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Mere Khat tum chahe rakh lo -
1st June 2014, 12:57 PM
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chote shehron mein,Aksar pyaar mein premi premika ek dusre ko khat likhte hain, aur phir ek din aisa aata hai jab premika kehti hai ki mummy papa nahi maan rahe unhone meri shadi kahin aur teh kar di hai aur ab main unke khilaaf nahi jaungi, aap ho sake toh mere khat lauta do. aur premi bhi gusse mein kehta hai ki jao nahi deta, aur agar khat chahiye toh mera wo waqt, mera woh intezaar, meri woh tadap ka bhi hisaab karo. toh usi ke jawab mein kuch lika hai Mere khat tum chaahe rakh lo Kuch aur tumhe na de paungi Janti hu tumhari kahani ki khalnayika kehlaungi Par jinhone ne khoon se seencha, unhe khoon ke aansuun na rulaungi jin aankhon ke kaajal ko kabhi saraha tha tumne jin palkon ke saaye ko ghar apna bataaya tha tumne Un aankho se saari umar kisi aur ko dekh na paaungi Jin Haathon ne haath tere ko apne haathon mein rakha tha Jin bahon ka gale pe tere pura pura kabza tha Un haathon ka bapu se ab kanyadaan karaaungi Mere khat tum chaahe rakh lo....... Jis dil mein bas jab dekho, tera aks lehakta tha Rooh mein, lafzon mein, khayaalon mein, bas tu hi tu jhalakata tha us dil ka sauda kaise main kabhi kar paungi Mere khat tum chaahe rakh lo......... Mere khaton ko pad-pad kar tum apna jee jalaana na Meri yaadon mein har lamha, tum khud ko sulgana na Tum toote toh bolo kaise, main apna farz nibhaungi Mere khat tum chaahe rakh lo........... Teri nazaron se gir kar main, shayad phir bhi jee lungi Bewafaa kehlaane ka gham dil hi dil mein pee lungi par apni maa ki sindhoor cheen main kaise maang sajaaungi Mere khat tum chaahe rakh lo........... kadhkadti dhoop mein jis aanchal mein tumne sar rakha tha jis aachal ko pakad kar tumne kadam pyaar ka rakhaa tha us aanchal ko daagdar na karna, yahi mein tumse chaahungi Mere khat tum chaahe rakh lo Kuch aur tumhe na de paungi |
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1st June 2014, 01:10 PM
Wah!..bohat khoobsurat ehsaas hain masti ji..
Dil ko chu gaye Yuhi likhti rahiye Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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2nd June 2014, 04:51 PM
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2nd June 2014, 04:58 PM
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Bahot hi dilsoz rachna pesh kee hai aapne.... hame bahot pasand aayee.... yun hi aate rahiye aur iss bazm ko jawaan karte rahiye..... ख़ुदा परेशां तेरी बला से तेरे सितम से तेरे अधम से अगर हसीँ होते ज़ुल्म तेरे तू भी तो कुछ शर्मसार होता 
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2nd June 2014, 05:05 PM
Mastiji,
Bahot hi dilsoz rachna pesh kee hai aapne.... hame bahot pasand aayee.... yun hi aate rahiye aur iss bazm ko jawaan karte rahiye.....[/QUOTE] Shukriya Aadil ji.... |
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2nd June 2014, 09:29 PM
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masti ji ufffff kini tadap, kitnaa dard chupaa hai is khat meiN..... sach kahun to aapki is kavitaa ne mujhe rulaa diyaa.... mereee aankhon me aansuu aa gaye yaqeenan.... bahot hi acchaa likhtii hain aap..... bas aapse guzaarish hai ke itne acche acche kalaam ham sab ke saath baanT'tee rahen, likhtii rahen.. aati rahen..khush rahen.. Shaad... |
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3rd June 2014, 11:31 AM
Bahut hee sundar ehsaas hain masti g aapke....padte padte dil bhar aaya.......mere paas shabd nahin hai...is kalaam kee tareef ke liye....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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3rd June 2014, 11:34 AM
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Congrats Regards  _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
 Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota Ananthpak |
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3rd June 2014, 01:21 PM
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Shukriya AAp jitna acha nahi likhti, apko pasand aaya toh mera din ban gaya. Regards Masti |
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3rd June 2014, 01:23 PM
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itna hausla badaane ke liye. Regards Masti |
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3rd June 2014, 01:26 PM
[QUOTE=Praneeta;458870]beautifully expressed Masti ji
Congrats Regards [/QUOShukriya Praneeta. |
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3rd June 2014, 01:55 PM
[QUOTE=N@zneen;458880]Excellent thought potrayed in a very well written poem.
