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reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab (Ghazal) -
20th September 2015, 06:08 AM
aadaab dosto,
Ghazal mulaiiza kareiN:
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
maine, charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab
zaalim hai teri tar'he, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab
"maikash" naeeN hui hai raqm "yooN hi" yeh Ghazal!
kaaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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20th September 2015, 01:22 PM
namaskaar maikash ji...
aapki is behatreen ghazal ko na jane kitni baar padh liya maine,tareef karne jitni samajh to nahi mujhme par bhi kahna chahoongi.. har sher itna pyara aur itna gahra ki bas kho hee gayi usme....bahut mubarakbaad aur daad aapko is khoobsoorat ghazal par..
Bahut shukriya hamare sath share karne ka..
Salamat rahein....
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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20th September 2015, 04:13 PM
Maikash Sahib...Adaab.
Wah janab bahut achchi peshkash rahi aapki.
Her ek sher apne meiN mukammal tha ...Aur rawangi
tau itni ghazab ki lagi mujhe ki dil kerta tha bus perta
jaaooN...DheroN daad kabool.kareiN.
Sanjay Sehgal
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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20th September 2015, 06:12 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab dosto,
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab
"maikash" naeeN hui hai raqm "yooN hi" yeh Ghazal!
kaaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab
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Janaab e aala
Kuch aashaar padh ke ya sun ke daad dee nahi jaati.. daad nikal hi jaati hai .. chune hue sher bas isi lihaaj ke nazar aate hai.. bohat hi khoob .. accha laga padh ke .. apna khyaal rakhiye .. aur aate rahiye ..
Aapka apna
Sifar
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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20th September 2015, 06:13 PM
Maikash bhaiyaa
Pranaam ...SSA
dilkash Ghazal ...waaah... bahot hi umdaah andaaz-e-bayaaN....ehsaas dil ko behad pasand aayen..khaas kar ke Ghazal ka maqtaa bahot hi pasand aayaa...bhaiyaa aap yuunhi bazm ko sajaate rahiye yahee chaahataa huun...dil se dheron saari daad...apni sehat kaa khayaal rakhiye...khush rahen
Jai shrii krishnaa
duaaon ke saath ijaazat
Aapka
Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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22nd September 2015, 10:09 PM
behtreen ghazal likhi hai maikash bhai.............................
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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24th September 2015, 10:33 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab dosto,
Ghazal mulaiiza kareiN:
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
maine, charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab
zaalim hai teri tar'he, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab
"maikash" naeeN hui hai raqm "yooN hi" yeh Ghazal!
kaaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab
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wah bhaiyaa wah!
Har sher par aah aur wah ek saath nikali, this is undoubtedly one of your best.
behad behad pasand aayi apki ghazal.
Daad kabool kijiye,
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24th September 2015, 10:46 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab dosto,
Ghazal mulaiiza kareiN:
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
maine, charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab
zaalim hai teri tar'he, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab
"maikash" naeeN hui hai raqm "yooN hi" yeh Ghazal!
kaaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab
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Maikash ji....aapki kalam ke mureed to ham shuru se hi hai, ab kaun se lafzoN mein tareef kare gazal/dard ki...bas etna kahuNgi ki hamesha ki tarah aapki yeh gazal bhi dil ke dard ke kareeb rhi.
rabb raakha ji
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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24th September 2015, 12:40 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab dosto,
Ghazal mulaiiza kareiN:
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
maine, charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab
zaalim hai teri tar'he, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab
"maikash" naeeN hui hai raqm "yooN hi" yeh Ghazal!
kaaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab
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Behtreen ghazal huyi hai Ustaad Ji, mazaa aa gaya padh kar kuch ghazal jitni baar padhi jaayein kam hai aur yeh unmein se ek nayaab nageena hai. zor-e-kalam aur badhtaa jaayein yahi duaa hai.....
Qasid
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नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं
क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ
रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें
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28th September 2015, 10:48 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab dosto,
Ghazal mulaiiza kareiN:
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera
maine, charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab
raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !!
kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab
zaalim hai teri tar'he, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN
ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab
voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN
palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab
kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab
"maikash" naeeN hui hai raqm "yooN hi" yeh Ghazal!
kaaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab
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qatl ho gaye ham to is haseen kalaam ko padh kar huzoor.....
alfaaz nahi hain mere paas iski shaan me kahne ke liye... bas guzaarish ahi ke jaldi jaldi hame padhne ke mauqe dete raha kijiye...
shukriyaa.....
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29th September 2015, 02:34 AM
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namaskaar maikash ji...
aapki is behatreen ghazal ko na jane kitni baar padh liya maine,tareef karne jitni samajh to nahi mujhme par bhi kahna chahoongi.. har sher itna pyara aur itna gahra ki bas kho hee gayi usme....bahut mubarakbaad aur daad aapko is khoobsoorat ghazal par..
Bahut shukriya hamare sath share karne ka..
Salamat rahein....
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namaskaar Madhu jee,
aapki dariyaa-dilli hai jo is haqeer Ghazal ko kisi qaabil samjha, maiN iNtehaayi shukurguzaar hooN aapne jo hauNslaa badhaaya hai, aapk daad aur mubarakbaad sar-aaNkhoN par, bohat hi shukriya
ek baat jo Ghazal post karte waqt kehna bhool gaya hooN ke yeh Ghazal koi 9-10 saal puraani hai
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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4th October 2015, 10:36 AM
behad khoobsoorat ashaar hain man khush ho gayaa padh ke
mere ashar ko mahoob samjh ke chhoomte the jo
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai
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21st October 2015, 09:16 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikash
aadaab dosto,
ghazal mulaiiza karein:
Reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab
kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka andhera
maine, charaagh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar mein kaash ho
hum rooth jaayen ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab
raaton ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiin !!
Kambakht dil ka zakhm sataaye tam'aam shab
zaalim hai teri tar'he, terii yaad bhi jaanaan
ashkon ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab
voh khwaab ki duniya men thi,baithaa tha main yahaan
palkon ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab
kaise main maan luun ke buri hai sharaab, yeh
marham mere zakhmon pe lagaaye tam'aam shab
"maikash" naeen hui hai raqm "yoon hi" yeh ghazal!
Kaaghaz pe bade ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab
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bahut umdaah ! Waah !!!
Dilee mubaaraqbaad !!!!!!!!!
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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