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Ik aas lagaye bethi hoon ...... - 4th February 2008, 09:17 PM
kuch ahsasaat aapke samne paish kerna chahti hoon umeed hai aap logon ka sath milega..


Ik aas lagaye bethi hoon ik khuwab sajaye bethi hoon
logon se chupa ker seene main ik dard dabaye bethi hoon


kesa ye khauf hai jevan main anjana sa unchaha sa
janne ki khuwahish main darbar lagaye bethi hoon


jo hona hai wo hoga hi jo darj hai taqdeeron main
phir kion khood pe mayoosi ki gard jamaye bethi hoon


bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon


aapki raye ki muntazir

Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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5th February 2008, 10:28 AM
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baRe dinoN baad aapkii teHreer paRhne ko milii.. KhuShii hu'ii.. wahi beHteriN aNdaaz aapka.. bahot hi Khuub..!

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yeH Sher be-Had pasaNd aayaa..!

YuuNhi bazm ki raunaq afzA'ii karte rahiYe..! daad hi daad..!

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN

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5th February 2008, 01:02 PM
jo hona hai wo hoga hi jo darj hai taqdeeron main
phir kion khood pe mayoosi ki gard jamaye bethi hoon

.......wah mani..bahut hi badhiya tehreer hain...sare ke saare ashaar lajawaab....uparwala sher zara jyada pasand aaya....gayab rehne ke baad itni acchi kalaam to na tum aise gayab raha karo.....kal na jab tumne yeh post kiya tha tab maine login kiya tha....par na pehli baar tumhe bade font mein pesh karte huve dekh main darr gayi , ki achanak mani ko kahin chasmeiN to nahin aa gaye..hahahhha..sach mein itne bade font mein padhna bilkul accha nahin lagta..maine socha tumko Pm karke bolu ki edit kardo..fir tumne khud se hi edit kar diya......fir light chali gayi aur main bhi.........dil se daad kubool karo......aur yunhiN is bazm ki ronak badhate raho...

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bohat bohat shukriya aapka is himmat barrahane ka thanks a lot

Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
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baRe dinoN baad aapkii teHreer paRhne ko milii.. KhuShii hu'ii.. wahi beHteriN aNdaaz aapka.. bahot hi Khuub..!



yeH Sher be-Had pasaNd aayaa..!

YuuNhi bazm ki raunaq afzA'ii karte rahiYe..! daad hi daad..!

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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jo hona hai wo hoga hi jo darj hai taqdeeron main
phir kion khood pe mayoosi ki gard jamaye bethi hoon

.......wah mani..bahut hi badhiya tehreer hain...sare ke saare ashaar lajawaab....uparwala sher zara jyada pasand aaya....gayab rehne ke baad itni acchi kalaam to na tum aise gayab raha karo.....kal na jab tumne yeh post kiya tha tab maine login kiya tha....par na pehli baar tumhe bade font mein pesh karte huve dekh main darr gayi , ki achanak mani ko kahin chasmeiN to nahin aa gaye..hahahhha..sach mein itne bade font mein padhna bilkul accha nahin lagta..maine socha tumko Pm karke bolu ki edit kardo..fir tumne khud se hi edit kar diya......fir light chali gayi aur main bhi.........dil se daad kubool karo......aur yunhiN is bazm ki ronak badhate raho...

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hahahaha didi aapka reply parrh ker bohat hansi aye actually mujhe idea nahi tha ke itna barra font hojayega main khud dekh ker darr gaye thi wesay aapko batadoon mere chashme already lage howe hain mazeed kia lagain ge aur bohat bohat bohat shukriya di ke aapne meri hosla afzai ki aap logon ki hosla afzai se hi likh paati hoon apna khayal rakhiyega di humesha khush rahain ameen

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7th February 2008, 10:36 AM
Aslam u alaikum , Adab !


Mohterma bahut khoob appne to kamal likha hai

bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon

maza aa gya ghazal perh ker . waisy to is ghazal mai koi shair aisa nhi jis ki tareef na kee jaey. balkeh mai to kahon ga k mery pass alfazat nhi hain k mai kuch likhon tareef main . bahut he umda mager opper waly shair k special dad liejiye dil cho liya hai app ki ghazal nay .mehfil ko or bhi ronak bakhshiye . umeed hai k app aisy he hamary dilon ko apny kalam se lubhati rahien gee


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7th February 2008, 02:05 PM
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kuch ahsasaat aapke samne paish kerna chahti hoon umeed hai aap logon ka sath milega..


