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Eik bauaht hee adnaa se kavish jis ka janam eik bauhat qeemtee lamhe mein hoa
aap ki is khubsoorat bazm ki nazr kartee hei Maham ........
Pehle baar gunah e maikashi kya mein ne
Ley ke Khuda ka naam ji bhar pya mein ne
daur pe daur chalta gaya saaqi mera ehsaan karta gaya
nigahon se masti tapaknae lagee khumar barhta gaya
hosh urtae rahae nasha charhta gaya
koshish tou bauhat kee daaman e dil talak na aan pohanche
kuch bass na chala shola e ishq bharakta gaya
qadam dagmagate rahe dil e beiman dharakta gaya
kyun khafa hota hai eiy waiz mujhse
Bakhuda maikadae ka rukh nahi kya mei ne
qasam saaqi ki koi gunah nahi kiya mein ne
kamzarf honge woh jo maikhanae ka rukh karain
nadaan hein woh jo bezaroorat paimana bharain
kaafir kaho unhen jo yun nashaa karain
uskee ankhkon se pee meree khata yehee hei
umr bhar hosh na ayae meri sazah yehee hei
maikada jinko azeez woh shouq se wahan ka rukh karen
mere lye kya kamee mujhe mayasar un mast ankhon ke jam
Na rahee aarzu saagar o meena kee Jab se hoay woh paimanae mere naam
saalaamaat rahae saaqi mera us nasheele nigaah ko mera salaam
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4th October 2007, 10:46 AM
bahut khoob maham ji.....majja aa gaya padkar
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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bahut khoob maham ji.....majja aa gaya padkar
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I m glad u liked it ma'am
thanx hazaroun gulistan
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4th October 2007, 04:58 PM
maham ji i just wanna say its mast..
o saaki saaki re saaki saaki\ /
bhot acchi hai g kavita..thanx 4 sharing
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Eik bauaht hee adnaa se kavish jis ka janam eik bauhat qeemtee lamhe mein hoa
aap ki is khubsoorat bazm ki nazr kartee hei Maham ........
Pehle baar gunah e maikashi kya mein ne
Ley ke Khuda ka naam ji bhar pya mein ne
daur pe daur chalta gaya saaqi mera ehsaan karta gaya
nigahon se masti tapaknae lagee khumar barhta gaya
hosh urtae rahae nasha charhta gaya
koshish tou bauhat kee daaman e dil talak na aan pohanche
kuch bass na chala shola e ishq bharakta gaya
qadam dagmagate rahe dil e beiman dharakta gaya
kyun khafa hota hai eiy waiz mujhse
Bakhuda maikadae ka rukh nahi kya mei ne
qasam saaqi ki koi gunah nahi kiya mein ne
kamzarf honge woh jo maikhanae ka rukh karain
nadaan hein woh jo bezaroorat paimana bharain
kaafir kaho unhen jo yun nashaa karain
uskee ankhkon se pee meree khata yehee hei
umr bhar hosh na ayae meri sazah yehee hei
maikada jinko azeez woh shouq se wahan ka rukh karen
mere lye kya kamee mujhe mayasar un mast ankhon ke jam
Na rahee aarzu saagar o meena kee Jab se hoay woh paimanae mere naam
saalaamaat rahae saaqi mera us nasheele nigaah ko mera salaam
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waah! maham jee kya kahne aap ke!aap se hame is tarah ke nazm kii ummeed to nahii.n thee.. sochaa bhii na thaa kii aap sharaab aur saaqi par bhii pukhta Dhang se likh sakti hai.n.. pahle ek urdu ki nazm, phir hindi me.n, phir english poetry aur ab saaqi par bhii.. waah!
pahle stanaza me.n aalam-e-maikashi, khuub bayaan kiyaa hai aap ne.. aur duusre aur tisre stanza me.n aap ne to Ghazab hii kar diyaa hai! kya khuub wazah tasliim kiya hai aap ne.. paRh kar dil baaGh-baaGh ho gaya hai maham jee, kya kahne aap ke!
yuun hii likhti rahe.n.ooparwaale se duaa hai kii aap ko aur hunarmand kare, zor--e--qalam ho aur zeyaadah!
