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15th October 2005, 01:44 PM
aaje sawaarna.. mane sooteli joi .. chumban kari mane jagaadi gayo tadko.. ne pachhi to hu tanaai aena vahaal ma..
Vaheli sawaarma bari-ae thhi dokaato
Mari chadar par chitraman karto tadko
Agaasi ma aawi saadla ni kor sathe ramto
Paapad, wadi ni vachhe, kudka marto tadko
Aankho thi kahu jo aene, tha jara koomdo
Vaat na mari manto, vadhu daarto tadko
Vaahano ni daud vachae, saune hamfaavto
Rasta oopar pag felaavi ne soi raheto tadko
Aakkhii bapor dariye, reti ne suki bhathh karto,
kuva tarsyani jem banne hathe pani pito tadko
aapi phoolo ne rang, hadvek thhi kayak sari jato
shodhu toy na jadto, mujne vahaalo maro tadko
aakashe jyaa meet maandu, vaadao ma santaato
thhai komodo ne malakta soneri kinaar sankorto
varsaad mokli mane rijhavto maro potano tadko
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15th October 2005, 02:38 PM
thhai komodo ne malakta soneri kinaar sankorto
varsaad mokli mane rijhavto maro potano tadko
maafi chahu chhu... shabd lakhwa ma bhul thhai chhe..
thhai koomdo*ne malakta soneri kinaar sankorto
varsaad mokli mane rijhavto maro potano tadko
aabhar.
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15th October 2005, 07:03 PM
tadakaa ma aatli badhi thandak...???
bahuj saras...
as you write more and more personal
it becomes more and more universal.
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15th October 2005, 09:14 PM
Hindi version chaahiye didi actually main try karta ise aapki dii dictionary me dekhkar samajhne ki.. but white-wash ke chakkar me meri maa ne woh kahin rackh di hai... .. so aap hi samjhaa do...!
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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15th October 2005, 09:22 PM
hi didi
kuch samjh nahi aaraha aap ne kiya likha hai. dnt nw d language u ave written it in wither plz di write it in an understandable language for people like me plzzzzzzzzzzzzzz..................
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16th October 2005, 09:27 AM
shu kahu have.. dearest meena di,
tadko... kevo chhe tamare tyaano tadko... tadkaa vishe aatlu sundar lakhyu chhe tamoe, vaanchi ne khub aanad thayo. daad kubul karsho, bas aamaj lakhta rehsho.. very interesting and touchable... it brings smile on face while reading it ...
Saadla ni kor saathe ramto tadko ne, chaadar par chitraaman karto tadko.. kharekhar, khubj khub j khub j sundar lakhyu chhe.. bas aamaj lakhta rehsho, ane sadaa khush raho..
take care,
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16th October 2005, 09:36 AM
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tadakaa ma aatli badhi thandak...???
bahuj saras...
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jivan game chhe aetly tadko pan game chhe..
meena
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16th October 2005, 09:39 AM
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Hindi version chaahiye didi actually main try karta ise aapki dii dictionary me dekhkar samajhne ki.. but white-wash ke chakkar me meri maa ne woh kahin rackh di hai..... so aap hi samjhaa do...!
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mere pulkit,
koshish karungi fir bhi shayed is baar lag raha hai k.. is rachna mai jo mithhas hai wo hindi mai nahi bhar paaungi.. haan tumhe kavita ka saar jaroor mil jaayega
jaldi hi post karungi.
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hi didi
kuch samjh nahi aaraha aap ne kiya likha hai. dnt nw d language u ave written it in wither plz di write it in an understandable language for people like me plzzzzzzzzzzzzzz..................
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meri romana,
koshish karungi fir bhi shayed is baar lag raha hai k.. is rachna mai jo mithhas hai wo hindi mai nahi bhar paaungi.. haan tumhe kavita ka saar jaroor mil jaayega...
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16th October 2005, 09:49 AM
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shu kahu have.. dearest meena di,
tadko... kevo chhe tamare tyaano tadko... tadkaa vishe aatlu sundar lakhyu chhe tamoe, vaanchi ne khub aanad thayo. daad kubul karsho, bas aamaj lakhta rehsho.. very interesting and touchable... it brings smile on face while reading it ...
Saadla ni kor saathe ramto tadko ne, chaadar par chitraaman karto tadko.. kharekhar, khubj khub j khub j sundar lakhyu chhe.. bas aamaj lakhta rehsho, ane sadaa khush raho..
take care,
yours,
Parul.