Ik aas lagaye bethi hoon ik khuwab sajaye bethi hoon
logon se chupa ker seene main ik dard dabaye bethi hoon


kesa ye khauf hai jevan main anjana sa unchaha sa
janne ki khuwahish main darbar lagaye bethi hoon


jo hona hai wo hoga hi jo darj hai taqdeeron main
phir kion khood pe mayoosi ki gard jamaye bethi hoon


bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon


aapki raye ki muntazir
bahoot achaa aur khoobsurat kalam likha hai mani, maine ise jab tumne post kiyaa tabhi padh liya tha, magar mere net ne us din mujh se gaddaari kar dii varna hameshaa ki tarah mera hee first reply hota.... Khair phir aaj padhaa to padhtaa he reh gaya, is se pehle jo kalam likha tha us se yeh jyada khoob aur tarannum men laga kyunki tum ne radeef aur kaafiye ka properly istemaal kiyaa hai, jis ki vajah se jab padhate hai is kalam ko to tarannum(rhythm) paida hota hai, bahoot khoob likha hai, dil se mubaarakbaad qubool kare, yunhee aur achhe kalaam paish karati rehna. ALLAH tumhe aur bhi hunarmand kare, "AAMIN".


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kuch ahsasaat aapke samne paish kerna chahti hoon umeed hai aap logon ka sath milega..


Ik aas lagaye bethi hoon ik khuwab sajaye bethi hoon
logon se chupa ker seene main ik dard dabaye bethi hoon


kesa ye khauf hai jevan main anjana sa unchaha sa
janne ki khuwahish main darbar lagaye bethi hoon


jo hona hai wo hoga hi jo darj hai taqdeeron main
phir kion khood pe mayoosi ki gard jamaye bethi hoon


bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon


aapki raye ki muntazir
bahoot khubsoorat kalaam hai,aaj aap ko pehli dafa padha.achha likha hai,jaane kaise aap log vaqt nikaal lete hai itne achhe kalam likhane kaa??

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7th February 2008, 11:27 PM
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kuch ahsasaat aapke samne paish kerna chahti hoon umeed hai aap logon ka sath milega..


Ik aas lagaye bethi hoon ik khuwab sajaye bethi hoon
logon se chupa ker seene main ik dard dabaye bethi hoon


kesa ye khauf hai jevan main anjana sa unchaha sa
janne ki khuwahish main darbar lagaye bethi hoon


jo hona hai wo hoga hi jo darj hai taqdeeron main
phir kion khood pe mayoosi ki gard jamaye bethi hoon


bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon


aapki raye ki muntazir
koi to ho ji

ehsasoin mein ghiri kyun dard chhipaye bathi ho

acha likha hai asardaar hai jo

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13th February 2008, 06:02 AM
manni diiiiiiii

kaise hain aap?

bahut hi acha likha hai, atleast 4 times to maine paadi hogi. very meaningful. har sher mein bahut dum hai, lekin yeh sher humein bahut acha lagaa:

kesa ye khauf hai jevan main anjana sa unchaha sa
janne ki khuwahish main darbar lagaye bethi hoon

yuhin likte rahein. khuda aapko humesha khushiyan de.

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13th February 2008, 10:07 AM
meri pyari mani.............kaise ho????????????
bahut khoob likha hai tumne...........kisi ek sher ki tareef karna bahut mushkil hai, har sher laajwaab hai, der baad likha hai tumne par likha bahut kamaal ka hai....dil se daad kabool karo....aise hi likhti raho....kush raho.

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13th February 2008, 10:13 AM
Mani di ko merul ka sadar pranaam...

behtanreeen mani di...

kuch esa likha hai aapne ki hamari zindagi se talukat rakhta hai aaj kal...bahut hi umda aur dil ko chhune wale ehsaason se sajaya hai rachna ko..

dil se nikle ehsaason pe daad hazir hai.. kabuliyega..

bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon

bahut khub di ye hamien bahut pasand aayi..

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Mohterma bahut khoob appne to kamal likha hai

bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon

maza aa gya ghazal perh ker . waisy to is ghazal mai koi shair aisa nhi jis ki tareef na kee jaey. balkeh mai to kahon ga k mery pass alfazat nhi hain k mai kuch likhon tareef main . bahut he umda mager opper waly shair k special dad liejiye dil cho liya hai app ki ghazal nay .mehfil ko or bhi ronak bakhshiye . umeed hai k app aisy he hamary dilon ko apny kalam se lubhati rahien gee


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bahoot khubsoorat kalaam hai,aaj aap ko pehli dafa padha.achha likha hai,jaane kaise aap log vaqt nikaal lete hai itne achhe kalam likhane kaa??