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5th October 2007, 09:44 AM
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maham ji i just wanna say its mast..
o saaki saaki re saaki saaki\ /
bhot acchi hai g kavita..thanx 4 sharing
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Thanx hazaroun gulistan for appreciating it Anamika ,
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waah! maham jee kya kahne aap ke!aap se hame is tarah ke nazm kii ummeed to nahii.n thee.. sochaa bhii na thaa kii aap sharaab aur saaqi par bhii pukhta Dhang se likh sakti hai.n.. pahle ek urdu ki nazm, phir hindi me.n, phir english poetry aur ab saaqi par bhii.. waah!
pahle stanaza me.n aalam-e-maikashi, khuub bayaan kiyaa hai aap ne.. aur duusre aur tisre stanza me.n aap ne to Ghazab hii kar diyaa hai! kya khuub wazah tasliim kiya hai aap ne.. paRh kar dil baaGh-baaGh ho gaya hai maham jee, kya kahne aap ke!
yuun hii likhti rahe.n.ooparwaale se duaa hai kii aap ko aur hunarmand kare, zor--e--qalam ho aur zeyaadah!
mayank
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Log aise he to nai kehte na ke
MAHAM IS FULL OF SURPRISES
hahaahhaa
so aise he hein hum
apko gaahe bagaahe heran karte rahain ge
dekhte jayae agayae agayae hota hei kiya
All jokes aside
wordz of appreciation from someone like u surely do add a feather in my cap
Thanx hazaroun gulistan for all ur words here ,Sir......
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8th October 2007, 11:49 PM
Is there anyway i can edit my post a few dayz later ?!
Trying to do so but in vain .....
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7th November 2007, 12:20 PM
haye haye maham..kya hain yeh sab!!!!!!!!!!!!!
sharaab!!!!!
Bahut buri baat hain.......................!!
Acche log aisi chezoN se door rehte hain :
Allah muaaf kare tumhe!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
main to tumhe abhi woh gaane pe imagine kar rahin hoon...tum gaati hui..." kaise rahu chup ke maine pee li kya hain..hosh abhi tak hain baaki...Aur zara si dede saaqi...aur zara si.."..
acchi tehreer hain maham ......behki behki si.............
hume pasand aayi....
mausam
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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haye haye maham..kya hain yeh sab!!!!!!!!!!!!!
sharaab!!!!!
Bahut buri baat hain.......................!!
Acche log aisi chezoN se door rehte hain :
Allah muaaf kare tumhe!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
main to tumhe abhi woh gaane pe imagine kar rahin hoon...tum gaati hui..." kaise rahu chup ke maine pee li kya hain..hosh abhi tak hain baaki...Aur zara si dede saaqi...aur zara si.."..
acchi tehreer hain maham ......behki behki si.............
hume pasand aayi....
mausam
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araay araaay kiya ghazab kartee ho yaar
maikashi pe nazm hum ne likhee behak tum rahee ho
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21st November 2007, 03:40 AM
kia akhri shayri ki hai nighahoon ki sharaab k baray mai dost ..lagta to u hai k aap b diljalay ashiq hai sharaab k,,,hamari tara
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21st November 2007, 05:26 PM
maikhane mein bhi meri dua kabool na hui
jaise mandir ke aage koi swaali khara raha
auron ko diye saqi ne jaam pe jaam
le ke paimaana haath mein khaali khara rha
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kia akhri shayri ki hai nighahoon ki sharaab k baray mai dost ..lagta to u hai k aap b diljalay ashiq hai sharaab k,,,hamari tara
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hazrat jab tak apko ye ilm na ho ke ap kisi khatoon se baat kar rahe hein ya kisi sahab se to apne lafzon ko bauhat sambhaal ke ehtiyaat se ada karna chahya hei
Behairkaif ,
agar ye apki daad ka andaz hei to shukriya aur kiya keh sakte hien ,aur batate chalain ke i m a female and not a male and NO i m not for sure an AASHIQ of shaarab but I do believe in intoxication
anywayz
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Eik bauaht hee adnaa se kavish jis ka janam eik bauhat qeemtee lamhe mein hoa
aap ki is khubsoorat bazm ki nazr kartee hei Maham ........