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priy parul,
tadko mane humesha vahalo laagyo chhe... jivan no marm bataavi jaay chhe... baalpan ma to khub vichaar aawto... jo maru chaalae to tadka ne barni ma bhari lau... lol athhana ni jem.. ne pachhi aakho shiyado hu ne maro tadko...
aabhar.
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16th October 2005, 10:06 AM
Meena di...
thodu athaanu anhin pan moklaavjo maara maate... ame pan aanand maanishu...lol
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16th October 2005, 10:35 AM
pulkit, romana, or muje padhne waale mere apne..
meri jo bhavna hai is 'dhoop' kavita mai... wo anuwaad to kar di hai maine hindi mai ... fir bhi ooska bhaav aapse pahlay share karna chahungi... kyunki shak hai kahi kahi yah kuch jyada hi gujarati hai..
kal subah khidki se ander aate hi dhoop ne muje choom liya.. or fir mai bah gayi ooski bhavna mai... or ban gayi rachna. - dhoop.
subah ..meri chhadar par chitr banati rahti hai... oos bachi ki tarah jise deewaar par rang ki aadi-tedi lakir banane mai maja aata hai...
gujaraat mai.. paapad, wadi.. achaar.. banaane ki mausam hoti hai dhoop. dhoop aate hi paapad bante hai or chhat par saari daal kar oos par sukhane rakhte hai. oos waqt muje aisa lagta hai mano dhoop is paapad wadi k bich kudti rahti hai... ek chhoti bachi ki tarah jo shaitaan hai... or yaha waha fudakti rahti hai..
dhoop ko jab kahti hu ke jara halki ho kar baras.. par jivan sansaar ki dhoop halki nahi hoti or bhi kadak hoti hai... tej raftaar k sath thhaka deti hai... is tarah ooska saya pada rahta hai barso tak.. lagta hai k pair faila kar soyi padi hai...
kabhi sahra ki ret jaise mere jivan ko or bhi sukha karti hai, or jivan ke ras ko bhi pi leti hai... maano jivan bhar ki oose pyaas lagi ho... kahi se bhi hume sukun nahi paane deti... par..
is dhoop ko jo swikaar kar lo jivan mai.. to aapko pata chalega ke is dhoop se hi kitne rangeen phool khile hai jivan mai... bas yah phool khilte hi dhoop apni leela samet-ti hai ... or pyaar ka saavan chhalkati hai yahi dhoop.
aasha hai aap ko achha lagega meri dhoop se mil kar.
subah hote hi khidki se jhankti dhoop
meri chhadar par chitr banati rahti dhoop
chhat par aakar sari ki kinaar se khelti dhoop
paapad, wadi ke bich, kudti rahti dhoop
aankho se jo kahu oose, ho ja thhodi halki
baat na meri maanti, or kadak hoti dhoop
vaahano ki raftaar ke bich sab ko thhakati dhoop
raste par pair failaa ke soti rahti dhoop
sari dophar samudra ki ret ko jalatai dhoop
janam bhar ki pyaasi, dono haath se pani piti dhoop
dekar phoolo ko rang, kahi chhip jaati dhoop
dhundhu fir bhi na milti, mujko pyaari meri dhoop
aasmaan mai jab dekhu, baadlo mai chhipti dhoop
ho kar halki or muskati, sone ki kinaar samet.ti dhoop
saavan bhej kar muje manati meri khud ki dhoop
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16th October 2005, 10:48 AM
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Meena di...
thodu athaanu anhin pan moklaavjo maara maate... ame pan aanand maanishu...lol
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priy parul,
hahahahaahahaha ... jaroor.
