Ghazal:aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by Pradhyuman

Mayank ji,

bahottttt hi umdaa....
kis sher ki taarif karun maiN..ek muqammal ghazal pesh karne pe dil se daad deta hun..

yeh kuch sher bahot hi zyada dil ko chu gaye:


ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!

zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!

ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?

yeh padhkar aisa laga jaise mano maiN shunya hun...phir se sarjan karna hai...

khush rahiye..god bless u

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman

pradhuman saahab,

namaste:

aap ne Gahzalpasand farmaaya is ke liye mai.n aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n.. aur aap ki daad ko tah-e-dil se qubool karta huu.n..ummeed hai ki aap aage bhii yuu.n hi hausila afzaaii karte rahe.nge.. aap khud ek achchhe shayaar hai.n to aap ki hausila afzaaii bhi khaas maayene rakhti hai..

apna khayaal rakhiyegaa..

Mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110

Mayank ji.......Main aapki Ghazal ki kaha se taarif shuru karu......mujhe bhi pata nahi......sabhi sher itne umda hai ki.....taarif ke liye alfaaz dhund pana mushkil ho raha hai.........bas itna kahunga .......bahut khub likha hai aapne.......aise hi likhte rahiyega.........aur mujhe aapki nayi rachna ka intezaar rahega......khush rahiye.......

tahe dil se daad detaa hu.......kabul farmaiyega..........

naresh saahab

namaste:

aap ko Ghazal pasand aaye mere liye bohat khushii ki baat hai,.. kyun ki aap khud ek anubhavi shaayar hai.n, tpo aap ki pasandagii bhii khaas maaene rakhti hai.. aap ne jis andaaz se Ghazal ki taareef kii hai, us ne mujeh la-jawaab kar diya hai.. tah-e-dil se aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n..

ab nayee rachan kab tak puuri hogi, yeh to nahii.n bata sakta par koshish karuunga ki, jaldi hi koii Ghazal pesh karuu.n...

apna khayaal rakhiyegaa..

ek baar phir se shukriyah!

-mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by mann_chand

Mayank jee,

Kiase hain aap?

wah wah suban allah ... ghazal ki tareef ke liye shabad kahan se laaye
Har sher dil ko chu gaya hain ...

dua karti hu aur ghazal\s nazar karte rahenge ....

take care

mandeep

mandeep jee:

mai.n baDhiya huu.n aur ummeed karta huu.n ki aap bhii khairiyat se hogii...

aap ne bhale hi aap ko lafz nahii.n mil rahe hai.n taareef ke liye, par aap ke ehsaas bayaa.n kar rahe hai.n ki Ghazal ki qadar aap ko bhayee hai... mai.n tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n is hausiala aur izzat afzaayee ke liye...

apna khayaal rakhiyegaa...

Mayank

[chaahat]

Originally Posted by Mayank

moderator saahiba,

Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye to aap ka shukr-guzaar huu.n. aap ko Ghazal bhaayee, khush qismati hai merii.. waise aap kahaa.n ghuum ho nazar hii nahii.n aa rahii ho.. sab khairiyat to hai na?

apna khayaal rakkho..

Mayank

Sab khairiyat hai Mayank bhai..

Bas kuch masroofiyat aur jyada kuch nahi.

Koshish karti rehti hun idhar ka rukh karne ki... jaise ki aaj haazir hun

Take Care..

~Priya

[maikasH]

Mayank saheb

namaste


Ghazal aapne khoob khai hai aur aisi kahi hai jaisi aaj-kal mujhe aap jaise sho'ra se ummiid rehti hai....aise qalaam padh kar thoDi tassalli milti hai ke Ghazal ke abhi achche din barqaraar haiN


kisi ek she'r pe khususaan daad nahiiN duuNga kyoN mujhe tam'aam ash'aar pasaNd aaye haiN....do-ek jagah zabaan aur alfaaz ke istemaal par aitraaz hai go uska zikr phir kabhi



mashq jaari rakhiye


ummiid karta huuN ke ziNdagi rahi to ek-na-ek din aap majmuaa paDhne ko zaroor milega


dua'go
maikash

[maikasH]

bhai miyaaN


aapko ek bohat zaroori PM likha tha, pataa chala ke aap Pm's accept nahiiN kar rahe haiN....dobara likhne ki himmat nahiiN hai....socha aapko ittelaah kar duuN


maikash

[sakhi1909]

mayank


kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ach laga ye sher khash kar
baki gazal bhi achi rahi

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by MahamAzmi

Kiya umda ashaar hein sahab,

daad hazir hei inke hazur,

bauhat hee alaa'a andaz e bayaan


eik do arz karte chalein gu ke hum tou tifl e maktab hein phir bhi aap se asaatza ko mehaz eik khayal se aagaah karte jayen socha......

