diya shayd is layak nahi hun mein.

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