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16th October 2005, 12:26 PM
subah hote hi khidki se jhankti dhoop
meri chhadar par chitr banati rahti dhoop
chhat par aakar sari ki kinaar se khelti dhoop
paapad, wadi ke bich, kudti rahti dhoop
aankho se jo kahu oose, ho ja thhodi halki
baat na meri maanti, or kadak hoti dhoop
vaahano ki raftaar ke bich sab ko thhakati dhoop
raste par pair failaa ke soti rahti dhoop
sari dophar samudra ki ret ko jalatai dhoop
janam bhar ki pyaasi, dono haath se pani piti dhoop
dekar phoolo ko rang, kahi chhip jaati dhoop
dhundhu fir bhi na milti, mujko pyaari meri dhoop
aasmaan mai jab dekhu, baadlo mai chhipti dhoop
ho kar halki or muskati, sone ki kinaar samet.ti dhoop
saavan bhej kar muje manati meri khud ki dhoop
Didi,
Bahu j saras lakhyu chhae... manae aa no bhaav bahu jamyo....Specialy these lines...
aankho se jo kahu oose, ho ja thhodi halki
baat na meri maanti, or kadak hoti dhoop
Aankhon ki baat maankar har dhoop halki ho jaati to jeeavn me kucch seekh nahi paate naa hum kadhi dhhop se...
Bahut hi pyaara message thha.... Loved it... aise hi likhti rahiye....Love u
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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16th October 2005, 03:53 PM
Meena bahen,
Tadka saathey no prem? kharekhar navai pamadey chey! Tyan toh hamesha tadko hoy chey pan ahin amara desh maa toh amey teney jowa aney manva khubaj utsuk rahiye chiyen! Tadko amoney pan bahuj vahalo lagey!
Tamoye jey pramaney tadka ney lainey aa rachna racheli chey tey bahuj dil ney sparshi jay tevi chey! Aavi adbhut rachna matey kai jatna prasansa naa shabdo kahun, samaj ma nathi avtoo!
Ek vaat chokkas chey key tamara jem lakhvani suujbhujj mara jevana bhejja maa avey tey aa janam maa toh shakya nathi lagtoo!! Rutu kevi pan hoy, darek rutu ney jey prem sahit avkarey aney teney lagta bey mitha bol kahey tey vyakti ney mara premad pranam...
Aa ek adbhut rachna matey tamo khuba j daad ney patra cho!!
Rajan!!!
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18th October 2005, 12:09 PM
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Didi,
Bahu j saras lakhyu chhae... manae aa no bhaav bahu jamyo....Specialy these lines...
aankho se jo kahu oose, ho ja thhodi halki
baat na meri maanti, or kadak hoti dhoop
Aankhon ki baat maankar har dhoop halki ho jaati to jeeavn me kucch seekh nahi paate naa hum kadhi dhhop se...
Bahut hi pyaara message thha.... Loved it... aise hi likhti rahiye....Love u
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mere pulkit,
haan ... dhoop hi to hai jo chhav ki kiimat jata jaati hai.
khush raho
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18th October 2005, 12:12 PM
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Meena bahen,
Tadka saathey no prem? kharekhar navai pamadey chey! Tyan toh hamesha tadko hoy chey pan ahin amara desh maa toh amey teney jowa aney manva khubaj utsuk rahiye chiyen! Tadko amoney pan bahuj vahalo lagey!
Tamoye jey pramaney tadka ney lainey aa rachna racheli chey tey bahuj dil ney sparshi jay tevi chey! Aavi adbhut rachna matey kai jatna prasansa naa shabdo kahun, samaj ma nathi avtoo!
Ek vaat chokkas chey key tamara jem lakhvani suujbhujj mara jevana bhejja maa avey tey aa janam maa toh shakya nathi lagtoo!! Rutu kevi pan hoy, darek rutu ney jey prem sahit avkarey aney teney lagta bey mitha bol kahey tey vyakti ney mara premad pranam...
Aa ek adbhut rachna matey tamo khuba j daad ney patra cho!!
Rajan!!!
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bhai rajan,
khub aabhaar... mari rachna ne pasand karwa badal....
ha... tadko mane khub j vahaalo chhe...
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18th October 2005, 02:38 PM
maa hindi version samajh me aayi.. jaisa ki aap jaanti hai.. mujhe guj. bilkul samajh me nahi aati..
aapki dhoop se milkar achha laga.. aur mai pulkit bhaiya ke baat se bhi sehmat hoon..
ye dhoop hi to jisase chaanw ka aabhas hota hai.. aur isi dhoop me hume din milta hai.. warna raat hi reh jaati.. fir phool nahi khilate,
aur achaar bhi to nahi banata na
aapki laadli
Anant se bhi aage... itni si khwahish hai :)
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19th October 2005, 10:49 AM
Vaheli sawaarma bari-ae thhi dokaato
Mari chadar par chitraman karto tadko
Agaasi ma aawi saadla ni kor sathe ramto
Paapad, wadi ni vachhe, kudka marto tadko...i liked these lines.
kaink mishrit bhav sathe..lakhayelo tadko.
mari samjh thi thodo dur rahyo aa tadko...
mane akalaman hati kale raat thi k savaar kyar thay..!!
