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jab zainyji ye reply padengi to shifaa ke liye haad vaid dhund lena..baqi jo dusra item hai , uska address mai de dunga. dont worry.aapko zarurat padegi, haddiyo ka dard door karne ke liye.
ha haaa.... Zidd saab,
ab tak toh bach gaye hai hum.. Aur fikr na kare.n fursat se ghar pe aaiyega dusree item saath me.n baith ke piyenge LOLzz...

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Hmmmm !!! Very tricky options !! Very intricate and intriguing too !! Mujhe sabhi options meiN maanee ke alag alag nuances lag rahe haiN. Very curious to see ki aap in options meiN se kis combination ko finalize karte haiN !!!

asl me mai ula ko 'kya' se shuru hi nahi karna chahta tha...meri first choice thi 'vo'...magar socha ki sabko zara samjhne me dikkat hogi..waise agar mai ye sher finally kahta to yu kahta.use indifinite chodta, interorrgative me nahi rahne deta...

vo tegh e ulfat abke qayamat si aa bane
hum pahle meherbaa huye daar o rasan liye....


Shaad sahab ki tarah maine bhi lafz "ulfataaN" pehle naheeN dekha hai lekin intuitively aur logically sahi lag raha hai. Aur jis situation meiN ye misre meiN aaya hai, wahaaN is ke alaawa aur koyee substitute lafz bhi khayaal meiN naheeN aa raha hai. Lekin is lafz ka pehle se chalan urdu zubaan meiN hai ki naheeN, is ka ilm naheeN hai mujhe.

actually fit lagta hai magar koi misaal nahi mili mujhe.
jaanaN, butaaN, yaraaN,dushmanaaN...sab animate nouns hai.

shaadaaN , raksaaN.... compound verbing hai, if conjugated.

mujhe 'ulfataaN' , jo inanimate hai , iski misaal nahi mili....kyuki phir mahabattaaN, ashkaaN ko roka nahi jaa sakta...i guess it is wrong.


PS : aap ki "exercises" hamaare liye "lessons" ka kaam kar rahi haiN Zidd sahab

what i did was to provoke a discusssion....ek sehatmand bahs( healthy debate...big Lollz) ke liye.

carry on..u doing yeoman service.

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Kisko bhala dikhate ho daar o rasan ka khauff
Dil se abhi gayaa hi kaha baankpan ka khauff

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Kya tegh e ulfataaN ke qayamat si aa bane
Kya tegh e ulfat ab ke qayamat si aa bane

Hum pahle zer e daar the daar o rasan liye
Hum pahle meherbaa huye daar o rasan liye
hum khud hi meherbaa huye daar o rasan liye
khud pahle meherbaa huye daar o rasan liye

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practice sher hai isliye sari exercise yaha rakh raha hu zarra sirji.

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ulfataaN par feedback invited hai
aur Zidd saab,
aapke aane se jaise yeh classroom me.n ravaani aa gayee.. aapse bahot kuch sikhna padhna hai hame.n....

aapke practice sher bhii behad khubsurat hai..

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"daar-o-rasan" par ek koshish qit'a ki shakl mein ...

hum ko n kuchh bhi farq khizaan-o-bahaar meiN
kaaNte chuna hi karte haiN aksar chaman ke hum
badleN qaza ke khauf se jeene ka kyooN chalan
jeete haiN yooN bhi saaye meiN daar-o-rasan ke hum

-zarraa
Zarrabhai,
waah waah waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh....
kya kamaal ka qit'a pesh kiya hai janaab.......



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Ziyaarat e Daar o rasan, zaroree nahee hai ab,
Zarraa kay qitay nay hai dhaaya aysa kuch ghazab!

MashaAllah Zarraa bhaaee!! Ghazab qita ataa kiyaa hai aapnay!
Ahmad bhai...aap ki mohabbaton ka qarz hamesha mujh par rahega. Aur aap ne to daad bhi sher keh ke de di. Aap ke is hunar ko daad !!


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Zarrabhai,
waah waah waaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhh....
kya kamaal ka qit'a pesh kiya hai janaab.......
Shukriya Aadeil bhai aap ka .......


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kyaa baat hai yaar... ab kya qatl karoge... bahot hi khoob qitaaa hai
Inaayat aap ki Shaad bhai ... !


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wah ....bohat khoob..................
Shukriya ........... Zainy ji ........