NAAR ki jagha agar AATISH lafz kar diiya jaye tou dekhiye ga ...NAAR akcar jahanum aur NAARI jahanumiyon ke liye istimaal kiya jata hai aur is mein vo nazakat nahi apa rahee hei


dosree baat ZAMEEN KI KHAAK kee bajaiyae a gar GARD E RAAH kar diya jaye

yunhee baat zehan mein ayee

umeed hei ye jasarat garaan na guzre gee tabiyat pe



eik umda kalam ke hazur Maham ki daad haazir hei

Qabul kijiye

Maham saahiba,

aadaab arz hai!

Ghazal aap ko pasand aayee aur aap ne khaaksaar ki itni hausilaa afzaaii kii, is ke liye, mai.n aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n...

maham dost, aap se guzaarish hai, ki aap khud ko, tifl-e-maktab aur mujhe astaazaa na kahe.n... astaazaa to bohat duur ki baat hai, mai.n to un ka khaak-e-paa bhii nahii.n huu.n.. yeh aap bhii jaan,ti hai.n.. mai.n ek tifl-e-maktab hii huu.n.. us se zyaadah kuchh bhii nahii.n....

aap ne naar aur naari lafz ke baare me.n bataaya, jaan kar achcha lagaa, kyun ki is ke baare me.n meri pahle se koii jaan kaarii nahii.n thee.. agar jaan kaari hoti to wiasa istemaal nahii.n karta... is ke liye aap ka behad maamuun huu.n. mai.n koshish karuu.nga ki, us lafz ko badal duu.n, atish-e-ulfat ko wahaa.n par liyaa jaa sakta hai, jaise kii '

aatish-e-ulfat sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa

aur aap ka duusra sujhaab zameen ki khaak ki jagah gard-e-raah ka, woh bhi Theek hai.. aisa shakl ban rahii hai... aap phir se dekh leejiyega...

ham hai.n gard-e-raah tum noor-e-falak
to ufuq par chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa

aap ne khul kar apni raa'ey di, mere liye khushii ki baat hai.. yuu.n hi aage bhi be-jhijhak apni raa'ey se nawaazte rahe.n.. aur aap kuchh buri ya Ghalat baat baat kah jaaye.n, aisa hone ki gunjaaish kam hi rehtii hai.. so be-fikr rahiye..

ek baar phir se sukriyah!


-mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by maikasH

Mayank saheb

namaste


Ghazal aapne khoob khai hai aur aisi kahi hai jaisi aaj-kal mujhe aap jaise sho'ra se ummiid rehti hai....aise qalaam padh kar thoDi tassalli milti hai ke Ghazal ke abhi achche din barqaraar haiN


kisi ek she'r pe khususaan daad nahiiN duuNga kyoN mujhe tam'aam ash'aar pasaNd aaye haiN....do-ek jagah zabaan aur alfaaz ke istemaal par aitraaz hai go uska zikr phir kabhi



mashq jaari rakhiye


ummiid karta huuN ke ziNdagi rahi to ek-na-ek din aap majmuaa paDhne ko zaroor milega


dua'go
maikash

maikash bhai,

namsate:

Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n.. chu.n ki aap ek behad achchhe shayar hai.n, aur behad achchhi Ghazal kahte hau.n, to aap ki pasandagii , behad maaene rakhti hai.n .. aur yeh bhi intahaaii masarrat ki baat hai ki, aap ke shagird aap ke ummeedo.n par kahii.n kahii.n khare utar rahe hai.n

tamam, ashaar ki pasandagii ke liye tah-e-dil se shukriyah.. aur jahaa.n aap ko kuchh aitraaz the, woh bhii kah dete to baDi mehrbaani hotee.. ummeed hai, zald hii, is maamle par aap se phir baat hogii...

albatta, mashq zaari rahegaa, aur gaahe-ba-gaahe, aap ko hame jhelna bhii paDegaa.. aur rahii baat majmuaa ki, to,aisa kuchh sochaa nahii.n hai ab tak, kyu.n ki koii peshwar shayar to ham hai.n haii.n.. sdc par kaaGhaz kaali kar lete hai.n, yehi bohat hai

izzat aur hausila afzaaii ke liye, ek baar phir se aap ka shukriyah!

apna khayaal rakhiye..

Mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by maikasH

bhai miyaaN


aapko ek bohat zaroori PM likha tha, pataa chala ke aap Pm's accept nahiiN kar rahe haiN....dobara likhne ki himmat nahiiN hai....socha aapko ittelaah kar duuN


maikash

upps! shaayad koii technical kharaabi rah gayee hogii.. par ab to Theek hai...

-mayank

[Pulkit_gupta]

Mayank bhai...

Uff uff uff kya kaatilaana andaaz hain aapke... Kyaa likh diya hai... Har sher padhkar dil se bass waah hi waaah nikli... Kasam se mazaa aa gaya ise padhkar... This is one of the most expressive ghazals I've ever read... Dil me utar gaye aapke aashaar...Aisa lagta hai maano aashaar bol rahen hon...