Aa kavita no bhav pure puro vanchvathi na samjayo..pan tamari undi soch ne nyay apva ma aa shbdo ochha payad hoy evu lagyu...jyare bhavanuvaad vanchyo.
Pan "tadko"...aa shabd aatlo kumdo che evu tamari kavita vaanchi ne j bhaan thayu. kadach tamari personality no aa prabhav che,,,!
di next time mane late thay jo reply apva ma..mane yaad bhale karavsho pan em na samjta k...hu kaink mann ma bharavi ne bethi chu...plz plz haN
tc
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19th October 2005, 12:27 PM
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maa hindi version samajh me aayi.. jaisa ki aap jaanti hai.. mujhe guj. bilkul samajh me nahi aati..
aapki dhoop se milkar achha laga.. aur mai pulkit bhaiya ke baat se bhi sehmat hoon..
ye dhoop hi to jisase chaanw ka aabhas hota hai.. aur isi dhoop me hume din milta hai.. warna raat hi reh jaati.. fir phool nahi khilate,
aur achaar bhi to nahi banata na
aapki laadli
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priy garima,
maa
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19th October 2005, 12:30 PM
mari priy komal,
haa... pan yaad jaroor karavish k maan ma kai bharavi to nathi bethi ne ... lol aa kavita par jaroor thi waat karshu...
dina ne sneh-yaad
tari di
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19th October 2005, 03:49 PM
Meena
maza aavi gayi. aaje ghana vakhat pachi com par aavi, pehla rajanbhai pan vanchya. keep it up.taka sathe jivta ane ena par lakhvu.great.
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20th October 2005, 06:46 PM
meena didi....
wonderfully written...
as alwayss...
very nice words...
i liked it a lot
keep writin
take care
Karthik
Chaandni mere pyaar ki kyun uspar na rang laayi
Kyun bas kami hi meri ibaadat me usko nazar aayi
Thaa laakh bura sahi main. sacchi meri chaahat thi
Kyun meri bhaavnaon ko woh samajh nahi paayi...
Dekhna chahta hun..
Tere tasveer ko khwab banake dekhna chahta hun
Aur us khwab mein apne aap ko khona chahta hun
I envy the words, which took the form of my emotions
I love my poetry…
Which has turned the tears of pain in to the pearls of love…
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21st October 2005, 04:38 PM
Coffee Mitr,
Baut hi sundar khayal...
Gujrati se thoda sa samjh tha...
Hindi mein aapne bhav samjhaya to jyada behtar samjh mein aaya...
yunhi likhte rahein
Take Care
Rohin
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Meena
maza aavi gayi. aaje ghana vakhat pachi com par aavi, pehla rajanbhai pan vanchya. keep it up.taka sathe jivta ane ena par lakhvu.great.
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mita,
anter vadhtu jaay chhe madwaanu...
kaik karwu padshe...
tadko... haa... taru to mathu dukhyu hashe ... lol
pan mane game chhe ae tu jaane j chhe.
meena
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26th October 2005, 09:12 AM
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meena didi....
wonderfully written...
as alwayss...
very nice words...
i liked it a lot
keep writin
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mere karthik,
der se jawaab de rahi hu ... maafi chhati hu.
shukria... meri dhoop ko pasand kiya...
di
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Coffee Mitr,
Baut hi sundar khayal...
Gujrati se thoda sa samjh tha...
Hindi mein aapne bhav samjhaya to jyada behtar samjh mein aaya...
yunhi likhte rahein
Take Care
Rohin
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mere rohin,
haan ... waise to yah saamanya dhoop hi hai .. par bhaav se dekhe to bahut kuch kah jaati hai meri dhoop..
shukria.
tumhari coffee mitr
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26th October 2005, 09:36 AM
meena dost
meri badqismati ke aaj kal behad masrufiyet ke baayes yahan aana naheen ho raha hai.
ek behad pur asr aur khoobsurat rachna hai yeh.
mein ne is ke ek ek lafz ko mehsoos kiyaa hai,
bohat dua go hoon tumhare liye , sab saathiyon ke liye.
God bless you.
musharrafhusain
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