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Suna hai Chand bhi takta hai ussay falak se -
20th July 2010, 09:38 PM
Suna hai Chand bhi takta hai ussay falak se
Suna hai sitare chup jate hai uski chamak se Suna hai uske mahakaar ka aisa asar hai Suna hai Gul bhi mahakte hai uski mahak se Suna hai uski gali me dhadkane sunai deti hai Suna hai dil zoro se dhadakte hai uski chhak se Suna hai aashqui mijaaz rakhane wale log Rah mud ke dekte hai uski chudiyo ki khanak se Suna hai uske husn ka charcha hai har suu Suna hai zaif bhi ankhbhar ke dekhte hai ainak se Suna hai andhere bhi ussay ParwaaZ karte hai Suna hai mehfile roshan ho jati hai uski subak se Suna pasine chhuth jate hai pahelwano ke bhi Suna hai waliden bhi ghabra jate hai uski karak se Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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20th July 2010, 09:46 PM
parvaazz sahab...apka kalaam accha laga......
ye sher to dil le gaya Suna hai aashqui mijaaz rakhane wale log Rah mud ke dekte hai uski chudiyo ki khanak se baki sher bhi acche the..... daad... regards |
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20th July 2010, 09:56 PM
parwaaj bhai
radhe radhe saare hi ashar lajawaab hain dil se daad Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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20th July 2010, 10:22 PM
Suna hai aashqui mijaaz rakhane wale log
Rah mud ke dekte hai uski chudiyo ki khanak se Mujhe bhi Zidd sahab ki tarha ........Parwaaz Ji ....yeh sher bahut pasand aaya.....dil luut ke le gaya ki nahi .....iski chhaan been zari hai....jaise hi kuch pata chalega.....aapko suuchit karunga.....magar ghazal ke sabhi ashaar bahut dilkash lage mujhe......tahe dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmayen.... aapne acchaa nahi ......bahut acchaa likha hai.... ! khush rahen... apna khayal rakhen... duaaon ke saath....  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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20th July 2010, 11:14 PM
Suna pasine chhuth jate hai pahelwano ke bhi
Suna hai waliden bhi ghabra jate hai uski karak se hmmmm...baqi sabhi sher tou samajh me aagaye..per yeh sher kuch samajh me nahi aaya... waliden bhi ghabra jate hai uski karak se...?? Waliden means parents right...???...Ya koi aur bhi meaning hai is word ka...??? karak ka meaning bhi bata dijiye... Suna hai uske husn ka charcha hai har suu Suna hai zaif bhi ankhbhar ke dekhte hai ainak se yeh sher best(funniest) hai........padh ke meri hasi nahi ruk rahi....  Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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20th July 2010, 11:42 PM
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parwaaz bhai assalamwalekum.. wahhh ..kya shandar talqleeq hai .. dad qubool karen .. is sher me apne romaniyath ki hadd kar di ..alag se dad .. za'if bhi ankhbar ke dekhte hain ainak se .. parwaz bhai ap kiss zumre me aate hain .. za'if ? ha ha muabarak baad apki jaandar taqleeq pe ..allah apko hamesa khush rakhe .. dua go qadeertoopchi |
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21st July 2010, 02:24 PM
Thank you Zidd Bhai...............
Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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21st July 2010, 02:25 PM
Thank you Ishk bhai...............
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21st July 2010, 02:27 PM
Naresh Jii shukriya aapka .......... he he achche se tafish karke bataiyega......
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21st July 2010, 02:32 PM
Parwaaz jii
hume sabhi sher acche lage, par yeh aik sher khaas accha laga. Suna hai aashqui mijaaz rakhane wale log Rah mud ke dekte hai uski chudiyo ki khanak se keep writing god bless u .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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21st July 2010, 02:34 PM
Jee mohtarm Zeny jii waliden ke maaeni Parents hi hai........
Karak ke maaeni hote hai.... zorse dhadna, chillana humne yaha chillana istemal kiya hai, Rahi is sher ki wazahat karne ki baat to..... puri Gazal hi ek masoom si choti bachchi ke liye hai....... Jiske chilane se bade pahelwaan hi nahi uske waliden sab se jyada ghabra jate hai....... chalane ki awaaz dard ya dar ki bhi cheekh ho sakti hai. Aap ka bahot bahot shukriya....... Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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21st July 2010, 02:47 PM
Qadeer Sahab wa'alekum as salam
Shukriya sahab aapko yeh taqlikh pasand aayi....... he he is sher ko aapke khayal ko palat diya hai humne humare ek jawab me...... he he he....... Abi yeh nahi bata sakte ke hum kis zumre me aate hai wagerna humari pol khul jayegi....... jii dua ka ahsaanmand feama'nu lilah. Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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21st July 2010, 03:46 PM
Faraz ki Ghazal hai....
