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19th October 2004, 02:15 PM
bohat dino se kuch nahi likha...likhne ka man bhi nahi tha...
magar aik dost ne kaha k kuch ho jaye..to yeh kuch apni jana k naam karta hun...jo mujhay maloom hay parhe gi magar khamoshi se..... ----------- AISE BETHA THA MERI MAIYYAT SE ZARA DOOR KOI SHAKS JIASE KAHTA HU MERA TUM PER KOI LAMHA UDHAAR THA.. ------------ khan.... |
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20th October 2004, 10:16 AM
Bhayya...
Itne dino baad aapko yahaan dekh kar baRa achha laga.. Shukria us dost ka jisne aapkse likhne ko kaha... Na jaane kyu.. aapka sher paR kar wo ghazal yaad aa gayi... Ranjish hi sahi, dil hi dukhaane ke liye aa.. Aa phir se mujhhe chhoD ke jaane ke liye aa.. ab aapki tareef hum kya karein.. itni haisiyat to nahi humaari.. jaate jaate kuchh arz karte hain.. aapke kalaam paR kar yahi khayaal aksar aaya karta tha... Kehte ho tum, 'Likho, magar dard se nahi..' Aye dost, meri kalam ki siyaahi yahi to hai.. Mere bhayya ko do jahaan ki khushiyaan naseeb hoN.. ek us din se pehle, ek us din ke baad.. Apna Khayaal rakhiyega!!! |
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22nd October 2004, 02:16 PM
banno...
kasi ho? tuhare lafzon main mere liye hamesha hi duaiya or tareefana rawiya hota hay.or shayad isi rawiye ki talab rehti hay mujhay.... sher acha laga..is k liye shukria...tum ne jo sher likha hay woh bhi kmaal hay.... or hmare lahje ki yehi majbori hay yar kiya krain..apna khiyal rakhna. khush rehna.. khan |
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22nd October 2004, 03:14 PM
mere dost mere bhai.....Moon kaise ho.....bade dino badh rabta hua aaj apse apki shayri k zariye.....maaf karnaa na apki khabar lee kisi se na apni khabar dii ap ko humne.......waqt ki giRafth mai hu....tao ye honaa hii thaa....khair ummid hai tum kairiyat se honge.....yaar mai aaj kal johannesburg mai hu....aur jinn k sath rah raha hu woh bhii pakistan lahor se hai.....kafee kuch jaane ko aur sune ko milaa mere dost naveed se pakistan k bare mai.....rozo k waqt mai unkaa khoon pinaa shuru kar rakhaa hai......samne baith kar khaa pii rahe hai aur woh janaab ap janaab se fhursath nahi paa rahe hai...
 ..bada pyaara isaan hai woh.......khair ap ko ramzaan mubarak ho......chaliye apka ek sher padhaa aur kafee sakun paa liyaa..sach dinn ki shurvat dard k aehsaas se huii......ab sukun hai......daad chotaa word hai par kabul kare.....apne dost se.......aur haan ek naya lafz humne apne dost se sikhaa aaj woh ap ko sunaaye dete hai urdu mai hai......Raazibarazaa..... apna haal hai iss baat mai...ap ko iss ka matlab samjhane ki zarurat nahi hogii...........ijaazat chahungaa.....ab k liye...Sanju!!!muddato mout ne bhi tarsaaya hame.. ..... |
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khan bhai, aap kuchh likho or woh dil ko chhu kar ood jaaye aisa kabhi nahi hota.... bas dil maie apni jagah ban hi jaati hai aapki kalam ki..... aapki bahna |
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22nd October 2004, 08:03 PM
Banjaara Dost..