Pehle baar gunah e maikashi kya mein ne
Ley ke Khuda ka naam ji bhar pya mein ne
daur pe daur chalta gaya saaqi mera ehsaan karta gaya
nigahon se masti tapaknae lagee khumar barhta gaya
hosh urtae rahae nasha charhta gaya
koshish tou bauhat kee daaman e dil talak na aan pohanche
kuch bass na chala shola e ishq bharakta gaya
qadam dagmagate rahe dil e beiman dharakta gaya
kyun khafa hota hai eiy waiz mujhse
Bakhuda maikadae ka rukh nahi kya mei ne
qasam saaqi ki koi gunah nahi kiya mein ne
kamzarf honge woh jo maikhanae ka rukh karain
nadaan hein woh jo bezaroorat paimana bharain
kaafir kaho unhen jo yun nashaa karain
uskee ankhkon se pee meree khata yehee hei
umr bhar hosh na ayae meri sazah yehee hei
maikada jinko azeez woh shouq se wahan ka rukh karen
mere lye kya kamee mujhe mayasar un mast ankhon ke jam
Na rahee aarzu saagar o meena kee Jab se hoay woh paimanae mere naam
saalaamaat rahae saaqi mera us nasheele nigaah ko mera salaam
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goood One but I will reply you noe I have taken a lot...........
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KAHEGANA PARAST HAI JAZBAT MEIN BAHE GA NAHI WOH MUJH SE MILNE AAENGA MUNH SE MAGAR KAHENGA NAHI
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Pehle baar gunah e maikashi kya mein ne
Ley ke Khuda ka naam ji bhar pya mein ne
Mazza aa gaya
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10th April 2008, 06:48 AM
Thanx hazaroun gulistan !
Due Respects,
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10th April 2008, 07:25 AM
apki nazm bahot pasand ayi Maham sahiba. subhan Allah. nihayat hi dilkash aor hasin. dad qubul farmaye.n
apki ki pahli line [pahle bar gunah.....] mujhe laga k jaise is line ko [pahli bar gunah.....] hona chahiye. apka kia khayal he? gustakhi ke liye mazarat khah hu.n
tu aur aaraa'ish-e-Kham-e-kaakul
maiN aur andesha_haa-e-dur o daraaz
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apki nazm bahot pasand ayi Maham sahiba. subhan Allah. nihayat hi dilkash aor hasin. dad qubul farmaye.n
apki ki pahli line [pahle bar gunah.....] mujhe laga k jaise is line ko [pahli bar gunah.....] hona chahiye. apka kia khayal he? gustakhi ke liye mazarat khah hu.n
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Adaab arz hei mohataram hazrat ,
ap ka dilli shukriya ke ap ne daad se navaza ,
janab vo PEHLI he hei , PEHLEE likhna tha shayed eik E lagana bhul gaye , it wz nothing but a sheer typo blunder , Ofcourse it HAS to be PEHLI BAAR !
Thanx hazaroun Gulistan ,
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KAHEGANA PARAST HAI JAZBAT MEIN BAHE GA NAHI WOH MUJH SE MILNE AAENGA MUNH SE MAGAR KAHENGA NAHI
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This does nt make any sense to me ,
Elaborate!
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Nihayat hi Umda kavish hai Mohterma app ki ...
yakeen maaniye sharab per likhi pehli ghazal hai jo mujhy passand aai
Reps +++
Tareef k liye alfaz kahan se laaon ?????