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8th July 2014, 06:06 PM

jumla-e-"daar-o-rasan" ke ta'arruf ki post meiN jo ustaad shora ke aashaar maine aap ke saamne rakkhe the, un meiN se mera ek behad pasandeedaa sher bhi tha.

wo sher hai Ghalib ka ...

qad-o-gesoo meiN qais-o-kohkan ki aazmaaish hai
jahaaN hum haiN wahaaN daar-o-rasan ki aazmaaish hai

- Ghalib

is sher ke alag alag interpretations haiN (jaisa ki Ghalib ke aashaar ke saath amooman hota hai). par jo interpretation hamesha mere zehn meiN ghoomta rehta tha us meiN "qadd" ka comparison "daar" se kiya hai aur "rasan" ka gesoo se. aur is tarqeeb se ek beintehaa lutf paida hota hai.

abhi ek site par isee sher par kuchh discussion dekha jahaaN par ye baat bhi rakkhi gayi hai.

socha ki jab maqsad seekhne ka hi hai, to ye "jugaad" bhi try kiya jaaye

link neeche hai .. ek baar nazar daal lijiyega ...

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Zarraa saahab, aapke huqum ki tameel karte hue ek sher arz kar raha hoon......


hai koii jo is Khwaab kii taabeer bataaaye,
dekhaa hai maine daar-o-rasan TooT ke girte..


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Zarraa saahab, aapke huqum ki tameel karte hue ek sher arz kar raha hoon......


hai koii jo is Khwaab kii taabeer bataaaye,
dekhaa hai maine daar-o-rasan TooT ke girte..


Shaad...
WWWWWAAAAAHHHHHHHH !!!!! Aatishee inqalaabee sher !!! Zabardast !!! Shaandaar !!! Bahaut bahaut daad aur mubaarakbaad Shaad bhai !!!


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Zarraa saahab, aapke huqum ki tameel karte hue ek sher arz kar raha hoon......


hai koii jo is Khwaab kii taabeer bataaaye,
dekhaa hai maine daar-o-rasan TooT ke girte..


Shaad...
waaaaaaaaaahhhh...
waaaaaaaaaahhhh...
waaaaaaaaaahhhh...

bahot hi khub sher pesh kiya hai, Shoibbhai...

dil se daad....



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dostoN ... apne pehle kahe hue 2 sher jin mein "daar-o-rasan" ka zikr hai, pesh kar raha hooN ...


neeyat badal n jaaye jo munsif ki ab kaheeN
daar-o-rasan pe hum ne nasheman bana diya

(munsif = judge, nasheman = nest)


haiN ye sukh dukh hi saNg-e-qasr-e-hayaat
ye hi daar-o-rasan sabhi ke haiN

(saNg = stone, qasr = palace, hayaat = existence)


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DostoN, kal is activity meiN "daar-o-rasan / rasan-o-daar" jumloN par guftagoo / shayari ka aakhiri din hai.


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ek adnaa se sher pe is darja muhabbat lutaane ke liye main aapka tahe dil se mashkoor hoon Zarra saahab aur aadeil saahab....... shukriyaa

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dostoN daar o rasan par jo members ke apne kahe qalaam aaye unheiN neeche darj kar raha hooN

gunaah kiya kar ke ulfat 'pari' bewafaa yaar se
saza to milni hai kaise bachogi rasan-o-daar se - Praneeta


daar us suruur ka daar o rasan ham jaliis hua
phir bhii kadaa e yaar me.n be shakl mai.n hua - Aadeil


Kuch daaro rasan yooN banaa meraa aye kaarsaaz,
qaatil bhii zaar zaar ho maqtool dekh kar - Shaad


Kharaash phuloN se mere liyN moamma thi
Khulasa ishq ke daar o rasan ne khoob kiya - Zainy


Kis ko bhala dikhate ho daar o rasan ka khauff
Dil se abhi gayaa hi kaha baankpan ka khauff - Zidd


vo tegh e ulfat abke qayamat si aa bane
hum pahle meherbaa huye daar o rasan liye - Zidd


hum ko n kuchh bhi farq khizaan o bahaar meiN
kaaNte chuna hi karte haiN aksar chaman ke hum

badleN qaza ke khauf se jeene ka kyooN chalan
jeete haiN yooN bhi saaye meiN daar o rasan ke hum - Zarraa


ziyaarat e Daar o rasan, zaroree nahee hai ab,
Zarraa kay qitay nay hai dhaaya aysa kuch ghazab - Ahmad Hyderabadi (Ahmad sahab, aap ke sher meiN bhi zikr e daar o rasan tha, to maiN ne us ka bhi yahaaN shumaar kar liya )