Daad kyaa dooon, woh chhoti rahegi is nagiine ke aage... Main to apni topi utaar ke rakh deta hoon... I mean... Hats off to you...

Bass mehfil ko aise hi sajaate rehna... apna khayal rakhna...

Originally Posted by Mayank

हाल-ए-सोज़-ए-दिल तुम्हे बतलायें क्या
अश्क का पैमाना फिर छलकायें क्या

may I show you the state of my heart pain
may I spill the cup of my tears once again

नार-ए-उल्फ़त! ऐ सनम भड्कायें क्या
हम तुम्हारे और क़रीब आ जायें क्या

the fire of love,my dear, may I blow
may I come closer to you, a bit more

दिल में धड्कन बन के हम बस जायेंगे
जिस्म दो हैं जान एक हो जायें क्या?

As a heart beat, in your heart I will reside
To become a single life, let the two souls unite

क्युं नहीं करती हमारा ऐतबार?
"अक्स हैं हम आईना दिखलायें क्या"

Why am I never worthy of your trust
Let me show you a mirror,I am your reflect

इश्क़ दोज़ख भी है, जन्नत भी है इश्क़
देखिये क़िस्मत में अपनी पायें क्या

love is hell and love is also heavenly
lets see what I get from my destiny

हम ज़मीं की ख़ाक तुम नूर-ए-फ़लक
तो उफ़ुक़ पर ,चल के हम मिल जायें क्या

I am the dust of earth,and in the sky you shine as light
Shall we walk upto the horizons ,and there we unite

ज़िन्दगी के पेच-ओ-खम में फंस गये
क्या करें! अब रोयें क्या! मुस्कायें क्या!

lost I am in the twists and turns of life in deep
confused I am,should I smile or should I weep

अब कहां :ग़ाफ़िल: वो शौक़-ए-शाइरी!
आप ही फ़रमाइये, फ़रमायें क्या?

for poetry,.. Ghaafil now hardly have any interest
what should I say..,why don't you suggest

-मयंक

[maikasH]

Originally Posted by Mayank

upps! shaayad koii technical kharaabi rah gayee hogii.. par ab to Theek hai...

-mayank

bhaii miyaaN ab sab theek ho ya na ho is se mujhe koii sar-o-kaar nahiiN.... ga'ur kijiye :


isii meiN ishq ki kismat badal bhi sakti thi
jo waqt beet gaya mujhko aazmaane meiN


go in do misroN meiN baat ishq ki zabaan meiN hai ba-wajood iske mujhe aapse kam se kam yeh ummiid to hai ke aap ishaara zaroor samajh gaye hoNge



dher saari baateiN haiN joi kehna chata huuN magar fitrat ka takaazaah hai ke chup raha jaaye....ba-har-haal is bazm ki shamaa ab aapke haath meiN hai...

ek Ghazal aapke hawaale kar raha huuN voh isliye ke maiN kuch bhi huuN lekin zabaan de kar mukarnaa mera shevaa nahiiN isliye tabiyat ki zidd hai ke is bazm meiN ab koii nayi post na kii jaaye so yeh taraahii Ghazal aapki hifaazat meiN choRe jaa raha huuN :



hum ne uske vaaste kya-kya kiyaa nahiiN !
kismat ke jaur dekhiye vo phir milaa nahiiN


tarq-e-wafaa pe isliye bhi maiN khafaa nahiiN
uski thiiN kya majbooriiyaaN mujhko pataa nahiiN


dikhte haiN aib jis ko har kisi meiN be-shumaar
shaayad voh shakhs aaiinoN meiN jhaaNktaa nahiiN


zulm sahuuN us pe shikayat bhi na karuuN !
ai jaan-e-Ghazal aadmi huuN, devtaa nahiiN


risney diyaa usne bhi aik zakhm umr bhar
maine bhi aik chaak jigar ka siyaa nahiiN


mujh ko qabool saare zamaane ki zilla'teiN
par mujhko bewafaa na keh, maiN bewafaa nahiiN


huuN muNtazir maiN teraa qayamat ke roz taq
ziNdaa rahuuNgaa tab talaq yeh vaayi'daa nahiiN


TukdoN ko dekh-dekh ke jee bhar chuka miraa
ab au'r khwaab dekhne ka hau'slaa nahiiN


har lamhaa dard-e-dil meiN izaafoN ke ba-wajood
paas-e-wafaa ko maine taak par rak'khaa nahiiN


kaaNToN se thi khusbuu ki tavvaqo, meri taq'seer
maiN khud hi gunaahgaar huuN, uski khataa nahii


paaya hai jis ko uss se mohabbat na kar sakey
har pal duaaoN meiN jisey maaNgaa, milaa nahiiN


ab khaatir-e-taskeen-e-dil kyuN dar-ba-dar phiruuN
is marz ki maiN jaanta huuN kuch dawaa nahiiN


sajdoN ne jiske dar ko tere, khooN se raNg diya
yeh sar vo tha jo kal talaq kahiiN jhukaa nahiiN