Mujhe tumhari poem bahot achchi lagi aur soch to lajawaab hai ++rep[/QUO Shukriya Naaz. Mujhe laga tha ki likhte likhte main itna kho gayi hu ki yeh bohut he lambi ho gayi hai par main kuch bhi edit nahi kar paayi. shukriya aap sab ka isey phir bhi pasand karne ke liye. |
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3rd June 2014, 03:46 PM
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tere alfaaz bahut hai, zindagi guzar jaayeGii Haan ! har baar padhkar tu yaad bahut aayeGii intezaar aab bhi raheGaa mujhe un shaamon ka aitebaar hai ki ek baar to tu aayeGii jin aakhon jo jhukaakar qaraar chinaa tha unhi nazron se kabhi to sitam dhaayeGii sukoon kitna tha tere daaman mein kaise batlaaye tere ghar ki chat tujhe yeh silsilaa sunayeGii tere imaan ki majboori hai jaanta hooN dilbar is bimaar dil tak magar yeh iltejaa na jaayeGii yeh tera ishq hai ki daman jo tera chod diya dekhte hai tu kis tarah yeh rabataa nibhayeGii milenge hum kisi dusri hi duniYaa mein kasam teri mujhe tu 'mast' ki kehlaayeGii Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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3rd June 2014, 04:06 PM
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Sikha hai tumse he khayaalaton ko shayari mein tabdeel karna 'Mast' bin 'masti', zinda he marr jayegi [/SIZE] |
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22nd May 2015, 06:41 PM
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waaah waaaah waaaah! .. wese kitni ajeeb si baat hy na kuch dard bhari composition bhi banda agar paDhta hy to waah waaah hii karta hy ... chahta hooN ke iss peshkash per 'aah; karooN .. lekin dastoor-e-sukhn is ki ijazat nahi deta ... dard meiN doobey alfaaz dil ky aar paar ho gaye ... beshumar daad an-ginat o be-hisaab qabool kejiye .. salamat rahen ... tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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22nd May 2015, 07:05 PM
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qaabil-e-tehseen o qaabil-e-tareef ... beshak! tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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22nd May 2015, 07:30 PM
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aaj mera bhi dil kiya ise padpadhkar ki aapko gale laga loon... Khush rahein.. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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22nd May 2015, 08:02 PM
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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22nd May 2015, 08:04 PM
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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22nd May 2015, 09:21 PM
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Shukriya Hassan ji mere bhi dil ke kaafi kareeb hai ye. isey pasand karne ka shukriya. Sarika |
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22nd May 2015, 09:23 PM
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mere ehsaason ko samajhne ka shukriya. aur gale milna to due hai. bachon ki chuttiyan hai aa jao mumbai. Sarika |
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wahhh wahhhh...bahut acchi tarah aap dono ne ehsaasoN ko bayaan kiya hai...aik taraf ladki ki majboori Sarika ne apne lafzoN meiN bakoobi bayaan ki aur doosri taraf Anu bhai aapne bhi Ashiq ke dil ka haal usi tarah bayaan kiya...! yu hi likhte rhaiye aur bazm ko rangeen banaye rakhiye duaoN ke saath dii .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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23rd May 2015, 11:39 AM
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Sarika ji.. Hats off ! Simply marvellous. **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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Anu ji, aapka jawab bhi bohot kamaal ka hai. Aap dono ko dheroN mubarakbaad. YuNhi likhte raheiN, khush raheiN. **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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3rd June 2015, 10:18 PM
yeh ehsaas khoob rahe sarika jee
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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