hai koii jo is Khwaab kii taabeer bataaaye,
dekhaa hai maine daar o rasan TooT ke girte - Shaad


neeyat badal n jaaye jo munsif ki ab kaheeN
daar o rasan pe hum ne nasheman bana diya -
Zarraa

haiN ye sukh dukh hi sang e qasr e hayaat
ye hi daar o rasan sabhi ke haiN - Zarraa


maiN rehnuma ke kahe raastoN se door raha
mera maqaam sada manziloN se door raha

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dostoN daar o rasan par jo members ke apne kahe qalaam aaye unheiN neeche darj kar raha hooN

gunaah kiya kar ke ulfat 'pari' bewafaa yaar se
saza to milni hai kaise bachogi rasan-o-daar se - Praneeta


daar us suruur ka daar o rasan ham jaliis hua
phir bhii kadaa e yaar me.n be shakl mai.n hua - Aadeil


Kuch daaro rasan yooN banaa meraa aye kaarsaaz,
qaatil bhii zaar zaar ho maqtool dekh kar - Shaad


Kharaash phuloN se mere liyN moamma thi
Khulasa ishq ke daar o rasan ne khoob kiya - Zainy


Kis ko bhala dikhate ho daar o rasan ka khauff
Dil se abhi gayaa hi kaha baankpan ka khauff - Zidd


vo tegh e ulfat abke qayamat si aa bane
hum pahle meherbaa huye daar o rasan liye - Zidd


hum ko n kuchh bhi farq khizaan o bahaar meiN
kaaNte chuna hi karte haiN aksar chaman ke hum

badleN qaza ke khauf se jeene ka kyooN chalan
jeete haiN yooN bhi saaye meiN daar o rasan ke hum - Zarraa


ziyaarat e Daar o rasan, zaroree nahee hai ab,
Zarraa kay qitay nay hai dhaaya aysa kuch ghazab - Ahmad Hyderabadi (Ahmad sahab, aap ke sher meiN bhi zikr e daar o rasan tha, to maiN ne us ka bhi yahaaN shumaar kar liya )


hai koii jo is Khwaab kii taabeer bataaaye,
dekhaa hai maine daar o rasan TooT ke girte - Shaad


neeyat badal n jaaye jo munsif ki ab kaheeN
daar o rasan pe hum ne nasheman bana diya -
Zarraa

haiN ye sukh dukh hi sang e qasr e hayaat
ye hi daar o rasan sabhi ke haiN - Zarraa

Masha Allah bohat khoob zarraa sahab...

Sabhi ashaar laajawab hain...

SUPERB!

sabhi ne bohat achche sher likhe hain....

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Masha Allah bohat khoob zarraa sahab...

Sabhi ashaar laajawab hain...

SUPERB!

sabhi ne bohat achche sher likhe hain....

Agle lafz ka intezaar hai..


Shukriya Zainy ji ..... aur sabhi saathiyoN ka shukriya jinhone apna keematee waqt diya ....

Ji agla lafz bas abhi haazir hai ....


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Naya lafz - 12th July 2014, 12:44 AM

dostoN ...aadaab

"fusoon-e-alfaaz" ke ab tak ke mukhtasar se safar meiN ... pehle hum lafz-e-fusooN ke fusooN meiN kho gaye ... phir jumla-e-daar-o-rasan ke daar-o-rasan par qatl ho gaye ........................ aur ab .....................

.................... ab hum lafz-e-bosa ke bose lene ja rahe haiN ...

ji haaN, is baar ka lafz hai .... BOSA

pichhlee dafa kuchh azeezoN ne shikaayat ki thi ke daar-o-rasan jaisa lamba mushkil khatarnaak daraawana jumla diya gaya hai ..... to is baar ek short simple sweet romantic lafz haazir hai .............. BOSA

BOSA simply means a KISS

is baar hum "bosa" par sher, qita, nazm, rubaayee ya aur kuchh jise shayari kaha ja sake, kaheNge. aap "bose", "bosoN" wagairah ka bhi istemaal kar sakte haiN.

is lafz par bade hi khoobsurat, dilkash, shokh aur shareer aashaar kahe gaye haiN

chaliye dekhte haiN "bosa" par mashhoor shora ke kuchh khoobsurat aashaar ...