"maikash" tam'aam umr kaTii is malaal meiN
"hum ziNdagii the humko kisi ne jiyaa nahiiN"



rab raakha
maikash

[NISHA_VIRGO16]

Originally Posted by Mayank

shayri.com ke sabhii dosto.n ko mere salaam, ek taazi Ghazal ke saath haazir huu.n.. apni raa'ey se zaruur nawaaziyegaa

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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa

naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!

dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?

kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"

ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?

ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!

zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!

ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?

-Mayank

haal-e-soz-e-dil: dil ke dard ka haal
naar-e-ulfat: ishq ki aag
dozakh: hell
jannat:heaven
kshitiz: horizon
falak: aasamaa.n
pech-o-kham: Twist and turns

mayank jee...
maafi chahti hun ki pehle aapko reply nahin kar pa_ii...

badhaii aur daad dekar faedaa hai nahin... kyunki aap khud jaante hi hain ki aap kitne umda likhte ho.... aur replies se ye bhi pata chal gaya hoga ki gazal kitni pyaari hai....

mujhe to aap ye batao... ki ye gazal likhi kiske liye hai aapne??? kisko manaya ja raaha hai??? kisse milne ki itniiii betaabii hai???


aapke jawaab ke intzaar mein...
aapki dost
nisha

[shipra]

Originally Posted by Mayank

shayri.com ke sabhii dosto.n ko mere salaam, ek taazi Ghazal ke saath haazir huu.n.. apni raa'ey se zaruur nawaaziyegaa

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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa

naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!

dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?

kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"

ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?

ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!

zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!

ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?

-Mayank

haal-e-soz-e-dil: dil ke dard ka haal
naar-e-ulfat: ishq ki aag
dozakh: hell
jannat:heaven
kshitiz: horizon
falak: aasamaa.n
pech-o-kham: Twist and turns

Mayank ji,
tarif ke liye shabd hi nahi h. bahut accha likha h aap ne
or iska english me transalation to or bhi kamal h
Best wishes to you

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by chaahat

Sab khairiyat hai Mayank bhai..

Bas kuch masroofiyat aur jyada kuch nahi.

Koshish karti rehti hun idhar ka rukh karne ki... jaise ki aaj haazir hun

Take Care..

~Priya

hmm.. I think good news to ab tak aa hi chukaa hogaa.. aap ne bataaya nahii.n....

take care

mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by sakhi1909

mayank


kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"
ach laga ye sher khash kar
baki gazal bhi achi rahi

sakhii jee,

aap ne Ghazal pasand farmaaya, jaan kar khushii huii.. aur aap ne jo sher chuna hai, woh sher mere khayaal se haasil-e-Ghazal hai.. is kee pasandagii ke liye alag se shukr-guzaar huu.n...

apna khayaal rakhiye

Mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by Pulkit_gupta

Mayank bhai...

Uff uff uff kya kaatilaana andaaz hain aapke... Kyaa likh diya hai... Har sher padhkar dil se bass waah hi waaah nikli... Kasam se mazaa aa gaya ise padhkar... This is one of the most expressive ghazals I've ever read... Dil me utar gaye aapke aashaar...Aisa lagta hai maano aashaar bol rahen hon...

Daad kyaa dooon, woh chhoti rahegi is nagiine ke aage... Main to apni topi utaar ke rakh deta hoon... I mean... Hats off to you...

Bass mehfil ko aise hi sajaate rehna... apna khayal rakhna...

pulkit bhaii,

aap ke taarif karne ke andaaz ne to mujhe la-jawaab kar diya hai... kuchh kahte nahii.n ban rahaa hai jitnaa meraa andaaz aap ko qaaitlaana lag rahaa hai, us se zyaadah hame aap ki daad zehreeli lag rahii hai. zehreelii daad ke liye , shukriyah! aap ko Ghazal is kadar bhaayee hai, yeh to mere liye i.ntahaaii masarrat kii baat hai... yeh Ghazal mujhe bhii behad pasand hai.. aap me.n khaasiyat yeh bhii hai ki, aap ek achche reader bhii hai.n.. jo ki Ghazlo.n ki kamiiyo.n par dhyaan na de kar, Ghazal me.n kuchh na kuchh khaasiyat dhundhh hi lete hai.n.. to hats off to you, mujhe kahana chaahiye,....

hausiala afzaaii, izzat afzaaii, aur daad dene ke liye, mai.n aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n. . ummeed hai aap se phir baat hogii..

Mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by maikasH

ek Ghazal aapke hawaale kar raha huuN voh isliye ke maiN kuch bhi huuN lekin zabaan de kar mukarnaa mera shevaa nahiiN isliye tabiyat ki zidd hai ke is bazm meiN ab koii nayi post na kii jaaye so yeh taraahii Ghazal aapki hifaazat meiN choRe jaa raha huuN :



hum ne uske vaaste kya-kya kiyaa nahiiN !
kismat ke jaur dekhiye vo phir milaa nahiiN


tarq-e-wafaa pe isliye bhi maiN khafaa nahiiN
uski thiiN kya majbooriiyaaN mujhko pataa nahiiN


dikhte haiN aib jis ko har kisi meiN be-shumaar
shaayad voh shakhs aaiinoN meiN jhaaNktaa nahiiN


zulm sahuuN us pe shikayat bhi na karuuN !
ai jaan-e-Ghazal aadmi huuN, devtaa nahiiN


risney diyaa usne bhi aik zakhm umr bhar
maine bhi aik chaak jigar ka siyaa nahiiN


mujh ko qabool saare zamaane ki zilla'teiN
par mujhko bewafaa na keh, maiN bewafaa nahiiN


huuN muNtazir maiN teraa qayamat ke roz taq
ziNdaa rahuuNgaa tab talaq yeh vaayi'daa nahiiN


TukdoN ko dekh-dekh ke jee bhar chuka miraa
ab au'r khwaab dekhne ka hau'slaa nahiiN


har lamhaa dard-e-dil meiN izaafoN ke ba-wajood
paas-e-wafaa ko maine taak par rak'khaa nahiiN


kaaNToN se thi khusbuu ki tavvaqo, meri taq'seer
maiN khud hi gunaahgaar huuN, uski khataa nahii


paaya hai jis ko uss se mohabbat na kar sakey
har pal duaaoN meiN jisey maaNgaa, milaa nahiiN


ab khaatir-e-taskeen-e-dil kyuN dar-ba-dar phiruuN
is marz ki maiN jaanta huuN kuch dawaa nahiiN


sajdoN ne jiske dar ko tere, khooN se raNg diya
yeh sar vo tha jo kal talaq kahiiN jhukaa nahiiN


"maikash" tam'aam umr kaTii is malaal meiN
"hum ziNdagii the humko kisi ne jiyaa nahiiN"



rab raakha
maikash

maikash bhaiii,

behad pyaarii Ghazal kahii hai aap ne..behad-behad asar daar... isay maine sdc par post kar diya hai to, is Ghazal par ab wohii.n aap se baat hogii...

apna khayaal rakhiye...

mayank

[abed_farooqui]

Originally Posted by Mayank

हाल-ए-सोज़-ए-दिल तुम्हे बतलायें क्या
अश्क का पैमाना फिर छलकायें क्या

may I show you the state of my heart pain
may I spill the cup of my tears once again

नार-ए-उल्फ़त! ऐ सनम भड्कायें क्या
हम तुम्हारे और क़रीब आ जायें क्या

the fire of love,my dear, may I blow
may I come closer to you, a bit more

दिल में धड्कन बन के हम बस जायेंगे
जिस्म दो हैं जान एक हो जायें क्या?

As a heart beat, in your heart I will reside
To become a single life, let the two souls unite

क्युं नहीं करती हमारा ऐतबार?
"अक्स हैं हम आईना दिखलायें क्या"

Why am I never worthy of your trust
Let me show you a mirror,I am your reflect

इश्क़ दोज़ख भी है, जन्नत भी है इश्क़
देखिये क़िस्मत में अपनी पायें क्या

love is hell and love is also heavenly
lets see what I get from my destiny

हम ज़मीं की ख़ाक तुम नूर-ए-फ़लक
तो उफ़ुक़ पर ,चल के हम मिल जायें क्या

I am the dust of earth,and in the sky you shine as light
Shall we walk upto the horizons ,and there we unite

ज़िन्दगी के पेच-ओ-खम में फंस गये
क्या करें! अब रोयें क्या! मुस्कायें क्या!

lost I am in the twists and turns of life in deep
confused I am,should I smile or should I weep

अब कहां :ग़ाफ़िल: वो शौक़-ए-शाइरी!
आप ही फ़रमाइये, फ़रमायें क्या?

for poetry,.. Ghaafil now hardly have any interest
what should I say..,why don't you suggest

-मयंक

सुभान अल्लाह, भाई आपको पढ़ा और ऐसा लगा के अबतक के सभी शायरो में आप सबसे अच्छे शायर नज़र आए मैं शायरी का कोई ज़्यादा मालूमत नही रखता पर आपको पढ़ा और समझा तो जनाब आपकी शायरी मुझे बहुत बहुत पसंद आई.... मैं तो पढ़ता ही रह गया माशा अल्लाह ही कहूँगा ,आपकी शायरी के काबिलमेरे लफ़्ज़ों में तारीफ ही नही है, आपको बार बार पढ़ने का चान्स मिले इतनी इलतेजा करूँगा.