Suna hai log ussay aankh bhar ke dekhtay hain So us ke shehar mein kuch din thehar ke dekhtay hain its aloooooooooong ghazal... I think this above Ghazal of Khawish( Ooops Parwaaz) ki Ghazal ussi par based hai  |
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21st July 2010, 04:08 PM
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Pehli baat ..mera naam Zainy hai..... Dusri baat ,aapne jo explanation diya hai ke choti bacchi ko dhyan me rakh ker aapne yeh ghazal likhi hai,..baqi sabhi ashaar is baat per theek baith bhi jaaye tou.. Suna hai aashqui mijaaz rakhane wale log Rah mud ke dekte hai uski chudiyo ki khanak se is sher per nahi baitha, iske baare me aapka kya kehna hai, moreover ghazal mein kayi ayse words hain jo mujhe nahi lagta ke choti bachhi ko describe karne me istemaal kiye jaa sakte hain... ex: dil ka zoro se dhadakna,husn ka charcha,chudiyon ki khanak, mehfil roushan hona etc.. ayse words kisi young lady (mehbooba)ko describe karne ke liye sahi hai.. mujhe lagta hai aakhri sher ko justify karne me aap bhool gaye ke ghazal ke baqi ashaar aapke explanation per fit nahi baith rahe..  Anyways keep writing... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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22nd July 2010, 03:12 AM
Parwaaz Sahab AadaaB!
Achchi gazal kahi hai aapne........ sabhi sher achche hai per aapke replys padhker aisa laga ke aap kahiN chuk gaye hai is gazal ke khayaal se jaise Zainy jee ne farmaya....... MaiN bhi aapki baat se sehmat nahi huN... Gazal ke khayaal ek jawaaN ladki ke liye hi lage haiN mujhe bhi........  phir ek choti bachi per kaise ho gaye... Likhate rahiye....... Khush rahiye..... Khuda Hafez....... Quote:
  Abe tujhe kya har jagaaH maiN hi nazar aa raha huN... Hmmmmmmm shayad kisi ki kami ka asar hai.......... hota hai hota hai dhakkan umar ka takhaza hai aksar aisa hi hota hai...... 
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22nd July 2010, 04:26 PM
Thank you very much sunita jii......................
Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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22nd July 2010, 04:32 PM
Mr baqtiyar aapse humne pahele bhi kaha hai ke aap ko kuch galat fahmi ho rahi hai. Aur aap ho ke manne ko tayyar hi nai..... aap jesa samje wo aapki marzi....... per humara naam ehi hai jo hume bahut pasand hai....... aur kisi ka naam hume mat dijiye.... agar aapko humara id pasand nahi to plz aap humare posts per koi comment na kare......
Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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22nd July 2010, 04:47 PM
Zainy jee muafi chahte hai aapke naam ke saath gustaqi ke liye..
Suna hai aashqui mijaaz rakhane wale log Rah mud ke dekte hai uski chudiyo ki khanak se is sher ke pahele micare me humne aashque mijaaz log kaha hai' jinhe agar koi awaaz jo ladki se releted hai jese chudiyo ki awaaz, payal ki awaaz yaa fir aisa mehsus hi kyu na ho ke unke piche koi ladki ho to woh koi jawan ladki samj ker mud ke dekhte hai is baat se anjan hai ke wahan koi jawan ladki nahi ek choti se bachchi hai..... ye sab unke aashique mijaazi ki wajah se hi dekhna hota hai. aur humne "rah mud ke" kaha hai iske maeeni ehi ke wo anjaan the piche koun hai.. aur chudiyo ki khanak se woh mud ke dekhte hai.... Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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Morons with different id's -
22nd July 2010, 05:13 PM
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Wanna prove tou chal mods tak ley jatey hai ye issue he he he Phir dekhte hai doodh ka doodh pani ka pani And this reply even apply to (Parwaaz) who said somthing regarding koi ghalat fai mi hai...  Once these kinda faltoo practices of morons coming with different ids are identified than no one will dare to come with different id's to fool mods or ppl with sixth sense.....  |
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23rd July 2010, 05:46 PM
very nice creation parwaaz ji
SDC meiN aapka swagat hai aate rahiye Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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28th July 2010, 04:33 PM
hahaha.........
Ek hafta hone aaya hai..... Khwahish (Parwaaz) ko iss thread par nahi dekha (Moron...!!! he thinks am from Lal Bagh) |
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30th July 2010, 04:38 PM
Shukriya diya jii ..... aur bahot bahot shukriya swagat karne ke liye... aapne hi yaha peahli martaba humara swagat kia hai, aapka bhot bahot shukriya.
Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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30th July 2010, 04:41 PM
Shukriya Baqtiyaar sahab aapka bhi, aur aap laal bagh ke ho ya green bagh ke hume kya karna hai... hum nahi janna ke aap kounse bagh ke hai.
Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti |
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