bosa dete naheeN aur dil pe hai har lehja nigaah
jee meiN kehte haiN ke muft aaye to maal achchha hai
-ghalib

dikha ke jumbish-e-lab hi tamaam kar hum ko
n de jo bosa to muNh se kaheeN jawaab to de
-ghalib

ghair leiN mehfil meiN bose jaam ke
hum raheiN yooN tishna-lab paighaam ke
-ghalib

bose ki hai to khwaahish par kahiye kyooN ke us se
jis se mizaaj-e-lab par harf-e-sawaal baaNdhe
-sauda

kya taab kya majaal hamaaree ki bosa leiN
lab ko tumhaare lab se mila kar kahe baghaair
-zafar

bosa mujh ko jo naheeN dete to jhirhkee hi sahi
naheeN darwaaza jo khul sakta to khirhkee hi sahi
-insha

lafz BOSA ki taqti, mere hisaab se, 21 aur 22 donoN ho sakti hai. any other opinion is welcome.

aur haaN, is activity meiN members jitne chaaheiN qalaam keh sakte haiN. sirf 1 ki hi bandish naheeN hai ....... more, the merrier

ye silsila hum agle 4 din tak chalaayeNge, yaani 15th July midnight tak. ab tak yahee trend dekhne meiN aaya hai ki zyaadatar posts 4 din ke andar aa gayeeN haiN. to hum 4 din tak bosa/bose/bosoN... par ghaur kareNge, phir agle lafz par chale jaayeNge.

to chaliye, ab is haseen lafz ke bose lete haiN.

duaoN ke saath
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Zarra sahib.....wazn giraane Ka qaaida hai ki agar lafz Alif par khatm ho rahaa ho lekin WO Hindi lafz ho ( esp.Verb ) to wazn giraaya ja sakta hai...lekin agar Lafz..Arabic ya Persian ho to ..uska wazn nahi giraya Jana chahiye.....lekin Urdu shaairi Ke tamaam diigar usoolaat ki tarah iska bhi sakhti se amal nahi kiya jaata....missal Ke taur par aapne Ghalib sahib Ka Jo Pahla sher likha hai...usme hi...alif ki aawaz ko giraya gaya hai....yu'n samajh le iska wazn 2x hai
   
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Zarra sahib.....wazn giraane Ka qaaida hai ki agar lafz Alif par khatm ho rahaa ho lekin WO Hindi lafz ho ( esp.Verb ) to wazn giraaya ja sakta hai...lekin agar Lafz..Arabic ya Persian ho to ..uska wazn nahi giraya Jana chahiye.....lekin Urdu shaairi Ke tamaam diigar usoolaat ki tarah iska bhi sakhti se amal nahi kiya jaata....missal Ke taur par aapne Ghalib sahib Ka Jo Pahla sher likha hai...usme hi...alif ki aawaz ko giraya gaya hai....yu'n samajh le iska wazn 2x hai
Shukriya Ufaq sahab buniyadi tareeke se wazn par roshni daalne ke liye. Chaliye, ab ye reconfirm ho gaya ki lafz "bosa" ki taqti 2X = 22 and 21 donoN tarah se kar sakte haiN.


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ek taaza sher bas abhi abhi kaha hai, so us par bina ghaur kiye ya bina taraashe, yahaaN par waisa ka waisa pesh raha hooN ... delivered fresh


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Masha Allah bohat khoob. ...

Touching. ......




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Lijiye mera sher!

HaseeN hai yeh manzar haseeN hai nazaara
Ufaq per zameeN aasmaaN ka yeH bosa




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tere fusoon-e-bosa ki kya tareef karun 'ananthpak'
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Ek koshish

muntazir hun iltija par meri kab tu dil-o-jaan se razi hogi

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Touching. ......
Shukriya Zainy ji .....

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Lijiye mera sher!

HaseeN hai yeh manzar haseeN hai nazaara
Ufaq per zameeN aasmaan ka yeH bosa
wwwwwaaaaaahhhhhhh !!!!!!!!! ek khoobsurat tasweer ke jaisa ye sher .... wo tasweer jo is aalam ke canvass par banayee gayee ho !! is sher meiN ek azmat hai, ek gehraayee hai, ek sukoon hai, ek bandagi hai !!!

Bahaut si daad aap ko Zainy ji !! Aur haaN lafz ka bhi kya khoob istemaal kiya aap ne!!