[Amanush...]

Originally Posted by Mayank

shayri.com ke sabhii dosto.n ko mere salaam, ek taazi Ghazal ke saath haazir huu.n.. apni raa'ey se zaruur nawaaziyegaa

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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa

naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!

dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?

kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"

ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?

ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!

zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!

ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?

-Mayank

haal-e-soz-e-dil: dil ke dard ka haal
naar-e-ulfat: ishq ki aag
dozakh: hell
jannat:heaven
kshitiz: horizon
falak: aasamaa.n
pech-o-kham: Twist and turns

Aap ke iss ghazal ko angeenat baar parha lekin abhi tak jee bharaa nahin, Mayank Bhai...! Tareef jitna karein isski, kam hi paDegaa...!

I should say ' Adding one more feather to your cap '

I really like this creation of yours...!

Keep on with the good work and may God bless you...!

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by NISHA_VIRGO16

mayank jee...
maafi chahti hun ki pehle aapko reply nahin kar pa_ii...

badhaii aur daad dekar faedaa hai nahin... kyunki aap khud jaante hi hain ki aap kitne umda likhte ho.... aur replies se ye bhi pata chal gaya hoga ki gazal kitni pyaari hai....

mujhe to aap ye batao... ki ye gazal likhi kiske liye hai aapne??? kisko manaya ja raaha hai??? kisse milne ki itniiii betaabii hai???


aapke jawaab ke intzaar mein...
aapki dost
nisha

hello nisha jee

der aaye durust aaye.. is me.n mazraet waali koii baat nahii.n.. aur waise bhii aap ne jitne der se Ghazal par reply kiyaa, hamne bhi utni der se aap ko reply kiyaa hai, to hisaab waise bhiii baraabar ho gayaa

aap ne na badhaaiii dii, na daad, khair, koii baat nahii.n, hame pata hai ki ham kaisaa likhte hai.n.... ham dil se niklii huii, ankahii daad bhi qubool kar lete hai.n :P

waise, aap ne farmaaya hai ki yeh Ghazal kis ke liye hai, mai.n bhi yahii socha raha ahuu.n ki , kis ke liye hai, pata chalte hii aap ko sabs e pahle bataata huu.n :P

shukriyah!

mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by shipra

Mayank ji,
tarif ke liye shabd hi nahi h. bahut accha likha h aap ne
or iska english me transalation to or bhi kamal h
Best wishes to you

shipra jee,

kaise hai.n aap? ummeed hai, bhali changi ho.ngii

Ghazal par aap ki hausila afzaaii ke liye mai.n aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr guzaar huul.n.. aap khud bhi achchha likhti hai.n, aur aap ke ehsaas bhi hame pasand hai, to Ghazal par aap ki pasandagii hamaare liye khaas maaene rakhti hai.. yuu.n hi aage bhii saath dete rahiye...

apna khayaal rakhiye

mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by abed_farooqui

सुभान अल्लाह, भाई आपको पढ़ा और ऐसा लगा के अबतक के सभी शायरो में आप सबसे अच्छे शायर नज़र आए मैं शायरी का कोई ज़्यादा मालूमत नही रखता पर आपको पढ़ा और समझा तो जनाब आपकी शायरी मुझे बहुत बहुत पसंद आई.... मैं तो पढ़ता ही रह गया माशा अल्लाह ही कहूँगा ,आपकी शायरी के काबिलमेरे लफ़्ज़ों में तारीफ ही नही है, आपको बार बार पढ़ने का चान्स मिले इतनी इलतेजा करूँगा.

saahaab aap ne jin lafzo.n se meri hausialaa aur izzat afzaaii kee hai, aisa lag rahaa hai ki khaak ko aap ne aasmaan kaa noor banaa diyaa, behad maamuun huu.n aap kaa... aisa nahii.n ki shayri.com par mai.n sab se behtar likhataa huu.n, aap ko shayri.com par mujh se achchhe aur bohat behtar likhane waale shayar bhii mil jaaye.nge...

aap ek bohat achche reader hai.n, aur behad pyaar ke saath paDhte bhii hai.n aur hausila afzaaii bhii karte hai.n.. ummeed haim, aisa hii rabt aap se aage bhii banaa rahegaa... apna khayaal rakhiye.. shukriyah!

Mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by Mushkil

Aap ke iss ghazal ko angeenat baar parha lekin abhi tak jee bharaa nahin, Mayank Bhai...! Tareef jitna karein isski, kam hi paDegaa...!

I should say ' Adding one more feather to your cap '

I really like this creation of yours...!