Kaise ho? Bahoot dinoke baad aaj aap ka kuch padhan naseeb huaa.. Sukragujaar hooN mai aap ke dost ka jis ki wajah se aap ne is mehfil mai fir se kuch likha.. AISE BETHA THA MERI MAIYYAT SE ZARA DOOR KOI SHAKS JIASE KAHTA HU MERA TUM PER KOI LAMHA UDHAAR THA.. Shbd nahi hai dost kuch kahne ko… Moun hi samjh jaana.. MayanK |
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23rd October 2004, 12:45 PM
THA..AISE BETHA THA MERI MAIYYAT SE ZARA DOOR KOI SHAKS
JIASE KAHTA HU MERA TUM PER KOI LAMHA UDHAAR Waaah...........! Saahab waah. Ye teer to unhone shaayad..... Be...iraada hi chala diya, Sochta hooN gar wo iradtan aate to... Ham unki daad ke khaatir ye apni... Waah...! bhi kahaaN se laate. Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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Chaliye Dard mein sahi...likha tau aapne...aapke ek sher kee gehraayi tak hum na pahunche... bus kuch aapki nazar kar dein...apni daad ke saath saath rah-e-aashiqii ke maare rah-e-aam tak na pahu.Nche kabhii subah tak na pahu.Nche kabhii shaam tak na pahu.Nche kahii.n is tarah bhii ruuThe na kisii se ko_ii 'Yahya' ke payaam tak na aaye ke salaam tak na pahu.Nche --yahya jasdanwalla khayaal rakhieygaa... paras gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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24th October 2004, 12:13 PM
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29th October 2004, 10:26 PM
sanjoo
kaise ho? han tumhari jaan...thanks 4 that too aik misra yad ata hay hay kisi shayar ka... TUJH SE BHI DILFAREEB HAY GHAM ROZGAR K aap k liye dua karta hun k apne har maksad main kamyab raho.. apna bohat sara khiyal rakhna..or kabhikabhi hoskae to pm kar diya karo yar...i note ur number...n will call u soon... apne dost NAVEED ko mera slaam kahna.,or Zindagi rahi to batain chalti rahin gi.. apna khiyal rakhna.. --------- meena main kuch likhon or tumhare dil main utar jaye... khushneseebi meri hay..or khas kar in lafzon ki..warna dil se parhna har koi zarori nahi samjhta...AB MERI jana KO HI LELO majal hay jo aik zara sa HI bol diya hota.. khiar yeh bhi kismat ki baat hay apna lkhiyal rakhna.. ------- anjana rahi kaise ho dost.... tabiyat hi saath nahi deti dost warna site wale jante hain... k raat chahe pakistan ki ho yah...usa ki...BANJARA sab ko online milta tha...kyun k use adat ho gayi thi is mehfil ki...kosish karon ga saath bnaye rakhne ki...lakeeron main zindagi or sehat SHART hay.. apna khiyal rakhna... ------- chand mere dost.... kaise ho? tumhari ..wah ..wah pasand ayi dost.. or tumhare jwab main likhe hwe sher k jwab main bhi yehi wah wah apna khiyal rakhna... -------- parastaar sahiba.. kasi ho? tumm bohat stupid ho yar lagta hay tumhain bhi seedha karna pare ga... khair....tumhari shayri mujhya hamesha se inspire karti hay tareef k liye shukria..or sher bohat ache likhe hain tum ne.. apna khiyal rakhna... --------- MANPAKI kaise ho? u seemd new here wellcome.. tareef or jwab main likhe hwe sjher k liye shukria.. thanks lot khan......... jana ji raha hun tumhare liye...plzzzzzzz baat karo na agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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31st October 2004, 08:49 PM
pyasa ji
thanks alot khiyal rakhna... agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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1st November 2004, 02:20 AM
hi moon
hw r u. itni dard bari poem likhi hai tum ne magar tumko usse yeh shikayat kiyo hai. tumhaari shayri to hamesha ki tarah bhut hi gehri hai magar itni yeh udaasi kiyo. tum kabhi itne kamzoor na the maine to socha tha ke moot aur laasho ko apni shayri mai mention karna sirf sanjoo ka kaam tha magar ab tum bi shuru ho gaye hmm well keep on writing and moon plz plz take care of urself bye |
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1st November 2004, 10:10 AM
Banjara ji..... ye sher jaane kitni baaten keh jaat hai...