(just a very small point, kyuNki aapne "n" aur "N" ka farq zaahir kiya hai, to behr ke mutaabiq "aasmaan" meiN "N" lagna chaahiye mere hisaab se. lagta hai typing error ho gayi hai ya computer ke auto-correct feature ne behr ki nazaakat ko nazar andaaz kar diya there should be a shayari mode in operating systems as well )


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kuch sher mere taraf se bhi

Lagta garma garm hi accha
Ab ho bosa ya ho samosa

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SaikhDo laana.te hai bose par
Apni to kat gayi samose par

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Ho gaye hum ek pal me khaak-bos
Aakpi nazroN ne kya bosa diya [ ! or ? ]

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Ik khwaab ka tawaaf tha darparda kwaab ke
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WWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH !!! pur-fusoon sher kaha Praneeta ji !!! paak mohabbat se bhara hua !!! khoobsurat ehsaasaat se labrez !!! aur lafz ka bhi kya khoob istemaal kiya hai !! aap ko dheroN dheroN daad Praneeta ji !!!

just a small point. mujhe intuitively aisa lag raha hai ki donoN misroN meiN agar lafz ko "bose" ke form meiN kaha jaaye to shayad zyada sahi sound kare. again, just my opinion for your consideration only. is ke peechhe ki theory se naawaaqif hooN

ek seekhne ka mudda mujhe ye lag raha hai ki "a" par khatm hone waale lafz even in singular form meiN bhi kab "e" par khatm hote haiN, e.g "tere waade par jiye hum" (lafz "waada), ya "n shole meiN ye karishma" (lafz "shola"). koyee member meherbaanee kar ke agar roshni daaal sakeiN to mujhe seekhne ka mauka haasil hoga.

ek baar phir se aap ko khoobsurat sher par daad !!!


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kuch sher mere taraf se bhi

Lagta garma garm hi accha
Ab ho bosa ya ho samosa

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SaikhDo laana.te hai bose par
Apni to kat gayi samose par

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Ho gaye hum ek pal me khaak-bos
Aakpi nazroN ne kya bosa diya [ ! or ? ]

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Ik khwaab ka tawaaf tha darparda kwaab ke
Kya le liya tha bosa hi but ke naqaab ka ?


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chaliye meri taraf se bhii isi par ek sher arz hai...... zidd saahab khaaskar ke aapki nazr..

bivi ki ye zidd thii ke milegaa tabhii BOSAA,
baahar ka khilaao mujhe DOSA ya SAMOSAA...

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WWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH !!! pur-fusoon sher kaha Praneeta ji !!! paak mohabbat se bhara hua !!! khoobsurat ehsaasaat se labrez !!! aur lafz ka bhi kya khoob istemaal kiya hai !! aap ko dheroN dheroN daad Praneeta ji !!!

just a small point. mujhe intuitively aisa lag raha hai ki donoN misroN meiN agar lafz ko "bose" ke form meiN kaha jaaye to shayad zyada sahi sound kare. again, just my opinion for your consideration only. is ke peechhe ki theory se naawaaqif hooN

ek seekhne ka mudda mujhe ye lag raha hai ki "a" par khatm hone waale lafz even in singular form meiN bhi kab "e" par khatm hote haiN, e.g "tere waade par jiye hum" (lafz "waada), ya "n shole meiN ye karishma" (lafz "shola"). koyee member meherbaanee kar ke agar roshni daaal sakeiN to mujhe seekhne ka mauka haasil hoga.

ek baar phir se aap ko khoobsurat sher par daad !!!
shukriya zarraa sahab...initially main ne ye likha tha:

tere fusoon-e-bosa ki kya tareef karun ananthpak
ke ek bose ne umr bhar ka itminaan de diya

phir mujhe wahi singular plural mein confusion ho gaya so I edited it.
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Wwwwaaahhhh !!! Bahaut hi khoob kaha ye sher aap ne ananthpak sahab !! Jazbaat ka pur asar bayaan hua sher meiN !! Lafz-e-bosa to ka bahaut hi khoob istemaal kiya hai aap ne. saath hi aap ke qaafiye ka bhi bahaut lutf aaya. Dheron daad !!!!


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Wwwwaaahhhh !!! Bahaut hi khoob kaha ye sher aap ne ananthpak sahab !! Jazbaat ka pur asar bayaan hua sher meiN !! Lafz-e-bosa to ka bahaut hi khoob istemaal kiya hai aap ne. saath hi aap ke qaafiye ka bhi bahaut lutf aaya. Dheron daad !!!!

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wwwwwaaaaaahhhhhhh !!!!!!!!! ek khoobsurat tasweer ke jaisa ye sher .... wo tasweer jo is aalam ke canvass par banayee gayee ho !! is sher meiN ek azmat hai, ek gehraayee hai, ek sukoon hai, ek bandagi hai !!!