Keep on with the good work and may God bless you...!

danny bhaii,

kaise ho aap? ooparwaala(god) aap ko achchhi sehat aur lambi umr ataa kare...

mai.n Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu,n.. aap khud bhi achchhe shayar hai.n, to aap ki pasandagii khaas maayne rakhati hai.. ummeed hai, aage bhi aap se daad milti rahegii.. apna khayaal rakhiye...

mayank

[zidd]

Originally Posted by Mayank

shayri.com ke sabhii dosto.n ko mere salaam, ek taazi Ghazal ke saath haazir huu.n.. apni raa'ey se zaruur nawaaziyegaa

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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa

naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!

dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?

kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"

ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?

ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!

zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!

ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?

-Mayank

haal-e-soz-e-dil: dil ke dard ka haal
naar-e-ulfat: ishq ki aag
dozakh: hell
jannat:heaven
kshitiz: horizon
falak: aasamaa.n
pech-o-kham: Twist and turns

mayank sahab .........aadaab........

apki ghazal pasand aayi.............
yun to sare sher acche lage ...........magar ye khas accha laga.......

ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!

like a rainbow on the horizon..........hmmmm.......standing together between the arch of the horizon..... aise imagine karna theek hai.....

bahut acchi peshkash par meri daad kabol kijiye.........

regards

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by zidd

mayank sahab .........aadaab........

apki ghazal pasand aayi.............
yun to sare sher acche lage ...........magar ye khas accha laga.......

ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!

like a rainbow on the horizon..........hmmmm.......standing together between the arch of the horizon..... aise imagine karna theek hai.....

bahut acchi peshkash par meri daad kabol kijiye.........

regards

zidd saahab,

aadaab!

Ghazal ki pasandagii ke liye aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n... aap ki daad qubool hai.... khaas sher mujhe bhii khaas taur par pasand hai.. izzat afzaaii ek liye shukriyah!

apna khayaal rakhiye...

Mayank

[zainy]

Originally Posted by Mayank

हाल-ए-सोज़-ए-दिल तुम्हे बतलायें क्या
अश्क का पैमाना फिर छलकायें क्या

may I show you the state of my heart pain
may I spill the cup of my tears once again

नार-ए-उल्फ़त! ऐ सनम भड्कायें क्या
हम तुम्हारे और क़रीब आ जायें क्या

the fire of love,my dear, may I blow
may I come closer to you, a bit more

दिल में धड्कन बन के हम बस जायेंगे
जिस्म दो हैं जान एक हो जायें क्या?

As a heart beat, in your heart I will reside
To become a single life, let the two souls unite

क्युं नहीं करती हमारा ऐतबार?
"अक्स हैं हम आईना दिखलायें क्या"

Why am I never worthy of your trust
Let me show you a mirror,I am your reflect

इश्क़ दोज़ख भी है, जन्नत भी है इश्क़
देखिये क़िस्मत में अपनी पायें क्या

love is hell and love is also heavenly
lets see what I get from my destiny

हम ज़मीं की ख़ाक तुम नूर-ए-फ़लक
तो उफ़ुक़ पर ,चल के हम मिल जायें क्या

I am the dust of earth,and in the sky you shine as light
Shall we walk upto the horizons ,and there we unite

ज़िन्दगी के पेच-ओ-खम में फंस गये
क्या करें! अब रोयें क्या! मुस्कायें क्या!

lost I am in the twists and turns of life in deep
confused I am,should I smile or should I weep

अब कहां :ग़ाफ़िल: वो शौक़-ए-शाइरी!
आप ही फ़रमाइये, फ़रमायें क्या?

for poetry,.. Ghaafil now hardly have any interest
what should I say..,why don't you suggest

-मयंक

Mayank jii,

Ghazal tou khoobsurat hai hi, per english translation bhi lajawaab hai......apki nayi ghazal padhne ko mehfil me sab beqaraar hain.....kab tak intezaar karwayenge aap...?..

[Pulkit_gupta]

Originally Posted by Mayank

pulkit bhaii,

aap ke taarif karne ke andaaz ne to mujhe la-jawaab kar diya hai... kuchh kahte nahii.n ban rahaa hai jitnaa meraa andaaz aap ko qaaitlaana lag rahaa hai, us se zyaadah hame aap ki daad zehreeli lag rahii hai. zehreelii daad ke liye , shukriyah! aap ko Ghazal is kadar bhaayee hai, yeh to mere liye i.ntahaaii masarrat kii baat hai... yeh Ghazal mujhe bhii behad pasand hai.. aap me.n khaasiyat yeh bhii hai ki, aap ek achche reader bhii hai.n.. jo ki Ghazlo.n ki kamiiyo.n par dhyaan na de kar, Ghazal me.n kuchh na kuchh khaasiyat dhundhh hi lete hai.n.. to hats off to you, mujhe kahana chaahiye,....

hausiala afzaaii, izzat afzaaii, aur daad dene ke liye, mai.n aap ka tah-e-dil se shukr-guzaar huu.n. . ummeed hai aap se phir baat hogii..