"AISE BETHA THA MERI MAIYYAT SE ZARA DOOR KOI SHAKS JIASE KAHTA HU MERA TUM PER KOI LAMHA UDHAAR THA.." Kutch arj kar raha hoon..... "KHUSHIYAAN MERI LE GAYA CHEEN KE VO... JISE HAR PAL PYAR AUR KHUSHIYANN BAANTI MAINE... PAYAGA AB SIRF MERI KHAMOSHIYAAN.... JO RAAKHIN HAI USKE LIYE AAJ SAMBHAAL MAINE..... DUR- DUR TAK GOONJENI YE KHAMOSHIYAAN..... TADAP - TADAP KE AAYEGA VO PAAS MERE..... LAUTANA CHAHEGA PAR NAHI DE SAKTA... (udhar hi samajh kar) JO KIYA THA USSE PYAR MAINE......." **(*·.¸(`·.¸ ¸.·´)¸.·*)** *·.¸Paigaam -e- Aman¸.·* **(¸.·´(¸.·* *·.¸)`·.¸)** ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~* inhan ankhaaon vicho kadi, tere hanju vaghe si..... aaj ki hoye, jehda ^AMAN^ da lahoo vagda ae...... AMAN RAHI |
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1st November 2004, 10:12 AM
AISE BETHA THA MERI MAIYYAT SE ZARA DOOR KOI SHAKS JIASE KAHTA HU MERA TUM PER KOI LAMHA UDHAAR THA.. Khan bhai, Aapne in do panktiyon me duniya bhar ka dard hai...Bahut hi sundar likha hai aapne...(as always  )...Dil se daad kubool kijiyega....Aage bhi aise hi mehfil sajate rahiye.. DO TC Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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1st November 2004, 08:51 PM
amaan rhai
howru? lafzon ko likhne shayad itna mushkil nahi hota jitna unhain smajhna hota hay.(meri nazar main) mumkin hay kuch log is se ikhtlaf krain..magar main aisa samjhta hun..kyun k kabhi kabhi aap bohat kuch likh jate ho magar samjha nahi skate ..or kabhi kabhi aik sher jaisa k aap ne kaha kitni hi batain kah jata hay....koi samjh jaye to smajh lena chahiye k kamyab hwe aap bhi khoj or aap k lafzon ki kismat meri taraf se mere chand lafzon ko smajhne k liye shukria mere sher k jwab main aap ne jin sheron ka tohfa siya hay woh bohat ache hain..likhte rehna apna khiyal rkahiye ga.. milte rhaiye ga khan ------- pulgit gupta kaise ho dost? meri in do panktiyon main duniya bhar ka dard... bhai yakin karo k yeh sirf mera hi dard tha jo mere liye bardasht karna kabhi kabhi mushkil hota hay..or bhai main kahan duniya bhar ka dard bardasht kar sakta hun bhala..magar aap ne mere sher ki tareef ki or ise samjha main yakinan kamyab hwa. apna khyal rkahna.or lmilte rehna... agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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1st November 2004, 09:11 PM
ROMANA
kasi ho? sher pasand karne ka behad shukria or shikayat karne ka bhi... baat rahik maujhay us se shikayat kiyon hay to tum to meri jana se milti rehti ho...kabhiakele main milo to us se poch lena k khan ko tum se kiya shikayat hay..shayad woh sach kah paye... or mere sheron main lashon wagera ka zikar hone lagta hay to jahan tak mera khiyal hay yeh pehla sher hay jo is tarah ka maine yahan post kiya or is ki haqeqat bhi sirf yehi hay k dost k kaha KHAN BHAI ABHI KUCH POST KARO.so jo mind main aya likh dala..or sanjoo to is baat ka jwab khud hi de skata haymain kiya kah sakta hun....magar itna kahon ga k aik likhne wala wohilikhta hay jo us dimagh main lafzon ki sharat hoti hay agar zehan khush hay to waisa hi likhe ga..or agar zehan naraz hay to phir........ainda koshih kron ga shikayat na ho... khair..mainkamzoor ho chuka hun...to aisa karna is baat ka jwab bhi jana se hi lena k us ne mujhaykamzoor kiyonkar diya hay shayad woh sach bol sake... sher ki tareef karne ka aik bar phir shukria.. apna khiyal rkahna..main sahi rahon ga... khan |