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ehsasoin mein ghiri kyun dard chhipaye bathi ho

acha likha hai asardaar hai jo

sakhi

sakhi ji aapka saath paa ker behad acha laga bohat nawazish aapki yunhi saath deti rahiyega khush rahain

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manni diiiiiiii

kaise hain aap?

bahut hi acha likha hai, atleast 4 times to maine paadi hogi. very meaningful. har sher mein bahut dum hai, lekin yeh sher humein bahut acha lagaa:

kesa ye khauf hai jevan main anjana sa unchaha sa
janne ki khuwahish main darbar lagaye bethi hoon

yuhin likte rahein. khuda aapko humesha khushiyan de.

God bless u

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hellooo....di...

may i call u so....sab ne aapko DI kaha hai...i thot...may i?
well...aapne bahuth hi khoob likhe hai....
i just loved it...!

Ik aas lagaye bethi hoon ik khuwab sajaye bethi hoon
logon se chupa ker seene main ik dard dabaye bethi hoon

waah....too good...kithna dard hai...

jo hona hai wo hoga hi jo darj hai taqdeeron main
phir kion khood pe mayoosi ki gard jamaye bethi hoon

kya baath ki hai...TAkdeeron ki...

bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon

too good....

Mujhe daad dena kuch khaas tho aatha nahin....
Kisi ke dil ko kaise behlaaoo yeh bhi tho aatha nahin...
Lafz gum ho gaye hon jaise tumhare alfaaz dek kar,
Varna is shayar ki mehfil se koi jaatha nahin...

anyways,....take care... wana c more of u....

If you want ur dreams to cum true...
WAKE UP...!


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meri pyari mani.............kaise ho????????????
bahut khoob likha hai tumne...........kisi ek sher ki tareef karna bahut mushkil hai, har sher laajwaab hai, der baad likha hai tumne par likha bahut kamaal ka hai....dil se daad kabool karo....aise hi likhti raho....kush raho.

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Mani di ko merul ka sadar pranaam...

behtanreeen mani di...

kuch esa likha hai aapne ki hamari zindagi se talukat rakhta hai aaj kal...bahut hi umda aur dil ko chhune wale ehsaason se sajaya hai rachna ko..

dil se nikle ehsaason pe daad hazir hai.. kabuliyega..

bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon

bahut khub di ye hamien bahut pasand aayi..

yuhi sath dete rahiyega
aapka dost
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merul kahan ghayab ho aajkal thanks dear is nawazish ke liye aate raha karo takecare

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hellooo....di...

may i call u so....sab ne aapko DI kaha hai...i thot...may i?
well...aapne bahuth hi khoob likhe hai....
i just loved it...!

Ik aas lagaye bethi hoon ik khuwab sajaye bethi hoon
logon se chupa ker seene main ik dard dabaye bethi hoon

waah....too good...kithna dard hai...

jo hona hai wo hoga hi jo darj hai taqdeeron main
phir kion khood pe mayoosi ki gard jamaye bethi hoon

kya baath ki hai...TAkdeeron ki...

bekali hai her dharrkan main kion ansu hain in ankhon main
kion bin barsaati nadi ke sailaab bahaaye bethi hoon

too good....

Mujhe daad dena kuch khaas tho aatha nahin....
Kisi ke dil ko kaise behlaaoo yeh bhi tho aatha nahin...
Lafz gum ho gaye hon jaise tumhare alfaaz dek kar,
Varna is shayar ki mehfil se koi jaatha nahin...

anyways,....take care... wana c more of u....

hi simran zaroor bula sakti ho di aur bohat bohat shukriya is zaranawazi ke liye aati rehna khush raho

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bhut khub - 27th April 2008, 08:04 PM
beena ko raj ka adaab...kaisii ho meri behna? maloom hai tere dil mein kaii shikve honge or shikayat bhii....teri gazal bhut pyarii hai pehle se bhut sudhaar hai....apna khyaal rakhna.....raj....

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Pyari Mani..

Itna dard kahan se sama laayi apni aankhon me...

Wishing you all the happiness in life@!!! May you always be smiling...

TC

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beena ko raj ka adaab...kaisii ho meri behna? maloom hai tere dil mein kaii shikve honge or shikayat bhii....teri gazal bhut pyarii hai pehle se bhut sudhaar hai....apna khyaal rakhna.....raj....

veeeeeeeeeeer aap agayeeee wapis kahan ghayab hogaye the aur behna to mat bolain aap kionki behanon ke sath koi aesa salook nahi kerta aik mail tak nahi ki aapne aesi bhi koi masroofiat hoti hai kia? shukar ker rahi hoon kam se kam aapko yaad rehgai main sakhta naraz hoon aapse main ...... bohat shukriya veer aapne itna waqt dia is tehreer ko humesha khush rahain ameeeeeennn apna bohat khayal rakhiyega ..

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Pyari Mani..

Itna dard kahan se sama laayi apni aankhon me...

Wishing you all the happiness in life@!!! May you always be smiling...

TC

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