Bahaut si daad aap ko Zainy ji !! Aur haaN lafz ka bhi kya khoob istemaal kiya aap ne!!

(just a very small point, kyuNki aapne "n" aur "N" ka farq zaahir kiya hai, to behr ke mutaabiq "aasmaan" meiN "N" lagna chaahiye mere hisaab se. lagta hai typing error ho gayi hai ya computer ke auto-correct feature ne behr ki nazaakat ko nazar andaaz kar diya there should be a shayari mode in operating systems as well )
bohat bohat shukriyah zarraa sahab. ..

it was again a typo. . ..corrected anyway....




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kuch sher mere taraf se bhi

Lagta garma garm hi accha
Ab ho bosa ya ho samosa

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SaikhDo laana.te hai bose par
Apni to kat gayi samose par

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Ho gaye hum ek pal me khaak-bos
Aakpi nazroN ne kya bosa diya [ ! or ? ]

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Kya le liya tha bosa hi but ke naqaab ka ?


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chaliye meri taraf se bhii isi par ek sher arz hai...... zidd saahab khaaskar ke aapki nazr..

bivi ki ye zidd thii ke milegaa tabhii BOSAA,
baahar ka khilaao mujhe DOSA ya SAMOSAA...

Shaad....


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kuch sher mere taraf se bhi

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zarraa : HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA ....

WWWWWWAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH ..........lagta hai ek naye genre ki ibteda ki hai aap ne, jise keh sakte haiN "bosa -samosa" shayari mujhe lagta hai ki ek lambi kataar lagne wali hai is silsile ki. Shaad sahab ne is kadi ko aage badhaaya hai. MaiN bhi is se mutaasir ho kar jald hi kuchh arz karooNga. Is par bina sher kahe raha naheeN jaata
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Ho gaye hum ek pal me khaak-bos
Aakpi nazroN ne kya bosa diya [ ! or ? ]

zarraa : wwwaaaahhh !!! bahaut bahaut pyaara sher Zidd sahab ... dheron dheron daad !! on ! vs ?, ji mera non-technical, un-educated and gut-feel based opinion hai ki "!" zyada appropriate hai kyunki sher mein lafz "kya" as superlative use huwa hai, na ki as inquisitive .... does this make sense .... aap kis ko choose karte ?

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zarraa : khair daad-o-tehseen se to ye sher n jaane kitne aage nikal gaya hai. is sher ke saath insaaf yahi hoga ki ise khaamoshi se pardha jaaye aur khalwat mein ise yaad kiya kar liya jaaye. beintehaayee khoobsurati ke saath, is emiN maanee ki jalwagari kamaal ki hai. mujhe laga ki "tawaaf", "darparda", "but" aur "naqaab" ke interplay se maanee aafreenee huwee hai. agar aap is sher ke baare meiN kuchh kehna pasand kareNge, to pardhne waaloN ki khushkismati hogi warn a ise pardhna aap hi khushkismati hai.

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chaliye meri taraf se bhii isi par ek sher arz hai...... zidd saahab khaaskar ke aapki nazr..

bivi ki ye zidd thii ke milegaa tabhii BOSAA,
baahar ka khilaao mujhe DOSA ya SAMOSAA...

Shaad....

WWWWAAAAHHHHH !!!! WAAAH KYA PUR LUTF SHER KAHA SHAAD BHAI !!! MAZA AA GAYA !!

jaisa maiN ne Zidd sahab ko reply dete hue arz kiya, lagta hai ke ek naye genre ka ibteda huwa hai "bosa-samosa" shayari ka. aap ke aur Zidd sahab ke aashaar is genre ke defining qalaam haiN ..


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chaliye meri taraf se bhii isi par ek sher arz hai...... zidd saahab khaaskar ke aapki nazr..

bivi ki ye zidd thii ke milegaa tabhii BOSAA,
baahar ka khilaao mujhe DOSA ya SAMOSAA...

Shaad....

bahaut roka khud ko, par "bosa-samosa" ke unwaan par bina sher kahe naheeN raha ja raha ......

to Shaad bhai, aap ke sher ke hawaale se, usi ki zameen par, aap ki ijaazat se ek koshish kar raha hooN ....


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shukriya zarraa sahab...initially main ne ye likha tha:

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phir mujhe wahi singular plural mein confusion ho gaya so I edited it.
I agree with your suggestion

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