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2nd November 2004, 06:02 AM
hi moon
i m so sorry i didnt mean to hurt ur feelings u know i meant it as a joke. ur poem was beautiful and dats the truth it was very deep and i didnt mean to complain jus didnt like d idea of u talkin about death and expressin those feelings just didn't seem u. aapko mujhe yeh baat batane ki zaroorat nahimai yeh achi tarah se jaanti ho ke ik shayar wohi likhta hai jo vo mehsoos karta hai jo uska dil kehta but tumare dil ne aisa socha bi kaise is pe hiraan ho mai. tumhari jaana apni jaga theek hai aur tum apni jaga aur usko muhabbat pe yaqeen hai khud pe nahi. neway good kabhi mile to poocho gi zaroor ke usne aisa kiya kaha ke aaapki shayri mai aise dukh bare feelings shamil ho gaye. tc bye |
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2nd November 2004, 08:25 PM
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kasi ho? yar yeh sorry lafz mujhay aik dam acha nahi lagta.... or agar tum kaho to aik dam nahi...tum ne koi aisa lafz nahi kaha jis se main hurt hwa..or phir na hi maine kuch aisa kaha (mere khiyal main ) jis se show ho k main hurt hwa tumhari baat se.. main bhi tanqeed karta hon...BANOO ko aksar dantta hun k jab woh iase likhti thi...MEENA se bhi aksar shikayat karta tha..kyu k they means a lot to me..phir agar tumhain laga k mujhay aisa nahilikhna chhaiye to maine usi maan ko nazar main rakh kar kaha main aisa nahi likhon ga...theek hay....dont say this word again..ok? tum ne kaha k tum mere is tarah ki soch per heraan ho...han main bhi apni jana ki beyakini per hairan hon..ko use mohabbat per to yakin haymagar khud per nahi...use kaho k mohabbat us k liye hay...or woh mere liye...sirf is baat per yakin kar le..use khud per yakin ho jaye ga.... kam se kam aisa kar k dekh zaror ,le aik baar.. or jwab ka intzar rahe ga mujhay... apna khiyal rakhna... khan |
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AISE BETHA THA MERI MAIYYAT SE ZARA DOOR KOI SHAKS
JIASE KAHTA HU MERA TUM PER KOI LAMHA UDHAAR THA.. Khan Sahab adab arz hai , ajj thoda sa waqt mila to ajj mai ne kuch shayri ko explor kiya , jis mai kahien se app ka yeh sher mila , is sher ney mery dil ko cho liya iski gehrai to mai maap hi nhi sakta mager is main dobny ka saleeqa thoda sa mujh mai tha , tareef keron ya daad doon to yeh na munasib rahy ga , kiyon k kisi k dard ko ager mehsoos na ker sako to aik lafz khud ba khud moun se nikalta hai wah , wah ............ mai ye dua bilkul nhi keron ga app aisy likhty raho kiyon k haqeeqat us waqt maloom hoti hai jab hum is mai dobty hain ... Dua kerta hon k app ko appki mohabbat mil jaey Regards Mujeeb |
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24th March 2008, 11:47 AM
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i dont know what to say.. but itna kahu ga k ap k jwab main jo dard chupa hwa hay... wo main mehsos kar sakta hu.. mujhe ye to nahi pta k itna purana dard aj kaise mil gya apko. mgar apki tarah mujhe bhi koi chupa hwa dard yad agya thanks dear agar mohabbat hay to judai kiyon or judai main mohabbat kasi???? |
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