Bahut achi hai ...........Keep Writing
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6th October 2008, 09:35 PM
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zahae naseeb zarahnavazi hazur,
Due respects
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ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
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Thanx hazarun gulistan Ravi sahab,
Due Respects
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
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me to yehi kahunga, k ye sheyr pad kar mujhe to talab c lag gai he, or kya kahu sarkar,
Gustakhi maaf
unko hame satane ka bahana mil gya, hme hmari maut ka thikana mil gya, hme to unke saath ki umid thi jo na mila , unko to sara jamana mil gya, hmari juban ko khamoshi ka kinara mil gya, meri ankho me ashko ka najara khil gya,
Ye kya kam tha k ik mulakat ho bus, tumhari dosti me kambakht hmara dil gya, hm drd ko khuda maan bethe he ab,mere maran k bahane me sath tumhara bn gya,,
Kya malum hqiqat me sath dega khuda,
Khwab aya k hmara ek jakham sil gya...M
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me to yehi kahunga, k ye sheyr pad kar mujhe to talab c lag gai he, or kya kahu sarkar,
Gustakhi maaf
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pasand farmanae ke lye shukriya..
wasalam
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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Eik bauaht hee adnaa se kavish jis ka janam eik bauhat qeemtee lamhe mein hoa
aap ki is khubsoorat bazm ki nazr kartee hei Maham ........
Pehle baar gunah e maikashi kya mein ne
Ley ke Khuda ka naam ji bhar pya mein ne
daur pe daur chalta gaya saaqi mera ehsaan karta gaya
nigahon se masti tapaknae lagee khumar barhta gaya
hosh urtae rahae nasha charhta gaya
koshish tou bauhat kee daaman e dil talak na aan pohanche
kuch bass na chala shola e ishq bharakta gaya
qadam dagmagate rahe dil e beiman dharakta gaya
kyun khafa hota hai eiy waiz mujhse
Bakhuda maikadae ka rukh nahi kya mei ne
qasam saaqi ki koi gunah nahi kiya mein ne
kamzarf honge woh jo maikhanae ka rukh karain
nadaan hein woh jo bezaroorat paimana bharain
kaafir kaho unhen jo yun nashaa karain
uskee ankhkon se pee meree khata yehee hei
umr bhar hosh na ayae meri sazah yehee hei
maikada jinko azeez woh shouq se wahan ka rukh karen
mere lye kya kamee mujhe mayasar un mast ankhon ke jam
Na rahee aarzu saagar o meena kee Jab se hoay woh paimanae mere naam
saalaamaat rahae saaqi mera us nasheele nigaah ko mera salaam
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Maham ji,
Waise hi ghoomte phirte aap ke thread pe aa gaya tha... Aapki Ghazal pdhi bahut Maza aaya....
MaiN Khud ko iss layak to nahi samjhta ki main aapki Ghazal ki tareeff bhi kar saku phir bhi kahne se ruk nahi saktaa ki Bahut Khoob likha hai aapne, aapne behad umda tariqe se apne ehsaasoN ki chhap apni Ghazal meiN chhodi hai....
Mere paas aur alfaaz nahi haiN...
Daad kabool kareN......
Khush rahiye,
Vikram Jethi
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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5th December 2009, 03:58 PM
mohataaram hazrat,
ap kasranafsi s kaam lete hein warna ap khub hasas andaz mein ashaar ko jazb karte hein apne ander
apki is karamfarmayee is haqeer kaavish ko yun shidat se sarhaane ke lye behud mumnun t hehree maham ,
behud navazish hazur apki...
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
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20th December 2009, 08:40 AM
le ke khuda ka naam ji bhar pia maine
maham ji aaj achanak is forum pe aa gya or aapki rachna padne ka sabab ban gya.............maza aa gya
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le ke khuda ka naam ji bhar pia maine
maham ji aaj achanak is forum pe aa gya or aapki rachna padne ka sabab ban gya.............maza aa gya
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navazish hazrat...
karamfarmayee ka behud shukriya..
ye dil soye hoay jazbon ka hei aisa mehal jis mein
kisii jazbe ka ab mumkin nahi bedaar ho jana
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eik lamha e visaal tha vaapis na aaska
vo waqt ki micaal tha vaapis na aasaka
mujh ko mere vajud se jo kar gaya judaa
kaisa vo baakamal tha vaapis na asaka
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