Mayank

Amaa Mayank Bhai,

Is level ki kavvish pe, jahaan Maikash bhai bhi ishaaron me hi samjhaa ahe hain... mujhe kya khaak koi kami nazar aayegi Mere liye to bass kavvish ke ehsaas hi zaroori hain...aur woh agr aapki gahzal me kahin se bhi kam hai to koi mujhe bataaye...

Arse baad site pe aana shuru kiya hai isilye deri se yahaan aaya... khair ab mulaakaat hoti rahegi...aap gaayab naa ho jaao to...

[rajinderseep]

myank ji bahut hi umda gazal hai aapki......gazal ka ek shair or ek ek lafz qabilay tareef hai.bahut bahut mubarak ho.

[vikramjethi]

mayank saheb......behad khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne....maza aa gaya padh kar.......daad....

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by Pulkit_gupta

Arse baad site pe aana shuru kiya hai isilye deri se yahaan aaya... khair ab mulaakaat hoti rahegi...aap gaayab naa ho jaao to...

Amma Pulkit bhaii... kahaan kho gaye ho ab aap ?

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by vikramjethi

mayank saheb......behad khoobsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne....maza aa gaya padh kar.......daad....

Shukiyah Vikram Jee aap ki hausila aur izzat afzaii ke liye

Originally Posted by rajinderseep

myank ji bahut hi umda gazal hai aapki......gazal ka ek shair or ek ek lafz qabilay tareef hai.bahut bahut mubarak ho.

Rajinder jee,

Ghazal par aap ki daad mere liye behad qeemati hai.n.. ummeed hai aage bhi aap se milna hoga... shukriyah!


Mayank

[Mayank]

Originally Posted by zainy

Mayank jii,

Ghazal tou khoobsurat hai hi, per english translation bhi lajawaab hai......apki nayi ghazal padhne ko mehfil me sab beqaraar hain.....kab tak intezaar karwayenge aap...?..

hmm.. zainy jee.. aap ne such kaha english translation la-jawaab hai.. kyun ki jis ne yeh translate kiya hai woh khud hi la-jawaab hai translation ka credit main nahii.n le sakta huu.n rahii baat nayii Ghazal ki tou kuchh naya likhana huaa to yaha.n post hona hii hai tab tak aap bhi intazaar keejiye aur ham bhii..

-Mayank

[sameer'shaad']

Originally Posted by Mayank

haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa

ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?

zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!

ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?

-Mayank

Mayank saahab ko khaaksaar ka aadaab... aaj hi nazar gai aapke is naayab nageene pe.. kya kahun saahab.. bas kamaal ka likhte hain aap... bahot khoob... har ek sher khud me muqammal, har sher me ek nayaa
jazbae-muhabbat... meri daad peshe khidmat hain, qubool farmaaiyega..

Shaad...

[Radhika_2]

Originally Posted by Mayank

shayri.com ke sabhii dosto.n ko mere salaam, ek taazi Ghazal ke saath haazir huu.n.. apni raa'ey se zaruur nawaaziyegaa

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haal-e-soz-e-dil tumhe batlaaye.n kyaa
ashk kaa paimaanaa phir chalkaaye.n kyaa

naar-e-ulfat ai sanam bhaDkaaye.n kyaa!
ham tumhaare aur qareeb aa jaaye.n kyaa!

dil me.n dhaDhkan ban ke ham bas jaaye.n ge!
jism do hai.n jaan ek ho jaaye.n kyaa?

kyu.n nahii.n kartee hamaaraa aitbaar?
"aks hai.n ham aaiinaa dikhlaaye.n kyaa"

ishq dozakh bhii hai, jannat bhii hai ishq
dekhiye qismat me.n apnii paaye.n kyaa?

ham zamee.n kii Khaak tum nuur-e-falak
to kshitiz par ,chal ke ham mil jaaye.n kyaa!

zindagii ke pech-o-kham me.n pha.ns gaye
kyaa kare.n! ab roye.n kyaa! muskaaye.n kyaa!

ab kahaa.n :Ghaafil: woh shauq-e-shaairee!
aap hee farmaaiye, farmaaye.n kyaa?

-Mayank

haal-e-soz-e-dil: dil ke dard ka haal
naar-e-ulfat: ishq ki aag
dozakh: hell
jannat:heaven
kshitiz: horizon
falak: aasamaa.n
pech-o-kham: Twist and turns

ji bhaut sunder..........................

[sunita thakur]

aaj phir aapki yeh gazal padi.....utni hi tar-o-tazza lagi jitni pahli daffa padne par lagi thi....aapki shayri wah wah wah......dil khush ho gya Mayank jii, poore diN ki thakan uttar gaye aapki gazal padkar....

aapki dost